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Posted: 3 years ago

Originally posted by: SmithaRam

Scene: It is the day of Anu’s dance competition, she is in the green room regretting her behavior towards him the prev night and sorely missing him. She wants to call him, turns on her phone, see his pic and her remorse deepens.


An alternative continuation of the scene from imagination land... 😳


She calls him and turns on the video. She sees him, he’s a tad bit upset, but he manages to throw in a smile.

Anu: Teary eyed, asks “ aap mujhse gussa ho?”😲

Anuj: nahi…nahi.. bass, aisa hi kuch kaam mein ulajh gaya tha…. manages to smile and continues Tum kaho, how are you? Bahut pyaari lag rahi ho …❤️ all set to go on the stage?

Anu: Her guilt worsens seeing him smile despite being hurt. She says – “suri suri suri… mein bahut bahut bahut suri……. ab mein jo bhi kahoongi, woh guzra hua waqt ko nahi badal sakta…., pata nahi mein kya karoon… pats her forehead in remorse.🤔

Anuj: sees her shedding tears in distress and tries to cheer her up for the performance. It is okay Anu!🤗

Anu: mein sab theek kar doongi, aapko kabhi shikayat ka mouka nahi doongi…jab aap wapas ayenge...

Anuj: smiles and then looks far behind her and says – “Jai sri krishna baa… “😊😇

Anu: is scared out of her wits, drops the phone and turns around to see…

that nobody is there…..😲

Anuj: is hysterically laughing at her🤣… chehra… tumhara chehra….

Anu: Irritated with him…. Makes a face at him and starts to yell😈😡

Anuj: aaa haa!…. Abhi toh keh rahi thi ki…who kya keh rahi thi…. I’m suri, it won’t happen again blah, blah blah….

Anu: aapko mazak soojh raha hai? Mein pehle se hi paresaan hoon…..😳

Anuj: achcha baba ,…. I am really sorry! and says… All the best for your performance and chirps a kiss.😳❤️

Anu: Feels shy and says “ thenk you!”😳😳

Anuj: Arey, aise kaise? Tum mujhe kiss nahi dogi? Ek kiss toh banta hai….. please😒

Anu: hesitates, feel shy …finally obliges and about to kiss…she hears baa’s voice (for real this time)


Baa: tum kisse baatien kar rahi ho…. huh?😡

Anu: jumps from her seat… jai sri krishna baa… mein woh sweety se….🤪

Baa: sweety toh hamare saath baithi hai…. Tu kiske saath kuchi koo kar rahi thi?😈 Picks up Anu’s phone, sees AK and rolls her eyes🤔. …. And hangs up the call.😈😈


Anu: is irritated but chooses not to say anything at that moment to avoid any drama. After Baa leaves from there, she texts Anuj - 😘😘😍


Mins later…. She is called upon the stage to perform. She goes on the stage and her eyes widen with joy seeing Anuj in the front row…..😳

she smiles and he winks back at her😉… she starts to blush,😳 but comes back to reality when the song starts playing.


She dances and then goes backstage to the green room. She sits on the chair, heaving a sigh of relief that the competition is over.

She begins to wonder how Anuj was present, was he talking to her on the phone while he was inside auditorium? Was he throwing kisses at her while being surrounded by so many people?🤔


Just when she is lost in thoughts… Anuj walks in, pushing his glasses back and kicks the door close behind him….

Anu: confused, incoherently mouths words... aap … yaha, …. kaise…..kab

Anuj: I'm sure, tumhe hairani hogi mujhe waha audience ke saath, front row mein dekhkar.

I am one of the chief guests for the evening. I wanted to surprise you.😊 Missed me? and opens his arms tempting her for an embrace🤗

Anu: still confused, lekin aapne toh kaha…

Cutting her off mid sentence, he places his lips on hers sweeping her away into oblivion.😉😳❤️


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I feel that the rona dhona, yet another accident, womanhood speech etc is all uncalled for, we have had enough of it. So, wrote my own alternative. Aisa hota toh kaisa hota? smiley9 Drop your comments to let me know.

some more....

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Posted: 3 years ago

Lovely...I wish aisa hota ❤

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Posted: 3 years ago

Awesome one

MaAn😳

Yeh surprise show mein bhi mile toh maza aata

Love it❤️

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Posted: 3 years ago

Your version is so so so so good Smitha...

Maja aa gaya .

Tu is show ki writer ban ja

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Posted: 3 years ago

Smitha yaar. It was amazing and much needed in the episode itself but we better not see the dreams. Nothing such sort will happen.

