FF:Priya ka Prem- part 30, page 65, 27th sept!!!!

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Hi everyone !

I've been wanting to write a FF, but never had time. But now I do, so I'm gonna write one. Sorry if I'm annoying y'all, I know there's alot of FF:s but I hope you will give it a chance and read it. Hopefully y'all will like it ! Smile

I don't want to have any spoiler predictions, so I won't write any deep description of the main characters the first part. I want you all to have some excitement when you read it, and don't know much before. The first part is extra long, so don't get bored lolz. So here i start:

Introduction: This story takes place in the big jalebi, Delhi year 2008. The time is 7 o'clock in the morning and we hear an alarm clock ring : BRRRRRR

A girl wakes up. She has shouldered long black hair. We don't see her face though. She gets up and goes to the bathroom. After that she puts her clothes on: a knee longed turquoise skirt with a white top. With the clothes she chooses to wear a 3 inch high heel shoes on, and goes to the mirror. From 7.20 to 8 o clock, the girl is in front of the mirror, putting make-up on. At 8 o'clock the alarm bell rings one more time: BRRR
The girl shouts: Priyaaaa, wake up!

Up rises a girl, with a smile in her face. The song hum to jaise hain from Veer-Zaara is playing in the background. She has long hair. The girl opens her eyes and we see it's our own Divyanka. She looks at her clock.
- OH FISH ! she says loudly
She rises up quickly, goes to the bathroom, then comes out. She doesn't know what to wear, and just grabs whatever is in the closet. A pair of jeans and a white striped shirt. She combs her hair hurriedly, grabs a hair crunchy and then goes to door. She sees her sister is already there, with a smile on her face.
- Madhu I...Priya says
- Overslept? I know, but you better hurry, or else you'll be late for school! You have 10 minutes. Madhu says
-But I haven't even...
- Here's a banana, and here's your bag. Go, go, go!
Priya runs out from her house, and walks fastly to her college. Luckily it's nearby. All the way she was thinking about how this could happen? She was never late!

15 minutes later, Priya was in her college outside her classroom. She didn't see anyone else.
-Ayy rabba, yeh kya hogaya? she said to herself
-Priya? someone said
She turned and saw her teacher Mrs.Sharma
-Mrs Sharma! I'm so glad i found you. I am soooo sorry, I apparently overslept myself. I'm sorry, It won't happen again...
-Liken Priya tum to ...
-I don't know what happened, my alarm clock.. I was so sure.. I'm sorry, It won't happen again I..
Mrs Sharma giggled.
-Priya take a deep breath. You're not late.
-What? I'm not? But..
-Actually you're early. 30 minutes early to be exact. That was why I was chocked to see you. I know you usually come 15 minutes early, but not this early.
-But my alarm clock, it ..
-I don't know what has happened, but check your calender.
-Check my calender? Priya took her calender out from her bag. What did Mrs. Sharma mean? It's just an ordinary monday, monday the 1st april...
She understood everything now. She felt something vibrating in her bag. It was her cell-phone. She got a sms from Madhu: My dear bewakoof sister. I told you naa, someday i'd fool u. Haha Who's miss smartypants now? love Madz

Priya started laughing. Then she took a deep breath, and sat down on a bench. She braided her hair, as always, and started to eat her banana.
-BUUU someone came from behind and scared Priya. It was Madhu
-AHHH
-Haha twice on the same day. So how does it feel to be not so organized and perfect?
- You should be ashamed of yourself Madhu. Fooling your older dii like that. But it was funny, i must admit. But I'm just happy I wasn't late like..
-Normal people lol.
-No, normal people come on time. Careless people come late. Like the boys in my class. They are sooo...
-Cute!
-Madhu. Is that all you think about? Boys, clothes and make-up? There are other things in life you know. And the boys in my class are stupid.
-No, my dear older dii. You are stupid. Do you know how lucky you are? The hottest guys in college goes in your class. Teri prem kumar waha hai!
- Aur wo premi kaun hai?
- Pichee deko!

Now we see a guy stepping out from a red cabriolet. We don't see his face. In the background the song bachna ae haseeno is playing. The guy is tall, has dark hair. He's wearing jeans and a white shirt. He looks very stilish. The wind is blowing, and he turns. It's our very own Sharad!
People, guys and boys are whispering and saying: There's Prem!

Promo for part 2: Mrs.Sharma says something and both Priya and Prem are thinking loudly: You got to be kidding with me!

