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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: Mihrimah

Wow man!! That's poetic! You people r such great with words!! Everyone has such beautiful words to share! Love reading all of you...

You keep writing.. very very aesthetic❤️


Oh dear thanks glad you liked it... pls do read part 2 and care to share your views...


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Posted: 8 years ago
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Oh God AD! this is beautiful!!!! Your words brought tears to my eyes. Mukhi's thought process has been written in such a fantastic manner that i could'nt stop myself from feeling all those feelings that his soul has been going through... 😭 I dont want mota Anshul to be Aru's husband...i m sure he is Besharamishta's pati and when Mukhi ji will realize this, i want him to have a final emotional breakdown before he eventually finds his true love back. Please bring her back to him... 😭
Write the 3rd part soon please... 😊
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Oh God AD! this is beautiful!!!! Your words brought tears to my eyes. Mukhi's thought process has been written in such a fantastic manner that i could'nt stop myself from feeling all those feelings that his soul has been going through...😭I dont want mota Anshul to be Aru's husband...i m sure he is Besharamishta's pati and when Mukhi ji will realize this, i want him to have a final emotional breakdown before he eventually finds his true love back. Please bring her back to him...😭

Write the 3rd part soon please...😊



Hahahahaha Ayesha am taking the sadistic pleasure You c lolol but on a serious note it's going to be a tornado for multi I feel dear ... let's see how my lens shapes up...

Glad u love it .. will update it soon

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Posted: 8 years ago
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OMG! This is so so beautiful.. Where were you all these days. Please give us more. I really loved Mukhiji's diary writing in the first part and the leap... goodness... how intense it makes the story. Mukhi's feelings on seeing the baby in the picture was so sad. You said that she offered herself to him... so I thought the baby was his.
Now I really want a leap. And please update fast, can't wait to read this.

Put a SS or FF on your topic. I had no idea such a beautiful story was inside.
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Originally posted by: malkasub

OMG! This is so so beautiful.. Where were you all these days. Please give us more. I really loved Mukhiji's diary writing in the first part and the leap... goodness... how intense it makes the story. Mukhi's feelings on seeing the baby in the picture was so sad. You said that she offered herself to him... so I thought the baby was his.

Now I really want a leap. And please update fast, can't wait to read this.

Put a SS or FF on your topic. I had no idea such a beautiful story was inside.


Hey thanks dear for your feedback... glad you liked it... will try to update soon ... weekdays are pathetic for me ... i always hang around in forum for updates as i dont get time to watch it on time ... khair.. but yes will try to update soon yar


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Originally posted by: artzdreamer

With love
Yours ever ever culprit
Your mukhiji...
A life, a soul that will burn in guilt of hurting its love, smashing it to graves...

Page is turned and the book is closed... tears of pain and heaviness squeezed hearts ... : Bhaila eh tu ne teeq nahi kiya aru ke saath... tu ne tere dingli se itna sab chupaya ...tumhara sakti se peshana nafrat dikhana sab jhut tha... itna pyaar shayad aru bhi nahi ki hogi tere saat ..itna pyaar karke chupaliya...aur use dhakke marke zindagi ne phenk dala? Ab tujhe tumhare is dheengli ko jawab dena hoga ... ab mein agayi hu...

Mishsri takes that dairy and dials a number... the receiver doesnt pick the call.. .she tries but in vain ... Deep comes to mishri saying where is sir... aur ye sab kya hai ...aru aur tumhare bhaila ek saath nahi hai? aur itne dino se koi hum bataya kyu nahi ... Tu to aru se baat kar rahi thi na ... mishri bol na ...

she stands with tears in eyes ...and a sudden jerk by deepu lets her grip on dairy lose and few snaps from dairy falls down along with few letters too...

Mishri looks down and deepu bends down and picks up those snaps...

Both deepu and mishri were shell shocked to look at the snaps. ...

A capture of aru's eyes, smile, her playing with kids, aru in saree, aru naughty chirpy antics ...her childhood pics... Deepu asks eh sab kya hai... koi bataega bhi eh sab ho kya raha hai...

Sanvi comes with a kid and says its all because of raju ... he feels that he doesnt deserve her coz of his age ... and his village life style ... and we got to know that there is a guy of her age who loved her .. so raju ne aru ko chod diya ... bohot bohot sakti se peshake use apne se dur karliya ... aur ab aru kaha hai kisi ko nahi pata... aur mishri ... tu keh rahi thi ki aru se treri baat hui kab ?

