MehRya SS: Forbidden - Ch5 Teaser pg 14 04/08

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So, the crux of this plot is actually inspired by another show I watched for half a second, until I lost interest, but when I revisited the intro, I realized with some tweaking it could be easily become a Mehrya story. In the beginning does have some religious connotations, which I hope no one finds offensive...please let me know if it does and I will rewrite... but only to jumpstart the story, after that it will be more of a tale of destiny ( with a curse thrown in). Not sending any PMs right now as I test the waters for this one...and will be back with updates to DTM and HUL before the end of the week... So let me know if this piques your interest or if I should keep this one to myself:

FORBIDDEN


Prologue:

Twenty-five years ago...

The young tour guide watched as the boisterous group milled in front of their coach; the forced quiet they had adhered to during the tour broken as soon as they exited the temple. She shook her head, wondering why they had even included the religious site on their tour at all when it was clear that their upcoming afternoon activity, the pool party at their hotel was way more to their liking. She sighed, irritated for the time she had spent with the bunch that could have been better utilized, but then chided herself for doing so. Despite how she felt about the matter, she had fulfilled the task that had been asked of her...even it felt like a completely wasted effort. Perhaps the true lesson that was to be imparted today was that impatience was still a vice that she had yet to overcome. She would never reach her full potential if she didn't curb this flaw of hers, but it was very hard when she was assigned duties such as this. Just then she spied the luxury car pulling up to the temple gates and inwardly shuddered...at least she thought, her duties hadn't progressed to what was expected of so many others in her position.

"Excuse me, Meera ji, I was wondering if you could clarify one thing for me..."

Grateful for the distraction from the odious dignitary's arrival, Meera turned around, an automatic smile coming to her face. After the ninety minutes spent in the group's company, she had immediately recognized the voice as one of the few touring students who had expressed more than a passing interest in the information she had conveyed.

"Haan, Susheel, what is it?"

As handsome as the young man was, it was the spot of colour that came to his cheeks when she addressed him by his given name, that endeared the student to who had hung back to speak to her, to Meera. He was definitely nothing like the any of the others in his group...and she really, really liked that: probably more than she should. In fact, and this was surely the craziest idea she had ever had, if things were different, she believed that it would be someone exactly like Susheel Sharma that she would have hoped her mother would have chosen as life-partner for her. How she knew this after less than two hours in his company she had no clue, but something instinctively told her that she was correct in her belief. Susheel Sharma, to her at least, was perfection personified. The smile she couldn't contain, remained on her face, as he asked his question and then another, and yet another. For a few minutes, at least, she thought, she could pretend that she had a normal life.

Present Day...

They had always said that it was giving birth to me that killed Mama; that in bringing me into this world she had given the greatest gift a mother could ever - her life for the sake her child. But, lying here now fighting for my own life, I know different; finally, I understand. It wasn't the loss of blood that sealed my mother's fate, but the loss of her heart.

Devadasi... that's what they call us...but the fact remains that we were...are...so much more than that.

We are the revered protectors; respected but destined to be alone. Never to seek the solace of anyone but our God, our relationship and devotion with Him the only intimacy we would know. Unless it became necessary, that was. Then to propagate and secure our lineage we would become more. Cold lovers: some would say, one step higher than a prostitute only because of our mission, we would lay with a man as often as necessary in order to conceive. They would receive blessings through our union, and we would secure our future...

My name is Mehek Sharma and evidently, my birth mother was Devadasi, as had been her ancestors. However, she had betrayed her heritage in her desperation to save me from my legacy, begging Papa to take me away right after my birth and hide me from the fate she did not want for her daughter. She could not bear the unjustness of her life to be visited on another girl child, and because Papa loved her, he did what she asked.

In that moment, Mama experienced love in its purest form; for the man who had seen more to her than a vessel for his desire, and for the doe eyed child she had borne him. But in her decision, she sealed her fate and the curse, hundreds of years in the making, was swift and cruel. My name was the last word she uttered, and I would like to think that in that instant her blessings for me for a happy life would have followed. But Papa said that she was gone so quickly... And he had followed suit, spiriting away the precious bundle as he had promised...

He had fulfilled his promise from the very first day, and I had lived the best life a girl could, but it seems that one can never escape one's fate. No matter how hard one tries, Destiny will seek you out and bring you back to the path you were meant to be on.

"Doctor, how is she? Will she live?

Shaurya...Beyond the beeping of the equipment that monitored me, I hear him, and I am relieved. He is safe...and that's all that matters. If I must go now, then it will be alright, because he is okay, but deep down I don't want to. I want him...I want us... I want love, and curses be damned.

