Samaina OS- The Unexpected Kiss

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_shweta98

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Posted: 7 years ago

#11

Loved it!!❤️

Situation back iin school was refreshing and made nostalgic!! Keep coming with moree!!

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MeenAkshi Kalra

@dreamyp

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Posted: 7 years ago

#12

Originally posted by: moumita04

Aww... sorry dear..! Maine pehli baar kisi story pe first reserve kiya hai... haha..

Hehe are maine bina story pdhe 1st commnt kra ki waohhh mje aa gye aaj toh then refresh kiya to saw your res..😆😃

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Shreya

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Posted: 7 years ago

#13

Originally posted by: moumita04
Hey Shreya... First of all congratulations on your first story on this forum...!! 🤗

About the story, when I read the title I thought it must be based on the college track and a bold Naina... but it was completely different...Wow...!! 😃

I don't think we have any stories that imagined intimacy, expected or unexpected, during that stage of the show... I mean, who would think stealing shoes would lead to any intimate situation... But, this is so perfectly presented...

Sameer went there with the intention of teaching her a lesson, instead was taught something be never expected - an emotion that he couldn't yet name.

I loved the section where she raised her hands defensively and Sameer felt those hands were challenging him... Its a natural action, the girl fantasizes about him, so she is scared of being near him... He was feeling disgusted one moment, and tender the next, and challenged the immediate next... It was like Naina caused some emotional switches to turn on and off in him... 👏👏

And lastly, the trip and fall... Oh man... You know how vivid my imagination is and I completely melted on this scene... The first soft touch on her delicate neck... the sweetest spot for a woman... I wouldn't have minded if he had lingered a bit, unexpectedly, like he just had to... But I loved how he didn't immediately pull back completely... He couldn't... He had to see her face up close... 😳

All in all, good work...! And now that you have started, please don't stop... 😊

I have an idea, if you want, you could convert this into a series of OS, titled "Unexpected Encounters" - how they yearn, but stay far, but destiny plays a role and they are pulled towards each other through unexpected situations... 😳

Love,
Mou

Thank you so much Mou di!😳

I was a little apprehensive about this one as it is dealing with intimacy in school and also I think my writing has become quite rusty...Your motivation did wonders to up my spirit.

This idea has been running in my mind and my hand was itching to edit it out. There are few more ideas which I would try to write and update when I am free from school.

Yes, I have used a sequence from the show and improvised it the way I wanted in my mind but was scared if the readers would like it then maybe that's where writer's skill comes into play. Glad you liked it🤗

I was certainly scared about the details of the neck kiss, it should match to a teenager's emotions. I am so happy that I could make you imagine something on those lines.

Naina had thought she raised her hands defensively due to Sameer's presence but it was actually her defending herself from her confusing thoughts.

Thats an awesome idea. I would really think on it and just tweak my ideas to match the title. I won't stop writing and will write it in my notebook, when I have my PC free, I would certainly update it and hope it could please you just the way this did.

Thank you so much for this long and lovely note di!😃

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Azraa

@Azraa01

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Posted: 7 years ago

#14

It was an amazingly sweet OS..
Reading the title my gutter mind thought it would be a liplock, but it turned out to be different and this made it more amazing.

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May

@SixteenAgain

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Posted: 7 years ago

#15

Wow! Definitely unexpected! Unexpected for Sameer, Naina and us as well.. but nevertheless a very pleasurable experience 😳

Lovely lovely first OS! Well done Shreya.. do keep writing!

May

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Shreya

@PehliDafaHai

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Posted: 7 years ago

#16

Originally posted by: dreamyp
Sorry for late commenting dear.. I was busy with shipping 😆
It's ur first story? Nahhh.. u hv written it perfectly yrr.. superb sach..

So u picked up that shoe incident.. gonna see school romance that's would b too gud ..

Make it ff na.. plz..

Of course not dear. You are not at all late. Kuch bhi😆

Yes, first story in a third person narration. Last time I wrote was almost one and a half year ago but that was drabbles mostly dealing with first person narration.

Aww, thank you so much Meenakshi! I am so happy that you found my first attempt perfect..I am touched😳

Hehe, this is going to stay as an OS itself. Sorry dear, khaan pakadke😉

Now I have started, you can expect some OS from me in coming months.

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Shreya

@PehliDafaHai

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Posted: 7 years ago

#17

Originally posted by: Anmol333
Res. 😉😆
Unres 😳
Kya baat hai Shreya superb 👏
Bhout pareshan hota tha Sameer us time Naina se 😆 reflected here same 😉
Bechari Naina Bina kuch liye bhout kuch ho jata hai usse 😆
Angry birds ke beech me unexpected kiss 😳☺️
Loved it!
Awesome it was.

Thank you so much Anmol didi!😳

Ha, yeah, I have kept their equation same par just masala add kiya😉

Whatever Naina does, someway it will affect Sameer, it can happen vice versa too, hehe.

I am glad you loved it, I kept the kiss very subtle.

Thank you again😃

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Shreya

@PehliDafaHai

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Posted: 7 years ago

#18

Originally posted by: Komalp1391
Shreya its awesome
Yesterday u were discussing about the os and today it here..great
Behanji i was missing this word alot
It is proved that anything about naina affects sameer and vice versa
The way naina raised her hand and sameer thought she was challenging...that was so real
The unexpected kiss on neck was so beautiful
Sameer could not pull himself all of a sudden but took some tym..
it was a lovely os
Dear keep writing ur imaginations r too good

Thank you Komal!😳 Your words mean a lot...

Ha, I was discussing of course but didn't plan to update today but then I couldn't control myself😆

Yes yes! I was missing that word too and just had to use it but in my story the word was used because of his anger. But in show, I would prefer him calling it with love😳

I always thought that from the first twirl, their respective actions affected each other, directly or indirectly. Just improvised it a bit.

I did take time to write the neck kiss, I am happy that you found it beautiful.

I would keep writing on Samaina and would update whenever I have free time.