Ruko ruko ... raju ko bulati hu...

Mishri basss sanvi di ... Itne saal aru mujhse jhoot bolti arahi hai mein abhi baat karungi ...

Sanvi : ek minute raju se bat karne to do ...

On road : A car driving as fast as jet stops at a studio ... its raining heavily ... thunders trying to signal something ... mother nature shedding her tears to console her kids who were born to be meant for each other living a life as scary as a dark grave ... those remains of ashes are driving them to live a dead life. .. she is bursting out her pain and drenching the world ... she is pleading her kids to look at the doors that she is opening for them...

The window door slides down ...with eyes looking constantly at the display photo board from the glasses ... tears welling up ...as though its a season for high tide and the tides might take the world with her angst...

Eyes are stuck with colors of nature ... Driver asks ... sir kuch chahiye...
From car : Studio se woh photo chahiye ... kitna daam hai aur woh kiska photo hai puchke ao...
Driver steps out... .. Its our beloved mukhiji inside the car... talking to self ... aru...meri aru ... meri gaurani... kitni badalgayi ...aur bacha ? matlab... aru apni zindagi mein age bad gayi? His heart sould is stripping and crashing down ... His love his one and only love ...his only hope of life ... a part in him waiting for a day - aru coming to him slapping him for pushing her away and surrender ...
world of hope is draining in that rain ... a part of his soul ... looking at that picture ..screaming on top of the world. ...after 5 years ...pure paanch saal bad ...dikhi hai eh chehra jise dekhe ... mera jee karta hai ki mein phir se jiu ... jiske naam sunte hi ... mera rom rom moh moh ke dhaage mein apne aapko samaa neka man karta hai...

a part of his soul fuming in jealousy ... mein sahi tha... woh umr me choti hai ...woh zaroor apne umr ke chokre se age bad sakti hai... aur mein sahi nikla... woh age bad gayi... ab raju tereliye is duniya men kuch nahi hai...

A part of his soul fuming in dejection ..tasting his own medicine ... woh aru jo ladki mujhe pyar karne ka dawa ki hai ..mere age peeche ghoomti rahi woh mujhe bhool gayi...e kaise manu mein ... woh meri dua hai ..aur dawaa bhi... lekin use shadi karte waqt mein yaad tak nahi aya? hu! umr ki garmi mein pagal bani woh ... lekin ..woh aur uski pyar sab jhoot eh ek phareb hai ... use mujhe ek na ek din is zindagi mein puchunga ... safayi mangunga...

A part of his soul ripping him to pieces ... wanting to see her meet her once at least once ... hug her till a sweet bitter pain stab touches his soul and rips him off... wants to listen to her saying mukhiji ... dukhi mukhi ... and he wants to kiss every inch of his dufford gaurani...

but she is standing there in that picture with a kid... is that kid hers? did she really marry someone? where is she now? what his gaurani must be doing? Flashes of that night where he left her ruthlessly throwing tantrums questioning her conduct... feeling of deceit his head started spinning... for once ...

those flashes of his aru confessing her love ...she running into him like an innocent river to hug him kiss him...on his wounds ... those flashes of him knowingly helplessly failing to refrain himself from falling for her... she coming for him to offer herself ...those dove shaped eyes...those little little chirpy giggles... she getting scared of darkness, their first hug... the way he kissed her ... everything every single moment they shared are troubling him, torturing him, bitterness in his heart is growing heavily reciprocating to the endless wild rain...of the night...

sirji...e lijiye photo ...eh madam mumbai mein rehti hai khud ki ek company chalarahi hai...

Mukhi : Aur woh bachha?

Driver : Pata nahi sir...

Mukhi gives him money and asks him to leave he sits in the driver seat and starts driving ... aimlessly...turns on music system...

: yeh moh moh ke dhaage...

