OS - Anuj-Anupama confrontation

Hi - silent reader of the forum for a few weeks now, first post here ! The way the show used to be in the beginning (especially Anupama's reaction to Vanraj's betrayal and the fighting spirit she had shown then) and the way everything has been butchered over time almost amazes me. A lot of the opinions shared here seem to resonate with mine to some extent, so I've attempted to write an OS - Hindi is not my strong suit at all, so the possibility that there will be grammatical mistakes is.... a solid 100 percent!

Anyway here goes:

Anupama-Anuj confrontation after today's episode

(Scene is still the school, outside, and conveniently eliminating all characters except Anupama, Anuj, Choti Anu)

Seeing Anuj's pained expression, Anupama starts: Anuj...aap mujh par naaraz hain...mein samajh sakti huun, samajh sakti huun, meri hi galti hai, meriii hi galti hai...hamari Choti ko -

Anuj is listening to all this with a wry smile on his face, like he is seeing her for who she is truly for the first time in his life. He interrupts:

"Hamari Choti nahi, meri Choti"

Anupama looks pained but keeps going "Choti ko kitni ummeed thi, kitni sapnein thi ki woh ye dance competition mein participate kare, jeet jaye..."

Anuj again interrupts with a piercing glare "apne mummy ke saath participate kare"

Anupama looks a little taken aback, she didn't expect this level of coldness: "mein tame par pahunch jaati Anuj, sach mein, mujhe bhi Choti ki bohot bohot chinta thi - bas baa ke lie khichdi phataphat banakar -"

"Dimple ne baa ko sikhaya tha, nahi, ki gas kaise on karna hai?" Anuj looks her straight in the eye. He seemed to have reached all limits of patience.

Anupama looks hurt. This conversation was not going the way she expected at all. "Unko ye sab aadat nahi hai na, itni aasani se nahi samajh..."

"Aur kuch raaste nahi tha? Tum ko hi rukna thi? Samar tha, Bapuji the, tujhe acche se pata tha ki ye Choti ke liye kitni important thi, tujhe pata tha. Kitne baar tumhe bola hai Anu ki hamari family ko priority de, pyaar se samjhaya meine - kitne baar -" Anuj begins letting out all his bottled feelings, his frustration, his anger. "Meri Choti royi jaa rahi thi, royi jaa rahi thi, mujhe pata nahi mein usse kaise sambhala, sambhala ki nahi. Ek orphan hone ka insecurities mujhe samajh aati hai, aur ye gehri chot thi Anu. Bahut gehri chot hogi uske liye..."

Anupama retaliates, feeling hurt "Aapko sach mein lagta hai ki mujhe Choti ki chinta nahin hai? Ye sab...mein baa ki wajah se late nahi hui...halat ki wajah se - nikalne wakt Pari ne vomit kiya, baa bohot darr gayi thi, mujhe woh situation sambhalna tha na, aur kya hi kar sakti mein. Aur phir, aur phir drive karne wakt woh highway wala raastha kisi wajah se band tha...lamba rastha se...aur in sabki beech meri pair..."

Anuj listens with a faint smile. "Ho sakta hai Anu ki tum bhi dard mein hai, haalaat bhi ek wajah thi. Lekin pata nahi Anu, mujhe ye sab bas excuses lag rahi hai ab. Tum nahi thi na...ek nanhi si jaan apni mummy ke liye tharas rahi thi...aur woh bhi... kitni samajhdar bacchi hai woh. Infact, haalat ki wajah se woh thoda zyada samajhdari dikhati hai ki uski childhood bhi childhood nahi rahi. Mujhe ye darr hai ki woh bhi tumhari tarah apni poori life compromises aur adjustments mein jiye. Mein aise hone nahi duunga, hone nahi duunga.."

"Hone bhi mat dijiye Anuj, hone bhi mat - " Anupama immediately reacts.

Anuj laughs almost hysterically.

"Tum aise keh rahi ho Anu? Tum? Kya tha woh stage mein tu tamasha kar rahi thi? Aur koi raastha nahi tha maukha poochne ke liye?"

