Samaina os ft.Preehan (Anjaane Humsafar)

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A Samaina os...


ANJAANE HUMSAFAR

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Sameer , Rohan Preeti and Naina four different persons...with different status...different thinking...And even different parental conditions...they were poles apart...

Then comes Sameer and Naina...Naina would freely talk to everyone... Being in same class from their childhood in the very famous Pragati Vidya Ka Mandir school these two never talked to each other freely for a longer time...but why...because in each other's presence they feel a peaceful aura...no words were needed for them to communicate with each other...

Their mere interaction being in similar class was to exchange casual pleasantries like wishing good morning or asking about each other's families well being...as their families were friends to each other...

Sameer's stepfather had loss in his business after four years of his marriage with his mother...thus resulting in his and his family to shift to Ahmedabad...Being with his nanu from childhood and seeing his mother caring for his stepson more than him made him vulnerable from inside...he would always yearn for a mother's love...which he got from his nanu...leaving in same home had established a civil relation between him and his mother and stepfather...but he adored his siblings and would always shower them with his love and care...

In a very early age of just 17 years he had become a very mature person who although is weak from inside but never lets it overpower his carefree nature...to get appreciation from his mother he would try and try harder to excel in every field...And was successful too...leaving just in studies where he always was no.2...but this doesn't disappoint him...as for him it would give him a happiness...the smile of the person for which he can turn world upside down...the topper of his class...the niece of his stepfather's friend...his only girl classmate with whom he talks...his love...the Naina Aggarwal...but never voiced it out...in fear to lose the adoration and respect for himself in his eyes...he could not live with seeing hatred in her eyes for him...

On the other side Naina...although a pari and ladli of her chachaji and chachiji...there was a void in her life..the void of mother's love...which can't be fulfilled by any other person rather than the mother itself...although she was loved by her Chachaji and chachiji...her sisters pooja and Preeti and by her elder brother arjun...but the hurtful words his father and taiji would use against her always left her wondering why is she living this hell of a life...where no hope for happiness in left...but then remembering about a person all her negative thoughts would vanish...And her mind would just start remembering about him...all her life from childhood to now in the 16th year of her life...she would silently observe him...that how being in a family like his he doesn't crib like other children...whom she had come to adore this much in the last couple of years that being in front of him would always make her nervous...she would always wonder about the changing feelings she had grown for her...until recently when she shared her feelings with her pen friend Shefali and she assured it to be attraction or love towards him...but she had to figure these emotions on her own...

And now being clear of her feelings as love she had decided to tell him about her feelings towards him...that she loves him and then it be his decision to accept her love or not...so she anxiously waited for the next day...

The next day in school...naina reached the school earlier as she knew that he arrives earlier in school everyday...she searched for him...but didn't find him...And as the day proceeded further she was becoming restless because it was not in his nature to miss the school she couldn't enquire about him from his friends as they have no relation to ask about each other...so she decided to wait and ask him from himself the next day...but before the school would be over for the day...the trustee of school ...his nanaji arrived for a special announcement...And this would change their whole lives...the announcement was that the topper Naina was selected to be as a special student and will now be given a scholarship from a highly reputed school of Gujarat...the Vanasthali school...situated in Rajkot...she was initially happy...but a mere thought of being distant from her new found love even without confessing to him made her sad...but what could she
do...she can't argue in front of her elders...but then a thought came in her mind...she could talk her wish to her chachaji who could convince the family to let her continue her studies here only...so with this determination she found a new hope for her love...

Here in the maheshwari house in noon time sameer told her nanaji that he loves a girl in his class...because whatever might be...he knew that Naina adores him and likes him as a friend...so to make his love a success he decided to take help from nanaji and told him about her and also insisted to talk about their alliance with her family and their marriage after their college finishes...