Yeh moh moh ke dhaage
Teri ungliyon se jaa uljhe
Yeh moh moh ke dhaage
Teri ungliyon se ja uljhe
Koi toh toh na laage
Kis tarah girah ye suljhe
Hai rom rom ek tara
Hai rom rom iktaara
Jo badalon mein se guzre

Ye moh moh ke dhage
Teri ungliyon se jaa uljhe
Koi toh toh na lage
Kis tarah girah yeh suljhe

Tu hoga zaraa paagal
Tune mujh ko hai chuna
Tu hoga zara pagal
Tune mujh ko hai chunaa
Kaise toone ankahaa
Tune an-kahaa sab suna
Tu hoga zara paagal
Tune mujh ko hai chuna

Tu din sa hai, mein raat
Aana Donon mil jaayein shaamon ki tarah

Yeh moh moh ke dhaage
Teri ungliyon se ja uljhe
Koi toh toh na laage
Kis tarah girah ye suljhe

Yeh teri jhoothi baatein mai saari maan loon
Ke teri jhoothi baatein mai saari maan loon
Aankhon se tere sach sabhi, sab kuchh abhi jaan loon
Ke teri jhoothi baatein mai saari maan loon...

Tej hai dhaara behte se hum awaara
Aa tham ke saansein le yahaan

Yeh moh moh ke dhaage
Teri ungliyon se jaa uljhe
Koi toh toh na laage
Kis tarah girah yeh suljhe

His car creek sound ... stops at the place where aru use to live in ahemdabad... That verandah where she acted as though she fainted when he was all set to leave her... he stepped in ... those staircases from where she like a swan use to come down playing ... that bedroom where she offered herself ..to him every time he rejected ... never losing hope...nostalgia took over his senses... he is not able to think beyond her... a girl comes from behind and asks

who he is looking for ... he says aru... nothing else... woh woh didi ab yaha nahi rehti... woh sab ko chod ke mumbai chali gayi...

aur uske pariwar ? asks mukhi...the girl says ... they live in gandhinagar here she bought a big flat for them ..so they left but she gave this place to an orphanage ...

A voice from behind... sarla ben ...ab eh kaam bhi mujhe hi karna padega kya? he turns ..its a male voice which he is familiar to ... he turns to and sees but he fails to recognize the person ... he is none other than anshul... he look s at mukhi and gets hell beaten to death ... a shock ..a moment of silence ...

the kid he saw in aru's hand in the picture comes running to anshul calling him papa ...

Mukhi heart skips its beat and silent tears storms his heart ...thinking anshul as aru's husband and the kid to be her's ...


To be continued ...

Dear friends... as i say ...please care to share your views... next update will be up soon...


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Wow..lovely post and what a grip you have on dialogue delivery...you can be an awesome screenplay writer!!
And the webs of confusion , sacrifice and longing that you have depicted in Mukhi are awesome...hope to got Aru Mukhi never get separated though.

I hope your Aru does not become a broken soul...or maybe she is and Mukhi needs to come and restore her...

Good going...do write the next part.
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Anshul being anshul, knowing it s mukhi, he plays a foul play which he rami and dharmi played years back... asks mukhi ...who are you?

Mukhi - Am passing by and suddenly my car is dead ...so i need one night stay here if you ppl dont mind..

Anshul - looks at mukhi from top to bottom and thinks that this is the right time to spoil the left overs of mukhi aru love and he obliges.

Purposefully gives him ARMU bedroom - That room where they last had their moment and first confessed their wish to be together for ever. That bed, still reminds of that hot passionate steamy moments for the countless number of times they had .. those promises, those memories started coming like flashes.

Everything changed, he changed, world too is transforming but one thing in that room hasnt changed. Anshul too was not around, suddenly Mukhiji remembered it. He opened the cupboard there its filled with spider webs. just like the misunderstandings that clouded their lives...

It's a box wrapped in gift box in the dust and web looking for its righteous owner to open it as though arus soul is resting in it, along with their pic in digital frame that's gifted to Mukhiji by Aru on that night an hour before they parted their ways. He opened the cupboard and was taken aback to look at it. His heart skipped multi times and bombarded zillion times thinking of the way he got the gift that night ...and how a tsunami evolved and disaster washed their peace and smile before he could open and see that. He is scared... hands were shivering looking at it... still,... He wanted to know whats in it.

"Us din tu ne mujhe eh haath mein dekar kaha thane ki ...mukhi ji eh gift humare zindagi mein khushi bhardegi... Hum ek ho hi gaye lekin iske baad is jahan mein koi bhi hume alag nahi kar sakte... kyunki hum ek aur moh ked or mein bandhne ja rahe hai Mein kabhi who baat samjha nahi kaash mein sun leta tujhke ... kash uske baad hum judaa hi na hogaye hote...

