Tumko Dekha Toh.. PG 71 note - Page 12

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Posted: 12 years ago
wow.. update every day... thanks in advance...
nice update as always
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Posted: 12 years ago
Hey Neha, good to see you're back! well, I really don't have any complaints regarding the update... it was short but at the same time was very cute too... I'm really thankful to you for this nice story... ab aur mat sataana, 😆 give us the long & romantic update asap, as you've promised 😉 😉
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Posted: 12 years ago
rajat took priya's blessings.😆btw beautiful update.plz continue soon.😊
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Posted: 12 years ago
Beautiful update. Please PM me when you post next part. Don't want to miss
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Posted: 12 years ago
superb neha they just made for each other
luved it
update soon
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Posted: 12 years ago
Awww..!! What a sweet update.. Sachi yaar the way ur potraying raya character is indeed looking made for each other.. Ek request hai agar ho sake toh ek scene main thori priya ko professional look main bhi laado.. Thank god ur exams have finished, looking forward to the next update eagerly..
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AWESOME UODATE...CONTINUE SOON 😃
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Continued..
The lights went off.. Everyone whispering wondering what happened..
Priya hears Ram calling her.. She doesnt want to turn back.. There is some new feeling when he's around.. But she doesnt know what it is.. Ram looking at her back.. Her skin so soft.. He feels like she's calling him.. But he holds back.. There is spotlight on Rajat and Jhyothi..
Rajat with the mike..: I want everyone to dance.. Not a single soul left.. Have a romantic evening ladies and gentlemen..
Jhothi: Looking at Priya.. Kya aap gaayengi plz..
Rajat: That's a great idea.. Aur Ram tum bhi..
Everyone clap..
Daijaan: Yes.. Pehele.. Rajat aur Jhyothi dance karenge.. Phir baaki sab.. Music please..
Beautiful music starts playing as Rajat takes jhyothi by her hand to the center of the hall..
Priya looks at the night sky walking towards the window.. and starts..
Priya: Raat aankon mein dali.. She looks at Ram..
Ram continues: Palkope jugnu aaye.. They both look at everyone around.. Everyone is lost looking at the couple dance.. Rajat and Jhyothi sway in peace..
Priya looks at Ram.. Her eyes were moist.. And she was cold..
Priya: Raat aankon mein dali, palkope jugnu aayee.. Ram goes close to her and stands.. He remembers their touch and smiles lookingg at his hands..
Ram:Hum hawaao ki tarah jaake, Usse choo aaye.. Priya looks at her hand and looks away..
Both: Raat aankon mein dali palkope jugnu aayee.. Both of them lost in their emotions..
Priya: Bas gayi hai.. mere saason mein.. Looking at Ram... yeh kaisi mehek..
Ram looks into her eyes.. : Koi khushboo mein laagaaoo.. Teri khushboo aayee.. He hands his hand towards her.. Asking her to dance with him.. But he sees another hand in front of her..
Ram looks at her possesively.. Before she looks at who the other man was.. He holds her hand and takes her away singing.. Hum hawaaon ki tarah jaake usse choo aaye..
She just looks at him with umteen eyes.. : Raat aankon mein dali palkope jugnu aaye..

