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Posted: 10 years ago

Originally posted by: Wings-of-Fire

The chapter was beautiful.

This is the reason I don't like teenagers! I mean the mental age. Every teenager thinks that he/she is the center of the universe! Did he ask you to dream about him? Now he doesn't act like the one in your dreams so you're going about crying and hurting yourself and blaming it on him and fate? Seriously, girl grow a pair!

@maanvir You don't need my horrible scenarios. You're doing great. With my scenarios it's not gonna be an IshRa story.😭


Well said...more on this in the next updt...

About the scenarios...ummm...let me keep it a secret fr nw...
I am really planning to flee away aftr cmpltng this story...
I dnt thnk u guys will let me live


PS: Once again I knew dis was cmng frm u😆
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Posted: 10 years ago

Originally posted by: prayosha

Hey Di...

Ishitane aisa kyo kaha...ki uss ke saath rone wala koi nahi hai...

Mai hoo na...puri update me jab se Ishita ne rona shuru kar diya tab se mere bhi Ansu nahi ruke...

Jab Ramanki awaj dusre washroom se aa rahi thi...tab muje laga hi...ki Yeh Raman Shagun ke saath hi hai...& yeh part bahot hi sad & Emotional tha...actualy to nuje complain karni chahiye ki aap ne muje rulaya...par Realy mai kahungi...yeh part muje bahot achcha laga...Dil ko chhu liya...bahot beautifuly likha tha...

But Today I want to say...I hate you Raman...itni aasani se Ishita ko bhula diya...par muje pata hai...Ramanto hai hi Ishita ka...Ishita ne Raman ki kami mehsus na ho iss liye uss ke sapno ka sahara liya...& Raman ko Ishita ki kami mehsus na ho iss liye Gusse & dusri ladkiyo ka sahara liya...Shagun ke paas jana koi pyar nahi...mere Attraction hai...True love to Ishita hi hai...

& aap ne Boy's POV ke songs puchhe hai...mere comment maine 60th page par complete ki hai...please phir se padh lena...aap ko sab ke POV milenge...


Hey Prayo!

Mujhe patha tha tu Ishu ka sath degi😆

Raman ki deewani se I hate u sunna matlab kayamat agayi kayamat...

Tu chill maar...wapas se tujhe Raman se pyar ho jayega...ya phir aur zyada nafrat?😲

Maine pg 60 ka oora cmnt padha...reply b kiya hai...dekh lena...
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Posted: 10 years ago

Originally posted by: DivanIsh

RES

when ur husband cooks you are free to do anything 😳even if it is a fast unres...here i go

beemar hone ka asli fayda to yahi hai...pati seva karte hain😉
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My nails would not need trimming for next few weeks as I had bit them to their boundaries. 😆 this is like being a dhabba on ladies community if you have this habit but i have this habit and i am sure you too have *hiding my face*

this time u r wrong...mujhe nails bite karne ki adat nahi hai...😆


i had copied the above line before i read the update ahead bcoz i knew once i read it there will be no room for comedy and so right i was

this update was too heavy and i dont i think i will ever read such an extraordinary presentation of pain...the way in which you wrote it was out of this world...

pain means sadness and i generally read such updates once and end them then and there...i usually skip to comment as well reading them again is far

but but but i have read this update thrice already and i dont feel enough...i want to back and read it again and i am going back after this comment

each word each line said so much...it was too deep and too emotional

I could only feel compassion for Ishita...what a pure soul she is...true lover

i am sorry i cannot comment too elaborately on this particular part...it has dome something to me within...you took love to a different height today

the song blended with the update was just perfect...it looked as if the song if written keeping this particular update in mind

i found the poetic touch in this update throughout...some words used were just beautiful


Honestly...after reading ur cmnt I literally went back to the update and read it to know whats so amzing about it...I am just overwhelmed...

ending was even more painful to read...every time until now it was because you could not go away from my dreams

today it was like repenting...why could you not go away from my dreams

Mannu di this was the BEST update till now...ofcourse part 2 will always remain the favorite because of some secret reasons but otherwise this was the BEST

second part of course...hamari dosti ka pehla kadam...