I know the first part was very long, but it's the first part, so it's extra special and long.
So what did you all think? Please leave comments. Good/Bad. If you want me to continue. And critics, or improvements i need to do? 😊

Thanks // theflyingdonkey

Index:

part 1, 2, 3 & 4 - page 1
part 5- page 2
part 6- page 3
part 7- page 4
part 8- page 5
part 9 & 10 - page 7
part 11- page 8
part 12- page 10
part 13- page 12
part 14- page 14
part 15- page 17
part 16- page 19
part 17- page 22
part 18- page 24
part 19- page 26
part 20- page 31
part 21- page 34
part 22- page 38
part 23- page 41
part 24- page 44
part 25- page 50
part 26- page 53
part 27- page 56

part 28- page 60
part 29- page 62

Edited by theflyingdonkey - 15 years ago

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Posted: 16 years ago

Hi guys, I'm back with part 2 !
First of all I want to thank you all for your great warming comments and support.;)<3

Here starts part 2:
Prem (Sharad) steps out from his red cabriolet and walks towards the college. The wind is blowing in his hair. The song bachna ae haseeno is playing in the background. He looks very stilish and cool.
Everyone is whispering and saying: Prem is here! Prem is here!
Girls are saying: He's so cute.
Guys are saying: Kya style hai, yaar
Priya says: Olo ka patha!

Prem walks into the college and stands outside the classroom. His friends, Shahid, Raja and Ajay comes too.
-Hey Prem, did you watch the game last night? Shahid asks
-Oh no yaar, I missed it
-Come on Shahid, how could Prem watch the game? Last night was his date with Anjali. Raja says
-It wasn't a date. We're just friends.
-Yeah right. Your "just" friends with the most hottest girl in Delhi. How can you NOT have a crush on her? I do!
-Me too Ajay says
-Stop it yaar. It wasn't anything like that.
-So how was it? Ajay asks

Prem remembered the night before. It was probably the most embarrising night of his life. How could I be so stupid? He thought. No, It wasn't my fault, It was hers! Leading me on like that with her talk. It was a good evening. They sat and had dinner in a fancy resturant. They ate, talked and laughed and remembered some nice memories. Then suddenly she ruins everything and blurs out:
-You know mummy and daddy nee meri shaadi ki baat karley. They said now that I'm 20 I need to settle down and make my life complete.
-Haha okay. And how do you feel? Have you found your lucky guy?
-Prem, I'm in love. And daddy approves of this person.
-What? Anju, you never told me this. Wow, congrats. Who's the lucky guy?
-He's a great guy and our families are very close but...
-What's the problem then?
-Um, I don't know how the guy feels about this. That's why I'm having this conversation with you. Prem I...
Suddenly Anjalis father came.
-Prem beta hi. How are you?
-Uncle ji! Good, and how are you? How's auntie? Wo Anju nee kuch baate..
-Ahh. Maine usko kehdiya ke wo tumse baat karle. Beta, tum to jaante ho ke aaj bahot mushkel hai ke ek acha sa larka... I mean since you two are such good friends I thought..
OMG, what are they saying? Prem do something! He thought to himself
-I'm sorry! I can't do it! Prem blurs out loudly and rises from his chair. Everyone in the resturant is watching.
-Do what beta?
-Marry Anju. Dekye Anjali bahut acha hai liken main aur shaadi? I like Anju, but not in that way. I'm sorry
-Liken Prem main to .. Anjali says
-Nahi. Anjali I'm sorry. Uncle ji, I'm sorry.
Anjali and her father starts laughing. Prem looks confused.
-Why are you laughing? This isn't funny!
-Buddhu! I don't want to marry you! I want to talk about WHICH guy I want to marry!
-Haaa beta. Maine uske kehdiya ke wo tumse baat karle kyun ke tum dono ache dost hoon, aur tum uske madaat karlo.
-Madaat?
-Haan, baat woo hai ke wo larka ke anjali pasan karti hai wo tumhara dost hai. Iselye maine socha ke tum use madaat karlo.
Prem understood everything and just realized what a fool he made of himself.