Really liked your different take on the scene.👍🏼

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Posted: 3 years ago

Originally posted by: SmithaRam

Scene: It is the day of Anu’s dance competition, she is in the green room regretting her behavior towards him the prev night and sorely missing him. She wants to call him, turns on her phone, see his pic and her remorse deepens.


An alternative continuation of the scene from imagination land... 😳


She calls him and turns on the video. She sees him, he’s a tad bit upset, but he manages to throw in a smile.

Anu: Teary eyed, asks “ aap mujhse gussa ho?”😲

Anuj: nahi…nahi.. bass, aisa hi kuch kaam mein ulajh gaya tha…. manages to smile and continues Tum kaho, how are you? Bahut pyaari lag rahi ho …❤️ all set to go on the stage?

Anu: Her guilt worsens seeing him smile despite being hurt. She says – “suri suri suri… mein bahut bahut bahut suri……. ab mein jo bhi kahoongi, woh guzra hua waqt ko nahi badal sakta…., pata nahi mein kya karoon… pats her forehead in remorse.🤔

Anuj: sees her shedding tears in distress and tries to cheer her up for the performance. It is okay Anu!🤗

Anu: mein sab theek kar doongi, aapko kabhi shikayat ka mouka nahi doongi…jab aap wapas ayenge...

Anuj: smiles and then looks far behind her and says – “Jai sri krishna baa… “😊😇

Anu: is scared out of her wits, drops the phone and turns around to see…

that nobody is there…..😲

Anuj: is hysterically laughing at her🤣… chehra… tumhara chehra….

Anu: Irritated with him…. Makes a face at him and starts to yell😈😡

Anuj: aaa haa!…. Abhi toh keh rahi thi ki…who kya keh rahi thi…. I’m suri, it won’t happen again blah, blah blah….

Anu: aapko mazak soojh raha hai? Mein pehle se hi paresaan hoon…..😳

Anuj: achcha baba ,…. I am really sorry! and says… All the best for your performance and chirps a kiss.😳❤️

Anu: Feels shy and says “ thenk you!”😳😳

Anuj: Arey, aise kaise? Tum mujhe kiss nahi dogi? Ek kiss toh banta hai….. please😒

Anu: hesitates, feel shy …finally obliges and about to kiss…she hears baa’s voice (for real this time)


Baa: tum kisse baatien kar rahi ho…. huh?😡

Anu: jumps from her seat… jai sri krishna baa… mein woh sweety se….🤪

Baa: sweety toh hamare saath baithi hai…. Tu kiske saath kuchi koo kar rahi thi?😈 Picks up Anu’s phone, sees AK and rolls her eyes🤔. …. And hangs up the call.😈😈


Anu: is irritated but chooses not to say anything at that moment to avoid any drama. After Baa leaves from there, she texts Anuj - 😘😘😍


Mins later…. She is called upon the stage to perform. She goes on the stage and her eyes widen with joy seeing Anuj in the front row…..😳

she smiles and he winks back at her😉… she starts to blush,😳 but comes back to reality when the song starts playing.


She dances and then goes backstage to the green room. She sits on the chair, heaving a sigh of relief that the competition is over.

She begins to wonder how Anuj was present, was he talking to her on the phone while he was inside auditorium? Was he throwing kisses at her while being surrounded by so many people?🤔


Just when she is lost in thoughts… Anuj walks in, pushing his glasses back and kicks the door close behind him….

Anu: confused, incoherently mouths words... aap … yaha, …. kaise…..kab

Anuj: I'm sure, tumhe hairani hogi mujhe waha audience ke saath, front row mein dekhkar.

I am one of the chief guests for the evening. I wanted to surprise you.😊 Missed me? and opens his arms tempting her for an embrace🤗

Anu: still confused, lekin aapne toh kaha…

Cutting her off mid sentence, he places his lips on hers sweeping her away into oblivion.😉😳❤️


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I feel that the rona dhona, yet another accident, womanhood speech etc is all uncalled for, we have had enough of it. So, wrote my own alternative. Aisa hota toh kaisa hota? smiley9 Drop your comments to let me know.


It's perfect, as usual!

Hoga toh nahi aaisa, but it will be such a nice change from the constant tamasha❤️

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Posted: 3 years ago

Thank in your update no drama

N i love it more because v not in this update

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Posted: 3 years ago

Please continue .. want more of MaAn ☺️❤️

And thanks for the tag 🤗

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Posted: 3 years ago

Aisa hota toh mai seetiya bajati tho mujhe nhi aati par jaise bhi baja leti🌝😝 i missed ur updates mann tbh!😩

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Posted: 3 years ago

simiiii... bro!!!

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