i want to thank you from the bottom of my heart for penning this story down and making us all a part of this unique journey

I LOVE YOU

thnk u so much re...this cmnt ws so flattering...is baar tu nahi mai udi...I love u too

P.S. Song from boy's POV...i love the song Yeh Dhuaan Dhuaan Sa Rehne Do Mujhe Dil Ki Baat Kehne Do Main Pagal Deewana Tera Mujhe Ishq Ki Aag Mein Jalne Do

i dont know if it fits the situation you will bring out in ur next update but this is one of my favs so thought of sharing

eagerly waiting for the next 😳


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Posted: 10 years ago
Hi All!
I am just short of words after reading your comments on Part 8 b.

The response has been amazing and it was totally unexpected.

I literally had to run back to my update and read it all over again to see what's so special about it.

I don't know what to say. I am totally blank.

All I can say is Thank You.

Phewww...coming back to earth!
Bina ticket ke hi @ the top of Burj Khalifa pahunch gayi thi...
That's what ur cmnts do to me...


Anyways before I forget let me apologise to the ones whose comments I have not replied to...I am talking abt Part 8 a...

My lappy had a sound sleep of 26 hours as I put it on sleep yesterday with ur cmnts open in each tab...
When I was free IF didn't let me reply as it said Spamming is not allowed...
So I wasnt able to reply to all the cmnts...

Sorry about that...


Beginning to write the next update...


Now leaving with a teasing teaser


Part 9: Sapna Mera Toota Toota

(Translation: My Dream is broken)


PS: Have u noticed the change in the title?😉
Edited by maanvir - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago

Originally posted by: sush_rddt

mannu di update yavaga?


eega start madidene ashte...

noduva cmplt adre ivatte post maadthini
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Posted: 10 years ago
"My dream is broken"😭
I think the next update would be a most necessary yet painful one.
Poor ishu😭
As the story proceeds ishu loving Angad malhothra is acceptable as she deserves to be happy.
Waiting for the update
Please continue soon can't wait to read the next part😃
And thank you for the translation 😊
Edited by 9900 - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
Finally I m here di
Exams complete ho gayi yayyy😳😛⭐️
MBBS first yr complete ho hi gayiii
Ok enough of my blabbering
Now coming to update
Kya update likha aapne
Evrytime I feel this z best u prove me wrong wit d very next update
Kitna rulaya aapne didi
Bechari ishu kitne sapne lekar aayi thi
Aur Raman shagun ke saat!!!!
Ayyooo!!!!!yeh kya kar diya aapne?????
N then Raman asking ishu not to tell anything to anyone
I m hell angry with Raman
Par itna toh aapko jaanti hi hu kuch na kuch jaaroor pak rahi hai aapki dimag mein
Agar twists na ho toh so aapka story kaise hoga????
Ab jaldi update Karna is se pehle ki saare raman ke fans ishi ka side le le
I don't think Raman ishu KO bhool gaya hoga
Vaise sapne sach hote hai BT nightmares r dreams as well😉
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Posted: 10 years ago
Note ^

Part 9: Sapna Mera Toota Toota


"Hey Simmi. Tumhara Vada" I extended the tiffin towards trying to smile.
My lips were constricted and it hurt even to give a weak smile.


She stared at me for about a minute and then took me into a bone-crushing hug and said"Ishita! Ye kya haal bana liya hai apna"


"Kuch nahi yaar. Gir gayi thi kal ghar jate waqt" I tried to sound casual.



"Chot kafi gehri hai na" she said looking at me suspiciously.


"Utna zyada nahi. Bas forehead pe ek scratch hai, hath me ek chota sa zakhm aur ghutne cheel gaye bas" I said avoiding her gaze and pointing to the bandaged parts of my body.



She held my chin in a strong grip and forced me to look into her eyes.

"Mai us chot ki baat kar rahi hun jo tumhari ankhein bayan kar rahi hain" she said while staring at my puffy eyes.



"Kuchh bhi...Wo to bas kal rath theek se so nahi payi" I said with all concentration on my tiffin.


