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umayal

@LuvSSever

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Posted: 8 years ago

#121

Originally posted by: peeyara
Okay now read my Guruji's story...he is one member of trimurti with me second one n VJ the thir one...u can call as gandhiji ke teen bandars too 🤣
he writes feelings the way he connect words uff

Pehli Barish

this is my fav...i love this os peli barish very much 😳 the way he have writeen is magic❤️

other works:

OS Pyar ke rang

OS Ehsaas(incomplete)

Dard ka Rishta

Oh trimurti...😆

Ok...so u hv a gang of ur own...great...😊

By the way dear, I hv come across this Os:pehli Barish before, while searching for an OS on raya and i have read it and hv bookmarked it too...it was nice work, so i searched for other writings by same author ,and i read Dard ka Rishta too...but other ones havent seen...

And that time ,i dont know he was ur friend ...

Even the OS:pehli Barish , read it yesterday night too😳😆

I will post the comments soon on two stories of sagar I already read before...

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umayal

@LuvSSever

Rocker

Posted: 8 years ago

#122

Dear,

I shuld say, you and your bunch of friends are so great in writing...nazar na lage😳

You people are too good..👏

Thanks to you for introducing again to one more superb writer ,,,

As i told u already, i hv read two of his stories already..

First i will comment on 'Pehli Barish' OS...

Reading both the stories by him, I would say he definitely showed love in a different light...

He sees pyaar in a different angle altogether, those who are so much in love...so poetic...

A wonderful writer he is, who touches your heart and mind with his writings..

So poetic his OS was...

A gifted writer he is and has a good command over hindi..

His writing in hindi ,enhances the beauty of story and lang hindi too..

And coming back to Os..

Oh it was superb... Raya in themselves a lovely pair and he took us into a superb story with raya and with raya, he has portrayed a social issue too in his story...

Beautifully written, the feelings of Ram and the thought process,feelings of priya too in the letter by priya was written superbly... and i luved her letter, the tug of war her heart had was showcased too well...

Good or bad their doings, he raised good thoughts with his writings...he portrayed raya's dilemma so well tht u get confused to go with ram or priya... both are correct in their own situation to think wht they thought..

Finally a good touching end..overall superb...

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umayal

@LuvSSever

Rocker

Posted: 8 years ago

#123

Hi..

Now come back to give comments on 'Dard ka Rishta' by sagar...

Again a beautifully written story...

As i said, the way he sees love and explains love, they are so beautiful to read...

Again a different luv story...

Dard and pyaar,so beautifully portrayed with Raya...

The pain they went thru only, ended up them with the love of their lives...grt..

Oh the turmoil Raya went thru,loosing their first love...

Then destiny bringing them together, loving together so much and finally blessed with the bestest gift and raya finally attaining a nayi pehchan...

Love to know the name of the pyaare se little one.. 😳

Written so nicely, the toughest phase raya went thru with their first love leaving them, raya again feeling the luv, ram's dilemma on his second time falling in luv ,with ritu and priya his confusion, then finally coming out of tht and realizing that life has given him a second chance, he is destined to experience and live life with love again was written nicely...

Priya handling Ram with so much love, the way she confessed, confession was short but she said more in that...

His diary writings, that too flashback ones are too good, heart touching...

The way raya loved each other, their littke sweet romance, the talk of priya with her baby, all were too good to read and touchy...and finally ram deciding to overcome his fear for priya and his little one sake, and finally cutie golu coming into their life..all superb..

As usual his usage of words and hindi writings, too good to read..

First time reading a cutie golu coming first in Raya life rather than a little angel..😆

Nice..boy or girl, what diff it mkes, they are love of their lives..so happy anyways...

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umayal

@LuvSSever

Rocker

Posted: 8 years ago

#124

Hi,

I hv read the OS 'Pyar ke rang' by sagar...

Superb cute colorful sweet holi moment of Raya it was...

Oh the way Ram described priya, her inbhition to play holi, then her love for him finally making her enjoy colors and holi, then asusual Raya's ego doings, raya without tht was impossible,as always they r good at it😆, then at end Raya enjoying holi..too good...

Here priya was afraid of colors, ulta of balh, but then jho bhi ho, its only priya who as to wait for color to be applied by Ram, be it balh or here...😆

Fine, but finally ram giving up as always and priya's gussa and finally happy holi jaan😳 too good with her dropping bucket of water on him😆

Loved this colorful holi Os on Raya...

As always the story was enhaced with his own style of writings and his poetic hindi lines..

So rhythmic his stories are always...good to read again...

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umayal

@LuvSSever

Rocker

Posted: 8 years ago

#125

Hi dear,

I have completed reading his Os 'OS Ehsaas' by sagar...

I dont know what more i can write or add to praise is writing in hindi...

Hindi is one language which i learnt out of interest and not in my curriculum..

Somewhat i knew that lang, but his writings urges me to learn more and improve more...

