OS : An introvert's whisper!

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Posted: 12 years ago
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Guys I'm wrote this scene from Amit's point of view. We all know that he is an introvert and till now he has never shared his feelings / thoughts with anyone. It is still a mystery. Not sure whether I can do full justice to it but just keeping my fingers crossed. All your comments / criticism are appreciated.



Amit blankly stares at the mirror. He is totally lost in his thoughts.

He thinks "Yesterday was a real nightmare. How could she throw such an important file in the dustbin? She is bit silly and childish but she is good at heart and understands the value of a family in our lives. But just to hide her mistakes how could she blame my family members and point finger at their intentions? Even after knowing that my whole career depends upon that file, how could she do this? Does she hate me so much?"

He sighs and recollects the day of the car accident.

He thinks "
Even the other day she screamed on me and insulted me in front of her friends. Does she dislike me so much? She even mentioned that we are not made for each other and cribbed why did I change my decision and turn up for the marriage? Is she repenting her decision of marrying me? But what about those beautiful moments that we spent last week? I thought things were actually improving between us. Was I wrong in judging those moments? Doesn't she care for me anymore? Doesn't she have any feelings for me? Does she consider this relationship as a mere burden?".

A call on his mobile brings him back to the present.


Later he searches for his shirt and realizes that he forgot to get it. He opens the door, peeps and see Amita is cleaning the room.Amit asks Amita to get the shirt. Even after repeated requests she doesn't turn and after a moment she screams at him for not believing her.

Amit thinks "
What's wrong with her? Why is she behaving like this? Seems like she is still in her grumpy mood. And she is still adamant on her story. Why can't she understand that they are my family? Doubting them is like doubting a part of me. They can never do anything against me. Is this about them or about our unsuccessful and loveless marriage. Maybe she wants me out of her life. If this is what she wants then even I would leave as early as possible and give her this happiness."


Still engrossed in his thoughts he takes his shirt and closes the cupboard. He is about to open the bathroom door then he turns and comes near Amita and responds "
It's good that I would be leaving within 18 days. At least I do not have to hear you cribbing. Then we both can live happily with our lives."

He rushes back to the bathroom and bangs the door. He feels an excruciating pain in his heart and has a tear in the corner of his eye.

He thinks "Oh god! Why am I going through this pain? Can't she understand how much this is hurting me? I love her and care for her.If she is my heart then my family is my soul.
How can I choose one over the other ?Why is she putting me in such a dilemma? I'm sure after what I said she would be thrilled. After all this is what she wanted to hear."

Amit stares at the mirror and takes a deep breath and thinks "I've to set things right. I'll get ready and immediately go and apologize to the client. I'm sure things would be fine and dad would be happy too"

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Do let me know whether I need to continue with this. Pour in your comments.😳


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Posted: 12 years ago
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i liked it ...kya bast hai! story mein dum hai yaar...i hope he feels like this❤️
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Very well written!!! I hope he thinks and feels this way. I think Amit also not happy to go to US, that's the reason why he keeps on saying that to amita again and again. May be he wants her to say please don't go" I love you".
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Excellent write up!! 👏Thanks for bringing the unsaid words of an introvert guy...Amit. Hope Amit really feels for Amita like u hv expressed...especially the pain his heart for leaving his wife is brilliantly portrayed in your writing!!👍🏼
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Thanks for you wonderful comments guys. 😳Actually I was bit apprehensive before posting this. Yesterday we all were so angry with Amit. So I was not sure how this post would be received by all Amitians.
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Posted: 12 years ago
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beautiful portrayal as always... 👏 i don know whether i agree in verbatim with you... but even i felt that may be amit thinks that he is not worthy of her.. remember when he said, " whenever i give u pain, i hate myself more.."
may be this is y he is leaving for US thinking that it would be good for amita...

poor amit... he is going thru d same pain but is not able to utter to anyone...😭
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: grintson

beautiful portrayal as always... 👏 i don know whether i agree in verbatim with you... but even i felt that may be amit thinks that he is not worthy of her.. remember when he said, " whenever i give u pain, i hate myself more.." Yes, I remember those words. That was the main reason which made me wonder what he is feeling underneath his cool (I don't care) mask. He never reveals anything.

may be this is y he is leaving for US thinking that it would be good for amita...

poor amit... he is going thru d same pain but is not able to utter to anyone...😭

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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: wooster

i liked it ...kya bast hai! story mein dum hai yaar...i hope he feels like this❤️


Thanks wooster. Even I hope he feels the same way as mentioned in the fiction.
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: Anu_11

Very well written!!! I hope he thinks and feels this way. I think Amit also not happy to go to US, that's the reason why he keeps on saying that to amita again and again. May be he wants her to say please don't go" I love you".


Thanks Anu.Even I observed that he keeps repeating this statement.Seems like even he is not happy going to US.
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: lily.lotus.rosy

Excellent write up!! 👏Thanks for bringing the unsaid words of an introvert guy...Amit. Hope Amit really feels for Amita like u hv expressed...especially the pain his heart for leaving his wife is brilliantly portrayed in your writing!!👍🏼


Thanks Lily.Even I hope that he feels exactly the way I expressed.

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