"Aisi kya baat thi jisne tujhe sone nahi diya?" her interrogation continued.


"wo...mai...bas..."


"Is dar ne tujhe sone nahi diya na ke kahin Bhai phir se tere khwab me na ajayein?" she declared


I was dumbstruck for a while then quickly composed "Kuchh bhi. Mai kyun darungi is baat se? 10 saal se to woh mere sapnon me aa hi rahe hain" I tried to chuckle.


"Aur woh 10 saal ka sapna kal 10 second me toot gaya. Hai na?"


"Tu kuch bhi bole ja rahi hai. Vada thanda ho raha hai tera. Phir kal ki tarah mujhe blame mat karna" I tried to divert the topic by opening the tiffin for her.


She closed it back and threw it aside and held my shoulders in a strong grip "Bas kar Ishita! Aur kitna chupayegi? Mujhe sab patha hai ke kal kya hua tha"


"..." I could not speak a word after that.


"Haan mujhe sab patha hai. Kal mai Bhai ko dhoondte hue senior campus me gayi thi. Par Bhai wahan nahi mile. Unke doston ne kaha ke unko kuch kaam tha isiliye aaj practise keliye nahi aye. To maine socha ke tujhe bata dun warna tu ladies room ke bahar wait karti rahegi. Par ladies room ke raste me mujhe Bhai mile"


I listened to her silently as she narrated the encounter between her and Raman.

(Author's note: The 'I' below refers to Simmi who is narrating the incident)


"Bhai aap yahan kya kar rahe ho?" I was surprised to find him there.



"Woh mai..." he was baffled.


"Chupane ki koshish mat kijiye. Mujhe sab patha chal gaya" I said sternly trying to look angry.



"Oh shit. Zaroor us chashmish ne bataya hoga"



"Haan usi ne bataya"



"I knew it. Mujhe uspe bharosa karna hi nahi chahye tha. Ab wo sabko jake bata degi"



"Aap kis ke bare me baat kar rahe ho?" I was a little confused now.



"Haan mai Kiss ke bare me hi baat kar raha hun" he stated annoyed.



"Aapne itni jaldi kiss bhi kar diya?" I was surprised.



"Kiya nahi tha. Karnewala tha tabhi us Miss Sanskari ne dekh liya"



"Ek minute Bhai. I am not getting it. Aap Miss Sanskari ko kiss karnewale the aur usi ne apko dekh liya?"



"What the hell? Mai us chashmish ko kiss kyun karunga? Mai to Shagun ko kiss kar raha tha"


OMG! Ye kya hogaya!


"Us idiot ko bhi usi waqt ana tha. Isse pehle ke woh sabko jake bata de mujhe use sabaq sikhana hoag. I will see you later" he said starting to leave.



"Aap ko kahin jaane ki koi zarurat nahi Bhai. Wo kisiko kuch nahi batayegi"



"What? Abhi to tune hi kaha na ke usi ne tujhe bataya"



"Nahi Bhai usne kuch nahi bataya. Aur wo kisi ko kuch batayegi bhi nahi. Jaante ho kyun?"



"Obviously mujhe dekh ke dar gayi hogi" he shrugged proudly.


"Nahi Bhai. Wo apko dekh ke dar nahi gayi thi. Balki apko kisi aur e sath dekh ke mar gayi thi" I looked at him piercingly



"What non-sense?"



"Apko to non-sense hi lagega na. Apko kya faraq padta hai kisi ka dil tootne se. Aap to the cool and arrogant RKB ho. Aapko kisike dard se kya wasta" I accused him



"Stop it Simmi. Tu us ladki keliye mujhse lad rahi hai jise dekhna mai ek minute keliye bhi bardasht nahi kar sakta" he spat.



"Nahi Bhai. Mai us ladki keliye aapse lad rahi hun jiske liye aap bachpan me mujhse aur har kisi se lada karte the. Mai us ladki keliye lad rahi hun jise aap ek minute keliye bhi kisi aur ke sath dekhna bardasht nahi kar sakte the" I yelled.