Sameer tell his nanu that the girl he loves is the girl from the family of his stepfather's friend...And her name is Naina

Seeing happiness in his grandsons eyes while talking about the girl in his class Mr. Maheshwari felt relieved and decided to talk about the alliance...as the family Sameer was talking about is known to him from many years and he always adores the girls of that family...but the much adored from all three daughters of their family is Naina...he wished her to be his daughter in law...And with God's grace his wish was granted... and he decided to sent the alliance for Naina for Sameer...(And due to this he missed the school today...to think about how he will tell this to nanaji)...Rohan who had come to meet sameer after his chess competiton(he too missed school) listened to their conversation and he also presented his desire to marry the other daughter of Aggarwal family as he has fallen in love with her...but was too shy to admit it...altough unlike Sameer Rohan was known of Preeti's feeling towards him are of love...that is why he dared to took this big step...somehow they both missed to mention the special announcement nanaji had given in the school about his love...

The elderly man was happy for his both grandsons as they chooses gems in form of girls to be their life partner and after discussing the boys desire with his family he sent the alliance for both girls to marry his both grandsons respectively...

At night in Naina's home she goes to her chachaji's room...but stops after listening the conversation between the couple...And after liesting to their conversation the ground beneath her slips away and tears make way in her eyes...but she controlled her emotions and takes the decision to move to the vansthali school...

The next morning

Sameer was very happy today and was up with a new hope...hope to tell his feelings to the love of his life...he thought that now he will not stop...And it would be unfair to Naina if he didn't made his feelings clear to her...And with this enthusiasm he got ready and went to school...but to his dismay Naina was not present at school...he looked for her every where...in library...in canteen...everywhere he can think of but he didn't saw her anywhere...And soon the bell rang and following school rules he went to his class hoping to see her there...but to his surprise even the teacher taking attendance missed her roll call and this made him impatient...

Then after the lectures during break he was still gloomy when Rohan arrived there and asked him the reason...And Sameer told him everything to which Rohan responded in that today Naina was moving to Rajkot...

Sameer: par aise kaise jaa sakti hai woh...ek baar bhi nahi socha usne mera kya hoga...Rohan mujhe usse baat karni hai...

Rohan:shhh...bhai shant ho ja...dekh meri Preeti se baat huyi thi...bhabhi ke jaane ke baare mein...Abhi unki bus nikalne Mein aadha ganta hai...tu ja aur mil le unse aur unhe apne dil ki baat bata de...

Sameer: haan...tune sahi kaha Rohan...par school...

Rohan: bhai Dekh abhi lunch time hai...toh tu ja aur jaldi vaapis aa jana...mein yahan sambhal loonga...

Sameer: haan...mein aaj Naina se apne dil ki baat keh kar rahoonga...

Sameer started his bike and went towards the bus stand...he tried to find Naina a lot...

Naina who was tired from crying on her fate as soon as she sat in her booked seat in the bus drifted to a deep slumber and covered her face with dupatta...And here Sameer got inside the bus...but he didn't saw her...And due to a child's mistake he misunderstood the destination of bus as dwarika and hence left from there...And thus the meeting of two lovers...who just decided to confess their love of ages got aparted...






5 years later...

Naina had shifted to Delhi for higher studies...whereas everyone else had continued their studies in Ahmedabad only...Rohan and Sameer joined the family business...the gang started working with their parents respectively...And Preeti although after a lot of bickering from tauji and taiji had fulfilled her desire of being a hairstylist with the support of her future-in-laws...

Naina had never once visited Ahmedabad after the fateful day of her life...And not even allowed any family members go visit her in lieu of it being against hostel rules...

During her studying in vanasthali school she had started teaching younger students thus trying to be independent and with that she selected her liberal life far from the conservative thinking of her family...in which her chachaji and chachiji supported her...but they would always yearn for their daughter whom they loved the most but then they also feel proud of her for leaving life on her terms and being independent...Naina had perused her dream of being writer and after two years of continues hard work a publication house has decided to publish her first story...

In the evening...

