OS: Kitni Baatein Yaad Aati Hain - Page 3

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That was beautiful! Very well written and you were spot on with the emotions, you've beautifully described their feelings in a mature and calm way, that's exactly how grown ups deal with situations. Perfect!
Two of my favourite lines from your OS
Firstly -It was one of those situations where he knew what the answer was, but he didn't know how to begin writing that answer.
Secondly - People say that the few seconds right after you wake up, and before you remember all the disappointments of life, they feel like heaven
Both these lines touched me, they're deep! Almost made me tearey eyed. Well done bro! :)

gud one lucky...

Originally posted by: afsanaanjum

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Whoa Lucky! What a piece!👏

I like the way you avoided dialogues and directly went on to emotions.
Its kind of better that way. You get to express all the unsaid words and also the harsh and sweet undertones that the naked eye fails to notices.

Appreciate the depiction of a understanding, mature Ishita who can handle everyone in the family (-which includes the ferocious mothers!-) except her own vivid emotions which she is constantly trying to prove as vague.👏
What a thought! kudos to you for that buddy!🤗

Then comes Raman who is stupefied by his wife's maturity and sense, full of remorse, anticipation and distress. He keeps silent and is awed by the sweet, understanding nature of his own feral mother and his in-laws.

Inspite of the bedlam in his mind he doesn't fail to notice the eerie glances and awkward co-ordinations - which defines him as the 'man' of the family!👏

The lot who are always regarded as tiny and juvenile does the magic trick! Maybe that's the reason why people say nowadays that the Gen-Y is smarter!😃
- Though Ishita already accepted the inheritance of ruhi's wits from her dad!😆

The best part was the way you ended it Lucky! I'll fall short of words to describe or praise it.
Hence, ill just state my favourite line : "People say that the few seconds right after you wake up, and before you remember all the disappointments of life, they feel like heaven."
- If that is something you created, then hats off to you! I bow down!👏🤗

The ending couldn't have been any better! Even i learnt something new!😛
If you feel like continuing with a track in mind then surely go ahead! Its a green signal from my side buddy.👍🏼😊

Thanks Afsana 😊

I wanted them to come across as mature people dealing with a problem, without any melodrama. And even if I wanted to, I wouldn't be able to write any dialogues. If I were in Ishita or Raman's place, silence would be solace in this period.

The ending >> Thanks yaar... That "people say" line is from personal experience 😃 I am glad you liked it... Let me see after a couple of episodes if they take it forward the way I am imagining, so I can write something...

Originally posted by: DivAniTanni

Beautiful.

You took the current story from the show and used it beautifully in your own way. Great work Lucky.

Thank you so much Tanni 😊

Originally posted by: paru_rox

Loved this Lucky 👏... you write so well.

I especially liked the part where Ishita makes sure that the family does not isolate him for the wrongs that he has done towards her.

I do believe the two families will forgive him in the show too but hope Ishita does not go easy on him like last time... there both Ishita & Raman were at fault at some levels. Here its Raman only so he needs to know how much he hurt there.

Thanks Paru 😊

Yes, if I were Ishita, I would want to be mad at him, but at the same time not want him to be punished by everyone else!

The whole reason I wrote the separation saga last time was BECAUSE I wasn't satisfied with the way she came back to the Bhalla house immediately.

Originally posted by: afsanaanjum

Heyya! Edited on Page 1.

Sorry for the lengthy comment but once i started i didn't stop! Realized at the end that it was pathetically long!
Do pardon me i possible!😛

I have no issues with lengthy comments at all. I enjoy reading them, and some times even find out something about the story that I didn't even consciously think of while writing!!! so Thank you 😊

Originally posted by: rajji-cutest

loved it ! please do continue !

Thank You Rajji 😊

Originally posted by: Nichuss

gud one lucky...

ishu reaing raman eyes...

and raman reading ishu eyes in btwn dance is the best...

Thank You Nicchuss 😊

Originally posted by: Tanyaarora11

That was beautiful! Very well written and you were spot on with the emotions, you've beautifully described their feelings in a mature and calm way, that's exactly how grown ups deal with situations. Perfect!
Two of my favourite lines from your OS
Firstly -It was one of those situations where he knew what the answer was, but he didn't know how to begin writing that answer.
Secondly - People say that the few seconds right after you wake up, and before you remember all the disappointments of life, they feel like heaven
Both these lines touched me, they're deep! Almost made me tearey eyed. Well done bro! :)

Thank You So much Tanya 😊

The second line was something from my experience. And the first one, well, his eyes in the picture inspired me to write that one!!!