"Tu kya bakwas kar rahi hai? Mujhe kuch samajh me nahi araha. Lagta hai tu pagal ho gayi hai"



"Pagal mai nahi pagal wo hai jo 10 saal se apke sapne bun rahi hai. Pagal wo hai jo har din aapse milne ki duaaein karti ayi hai. Pagal wo hai jo aaj bhi bachpan ke us ek khwab ko apni zindagi maanti ayi hai"



"Tu kiski baat kar rahi hai?" he asked with a huge question mark on his face.



"Uski jise aap apni life partner maante the. 'Ishita mere poore life ki partner hai' aisa hi kuch kaha tha shayad aapne"



"Ishita!" he mumbled.



"Haan Ishita. Ishita Iyer. Kuch yaad aya ya sab kuch bhool gaye? Par wo nahi bhooli Bhai. Kuch nahi bhooli. 10 saal se usi yaad ko lekar jee rahi hai. Pagalon ki tarah aap se pyar karti hai" tears started forming in my eyes.



"Ishita...Miss Sanskari..." he blabbered trying to connect the dots.



"Haan Bhai. Wo Miss Sanskari jisne apki rathon ki neend aur din ka chain cheena hua hai, wo Ishita hai jiski rathon ki neend aur din ka chain aapne haram kiya hua hai"



He clamped his mouth as realisation dawned upon him.


"Tum sach keh rahi ho?" he asked.


I nodded teary eyed.


"Aapne ye achha nahi kiya Bhai. Aapne uska dil thoda hai. I hate you Bhai" I scoffed and ran out of there.


(Author's note: Scene switches back to present. 'I' here onward refers to Ishita)


"Par isme tumhare Bhai ki kya galti thi Simmi? Unhone to kabhi mujhse nahi kaha tha ke mai unka intezar karun? Na hi unhone mujhse koi waada kiya tha ke woh mere siwa kisi aur se pyar nahi karenge. To phir tum ya mai unhe is bath ka zimmedaar kaise maan sakte hain?" I asked.



"Par Ishita unhi ke wajah se to tumhara dil toota hai" she argued



"Unhi ke wajah se toota hai. Par zimmedaar wo to nahi hain. Apni is halath ki zimmedaar mai khud hoon"



"Par us sapne ka kya jo tum itne salon se dekhti ayi ho?"



"Ye sach hai ke mera sapna toota hai. Ek pal keliye to laga ke mere jism se meri rooh nikal gayi hai"
Sapna mera toota toota
Mujhse mera saaya kyu chhoota hai



"Meri har dua yahi hothi thi ke ek baar usse mulaqat ho. Mulaqat to hui par shayad uparwale yahi chahta tha ke hum milke bichdein"
Ke Rab mill bhi gaya toh kya
Mujhse mera Khudaya rootha hai



"Unki ek jhalak keliye tarasti thi. Yahi mangti thi ke bas ek baar mila de. Bas ek baar mera pyar mujhe mil jaye. Bas ek baar mujhe ye malum ho jaye ke mai unse jitna pyar karti hun wo bhi mujhse utna hi pyar karein"
Bas ek hi dafa ek hi baar kar
Mere yaara tu mujhko baawra
Bas ek hi dafa darkar kar
Mere yaara tu mujh se pyar kar



"Par mai itni naadaan thi ke mai pyar ko hi apni manzil samajh baithi. Bachpan ki us ek yaad ko apni zindagi ka sach maan baithi. Uske aage na kuch dekha, na kuch suna. Akeli chal padi is safar me ek sapne ka sahara lekar"
Bada nadaan nikla yeh dil
Mohabbat ko samjhe manzil
Ab tanha siyaah sa safar hai mera



"Jab tumse mili aur Raman ke bare me patha chala to aisa laga ke mera sapna poora hogaya. Raman se milne keliye bechain ho rahi thi par is bath se bhi dar bhi rahi thi ke milungi to kahungi kya? Ye soch ke hi meri saans atak jati thi"
Zara sa kehne ko darna
Zara sa milne ko marna
Ab saanson dilaason pe asar hai tera