Preeti:(on phone)Mujhe kuch nahi pata bs tu aa rahi hai...
Other person: nahi mein nahi aaungi..
Preeti: tujhe aana padega...tu nahi aayegi toh shaadi ki rasme kaise hongi...
OP:shaadi ki rasme nahi hogi...shaadi teri hai meri nahi...
Preeti bits her lips...Haan aur tu meri behen hai koi dur ki rishtedaar nahi...ki bs shaadi par aaye aur baat khatam...Mujhe kuch nahi sunana...waise bhi pata nahi jabse gayi hai kya hogya hai tujhe...bilkul badal gayi...meri naina toh lagati hi nahi...ab toh 5 saal ho gaye hain...ab toh ghar aa jaa...mere liye hi sahi...
Naina:accha theak hai...ab aise emotional blackmail mat kar...kal aa jaoungi mein...accha sun gate par koi hai...baad mein baat karti hoon and she kept the receiver down...

And then crashing down on floor near the table she starts weeping...

Naina: kaise karungi mein yeh sab...kaise dekhoungi apne pyaar ko apni behen ka pati banate huye...kaise samna karungi apni behen ka yeh jaante huye ki uske hone waale pati ke liye mein kya feel karti hoon...ki aaj bhi 5 saal baad mein usse nahi bhula payi hoon...jitna usse bhulana chahti hoon utna usse pyaar aur badh aata hai...kaise...And she starts crying again...

After sometime...

Naina:(Wiping her tears...)nahi Naina nahi...tu aise kamzor nahi padh sakti...tujhe apne dil par...apni feelings par kabu rakhna hoga...khudke liye na sahi Preeti ke liye...Aur waise bhi ek mahine ki hi toh baat hai...tu yeh Kar sakti hai...

And with this new found determination she moved to her room and started packing her clothes for the journey to her hometown...but she was unaware of the fact that this journey was going to change her life...for better or for worst...let's see...


The next day Naina arrived at her home


While entering the home she gently touched each and every corner of the house remembering bitter sweet memories of her life...the life she had left behind five years ago...life she was very fond of...the people she loved,adored and cares about...but at most she had left that vulnerable Naina behind who couldn't stand for herself against taiji and her father...

She had just entered the home and was engulfed in a bear hug by her sister and mother like figure her chachiji...


Then after ten minutes they leave her...And chachiji caressing her head and face...


Naina: jai siya ram chachiji...

Chachiji: itna tame(time) lagata hai kya koi ghar vaapis aane mein...chal aa baith thak gayi hogi na...meine naa aaj tera pasindida khanna banaya hai tere liye...ruk mein abhi laati hoon


And she goes on kitchen...

Preeti again hugs naina...

Preeti:mujhe tujhse koi baat nahi Karni...pata hai taras gayi thi mein...tu jaanti hai na mein tere bina nahi reh sakti...lekin bs bohot ho gayi padhai likhayi...ab toh hame umar bhar saath rehna hai...

Naina: umar bhar saath( Naina was confused on Preeti's words but before she could enquire anything)

Taiji enters the home...

Taiji: o bai...aa gayi maharani ghar vaapis...

Naina: jai siya ram taiji...

Taiji: haan haan wo toh theak hai...par ek baat bata tu itne din ghar ke bahar reh kar aa rahi hai...tujhme sharam laaj bachi bhi hai ki nahi...

Preeti: taiji vo abhi toh aayi hai itne saalon baad...aur aap...

Taiji: chup ek dum chup...(turning to naina)aur tu pehle toh yeh bata ki kahi apna mooh toh kala nahi kiya na tune...


Bela: bhabiji aap yeh...

Taiji:chup...haan toh ab ghar aa hi gayi hai toh jaa jake yeh naye phason( fashion) waale kapde badal aur jaise Aggarwal khandan ki ladkiyan rehti hai...vaisi ban kar aa...

Naina: taiji pehli baat...aap mere kapdon ke baare mein kuch kyun bol rahi hai...inme waise bhi koi problem nahi hai(she twirls a little) dekhiye badan har jagah se dhaka hai...aur dusri baat...mein aapki bohot izzat karti hoon...toh meri aapse beenti hai use aise hi rehne dijiye...

Taiji gulps at the answer given by Naina for she not expected the calm...innocent...studious Naina to be this bold...And in this shock she goes from their to her home...

Preeti hugs Naina from back..

Preeti: wah behen tune toh aaj taiji ki bhi bolti band kardi...

Bela: haan...still in shock...

