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Janani214 thumbnail
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Posted: 7 years ago
#41

Originally posted by: mystique123

Loved the realistic approach you gave to the chit. 😊

Even glad that Sameer dint want to mention about the letter even when he has treasured it.

The letter was plain and simple but indeed magical that has touched his heart.

Waiting to know will they confess their love to each other❤️


Thanks, the letter was meant to reflect Naina's character. She is truly innocent and simple.
You might have to wait a while for them to confess to each other. 😛
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Posted: 7 years ago
#42
Nice but plz give long update.. waiting for next update..
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Posted: 7 years ago
#43
Nice update
I wasn't dissapointed at all.. Don't want the story to rush
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Posted: 7 years ago
#44
It is such a cute story
Loved it
You made me remember the golden period of Yudkbh
I'm so happy sameer didn't returned the letter
I so wish he confessed her that he had read it but I know you must have something kept in your mind for the track
I'm so excited to read this version of sameer naina love story
Eagerly waiting for the next part

Love
Laalchi reader
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Posted: 6 years ago
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Part - 4
At Naina's house

The scene before dinner flashed in her mind. Her Papa was pressuring her Bhaiya to win the head boy's competition. Her Bhaiya looked completely stressed. She was wondering if she was betraying her brother and her father by teaching Sameer. She obviously didn't want to stop teaching Sameer.

Her Chachaji walked in. Seeing her looking so worried, he asked her whats wrong.

" Chachaji, as you know Arjun Bhaiya is participating in the school head boy competition and we'll his competitor is Sameer and I promised Sameer that I will help him with his studies and what if because I helped him, he wins and Bhaiya loses and you know how important this is for Bhaiya. He has promised Papa that he will win but even I promised Sameer and...

" Naina, Naina , calm down. Hmmm, your situation is tricky only. But you are helping Sameer by teaching , whether he learns from that and what he learns is up to Sameer. In your school, with the same teacher, each of you score differently because it's each of our efforts that decide. Similarly, Sameer and Arjun whoever wins is based on their own efforts and hard work. Teaching someone is a good thing, so you continue teaching and at the end of the day it's a competition so there can only be one winner so let the best man

Win " completed Naina, Thanks, Chachaji, you are the best."

With her conscience cleared about teaching Sameer, Naina slept peacefully.

Next Day

" And, this is the answer to the problem" finished Naina.
" Thanks, Naina" replied Sameer and the bell rang.
" Naina, I have practice today evening" said Sameer
" But, Sameer we still have to work on few maths problems and we have not even studied Science today" replied Naina
" I know, hmm, can we meet after practice?"
" Ok , I will come back around 5:30 to school then and the library will be open since extra classes will be happening" said Naina. " Alright , meet you at 5:30 " Sameer agreed .

Naina reached home and when to her cupboard to decide on what she should wear. This will probably be the first time, Sameer sees her in something other than her school uniform and she started wondering what will be his favorite color. But before she could select a dress , her Chachiji called her asking her to accompany her to the market.When she returned back it was already 5:30 and Naina didn't have time to chose a dress, she wore the first thing she saw and informed Chachaji and Chachiji that she was going to the library to study. But when she was leaving, her Taiji and Papa were arguing about the water spilled by her father and she had to clean it and then again change since her dress was completely dirty.

Finally, she thought when she climbed down the stairs and then she heard Pralay yell out her name. " Pralay, what happened ?" asked Naina, "Someone who sounds like a boy but says is your friend is on call for you" cheekily replied Pralay. Naina went to answer the phone but Pralay's statement was heard by our librarian and he followed Naina wondering who called her.

Naina on phone, " Sameer, sorry I am late but I will be there in another 15 mins, you revise whatever we studied yesterday till I come" Sameer agreed and Naina kept the phone and turned around to see her Papa.



Whew... I typed this completely on phone so apologize for the grammar and punctuation mistakes. I know it's been a long time since I updated but I promise frequent updates now. As usual , comments and criticism welcome.

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Posted: 6 years ago
#46

Part 5

"Naina thundered Rakesh, "You are going to meet that Sameer who is competing against Arjun? You are helping him?

"Papa stuttered Naina. "Answer me; you are going to school at this time to help him? Without even telling anyone, aren't you ashamed of yourself yelled out Rakesh.

Hearing the noise, Chachaji and Chachiji rushed towards Taiji's house.

Chachaji asked, "Bhaiya, what happened?

