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umayal

@LuvSSever

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Posted: 8 years ago

#131

Hi,

Now commenting on Os, ' Begin Again' by jo..

Again a sweet Os with Raya's care for each other and romance...

The jaipur track in balh wasnt fully utilized...they again started with ashwin,ayesha,sid tracks.grr...

Here again, like filling void of original balh, on tht scenario, jo has written a lovely Os...

Its good to see their care,concern,love with respect to second child of theirs.,..

Priya's love for Ram being the reason for her wanting second child..she want Ram to feel all that he miseed during pihu's..❤️

Ram ,same way with all love ,first concerned for her health..

But then gave approval and immediately process bhi start kardhiya...😆

Lovely romantic sweet Os...

Lovely start of day with ram helping priya in kitchen and lovely end of day too😆

Hope i didnt exceed her Os length with my comments for that Os😆

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umayal

@LuvSSever

Inactive

Posted: 8 years ago

#132

Hi..

Now commenting on OOs'Soul Mates Forever' by Jo..

Again a nicely written Os..

With priya's ranting , anger and Ram being mischieveous and romantic...

Started with serious scenario, where Ram still anger or faking his anger on priya and priya wants his attentions...

Then went with the flow of priya's rantings of ram not noticing her and talking to her, Ram actually noticing her and decided to end his angry avatar to her and going on with the second chance of their life..Too good...

In my pov, ram's anger was justified for wht priya done though priya too undergone many pain and struggles, its the lame reason given by cvs with priya for 5 year leap..and after leap also, the anger-manofying track was spoiled with ayesha more in pic..

But here, in this Os, ram got his family home, but showed his anger, finally they resolved and happy with enjoying their second chance..this is hw it wuld had been.. too good..

I loved their morning romance and Ram's rewards and punishments too😆

And priya's rantings and ram being romantic i culd imagine Rashi..😳

Nice one overall...

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umayal

@LuvSSever

Inactive

Posted: 8 years ago

#133

Now commention on Os... 'Mine Forever'...

Nicely written Os with Ram anger and his rage which ram is famous for..

Always his anger man avatar,one culd imagine...

And his anger was right and his possesiveness came out and finally Raya endedup one..

Why not Ram, we ourselves dont feel comfortable seeing priya with Rajat,😆

So ram anger justified...😆

Oh he took her to farm house, showed his right on her which is rightfully his..

Then priya couldnt resist seeing his love and finally they madeup..

And ayesha to get rid so easily and raya live tigether..

Nice one overall...

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umayal

@LuvSSever

Inactive

Posted: 8 years ago

#134

Hi dear..

I read one of ur friend's FF kabhi Jo Baadal Barse by sharan..

It was too good, i mean too good with suspenses yaar but it hasnt been completed...

Likewise i read some other FF's by one writer called Neha posted by her friend shananya i think,.

Here stories are also very good , mainly the backdrop and plots of story and raya's work environment but those were incomplete too..

First i read the FF, circle of life by that writer, then since its good, i searched for her other stories

And read some other 3 stories of the same author, but those were incomplete too

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sandhya

@lovelysakshi

Rocker

+ 2

Posted: 8 years ago

#135

Naseem

Meine page No. 8 se padna start kiya...kisike convo mein ghuskar padna bahut mushkil hota hai...uff

starting mein toh mera achha udaya hai...muje laga tum muje ullu bana rahi ho but baad mein comment pada

Luv S Sever

Muje jab Rajat ke saat link karke tease karte hai toh gussa aata hai ladkar dekha jagda karke dekha but inn logo ko farak nahi padta specially Naseem ko issliye abb chod diya.

Im only Sakshi fan

Frankly mein character Rajat ko hate nahi karti hoon...doesn't mean I love Rajat.

coming to ur comment

First of all Im not at all a writer..eise hi timepass ke liye likha tha

Thanks for reading all the stories...

Im glad u like the stories..apart from 3 FFs I have written many OS too.