"Kal jab Raman se milne keliye ja rahi thi to pata hai mere dimag me kya chal raha tha? Maine to poora script ready kar rakha tha ke kaise unko bataungi ke mai unse kitna pyar karti hun aur mai kaise poore haq se unse pyar mangungi"
Bas ek hi dafa ek hi baar kar
Mere yaara tu mujhko baawra
Bas ek hi dafa darkar kaa
Mere yaara tu mujh se pyar kar



"Lekin kal jo dekha uske baad to mai poori tarah toot gayi thi Simmi. Kuch samajh me nahi araha tha ke kya karun. Maine apni poori zindagi Raman ke naam kar di thi lekin jab Raman ko kisi aur ke sath dekha to laga ke meri zindagi hi khatam hogayi"
Sapna mera toota toota
Sapna mera toota toota
Mujhse mera saaya kyun chhoota hai



"Par phir thande dimag se socha to ehsas hua ke sirf sapna hi to toota hai, zindagi to abhi baki hai. Sapna to sapna hi hai jisko ek na ek din tootna hi tha, par haqeeqat to zindagi hai jo abhi mujhe jeeni baki hai"



"Ishita! Mujhe nahi patha tha ki tum itni strong ho. I am proud of you" Simmi said giving me a side hug.


That is what I have been trying to convince myself from last night that I am a strong person and I can move on.
Kam se kam Simmi to convince hogayi, mai bhi kisi na kisi din convince ho hi jaungi I spoke to myself.



"I wish ke Bhai ki jagah mai hothi aur tum mujhse itna pyar karti" she said dreamily hugging me tighter.



I pushed her away coming out of hold "Mujhse door rehna haan. Mai waisi nahi hun jaisi tu soch rahi hai" I tried to be funny.



"Oh hello! Mai bhi waisi nahi hun. I am straight ok" she played along.



"Thank God! Warna mai to dar hi gayi thi ke kahin tum Idli aur Vada ke bahane mujhpe line to nahi maar rahi" I winked.



"Oh mera Vada! Dekha aaj bhi tere chakkar me mere Vade thande hogaye"



"Mujhe mat blame karna haan. Maine to pehle hi warn kar diya tha"



"Ok baba...Galti hogayi mere se..." she folded her hands and bent her head before me "Par kya kal iska compensation mil sakta hai?" she said biting her tongue.



"Ek shart pe" I said folding my arms across my chest.



"Kya?"



"Mujhe badle me koi aunthentic Punjabi Dish chahye"



"Done deal" she said showing her thumb.


I hit her thumb with mine.


"Chal I need to go now. Kal ke kuch notes complete karna reh gaya hai. I will see you tomorrow ok" I told her wanting to leave the place.



"Ok. Bye" she waved at first and then took me into a warm hug and added "Take care" she must have sensed that I was trying to act normal but wasn't normal actually.


I closed my eyes for a brief moment as it started to fill up and the lump in my throat did not let me reply.


I captured the tears in my eyelids while breaking the hug and started to leave without meeting her eyes.



It is easy to say that I have moved on but practically it seemed impossible as of now.
But I believe I will be able to overcome this painful phase.


''Please aaj se mere khwabon me mat ana. Kyunki mai tumhe bhool nahi paaungi agar...


Tum Mere Khwabon Se Jaa Na Sake'



--------------------------To be continued------------------------------


Did this part make any sense?
I hope it did!


Edited by maanvir - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago

Originally posted by: maanvir


eega start madidene ashte...

noduva cmplt adre ivatte post maadthini

okay nan kaita irthini
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Posted: 10 years ago
RES
Mannu Di unres finally...

kya bolun is update ke baare mein...it was beautiful like always

Simmi ke liye 🤗🤗🤗🤗

i dont know jab mujhe kuch behad acha lagta hai toh main kuch keh nahi paati hu...aur abhi main chup hoon toh aap samajh jao bas

har ek word har ek line behad sunder

as always ending stole my heart
''Please aaj se mere khwabon me mat ana. Kyunki mai tumhe bhool nahi paaungi agar...


Tum Mere Khwabon Se Jaa Na Sake'


eagerly waiting for the next one bas
Edited by DivanIsh - 10 years ago

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