The dance ends.. Ram and Priya looking at each other.. The lights come on and everyone start clapping.. both of them snap out.. The mahaul is filled with uncertainity.. Now some nice instrumental music starts playing.. Vik Neha Kar Nutz start dancing along with other couples.. Ram: Sab kitna khush hai..
Priya: Smiles: Haan..
There is silence between them.. Ram starts feeling uncomfortable.. As there are many eyes on Priya.. He excuses himself to divert his attention.. He moves to the bar counter and orders a drink.. As he drinks.. His eyes are only on Priya.. Who seems to be smiling and talking to the elders around.. She walks out to the garden.. He follows her out.. But stays at a distance.. Watching the breeze blow her hai..
A man comes to her..
Man: Priyaji.. Kaise hai aap..
Priya smiles: Good.. Shruthi kaha hai..
Man: Shruthi..? Mere baare mein nahi puchogi? .. I mean puchenge..
Priya: Tum kaise ho?
Ram is startled at how Priya's behaviour had changed.. There was Rage in her eyes..
Man: Tik hu.. Putting his hand out.. Ek dance for old times sake..
Priya: No.. Looks at Ram.. He feels like something is wrong and goes closer trying to listen to whats happening..
Man: Mujhe pata hai ki aap Karthik ke siwai kisi ke saath dance nahi karthe.. and tries to touch her hand..
Priya: Ashwin I said no.. Aaj tak kisi ne bhi mujhe nahi chua hai..
Ashwin: I know ki tumhe kisi ko bhi chune ki himmat nahi hai.. Lekin I know you will not create a scene in front of the media..
Priya: Mein tumhe barbaad karsakthi hu.. And you know it! Lekin bardaash kar rahi hu.. Sirf Shruthi keliye!
Ashwin is taken aback.. He's scared.. He had never seen her anger..
Ram Walks to her side..
Priya turns to him... Both of them look at Karthik and Nutz walking hastily towards them.. Priya calms down and smiles at them...
Karthik stands between Ram and Priya and looks at Ashwin..
Karthik: Ram jiju.. Shayad aapko aur di ko ghar jaana chahiye..
Priya: Karthik.. Karthik calms down as Priya puts her hand on his shoulders..
Ashwin: Jiju..? Looks at Ram confused..
Ram feels a sense of right with that statement..
Ram: Aapki taareef? Looks at Priya..
Priya: He is my best fiend's husband Ashwin..
Ashwin: Hi.. Trying to pose..I work for the Kapoor industries..
Priya is being tolerant of his attitude.. And Ram notices this..
Ram: Oh.. Hi.. Mein Ram.. They shake hands..
Nutz understanding why Karthik was upset since they came to the party.. : Bhabi.. Maa bulaaya hai.. Aap dono ko jaana chahiye..
Ram and Priya look at eachother.. Ram senses that there is a reason Why the jiju bhabi convo has started.. So they both turn to leave.. Ashwin interrupts..
Ashwin: Ram aapne yeh nahi bataaya ki aap kya karthe hai..
Priya is now furious: She turns and Ram looks at her.. She narrows her eyes.. I warned you Ashwin.. He is The Ram Kapoor.. The owner of Kapoor industries..And Mr. Kapoor or sir to you.. Everyone is quiet..
Never had they seen her anger.. She closed her eyes and opened it.. She was cool.. She said.. Good night Karthik.. Der se mat aana..
Karthik: Ji di..
Nutz: Bhabi.. Aap mere car leke jayiye.. Mujhe bhai ke car mein aana hai..
Priya: Yea.. Sure..
Ram: looking at Priya.. Chale..?
Priya smiles..
They turn to walk away.. Ram is disturbed.. Why was Priya angry..? He feels like he should protect her..
He turns back..
Ram: Oh Mr. Ashwin.. Priya looks at Ram.. Wondering what he will say..
Ram: On the pretext of trying to misbehave with my wife.. You are fired! Good night and Good bye..
Ashwin stood shocked and rooted.. Did he just call her his wife?
Ram and Priya start walking away.. They silently walk away..
Nutz calls the driver..: Suniye.. Looking at Ashwin: Bhai aur bhabi ko aaj beach house leejaayiye..
Driver..: ji maam..
Karthik: Ab woh kisi aur ke hochuke hai..
Ashwin just walks back to the hall..
Karthik looks at Nutz.. : Yeh sab.. Humesha aise log.. His voice cracking.. Di ke peeche..
Nutz: Lets Karthik cry on her shoulders.. Aur woh humesha sab ko tolerate.. Tears fill her eyes..
Karthik nods hugging her tightly.. Tears flow down his cheeks..
Karthik: Pata hai.. No one dares to touch her.. Phir bhi..
Nutz: Tumhe bura lagtha hai.. Bushing his head to console him..
Vik comes with Neha..: Kya hua?
Nutz: Kuch nahi.. Aaj Bhai aur bhabi ghar nahi aayenge..
Karthik feeling better.. breaks the hug.. And tells them what happened.. They all leave to KM..