Rakesh took out his anger on them also, "This is all because of you both, she is going to meet some boy in school and you both aren't even aware of it "

Chachiji, "Naina, is this true? Naina started, "Chachaji, Chachiji, I... I am going to meet Sameer only to teach him "

Chachaji understood what was happening and he started explaining to Rakesh, "Bhaiya, I already know that Naina is teaching Sameer. I also know he is Arjun's competitor but there is nothing wrong with her helping him out

Rakesh temper increased, "She is betraying her brother and her family and you are supporting her?

The normally calm Chachaji who doesn't argue back to his elder brothers realized that this time he couldn't keep quiet. He was the one who had encouraged Naina to teach Sameer and if he accepted his brother's decision now that would make him a bad example to Naina. He always believed in living by what he taught to his children and teaching someone can never be wrong.

Chachaji said, "Bhaiya, I was the one who told Naina that she can teach Sameer. Teaching someone is considered to be the best form of charity, also one learns more when they teach someone else. The competition is between Arjun and Sameer; Naina is not interfering or spoiling Arjun's efforts to win then how is this betrayal?

Rakesh retorts, "Her helping Arjun's enemy is a betrayal

Chachaji, "Enemy?? Bhaiya, this is a school competition. They are competing against each other, not enemies.

Chachiji said "But Bhai sab, you are the school librarian; you have to provide books to all the children including this boy. Then, that means you are also helping him correct?

Chachaji gave a look to Chachiji. Rakesh replied "I don't give books specifically to that boy. I can see it's of no use talking to any of you. But, Naina listen, just because you are teaching Sameer doesn't mean he will win. Arjun is my son and he is the No 1 in both studies and sports and he will definitely win. Also, I don't want him to know about his sister's betrayal so you aren't telling him that you are helping Sameer.

With that, Rakesh walked away. Chachaji went towards Naina and said, "Naina, sometimes the decision we make may not be agreed and accepted by everyone and it might even be opposed but always listen to your heart and do the right thing. Like I said earlier, teaching is good and you also promised Sameer so continue teaching him. Naina hugged both Chachaji and Chachiji and thanked them.

Naina went back to her room, in a way she felt relieved that her Papa knew she was teaching Sameer because she didn't have to hide it anymore. And she thanked god that she had such an amazing Chachaji who argued on her behalf, because she could have never done it and would have agreed to stop teaching Sameer in fear of her Papa. In all this, she completely forgot that she was supposed to meet Sameer with which it started in the first place.

Sameer walked into his room followed by Mundit. They had waited for Naina till they closed the school.

Munna said "Sameer, I think Naina didn't want to come. She probably didn't want to help you since you are competing against her brother and instead of telling that directly, that behenji made us wait.

Pandit replied, "Maybe, she realized teaching you is pointless.

Sameer glared at him and said "I understand whatever she teaches and even she knows that. And Munna, on call she told me that she is coming and I don't think Naina will make us wait purposefully.

All three were silent for a while.

Sameer finally said, "Anyway, it's getting late so you both go home and I will try to study for some time.

Mundit said their goodbyes and left but Sameer couldn't concentrate on studying. He kept wondering about Naina. Like he had told Mundit, he knew Naina wouldn't have made him wait without a reason. He wanted to call her and ask her why she didn't come but it was very late and he knew how strict they were in her house. He hated to admit this to himself but he was actually worried and concerned about Naina and hoped all was ok with her.

Guys, please comment. Its really disheartening to not see a single comment. 😭. Even if its not good or you didn't like it , please mention why or provide criticism.

Edited by Janani214 - 6 years ago
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Posted: 6 years ago
#47
Nice story... What if? This change I liked where Naina will go to teach Sameer inspite of Rajesh knowing about it...
Let's see what is in store for us..keep updating!
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Posted: 6 years ago
#48

Originally posted by: gugul

Nice story... What if? This change I liked where Naina will go to teach Sameer inspite of Rajesh knowing about it...

Let's see what is in store for us..keep updating!


Thanks. Naina couldn't defend herself but she is backed by her Chachiji here so she can teach Sameer without worrying.
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Posted: 6 years ago
#49
I read all the parts in a go and its really an interesting story..
I like the pace with which the story is proceeding and love the changes you brought in the original storyline. So Sameer has the letter and he re reads it.. it was so good. Just one complaint. The updates are too short, please try to make it a little longer if possible😳... Continue soon...
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Posted: 6 years ago
#50

Originally posted by: chaaru26

I read all the parts in a go and its really an interesting story..

I like the pace with which the story is proceeding and love the changes you brought in the original storyline. So Sameer has the letter and he re reads it.. it was so good. Just one complaint. The updates are too short, please try to make it a little longer if possible😳... Continue soon...


Thanks a lot. Started it as an one shot on what would have happened if Sameer read Naina's letter and its going based on that. This is the first time I am writing a story anywhere, hence the short updates but promise that the updates will be longer.

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