Childhood Sweethearts - Part 6 on Page 13

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Posted: 6 years ago
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Hey
This is a new story. This idea has been in my mind for quite some time but finally started to write it today.

Part -1

"Sameer, is this how you behave? I don't know what is wrong with you, nowadays you have become so disrespectful These are the words heard by 6 year old Sameer Maheshwari as he climbs down the stairs. He doesn't pay any attention to his mom, he has lost count of the times he has been scolded like this in the past 6 months and he knows it will continue.

It all started 6 months back when his mother remarried. He had met Mr.Somani once when he came to his house and his mom and Nanaji introduced him as his new father. He couldn't completely understand what was happening but somehow he couldn't call this stranger as his Dad. Then their wedding happened and that was when he saw Rohan his step-brother. When he saw him, he didn't realize that he will end up competing for everything in life with Rohan including for his mother's love. When he saw Rohan, he was sitting calmly in his grandmother's lap while Sameer was busy running around with his cousins and others.

Two days after the wedding, they were leaving for Delhi or so he thought and tried to follow his mother who was getting into the car but he was stopped by Mr.Somani and Mr.Somani's mother. Even his mother was bewildered at this scene and following this a huge argument occurred between Mr.Somani and Nanaji. He didn't know the complete details of it but his mother came in after some time and told him that Sameer has to stay with his Nanaji. Sameer couldn't understand any of it and tried to grab his mother's hand but she left him and walked away and when she was leaving he could see her hold Rohan's hand and leave.

Today morning, his mom came from Delhi as she does once a month and he was sooo happy to see her. Earlier, she called him and pulled out a bag. In the bag there were two cars, he wanted the red one but apparently red was Rohan's favorite color also. He wondered why his mom couldn't give him give the red one considering the fact Rohan already has taken his mom away. He argued with his mom and finally stormed away with the green one, it was still a gift from his mother and he loved her a lot. But he was still angry and when he played with the car he used a little more force than necessary and it fell down the stairs. But his mom assumed that he threw it on purpose and started shouting at him.

He came down the stairs wondering if the car was still in one piece and that's when he saw her. A cute little girl with her hair in two ponytails picking up the broken pieces of the green car.

I know its short but consider it to be a Prologue of sorts and Part - 2 will be posted soon. (Tonight itself mostly)

Leave comments and reviews. ( Tomatoes and slippers also welcome)


Part - 1 - Page 1
Part - 2 - Page 3
Part - 3 - Page 7
Part - 4 - Page 8
Part - 5 - Page 10
Part - 6 - Page 13




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Posted: 6 years ago
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Hey interesting story
Samaina ka bachpan it's so cute little girl withtwo ponytails I think its naina :)
I don't like Vishakha she can never understand sameer that poor kid is suffering so much after his father death he has become more vulnerable and needs care and love but Vishakha can't understand this
I am glad that nanu is here and hope naina too :)
Please continue:)
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Posted: 6 years ago
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Interesting story. Looking forward
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Posted: 6 years ago
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This is a great start. A neglected, angry and confused little Sameer. A younger Naina coming in to pick up the pieces of a broken heart and heal him.
Beautiful. Please continue.
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Posted: 6 years ago
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Interesting one...And emotional too...would love to read how the story unfolds...And of you are looking for a title...ek duje ke vaaste...
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Posted: 6 years ago
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loved the concept
she has to be Naina
their journey from childhood onward
very interesting
waiting more more

continue soon


Edited by munchkinland - 6 years ago
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Posted: 6 years ago
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Hey Such a realistic plot and I am glad you have chosen one of the best sequences to narrate.⭐️
It will certainly be a treat to read on. Great work👏👏👏
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Posted: 6 years ago
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Interesting one!! Please continue
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Posted: 6 years ago
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Wow it's quiet interesting. I liked the concept. It starts from childhood, similar to my story. Thanx for the PM.
Pls continue
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Posted: 6 years ago
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I liked the concept .
It is even more beautiful bcoz the story is starting from their childhood .
Super do cont.

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