Meanwhile.. Ram Priya get into the car..
Ram: Driver.. Chalo..
Driver.. ji..
The driver closes the privacy sheild looking at Priya.. Ram thinking.. Does she make everyone understand what must be done at that moment without words..?
Priya breaks the silence..
Priya: Thankyou..
Ram smiles.. And suddenly it strikes to both of them.. Bhabi , jiju.. And wife.. What had they done? They look outside the window.. Ram phone rings..Its Nutz..
He picks it up..
Ram: Bol choti..
Nutz: Put me on the speaker bhai..
Ram turning the speaker mode..
Karthik: Hum sab ghar pohonchgaye.. Hum sab aapse baath karna chahthe hai..
Nutz: Bhabi?
Priya: Looks at Ram and then the phone..
Priya: Natasha.. ?
Nutz: Haan.. Media walon ko khabar mmilgayi ki aapdono..
Priya shuts her eyes tight while Ram exhales in a sign..
Karthik: ab agar aapdono Shaadi karthe toh..
They look at each other for answrers.. She looks empty for the first time..He has nothing to say.. There is no expression on their faces.. They feel like someone ripped their hearts out..And threw their opinions out of the window..
Vik: Haan Ram.. Inse acchi bhabi hohi nahi sakthi..
Neha: Priya.. Fatty bohot accha hai.. Toda mota hai.. Par.. Accha hai..
All of them together.. Plz maanjao dono..
Ram: Kya chahiye aap sab ko?
Everyone is silent..
Priya: Hum ek haftee keliye..
Ram completes her statement.. Ghar nahi aayenge.. Jab aayenge tab tak..
Priya: Shaadi hochuki hogi..
Ram: humaari..
Everyone is shocked.. Ram and Priya are still in a trance..
Together: lekin hum..
Ram: Aaj tak meine joh bhi kiya..
Priya: Aap logonkeliye kiya..
Ram: Aur aaj..
Priya: Phirse aapkeliye..
Both: Hume akela choddijiye..
There are tears in everyones eyes..
Krishuji: Chocking.. Ek hafta..
Ram: Ek hafta.. Phir aapke bahu ke saath..
Priya: Grihapravesh..
Krishuji smiles.. Thankyou Priya beta..
Priya bites her lower lips as tears brim in her eyes.. Ram's vision is blur filled with tears..
They dissconnect the phone.. Ram throws it out of the window..
Priya lowers the window..
Priya: Driver.. Sharma mansion chaliye..
Driver: Ji..
They both look outside the window.. The wind blows by thier faces.. Both thier eyes brimming.. They want to scream.. Ram feels like he is taken for granted by his family.. His heart is heavy.. Priya senses that he is not ok.. But she is not in a state to say anything.. Her heart is heavy.. She needs time.. She takes in a deep breath.. there is silence.. Priya feels better as she nears her house.. Ram senses a positivity.. But he is lost in his thoughts.. He senses a soft touch on his hands.. He feels releaved.. As if the touch had drawn all his pain away.. He looked at his Hand.. Priya had placed her palm on his.. He looked at her as she smiled.. She pulled her hand away... They reached the mansion.. The moonlight lit the house.. They got off at the gate.. The watchman opened the gate.. Priya: Saare naukaron ko kal subah chutti dedo..
Watchman: maalkin.. Kaam..?
Priya: mein karlungi.. Ek hafte ki chutti..
Watchman: Ji maalkin.. Lekin mein nahi jaaunga..
Priya: Smiles.. Tik hai.. Tum raho tik hai?
Watchman: Ji maalkin..
He closes the gate behind them..

Precap: Ram crosses his limits..

Hey everyone.. Hope you enjoyed the update.. Thankyou for the compliments.. Its nice to know how you feel about the update.. I'm going to make the coming updates long and romantic.. Plz do leave your comments!

Lots of love,
L.

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the update is too good but the precap is 😲

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