So beautifully he writes , tht you not only forget urself in the writings but u even develop a love for hindi language and feel its beauty...his writings were as such...any writing tht enhances the beauty of the lang in which it is wrote is always a pleasure to read... and his rythnic flow of events in story always want u to read more of it...

Same here, i loved reading this Os and i wish he culd had got time to finish it..

I wuld say, instead of writer, a gifted poet/poetic writer he is..

His stories always mkes one realize hw beautiful pyaar is...

U wuld start loving 'love' more and ur love of ur life more too when u read such writings...

He is too good at it to mk you feel and realize wht love is...his 'ehsaas' Os also brings or gives you the same ehsaas...😳😊

Thanks naseem for mking me read this writings..once again🤗

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peeyara

@peeyara

Stunner

+ 6

Posted: 8 years ago

#126

Who read all? 😲 😆

his writings takes u in another world n its so serene that u are lost in an imaginary world of his story...the flow, the way he uses words n connects them...its amazing n dreamy 😳

Ab next stories Jo I mean Jodude(Jyothi) ke deti hoon 😆 wait I will post links

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peeyara

@peeyara

Stunner

+ 6

Posted: 8 years ago

#127

Originally posted by: LuvSSever
Dear,
I shuld say, you and your bunch of friends are so great in writing...nazar na lage😳
You people are too good..👏

Thanks to you for introducing again to one more superb writer ,,,

As i told u already, i hv read two of his stories already..
First i will comment on 'Pehli Barish' OS...

Reading both the stories by him, I would say he definitely showed love in a different light...
He sees pyaar in a different angle altogether, those who are so much in love...so poetic...
A wonderful writer he is, who touches your heart and mind with his writings..
So poetic his OS was...
A gifted writer he is and has a good command over hindi..
His writing in hindi ,enhances the beauty of story and lang hindi too..

And coming back to Os..
Oh it was superb... Raya in themselves a lovely pair and he took us into a superb story with raya and with raya, he has portrayed a social issue too in his story...
Beautifully written, the feelings of Ram and the thought process,feelings of priya too in the letter by priya was written superbly... and i luved her letter, the tug of war her heart had was showcased too well...

Good or bad their doings, he raised good thoughts with his writings...he portrayed raya's dilemma so well tht u get confused to go with ram or priya... both are correct in their own situation to think wht they thought..

Finally a good touching end..overall superb...

i so so love this OS...pata nhi kyu but i love it 😆

its magical 😳 wenever I read it, I want it to not end 😆 my fav piece❤️

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peeyara

@peeyara

Stunner

+ 6

Posted: 8 years ago

#128

Os From Jodude(Jyothi)

1) Happy Birthday

https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/bade-acche-laggte-hai/4280609/3rd-one-shot-of-sakshi-bday

2) Begin Again

https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/bade-acche-laggte-hai/4312041/raya-os-begin-again

3) Soul mates Forever

https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/bade-acche-laggte-hai/4408206/raya-os-soul-mates-forever

4) Mine Forever

https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/bade-acche-laggte-hai/4411903/raya-os-mine-forever

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umayal

@LuvSSever

Rocker

Posted: 8 years ago

#129

Originally posted by: peeyara
Who read all? 😲 😆
his writings takes u in another world n its so serene that u are lost in an imaginary world of his story...the flow, the way he uses words n connects them...its amazing n dreamy 😳

Ab next stories Jo I mean Jodude(Jyothi) ke deti hoon 😆 wait I will post links

I read two already dear, then remaining ones were short OS, so finished soon..

Yes, his writing flow was like as u said puts u in imaginary world and dreamy...so true..

And i too luv that pehli baarish Os, its the first encounter of his writing to me and well impressed...

And thanks for the story links of Jo..

Asusual will read and pester u with my lengthy comments..😆

Hope u wont mind...😳

Even if u mind, i will post😆 since u introduce those stories to me and ur thread only open to share my views😆

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umayal

@LuvSSever

Rocker

Posted: 8 years ago

#130

Hi dear..

Thanks for giving me the os links of jo...

I hv read all..will reply on each one by one..

First one is 'happy Birthday'

So sweet ,lovely os...

Tht track of raya in balh was simply to put a base for 5yrs leap...they made us to putup with those more..

But taking the same scenario, here she has written a good Raya Os..kash serial mei bhi, like this ram culd mk her admit wht real truth is and they be together enjoying priya's first pregnancy time..

So lovely and sweetly she has written, the way ram started approaching priya, tickling her, he knows to bring her close to him in his own charming way😆...asking her to promise on him to finally admit the truth, and both slowly solving all barriers between them by conversing, finally issues solving and Ram presenting her a beautiful ring with so wonderful msgs on her bday..

But the biggest gift to her was already given by him and she has the cutest return gift inside her now.😊.

So good to read.. felt lovely reading it on Raya... being a first attempt and the scenario she chose to write, its too good...