raabta_updated part 4(pg.4)..OS(shivan)

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Hi guys, here again I'm preity Dey. Thanks for supporting in my previous OS and inspiring me to write more. Here in Kolkata it's raining heavily from morning, so I thought to bring some rain-romance in SHIVANANDI'S life😉. Hope guys you will enjoy.😊

pyaar ka dard

part : 1

It is 30th June, 3.30pm. Previous day was Shiv's birthday. It was raining heavily since the morning, just paused half an hour back. The canal project also paused for the heavy rain. So Shiv and Anandi are going to inspect the site.

Shiv rush driving the car in the village road. He is very frustrated. Flash back of previous day's party continuously haunting his mind.

FLASHBACK:-

Shiv: Wow, that's the best gift, thank you Anandiji.

Anandi: aapko accha laga? (You like it?)

Shiv: It's the best (looking lovingly at the watch)

Anandi: to aapko Aashima ji ko thanks u bolna chahie. Unhone hi dia hai, mujhe bhi unhone bataya aapka janamdin ke bareme. (You should thank Aashima, she gave you, and she told me about your birthday)

Suddenly hearing this Shiv became statue for a moment. He couldn't speak a single word. Anandi went back to her household work. After that in the whole Party he was waiting for some gift from Anandi, but she didn't give anything to him. This makes Shiv unhappy. Today also Shiv behaving so normal. Can't she give anything to Shiv? Any small thing? She gave handmade photo frame to Shiv's friend. And here as they don't have any personal relation. But she should give something out of their professional bond. Can't she? All this making Shiv angry, mad. He starts driving in more speed.

The silence of the jeep broken by Anandi's voice.

Anandi: collector sahib, what happens to you? Why are you driving so roughly? Please drive slowly.

The normal behavior of Anandi makes Shiv madder. He doesn't decrease the speed. The jeep is jumping because of the stone-y village road. Suddenly the side bag (jhola) of Anandi falls down from her lap to the road. After rolling ends up beside a pond. This makes Shiv guilty. He stops the jeep. Anandi gives him an annoyed look to him. He steps forward to the pond. Unfortunately he keeps his feet on sleeper mud and loses his balance. Anandi tries to save him. She holds his hand, but fails and falls directly in Shiv's arm. They two falls on the ground and rolls down ending up near the pond. Anandi on the ground and Shiv on the top. They two gazes into one another's eyes and lost there. Don't know for how long they keep lost in each other's eyes. Suddenly the rain starts pouring heavily again. This makes them aware of the real world. Anandi suddenly tries to stand up but in vain' because of Shiv's weight. Shiv realizes the uncomfortness. He stands up and gives hand to Anandi. Anandi refuses the hand and stands up herself. Their body, dresses becomes muddy due to the rain. Then she takes the side bag which was lying on the ground. The rain is pouring continuously. Shiv keeps staring at Anandi. Muds of her body are cleaning up by the rain. He mesmerized by the wet beauty in front of him. He again loses control over himself and tries to remove the dry, wet leaves stacked in her hair, shoulder. Anandi to can't avoids his charm, his attraction. She feels so comfortable with his care. She can be just like herself with him. She can be ' She began to keep her hand on Shiv's cheek, but suddenly the past haunts her, she became restless. What is she doing? Did she forget that she is a married woman, whose husband left her? And Aashimaji? She is such a sweet girl, loves him very much. She steps back.

And suddenly says,"Shiv please mujhe ghar chod dijie" (please drop me home, Shiv).

And run away to the jeep. Shiv follows. It sounds really good when Anandi calls him 'Shiv'. Shiv becomes happy. The jeep runs towards badi haveli.

P.S. please comment, whether it is good or bad... criticism or appreciation anything.😃


part : 2 in the page 3(http://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=3054174&TPN=3)

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Blukitten thumbnail
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Posted: 13 years ago
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V.good please continue i was waiting for a rainy os [;)]
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Very nice one :) Can happen in the serial also... Will wait for the next part :)
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Posted: 13 years ago
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if you dint continue 😡...be shure i will have the supari in your name 🤢...so beter continue and tht also soon 😡...i am very seriz type 😳...so beter take me srizlyy 😈...and post your next OS soon 👍🏼...
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Posted: 13 years ago
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WOW! You must try and write a Mills and Boon Novel... You have an amazing talent!
The details you've given... The wet looks... Lost in each others eyes... The narration is just FAB!

Keep it coming!!!
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Originally posted by: samyuktaa

WOW! You must try and write a Mills and Boon Novel... You have an amazing talent!
The details you've given... The wet looks... Lost in each others eyes... The narration is just FAB!

Keep it coming!!!



Thanks dear for such a complement...😳, will try more to please you people😊
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Originally posted by: payalibm

if you dint continue 😡...be shure i will have the supari in your name 🤢...so beter continue and tht also soon 😡...i am very seriz type 😳...so beter take me srizlyy 😈...and post your next OS soon 👍🏼...



hee hee of course dear 😆 will write more... I don't want any boring satturday,sudays...with many lovely OS and SS we can enjoy these days...😃
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Omg you should continue ASAP!!
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Posted: 13 years ago
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hey priety awesome OS dear.loved it so much.this OS is surely a treat to read with the ongoing rainshowers of kolkata right now.i m enjoying it so much.

plz plz plz do continue.

luv
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Posted: 13 years ago
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waiting for u r update...

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