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Anuteja10 thumbnail
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Posted: 6 years ago
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Congratulations Kelly dear for this new beginning of your story
Pls write
N yah we are eagerly waiting for DTM😉

Beautiful prologue Kelly
Devadasi I know little bit about devadasi
Story is interesting
In last who is in hospital dear I could not u understand
Pls continue soon
Thanks for the penning down new story
N one more question why you stopped other two stories those were so interesting dear
Pls if you have time then continue them also
Take care have a great day 😃
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Thank you for the beautiful beginning Kelly.
Yes have read about Devadasi.. I have seen in one of the olden days tamil movie... every ordinary people worships her but only the higher caste males wants for their personal pleasure etc. I am very much excited to see how the story unfolds.
Have a blessed day ahead and do continue soon
thank you so much dear
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Kelly di...so good to see you back that too with a story.🤗
story seems so interesting...
you have penned down it so well.
Di,i have not much idea about what Devadasi mean but still from this one i can figure out a little.
Thankyou for giving us a lovely new SS.
and moreover i'm happy that u r writing this new story for ur reades.🤗


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Nice start Kelly and this story is different and interesting.
Even I don't know anything about devadasi.
Looking forward to read the next chapter.
Welcome back Kelly 😊.
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Hey Kelly, missed your stories yaar... This is soo great... I know this show that you are referring to... But why with MehRya? If you don't mind me asking of course. Love you if you send me your DMs for this SS... I wanna see how MehRya met in those time and what actually happened in between those 25 years.
Cheers!!
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Posted: 6 years ago
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Wooow... Welcome back with another story 😛
Loved the prologue... 😛
Something is quite different with the story and i know you will do great job in this story too 😛
I am. Eager to know and read further .. Please do write n continue this story 😛
Will be waiting eagerly for other updates too😉
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Originally posted by: Chandana2010



Congratulations Kelly dear for this new beginning of your story
Pls write
N yah we are eagerly waiting for DTM😉

Beautiful prologue Kelly
Devadasi I know little bit about devadasi
Story is interesting
In last who is in hospital dear I could not u understand
Pls continue soon
Thanks for the penning down new story
N one more question why you stopped other two stories those were so interesting dear
Pls if you have time then continue them also
Take care have a great day 😃


Thank you Anu...to be honest writing this has been the first time in almost a month that I have even opened my laptop, with all that has been going on...😕, but it felt good to finally get back to writing something.

The show that I was inspired had it's basis in the devadasi system, basically girls who are dedicated to a diety at a young age and serve in a temple for the rest of their lives. The show itself had the added theatrics of supernatural beings ( can we say naagins😕) which I will not. Instead I will focus what I have learned in research, which detailed instances where some of these girls basically became concubines for elite males of society. I am retaining the theory of a love curse, but after that it will mostly be my imagination at work...so I hope you do enjoy it.

So back to the story...@bold: it is Mehek in the hospital in the present... all will be revealed as we go along😛

As it pertains to the other two stories, I just felt that they were not resonating with the readers, although I admit not to really focusing much on Under My Protection...I thought it best just to put them aside. If there ends us being some interest in them, perhaps I will reconsider and get back to them.

Lastly, I do apologize for my lack of response these last few week. A whole lot has gone on both at home and in the office in the last month or so, and frankly I just shut completely down, which is my tendency when I am overburdened😕 Like I said I didn't go near my laptop for weeks at a time. Things still happening around me, but not as stressful as they have been.

Okay I've rambled a bit more than I expected... I hope you enjoy this story, and yes I do plan on updating DTM and HUL later this week.
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Hi Haseena, 😃. Hope you like this one.
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Originally posted by: Mishtilove

Kelly di...so good to see you back that too with a story.🤗

story seems so interesting...
you have penned down it so well.
Di,i have not much idea about what Devadasi mean but still from this one i can figure out a little.
Thankyou for giving us a lovely new SS.
and moreover i'm happy that u r writing this new story for ur reades.🤗



He Mishti, admittedly I have been through a rough patch of late, so much that I completely shut down and stopped writing altogether for a few weeks. Trying to get out of this rut now, and hope that getting back to my writing will help me with that.

The devadasi as I understand from my research are females who are dedicated to a temple from a young age for their entire lives. Unfortunately, sometimes this "service" includes these poor girls becoming sex slaves to men of higher status, which the show I watched did not emphasize, but I will explore a bit. Add a love curse and a great pairing like Mehrya and I think that I have something interesting in mind. A lot of the content will be of my own imaginings, so I hope you enjoy this story of a love destined to be😛

Thanks for the read and the comment😊

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