Preeti:toh behen kiski hai and hugs her harder...And Naina hugs her back...


This...this was what she missed all these years the small amount of true love she got from her extended family...


Then after a couple of days it was the day of shopping...

Sameer Rohan Vishakha Bela Preeti and Naina were off to shopping...

Taiji couldn't accompany them due to PTM in parlay's school and preena couldn't ask for more...

In the shop...

Naina had selected a lehenga for herself of red colour and the back design of its choli was tied by dori...

Preeti liked her her choice and insisted her to try it out and both the sisters went towards trial room...Preeti had also picked the dress she had liked for herself...

First Naina went inside the trial room...

Preeti waited five minutes for her...then she thought...

Preeti:arey yeh toh kapde change karne Mein bohot time lagati hai tab tak toh mein yeh try bhi kar ke aajaoungi...And she goes from there...

In the meantime the Majnu brothers arrived there for their respective Lailas...


And then from the room naina was changing in they heard voices...

Naina: Preeti...Preeti...yeh dori bandh de na...

Rohan and Sameer heard her but they didn't saw Preeti their and after,seeing the other trial room locked they come to know that Preeti was changing too...

They looked towards each other's face then Rohan said...

Rohan:aise Kya Dekh raha hai bhai...hone wala pati hai tu...ja jaake bhabhi ki help karde...


Naina: Preeti...kahan hai...aa na


Sameer thought for a second and then went inside the room and tied her dori...in the process his fingers touched her bare back...And a shiver ran down her spine and she shot up her eyes upward and looked towards him through the mirror...

Naina:sa...sa...sameer...tu...tu...tum yahan...

Sameer: wo Preeti...(but she cuts him in between)

Naina: tum yahan kya kar rahe ho...aur vo bhi aise...tumne meri dori kyun bandhi...

Sameer:kyun bandhi mtlb...tumne hi toh kaha tha...

Naina:meine Preeti se kaha tha...

Sameer: haan toh meine baandh di toh kya hua...haq hai mera...ab shaadi ke baad bhi kya Preeti hi karegi yeh sab tumhare liye...

Naina was shocked to listen this...

Naina: haq...yeh tumhara haq hai...Sameer tum samjhate kyun nahi ho...yeh galat hai...tum aisa nahi kar sakte...tum meri behen ke hone vaale pati ho...

Sameer: Naina yeh tum kya keh rahi ho...mein tumse pyaar karta hoon...toh shaadi tumhari behen se Kyun karounga...

Naina: kya lekin uss din toh...

Sameer: kiss din naina...aur kya...

Naina: jis din mein apne pyaar ka izhaar karne waali thi tumse...jiss din mere vansthali jaane ke baare mein pata chala tha...



Flash back to that day...


In Aggarwal house...

Chachaji's room...

Chachiji: suniye ji...aapka kya kehna hai...aaj jo rishta aaya tha...Naina Preeti ke liye theak hoga...Mtlb abhi toh woh bohot choti hain...

Chachaji: arey Bela toh hum konsa abhi unki shaadi kar rahe hain...aur Waise bhi Maheshwari ji bhi toh chahte the ki college khatam hone ke baad hi baat aage badhe...aur Waise bhi bhai sahab ne naina ke liye Haan kardi hai aur Preeti ke liye bhi yeh rishte acche hoga...Waise bhi bohot pyaar hai dono behenon...ab umar ghar saath rahengi...aur ghar baar bhi toh badhiya hi hai...barson se jaante hai hum unn sab ko...


Chachiji: ji bilkul theak kaha aapne ...Naina toh kitni pyaari bachi hai...uske aage toh ladkon ki lane(line) lagati...bs mujhe Preeti ki chinta thi...wo bhi aaj dur Ho gayi...


And then Naina comes there to talk about continuing her studies in Ahmedabad only...

Chachaji: haan...acha hi hua..Preeti ki chinta toh mujhe bhi thi...par ab nahi...akhir Maheshwari ji ke naati se acha aur kon ho sakta hai uske liye...Mujhe toh yeh rishte bohot pasand hai...

Naina on listening this gets shocked and then left from there crying and bond noticed the strom took place there...