With the flashes of that innocent smiles tears welling up just like the water tank filled during the night of their confession ... His eyes were not knowing the limit of saltness piling up ... yet he dared to open that gift wrap ... and opened it... he for a second had lost his senses...his ground is shaken ... Aru mere liye apni naukri chodke ... ma bani? Who pregnant thi? Eh baat batane keliye usne us din tayari ki ? who pregnant thi toh us bache ka baap mein ? phir eh admi kaun hai? Who photo mein bacha toh 5 saal ka nahi lagraha tha? DNA aur pregnancy ka test result mujhe batane keliye who sab.toh phir ...dharmi ne mujhe aisa kyu bataya?

Next to the wrap he sees an album too its aru's family album, in that dharmi and anshuls marriage pics too were there. He slap of relief a sweet stab in heart started vomiting sigh of relief just as a high as the climax of a steamy makeout started spreading all over his body ... His hairs stood up with a relief that his aru is not married to that guy and that kid ? he leaves everything there and turns to run to the kid but reprimands... his mind knocks him of aru...he right at the moment wants to run to his gaurani confront her of what happened that night? Was she into another relation? Did she get married? If she was in a relation and deceived him then what was the report meant? A tide of countless questions encounters are troubling his mind... He leaves his things there and rushes downstairs to findout about aru's whereabouts... He goes to the orphanage lady and asks her about aru's whereabouts ..she doesn't budge to offer him any inputs .. but on persuading a lot he gets to know that the kid is not aru's and its Anshul and dharmi's. As dharmi eloped with a rich guy leaving this kid and then Anshul stayed back with the kid as he loves his wife but aru raises the kid and takes care.

On talking to her further, he gets to know that aru never married anyone. Its just a month back she was back in city as her father was serious. He tries to know about her further any kids does she have... The lady says five years back she left ahmedabad and family too since then, she visits them once an year. And Dharmi's kid she took with her and raised the kid.

Mukhi gets overwhelmed to know all this ... his hearts core accusing him, his conscience ripping him. Reality laughing at him. He couldn't face his own self.

He is not able to get in connect with the reality of his life... For what had happened to his love and how could he even think of aru like that, that she might be liking some other guy leaving him just becoz he was a village man, and the phone call recording that he heard from dharmi and rami ... those messages in the late nights all how his mind is jeopardized with a strong belief that, he is not fit for her and she deserves a better life ... and he even remembers how aru was literally on her knees trying to prove her innocence and love for him...and he never bothered to look at her ... he with his own hands ... removed her mangalsutra sindoor and declared himself dead for her... He develops a deep shock and requests her to give aru's details and the later heeds and gives info to mukhi.

He rushes to the address given. With a whack of guilt spreading his face...and a deep throb in his heart he knocks the door... and yes there you go ... He doesn't see her anywhere around ...he just pushes the door and the door is opened...

He is freaked out for what he saw as and when he entered the house...

To be continued next update will be up tonight itself...

Keep guessing guys what he might have seen...

As I always say... Care to share your views ...


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Edited by artzdreamer - 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: artzdreamer

Anshul being anshul, knowing it s mukhi, he plays a foul play which he rami and dharmi played years back... asks mukhi ...who are you?

Mukhi - Am passing by and suddenly my car is dead ...so i need one night stay here if you ppl dont mind..

Anshul - looks at mukhi from top to bottom and thinks that this is the right time to spoil the left overs of mukhi aru love and he obliges.

Purposefully gives him ARMU bedroom - That room where they last had their moment and first confessed their wish to be together for ever. That bed, still reminds of that hot passionate steamy moments for the countless number of times they had .. those promises, those memories started coming like flashes.

Everything changed, he changed, world too is transforming but one thing in that room hasnt changed. Anshul too was not around, suddenly Mukhiji remembered it. He opened the cupboard there its filled with spider webs. just like the misunderstandings that clouded their lives...

