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AnotherAdmirer

@AnotherAdmirer

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Posted: 12 years ago

#11

Thanks Guys !! 🤗 🤗 Glad I could share some smiles through my work :) <3

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Vishwa

@-Inferno-

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Posted: 12 years ago

#12

Hello Beautiful!

I read this the minute after you posted at night but couldn't reply as I was about to sleep. But koi nai...I will comment now.

First off, I thought that the whole OS was going to be based on Fahad because in the beginning he was introduced first as the father that just returned from office. Which, I found cute anyway. However, like I have said in the past, you have a very sleek way of presenting your thoughts. And I absolutely love it.

The kids and their love for their Chachi was beautifully portrayed along with their bond with Zain Chachu. Oh and I liked that one part where Zain asks for his gift from Fahad...didn't leave his character's essence. I mean it's so Zain like to just jump into the apple and not wash it...seemed just so very natural.

Also, I don't know much about Muslim rituals when eating but it was so cute that Aliya was trying to teach the kids that. I just wanted to say "IN YOUR FACE ZAIN!" LOL when the kids followed her.

Lastly, that one line that Fahad said...oh I was gushing in love even though it was an awkward moment for ZaYa. It was a lovely one shot like always!

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AnotherAdmirer

@AnotherAdmirer

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Posted: 12 years ago

#13

Originally posted by: -Inferno-
Hello Beautiful!
I read this the minute after you posted at night but couldn't reply as I was about to sleep. But koi nai...I will comment now.

First off, I thought that the whole OS was going to be based on Fahad because in the beginning he was introduced first as the father that just returned from office. Which, I found cute anyway. However, like I have said in the past, you have a very sleek way of presenting your thoughts. And I absolutely love it.

The kids and their love for their Chachi was beautifully portrayed along with their bond with Zain Chachu. Oh and I liked that one part where Zain asks for his gift from Fahad...didn't leave his character's essence. I mean it's so Zain like to just jump into the apple and not wash it...seemed just so very natural.

Also, I don't know much about Muslim rituals when eating but it was so cute that Aliya was trying to teach the kids that. I just wanted to say "IN YOUR FACE ZAIN!" LOL when the kids followed her.

Lastly, that one line that Fahad said...oh I was gushing in love even though it was an awkward moment for ZaYa. It was a lovely one shot like always!

Your review made my day 😳 I wrote this last night, couldn't sleep without penning it down and posted it the first thing in the morning 😆

Thanks for coming back to review :) It means a lot to me <3

I like how Fahad loves his kids, he doesn't differentiate in son & daughter either, I imagine him to be an amazing father and wanted to explore this side of him in my OS, hope we get to see him as such in the show <3

Added no work of mine would be complete without ZaYa :)

I was wondering abt the age gap in Zain and Fahad, Zain is a college dropout while Fahad has an 8 year old kid, so 8-10 year gap I assumed.

Zain had to be like that, not bothering to wash the fruit, I think all guys are like that 😆

I am a Muslim, so it comes naturally <3 I imagined the kids to be void of any religious knowledge, actually it was a mix of good manners and religion. Given how Nafeesa and Shazia are busy with each other, and Zain isn't exactly religious, we get an idea of the kind of upbringing given in the house :)

I Love it when Aliya proves Zain wrong :P The very idea of Zain as a father is such a cute thought <3 ZaYa's Kid ❤️

Thanks for being so kind and appreciating my work, Means a lot 🤗

Edited by AnotherAdmirer - 12 years ago

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AnotherAdmirer

@AnotherAdmirer

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Posted: 12 years ago

#14

Originally posted by: fee-fee
Very cute!

Thank Youu ! 😳

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Preeti

@Preeti.xo

Stunner

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Posted: 12 years ago

#15

Great OS! Zain is a kid himself can't imagine him with a baby of his own 😆 I also loved how Aaliya taught the kids what to do before and after eating. All in all good one! :)

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Yuvika

@Yuvika_15

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Posted: 12 years ago

#16

Originally posted by: AnotherAdmirer
Forgot to mention, don't know the kid's names, picked myself :P

Also wont be able to send PM's for now :)

dw u got one right...the girls are called sana and arub (but she's called aaru by her mum)

Edited by Yuvika_15 - 12 years ago

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Anweshaaa

@Anweshaaa

Voyager

Posted: 12 years ago

#17

Awww..Such a cute OS..Awesome..Loved it :)

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Shweta

@---Shweta---

Voyager

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Posted: 12 years ago

#18

New OS by you.. :D
The Best thing I Love About Your OS is Simplicity.

You chose a Very Simple Topic and Written it SO Brilliantly.

Love the Bonding Between Kids and Aliya..

Great Work.. 👍🏼

Edited by ---Shweta--- - 12 years ago

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AnotherAdmirer

@AnotherAdmirer

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Posted: 12 years ago

#19

Originally posted by: ---Shweta---
New OS by you.. :D
The Best thing I Love About Your OS is Simplicity.
You chose a Very Simple Topic and Written it SO Brilliantly.
Love the Bonding Between Kids and Aliya..
Great Work.. 👍🏼

Thanks a bunch dear 🤗 means a lot ! <3

I am definitely writing this week, hv been struggling to find time ..! 😔