Chachiji: ab meri teeno betiyon ki chinta khatam ho gayi...sabko ache ghar mile hain...aur Preeti aur Naina ab humesha saath rahengi...mein toh bohot khush hoon ji...


Present time...



Naina narrates her side of past to Sameer...

Sameer held her chin with his finger and made her raise her face...

Sameer: Naina dekho meri taraf...aur chalo mere saath...

He held her hand and took her outside of the room...And Naina didn't objected as she was still drowned in the sadness she experienced that day...

Sameer bought her to other room...whose door was open...And Preeti was standing facing mirror with Rohan behind her holding a saaree above her head trying to place it there...

Sameer: dekho...tumhari behen ki shaadi iss se hone waali hai...

Hearing his voice Preehan also turned back...And seeing samainas faces they are confused...


Preehan: kya hua bhabhi/jijaji...


And then Sameer told them everything...

Preeti just went to Naina and slapped her hard...

Rohan: Preeti yeh ky...

Preeti: jijaji mujhe apni behen se baat Karni hai...akele...

Sameer took Rohan outside...

Preeti: tera dimag theak toh hai...itni si baat ke liye...ek baar baat ko pura sun toh leti behen... 5 saal...5saal se ghut ghut kar jee rahi hai hum sabse dur sirf itni si baat ke liye...

Naina:(crying) sorry sorry sorry na plz and hugs her...maaf karde...

Preeti just hugs her tighter...

Preeti: dubara aisa kuch kiya na toh...

Naina: toh...phir thappad maregi...

Preeti: haan marungi...

Naina:haan toh maar lena na...behen hai tu meri...


And then both the sisters bursts out laughing...

And then they opened the door...


Both the brothers entered inside and found the sisters have resolved their issues...and then Preehan left Samaina alone in room as they still have to confess their feelings to each other in proper way...

Sameer and naina just stood there looking everywhere but at each other...

After good ten minutes Sameer decide to break the ice...

Sameer: phir kabhi toh aise chod kar nahi jaogi na...And this was it both turned and looked into each other's eyes which speaks a volume of emotions...

Naina just nods her head in no...

Naina: agar kabhi gayi toh tum vaapis le aana...ab toh haq hoga tumhara...

Sameer: haq toh hamesha se tha...bs uski manjoori baaki thi...jo aaj tumhare pyaar ke izhaar ne dedi...


And then he held her hands...

Sameer: ab yeh saath humesha ke liye...

Naina : humesha ke liye...And then they again got drowned in each other's eyes...


Such is their love...unspoken until now...but still felt away from each other unknown to the feelings of the other one...not bounded by any relation but by the hearts...shared no relation during school but then also feel the belongingness...then also felt the emotion to loose wah other...


Preehan entered the room and that brought the lovebirds out from there la la land...

Nobody told about this confusion to elders and as decided earlier both sisters were married together...


And then they lived happily ever after...


Sounds cliche...haha...right...I know


My first try at one shot...do tell how was it...And plz comment...one or two words are enough for us writers to get motivated...but plz do comment...

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Nice one. Loved it. Do write more
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Nice story. You have combined nicely the days of higher studies in Vanasthali to their love story.
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Good one! 👍🏼
You have winded up the whole story in one shot very beautifully..
Dialogues were also well written.
Overall it was a good read.

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Very good attempt. You have successfully combined Samaina, Vanasthali, Preehan, past and present.
Write more.

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Awesome...
Thanx for the PM. It's good that us Newbies are also writing
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Originally posted by: MinervaMcG

Nice one. Loved it. Do write more



Thanx...will surely...Plz do let others know about my work too...plzzz...

With regards
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Thanx...will surely...Plz do let others know about my work too...plzzz...

With regards
Ekta
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Originally posted by: YUDKBHT

Awesome...

Thanx for the PM. It's good that us Newbies are also writing



No probs dear...you are right...we should write more...


Thanx for reading and commenting on my work...


With regards...
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Originally posted by: Priya2910

Very good attempt. You have successfully combined Samaina, Vanasthali, Preehan, past and present.

Write more.

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Glad you like it...


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