FF: DESIRE II Part 15A-Part21E

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Veeann

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Posted: 10 years ago

#481

Originally posted by: krishy13
Vee - your most recent update was fabulous! Blame it on the lack of sleep which is making me a bit more senti then usually, but I definitely teared up when Raman broke down. That's the RKB I grew to love on this show - one who shouldered so much grief, angst, & burden. One who persevered only to find the one woman who could help him & whom he could help. In the show, I have always felt Raman just wants to be THE go to person for someone in the world, and I can see that vibe in your story!

*sigh* thanks again for a fabulous fabulous update! I can't wait for the next part!

👏

Aww Krishy, thanks darl. 😳

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Veeann

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Posted: 10 years ago

#482

Originally posted by: fugitives123

I'm gonna start commenting on your update from the last part. Why?? Because that's what remains fresh in my mind😛
And that was...

The flashback part was really good...intense!!
You brought out the emotions of Raman and Ruhi really well and Ishita handled them both beautifully. Shagun was at her dramebaaz best and I could actually hear her shrill voice in my head. I have a question...wasn't Shagun finding out who Raman's new wife is at the court?? I was expecting her to be shocked/irritated/more shrill.

When Raman said "I'll kill her before I let her take Ruhi from us. I swear, I'll kill her", I was thinking it's time sometime did that!! Can u send her to jail where she irritates some inmate and gets tortured to death?😡😡

I'll leave you with that thought. 😆

Thank you Ann. In this story, there was no mahila morcha or anything. Shagun came to CEO party but never interacted with Ishita. And Ishita made comments against Raman on TV, but he didn't lose Ruhi's custody because of that. That's where I deviated from serial. He got a contract that Ashok wanted and so Ashok is seeking custody as revenge.

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Veeann

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Posted: 10 years ago

#483

Originally posted by: ABBY92
Loved the way you wrote about Raman's emotional turmoil, how all those feelings of losing Adi returned to him when he saw Shagun and how he doesn't want the same to happen with Ruhi. The way Ishita comforted him through all that and promised him that she'll always love him was beautiful. I'm sure they can fight through anything as long as they are together.

Thanks Abby 😃

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Veeann

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Posted: 10 years ago

#484

Originally posted by: Heavens_Flower
If the weekend getaway was sensual then the courtroom drama was emotional...

Your writing evokes so many emotions in the readers. Exceptional play of words... You are truly talented. 👏

Thank you so much. You're too kind, but I enjoy doing this.

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BunnyObodhro368

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Posted: 10 years ago

#485

Loved the update

You showed what ishita and raman felt beautifully

Can't wait for the next update

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Eyes-Wide-Shut

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Posted: 10 years ago

#486

Vee!!!!!! Hai why can't we have this on screen (minus the making out part 😆) Call me a sadist but vulnerability is characters especially those of strong male characters is very appealing and when I see the Raman of your story expose his venerability..my heart skipped a beat! You described Ruhi and Raman's plight so well that I cried reading this part of the update. So many feels!!!

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Eyes-Wide-Shut

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Posted: 10 years ago

#487

Oh I noticed how you mentioned Shagun's blouse 😆 and made Ashok a fat baldy 🤣

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Aru.Divan

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Posted: 10 years ago

#488

Hey Vee❤️🤗... Look whose here to comment on your FF. Finally I am done reading and must say .. This is like ☺️. If I liked "At your majesty's service" the most, then this FF of yours "Desire" 😳.. I love the most ☺️❤️. Every single update made me go through a number of emotions be it Pain, Passion, Blush, Love and most importantly the Desire ☺️☺️☺️. I do not know whether I saw SRK but definitely there was only one guy and that is none other than RKB our Puttar and his Biwi 😳. How well do you write Vee ???????????? Sheeeshhh, I am just spell bound and damn I could relate to so many scenes not in real life but with YHM wala IshRa. Laugh at me, I promised a Ramayan but now its going the other way round I guess. Every single captured my heart but posting the scenes which are similar or close to YHM just to let you know how EPIC is this FF 👏👏

Their first ever roll on ice in the beginning, rather their first ever outing together reminded me of the remote fight between the two. They forgot about the relation between the two, when their feelings overcame their thoughts. They rolled over each other, here they chased and ended up getting caught in intimacy. You made me relive that scene

The first kiss between the two made them overcome their awkwardness but you went the Blush wala way and CVs are still going the satvik way. How can we not blush when Puttar kisses Biwi or Biwi kisses puttar. I loved every single kiss you have mentioned. Well, these comments are only for the first thread and so you will have to wait a little more for my comments for the remaining chapter. So the two kiss moments for you

Trust me, I never expected the deal seam moment cos that's like one of my fav moments in the show and to see that in your FF.. I could do nothing but blush and have my hands on my cheeks going Awww.. I could picture the two doing the same all over again ☺️❤️.. Here's that beauty

As their relationship progressed, damn you had to come up with the date evening in Taj and remembered their date in oberoi. Your second FF "At Majesty's Service" when she was dressed in that sexy dress and entering the hotel as Deepika ☺️❤️. How did you come up with the beauty and then here she came in to the hotel in a pink saree, again got reminded of their first date after the airport sequence when he gifted her a similar pink saree. Eeekkksss, Love you Vee for this scene.

Followed by the sweet proposal at Mihir's house. When he proposed in a way while he lifted her on his arms and then going all "Can you marry me ???? " Haiyeee, the whole tone of that propsal was as sexy as KYA . Trust me there has never been an FF as blushy as this for me. Love you for giving this magical FF. Yes these are my comments for the first thread, I will be back soon for the second thread. Sorry for the delay. A tight hug for this FF 🤗❤️

I do not know if I even made sense but all I can say is this will always be my go to story to read anytime .

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Veeann

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Posted: 10 years ago

#489

Originally posted by: Eyes-Wide-Shut
Vee!!!!!! Hai why can't we have this on screen (minus the making out part 😆) Call me a sadist but vulnerability is characters especially those of strong male characters is very appealing and when I see the Raman of your story expose his venerability..my heart skipped a beat! You described Ruhi and Raman's plight so well that I cried reading this part of the update. So many feels!!!

Thanks Doc. I'd like to see the making out on screen 😆 😆 But yes, I wanted to explore Raman's vulnerability and the fact that biwi understands him and tries to be his strength.

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Veeann

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Posted: 10 years ago

#490

Aru 🤗

What do I say? That was the most awesome comment ever. You especially went and found gifs for this, gosh I feel so spoilt.

First Paru did kospints for an update ( well, kind of 😆), then Gan made a beautiful cover for the ff, and now your gifs equating the YHM moments to the ff.

This is just so so awesome yaara. I love all the gifs and they are all so apt. Did the rolling in the snow remind you of the remote control fight? I hadn't thought of it, but yes, that was play turning to passion too, wasn't it.

The deal seal was of course from the show. I just loved that scene so much.

And the proposal and kya? I need to reflect more on that. You see I've forgotten what I wrote so need to go back n read it 😆

Thanks again Aru. I lubs you.