-Olo ka patha! he says to himself loudly. Just then Priya passes by and thinks he said it to her. She looks at him angrily and goes into the classroom.
-Why does she look so angry? he says to himself
-Come on everyone knows that miss perfect hates guys, if so they aren't her professors. She's a so called feminist. Anyways come on, class has started. Shahid says
They go into their class. The guys sit on their usual places, on the third bench row next to eachother.
Mrs.Sharma comes in and begins her lecture.
-From now on we are going to work with literature.
Everyone sighs, except for Priya whos sitting on the first row with her friend Pooja.
-We are going to read and write literature. Ajay spit out your gum!
-Sorry! he says
-Anyways, I will give you a theme. And that theme is... Love. I want you all to read 3 different lovestories and then write one own.You will have 3 weeks for this project. And it will be in pairs!
-Noo! someone said
Even Priya protested
-But Mrs.Sharma isn't it better if we...
-No Priya. You all will be in pairs. And this is because I want you all to really know and understand eachother. I want you all to learn on a different and new way, who knows maybe some pair fall in love? she said and giggled.
The class was quiet.
-Anyways here's the pair list. Raja you are with Pooja. Rani you are with Ajay. Priya you are with ... Prem!
Both Prem and Priya looked at Mrs.Sharma.
-But! Both of them said at the same time.
-No buts here! This is the pairs, and I suggest you befriend with each other. You will spending time with one another for 3 weeks. Today I want you all to get to know each other.
You got to be kidding with me both Prem and Priya thinks loudly.
Everyone else in class left with their partners. Prem rises up from his chair and walks to Priya.
-So, shall we go, partner?
Priya had a feeling that this will turn out bad.

Promo for part 3: I didn't know you love me Priya, Prem says to her.

Please leave comments and critics.

Thanks// theflyingdonkey

Edited by theflyingdonkey - 16 years ago

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Posted: 16 years ago

Hi guys, I'm back with part 3 !
I know it's been a while now since i last updated, i've just had soooo many exams and projects.. But now I have some spare time, so I will try to update when I'm available =)
By the way, thanks for all your comments 😊

Prem rises up from his chair and walks to Priya.
-So, shall we go, partner?
Priya had a feeling that this will turn out bad. She rised up from her chair and walked out from the classroom. Prem just stood there.
-Are you coming or not? Priya said and looked back.
Attitude problem, Prem thought to himself. He followed Priya out to the shoolyard. Then she stopped, so he stopped too.
-So what's the assignment? she asked
-Um, well today we have to get to know eachother. It says that we have to... Prem sighs
-Have to what...? Priya asks
Prem swallowed. Why? Why Mrs.Sharma? I haven't done you any harm! Not that I could think of atleast, Prem thought to himself
-Earth calling Prem! Hello! What do we have to do?
-We have to follow eachother home and see how we live, our surroundings and family.. Because all of this effects in lovestories plus we'll get to know one other better.
-WHAT? Let me see that paper! Priya reads the assignment. OMG! Why? Why Mrs.Sharma? I haven't done you any harm!
-Okay let's not waste any time.. Look I know you don't like me, but this is an assignment and we have to work now. So let's just get it over with okay? Prem says
-Fine .. Let's go! Priya says. She starts walking
-Where? Prem asks confused
-To my house! Where else? We have to do this nah? So come on
-Where do you live? Wait let me take my car
-OH NOO ! I'm not.. We're walking. It only takes 15 minutes,,
-Fine, either 15 walking with me OR 5 minutes in the car with me?
Priya looked at Prem. Oh I can't stand him, she thinks. Okaay, Priya kya kare? Think..
-Fine we'll take the car,, Where is it?
What a stupid question she thought to herself. EVERYONE in the school knew WHERE Prems car is. That super red cabriolet that every girl wants to sit in and every boy drools over and wishing they had that car.
Both of them walked to Prems car. He locked up the car with his automat clicker. Looks so filmy Priya thinks to herself. She was heading for the back door of the car when Prem stopped her:
-You know, you could sit here in the front.
Priya felt embarressed. She had never sit in the same car with a boy from her college. She went to the front door and sat down. Prem started the car and started driving. Priya closed her eyes and prayed. Prem looked at her and giggled.
-What's so funny? she asks
-You
-What?
-Seriously Priya, I've had my license for 3 years now and here you are closing your eyes and praying like it's my first time driving.
-And your point is?
-Relax! You're always so stressed and tensed.. Now tell me the direction!
Olo ka patha, telling ME what to do Priya mumbled.
-Did you say something? Prem asked
-What? Oh no, I just said turn left now.