It's a box wrapped in gift box in the dust and web looking for its righteous owner to open it as though arus soul is resting in it, along with their pic in digital frame that's gifted to Mukhiji by Aru on that night an hour before they parted their ways. He opened the cupboard and was taken aback to look at it. His heart skipped multi times and bombarded zillion times thinking of the way he got the gift that night ...and how a tsunami evolved and disaster washed their peace and smile before he could open and see that. He is scared... hands were shivering looking at it... still,... He wanted to know whats in it.

"Us din tu ne mujhe eh haath mein dekar kaha thane ki ...mukhi ji eh gift humare zindagi mein khushi bhardegi... Hum ek ho hi gaye lekin iske baad is jahan mein koi bhi hume alag nahi kar sakte... kyunki hum ek aur moh ked or mein bandhne ja rahe hai Mein kabhi who baat samjha nahi kaash mein sun leta tujhke ... kash uske baad hum judaa hi na hogaye hote...

With the flashes of that innocent smiles tears welling up just like the water tank filled during the night of their confession ... His eyes were not knowing the limit of saltness piling up ... yet he dared to open that gift wrap ... and opened it... he for a second had lost his senses...his ground is shaken ... Aru mere liye apni naukri chodke ... ma bani? Who pregnant thi? Eh baat batane keliye usne us din tayari ki ? who pregnant thi toh us bache ka baap mein ? phir eh admi kaun hai? Who photo mein bacha toh 5 saal ka nahi lagraha tha? DNA aur pregnancy ka test result mujhe batane keliye who sab.toh phir ...dharmi ne mujhe aisa kyu bataya?

Next to the wrap he sees an album too its aru's family album, in that dharmi and anshuls marriage pics too were there. He slap of relief a sweet stab in heart started vomiting sigh of relief just as a high as the climax of a steamy makeout started spreading all over his body ... His hairs stood up with a relief that his aru is not married to that guy and that kid ? he leaves everything there and turns to run to the kid but reprimands... his mind knocks him of aru...he right at the moment wants to run to his gaurani confront her of what happened that night? Was she into another relation? Did she get married? If she was in a relation and deceived him then what was the report meant? A tide of countless questions encounters are troubling his mind... He leaves his things there and rushes downstairs to findout about aru's whereabouts... He goes to the orphanage lady and asks her about aru's whereabouts ..she doesn't budge to offer him any inputs .. but on persuading a lot he gets to know that the kid is not aru's and its Anshul and dharmi's. As dharmi eloped with a rich guy leaving this kid and then Anshul stayed back with the kid as he loves his wife but aru raises the kid and takes care.

On talking to her further, he gets to know that aru never married anyone. Its just a month back she was back in city as her father was serious. He tries to know about her further any kids does she have... The lady says five years back she left ahmedabad and family too since then, she visits them once an year. And Dharmi's kid she took with her and raised the kid.

Mukhi gets overwhelmed to know all this ... his hearts core accusing him, his conscience ripping him. Reality laughing at him. He couldn't face his own self.

He is not able to get in connect with the reality of his life... For what had happened to his love and how could he even think of aru like that, that she might be liking some other guy leaving him just becoz he was a village man, and the phone call recording that he heard from dharmi and rami ... those messages in the late nights all how his mind is jeopardized with a strong belief that, he is not fit for her and she deserves a better life ... and he even remembers how aru was literally on her knees trying to prove her innocence and love for him...and he never bothered to look at her ... he with his own hands ... removed her mangalsutra sindoor and declared himself dead for her... He develops a deep shock and requests her to give aru's details and the later heeds and gives info to mukhi.

He rushes to the address given. With a whack of guilt spreading his face...and a deep throb in his heart he knocks the door... and yes there you go ... He doesn't see her anywhere around ...he just pushes the door and the door is opened...

He is freaked out for what he saw as and when he entered the house...

To be continued next update will be up tonight itself...

Keep guessing guys what he might have seen...

As I always say... Care to share your views ...


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AD...This is so beautiful.. Can't wait for the conclusion... Honestly, I can see this happen in the serial as well... THANK YOU..👍🏼
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AD...This is so beautiful.. Can't wait for the conclusion... Honestly, I can see this happen in the serial as well... THANK YOU..👍🏼



Aww thanks kitz .. lets see how will my thought flow shapes up ... i am trying to give you all a intense dose as a package of moh moh ...

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Whoa AD! This plot is sooo powerful! You have written very nicely and I am really looking forward to the next part... 👏

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