Thanks naseem for the link

Mein bhi apne stories kelink dhund rahi thi😆..socha tha ki Jo se help lungi. Chalo Jo bach gayi😆

Waise ek likhna start kiya hai...dont worry usme bhi Rajat hai aur positive hai. Abb mein Balh se related characters hi lungi na.🥱

Once again thanks😃

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umayal

@LuvSSever

Inactive

Posted: 8 years ago

#136

Originally posted by: LAdyLoveSAkShi
Naseem
Meine page No. 8 se padna start kiya...kisike convo mein ghuskar padna bahut mushkil hota hai...uff
starting mein toh mera achha udaya hai...muje laga tum muje ullu bana rahi ho but baad mein comment pada

Luv S Sever
Muje jab Rajat ke saat link karke tease karte hai toh gussa aata hai ladkar dekha jagda karke dekha but inn logo ko farak nahi padta specially Naseem ko issliye abb chod diya.
Im only Sakshi fan

Frankly mein character Rajat ko hate nahi karti hoon...doesn't mean I love Rajat.

coming to ur comment
First of all Im not at all a writer..eise hi timepass ke liye likha tha
Thanks for reading all the stories...
Im glad u like the stories..apart from 3 FFs I have written many OS too.

Thanks naseem for the link
Mein bhi apne stories kelink dhund rahi thi😆..socha tha ki Jo se help lungi. Chalo Jo bach gayi😆
Waise ek likhna start kiya hai...dont worry usme bhi Rajat hai aur positive hai. Abb mein Balh se related characters hi lungi na.🥱

Once again thanks😃

Hi..

Oh I know ur friends tease u with Rajat's name..

I had come across some chats and truly understand ur plight.😊..hi naseem bhi na😆

Naseem dear, i told u already its not fair to tease her when she is not his fan... but i think friends mei chalta hai..😊

Rajat and loving him,when raya in pic chanceless...

Ya i too neither hate him nor love him..for me i consider him invisible always..😆

He is not in picture only for me..😆

You are a sakshi fan too...myself too... ::)...anyways frm ur profile pic i culd mk it...:)

Dear,u may not be a writer, and it might be timepass..

But i loved your writing.. you are too good at screenplay,twists and turns..

First story adhuri kahaani i liked most..

You all might not be fulltime writers but U, naseem and ur bunch of friends are too good at writing, each excelling in diff aspects...you in ur hooking screenplays, naseem in funny stuffs(cid like),sharan in emotional ones, sagar in poetic writing, Jo in simplistic sweet stories

And i luved reading all, it made my time...

I shuld say thnks to u all.😳😃. especially to naseem...🤗

Oh, u hv started writing new one, me too eager to read it..

No probs with Rajat, Ur raya and Ur hooking sroryline will be enough for me ...😳

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peeyara

@peeyara

Stunner

+ 6

Posted: 8 years ago

#137

Originally posted by: LAdyLoveSAkShi
Naseem
Meine page No. 8 se padna start kiya...kisike convo mein ghuskar padna bahut mushkil hota hai...uff
starting mein toh mera achha udaya hai...muje laga tum muje ullu bana rahi ho but baad mein comment pada

Luv S Sever
Muje jab Rajat ke saat link karke tease karte hai toh gussa aata hai ladkar dekha jagda karke dekha but inn logo ko farak nahi padta specially Naseem ko issliye abb chod diya.
Im only Sakshi fan

Frankly mein character Rajat ko hate nahi karti hoon...doesn't mean I love Rajat.

coming to ur comment
First of all Im not at all a writer..eise hi timepass ke liye likha tha
Thanks for reading all the stories...
Im glad u like the stories..apart from 3 FFs I have written many OS too.

Thanks naseem for the link
Mein bhi apne stories kelink dhund rahi thi😆..socha tha ki Jo se help lungi. Chalo Jo bach gayi😆
Waise ek likhna start kiya hai...dont worry usme bhi Rajat hai aur positive hai. Abb mein Balh se related characters hi lungi na.🥱

Once again thanks😃

how mean sandy mai pareshan na karu toh kaun karega 😉 😆 kaun aapko bewaqt hasayega 😆 kise yaad karke aap muskuraoge 😉 😆

u neither love him nor hate him but IGNORE bhi nhi karti ho na usey 🥱 😆

mujhe OS ke naam yaad nhi hai 😆 anjana anjani n adhuri kahani yaad tha 😆 kisi ne forum pe raya lost n love ke writer ke baare mai pucha toh yaad aaya us story ka

since i hv saved urs n Jo's time, you both owe me chocolates

jaldi se post karna start karo story

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