After 5 minutes they reached to Priyas house. It was a small area. There were many houses, not so big but not small either. There was also a restaurant and a store nearby. Here lived the average people, middle-class. Everyone knew one eachother. That's why everyone was so shocked to see Priya, the neighborhoods angel, with a boy. Are dekliya Priya con ki saat hai? Dayya re Dayya, Priya ek larke ke saath? some gossiped when they saw them.
Prem and Priya stepped out from the car. Priya was walking fast to her house she didn't want anyone to see her, Prem was following her.
-So this is where you live ? He asked
-Yes
-Seems nice

The two of them were walking towards Priyas house when suddenly someone from behind said: Priyaaa, roko!
Both Priya and Prem looked back.
-Oh no! Priya said. Prem heard her and looked confused.
Three women came to her. All three were around 40 years old, wore traditional saris and looked tired and cruel
-Priya beti, one of them said, kaise ho?
-Ji main chik hoon, aur aap? Priya said in her nicest way that she could
-Hum to chik hain. To yeh, the woman said and looked at Prem, tumhara dost hain yah koye aur baat chalraha hai aap dono ki beech?
Prem and Priya looked at each other. Priya didn't know what to say. So Prem stepped in
-Actually Main aur Priya ek class me hain aur humari teacher ne humko ek assignment diya to hum baaz school ki kam kar rahe hai. Aapko to koye aitraaz nahi?
The woman was suprised.
-Come Priya we have to start now. Let's go, he said. Priya was shocked.
-Thanks, she said to him
-It's okay, he responded and smiled.

The two of them start walking. Finally they reached Priyas house.
-Hallo, papa? Priya said. Um you can come in Prem, she said.
Priyas dad came. He was a tall man, had short black hair and brown eyes. He looked modern.
-Hi beti, what are you doing home so early? he asked
-Papa wo Mrs.Sharma ne humko ek assignment diya hai aur wo bhi pairs me hain. Um, yeh hai meri classmate .. Prem
Prem looked at Priyas dad. He looked very nice and fatherly.
-Hi sir
-Hello beta.. So I suppose you will be working with Priya? Hehe good luck! He said to Prem and laughed a bit
-Papa!
-I'm just kidding. He said and looked at Priya. But he couldn't stop laughing, so Prem also giggled.
-NOT funny! Priya said
-Priya, won't you offer your guest any refreshings? Perhaps tea or a cold drink, her dad said
-Guest? she said confused. Oh, yeah .. Um would you like anything to drink or eat? she said to Prem
-Could I have anything to drink?
-Yes.. um my room is the second door at left. You can go there, I'll be right back.

Prem walked into Priyas room. It was so organized he thought. Her room was kinda girly, he was surprised. He thought he would see posters with humanitarian stuff but she had photos of herself and her family on the wall. She even had teddybears.
He sat down in a chair, next to a desk. She had alot of books and papers. He noticed an unordinary book. It was a notebook. On it said: Priya ka Prem
OMG what is this? He thought to himself. Um, is this why she's acting so weird around me? OMG she has a crush on me?
-Wow Priya, I didn't know you love me he said
Right then Priya came
-What?
Prem turned and saw Priya. We see alot of closeup on Prems face and Priyas face.
The end for part 3!

Promo for part 4: Madhu comes home and sees Prem and Priya, together and says to Priya: I told you your premi is right with you! Both Prem and Priya yell out: WHAT?

I made this part extra long, hope I didn't bore you guys to sleep. Please do leave comments, critics, thoughts and ideas. I'm openminded!

Thanks // theflyingdonkey

Edited by theflyingdonkey - 16 years ago

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@ekdoteenchar

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Posted: 16 years ago

Hi guys, I'm back with part 4 !
I know it's been a LONG while now since i last updated, i've just had soooo many exams and projects.. But now I'm on break, so I will try to update many parts now =)
By the way, thanks for all your comments :)

This part is especially for svforever/radika, thank's hun for ur support & love hehe <3

Recap: Prem looked around in Priyas room. On a desk he found an unordinary book, a notebook that said : Priya ka Prem. Prem panicked and thought OMG Priya has a crush on me? And said out loud: Wow Priya, I didn't knew you loved me. Just then Priya came and said: What?