"Tamasha?" Anupama looks surprised at Anuj's choice of word. "Woh mein Choti ke liye..."

"Choti ke liye? Uska naam ismein mat le. 'Mummy time par aa jaati lekin daadi fail hui'. Kya, sympathy chahiye thi audience se? Aur woh lecture tumne Choti ko end mein diya: doosron ki jeet mein khushi doondo...tumhe laga ki iss situation mein woh bolna sahi thi?"

Anupama starts shaking her head vigorously, but Anuj keeps going.

"Duniya mein Maa aur daadi donom tum akele hi hai kya? Mujhe khush hai ki Choti ko maukha mil gayi aur woh dance kar paaya. Lekin andar hi andar mera dil toot raha tha...mera dil toot raha tha.."

Anupama finally seem to be at a loss for words.

Anuj looks at her and starts smiling in a sad way.

"Pata hai Anu, mein galat word use kar raha tha, tumhare baare mein. Jo tum dikha rahe ho, usse acchai to nahi keh sakte. Ho sakti hai tumhari intentions bahut acchi hai, tum sabki bhalai chahti hai - jo tumhe abuse karti hai, shaap deti hai, characterless kehti hai, ghar se nikalti hai - sabki. Ye toh apne aap hi ek tarah ki galti hi hai. Apne self respect ko maar rahi hai. Lekin jab tum unn logon ko zyada importance dete ho, aur apni pati aur bacchi ko iski bhaari consequences jhelna padta hai, aisa behaviour to maafi ke layak nahi hai, Anu. Mujhe aise meri tarafdari karna accha nahi lagta lekin mere taraf se...abhi tak mein sirf unconditional support diya hai tumko, hai ki nahi? Koi kami thi mere taraf se? ...Kam se kam mere liye nahi, apni bacchi ke liye..."

Anuj starts crying.

Anupama also has tears in her eyes and a helpless expression on her face.

Choti Anu comes running and sees her father in tears.

"Papa, aap ro mat. Mujhe dance karne ki mauka mila, mujhe mazza aaya. Mein kitni acchi dance kar rahi thi na, papa?" She asks, trying to make Anuj smile.

Anuj smiles despite his tears "Sabse best thi meri princess"

Choti then looks at Anupama and sees her expression. "Papa, aap Mummy se naaraz mat ho, woh deliberately aise nahi karungi, kuch good reason hoga" then after a pause "Pari theek hai na Mummy?"

Anupama nods, unable to say anything more.

Choti Anu turns back to Anuj "Lekin next time Papa, kuch hai toh aap mere saath participate karoge? Mummy ko apni family aur apni responsibilities hai. Mujhe...mujhe usko trouble nahi karna" her voice breaks a little.

Anuj turns to look back at Anupama, and it was unmistakable this time. His face was full of fury. Taking Choti's hand, he walks away from Anupama without a second glance.

"Aapko ice cream chahiye, Choti?"

"Ice-cream! Yaayy... mujhe choco..."

Their voice fades away as Anupama stands there, alone, watching her husband and daughter walk away from her.

This was really heart touching and written well within how the characters have been potrayed 👍🏼

v well written and totally realistic ....Would love to see something like this play out on the show

This is beautifully written. Sadly don't think this would ever happen on the show but thank you for putting this here for all of us frustrated fans

Beautifully written. You have understood the characters so well. In such scenarios, bashing one character seems to happen a lot especially when you are actually frustrated with that character. However you didn't do that. You managed to keep all in their original characters dialogue and reaction wise. Even chhoti Anu's last dialogue was such a tight slap that nothing else could have been better. Even your grammar issues dis not stop me from understanding what you wanted us readers to understand. Really well done!😍😍🔥🔥🔥

Thank you everyone for reading it, and for your comments, despite it being so long! Posting this meant really coming out of my comfort zone, and I'm glad I took the leap. If it could give people a glimpse into a world where there are some sort of consequences for actions...that's enough.

@TheFluffyCactus That was such an insightful comment, it really touched me. Thank you so much for that - it made me feel like you understood not just my flawed writing, but me too to some extent!

Nice OS

Recations, dialogues are very well written.

Superb.