Priya- What? What did you say ? she said and came slowly near him
Prem panicked. OMG what should I do? He looked at her. No, ew. Why, Priya why? We don't even know each other, that well. It's probably of my handsomeness. Oh well, what to do. Okay Prem beta come up with a good excuse. If you tell her you saw the book, she will go all PMS on you and flip out. But if you don't then ... Hm, nothing really happens to you.
Prem- Um .. Nothing, Erhm I just said Wow Priya I didn't knew you had such a nice room, he said and tried to smile but inside he was panicking.
Priya noticed Prem was sweating. Urgh, great she thought. A guy with perspiration running down his face. What's wrong with him she thought
Priya- Thanks.. Here, have a cold drink. She said and gave him a tray of cold drinks. You need it, she muttered.
Prem- huh?
Priya- Oh nothing she said and put a forced smile on. Olo ka patha, she said slowly
Prem- I heard that
Priya- Heard what?
Prem was about to say something when Priya interruped him and suggested they wouldn't waste any time and start with the project. They went to her livingroom and sat on the sofa.She sat far away from him. Priya, being so ambitious and smart, made a plan of who would do which work and how they would write the actuall assignment. Prem looked wondering on her and said:
- Priya, um how come you get to do the actuall writing, and not me?
-Oh well, I .. Look, we both don't get along. And it's fine. So I'll be the bigger person here and just do the entire work. Ok? That way we don't have to spend time with each other, and I will write an amazing lovestory and just put your name on it too. Then we both will get good grades. So it's a win-win situation for you
-Oh okay. So little miss smartypants thought she's SO smart and I'm SO stupid?
-What? No Prem, I...
-Look I know why you don't want to be around me. BUT this is for school. I work hard in life, and I'm going to let a girl like you get in the way of my education.
-A girl like me? You should be happy that you got in the same team as me. Thanks to me you will get a grade that you don't even deserve, she shouted
Right then Madhu came home. She saw Priya & Prem together. WOW did didi really listen to me and went and become friends with Prem? What, no? Madhu went near them and got lost in her head, picturing Prem and Priya together. Then she came back to reality and realised the two of them were argueing. About school and grades? Wow they are alike. She thought loudly: I told you Priya, your premi is right with you!
Both Prem and Priya snap out of their argue and yell out: WHAT?
Madhu came to her sense: Huh? What?
Prem looked at Priya, who looked at Madhu, who looked down on the floor.
-So I was right, Prem said
-Right about what? both Priya & Madhu said
He looked at Priya, who looked at him. And Madhu looked at both of them. She giggled. Then Prem starts walking and goes away without saying anything. Priya goes to her room and Madhu just stands there and is thinking: What the heck happened?

Promo: Prem comes up to Priya and gives her a hug. Priya is shocked as hell.

Sooooo ... um, what did ya think ??
Like / Dislike. Critics / changes. Ideas ? I'm openminded !! =D =D

// theflyingdonkey aka Gina

Edited by theflyingdonkey - 16 years ago

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Suhana

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Posted: 16 years ago

Wow Gina!!!!! Brilliant FF....Madhu is really naughty...playing such a trick on Priya 😆😆......poor Prem....he thought Anjali wanted to marry him!! And what's wrong with Mrs Sharma...she paired Prem and Priya together!!! Hmm...what are you planning on now....is Priya and Prem's assignment gonna turn them into a couple as Mrs Sharma was hoping??

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@ekdoteenchar

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Posted: 16 years ago

aww thanks suhana ! =D ,, I actually start writing this like 3 months ago.. But then I "forgot" to update like in 2 months ,,, but now i'm back, in action muhahaha

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Manusha

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Posted: 16 years ago

I see, u r back in action na..love the update....

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Saniya

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Posted: 16 years ago

hey. im saniya! luv ur ff keep goin!! i love it!!

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Radika

@svforever

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Posted: 16 years ago

Awwwwwwwwwwwwww! That was awesome! I am soooooooooo happy right now! Seeeeeee, so many people like your ff and you were on the verge of never starting it again! Keep on going! When are you gonna update again? I am soooooooo anxious right now....cause of the promo! Update soon! Bye! Luv ya!

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Posted: 16 years ago

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Originally posted by: svforever
Awwwwwwwwwwwwww! That was awesome! I am soooooooooo happy right now! Seeeeeee, so many people like your ff and you were on the verge of never starting it again! Keep on going! When are you gonna update again? I am soooooooo anxious right now....cause of the promo! Update soon! Bye! Luv ya!

Aww well it was ur sweetness & kindness that got me to write again <3<3 hehe ... I think i'll update on friday. I will try to write many parts now, and just post one each week, every friday .. Or what do u think ?
Thanks hun for ur support <3<3😳😊

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