Two-Shot: Feelings & Evolving Emotions |PART 2: PG12

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Surya.Ravi

@Surya.Ravi

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Posted: 11 years ago

#21

very nice..well written...👍🏼

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ABI

@ABBY92

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Posted: 11 years ago

#22

Part 1 was awesome. I liked how Raman was so lost in Ishita that he hardly did any of his work. That by itself is a miracle! The whole flashback scene was amazing. From Ishita firing Shagun to her conversation with Raman regarding him hiding his latest altercation with Shagun to Raman teasing Ishita and insisting on only eating what she has cooked. The scene at the restaurant was also another awesome sight with us getting to see a possessive Raman. I loved that part when Raman thought to himself that flirty Ishita is meant to be reserved only for him. That was just too cute. Do update Part 2 soon!

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Aani

@EkPaheli

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Posted: 11 years ago

#23

res 😳

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So so sorry Reens for the late edit... I simply forgot about this one ☺️

this was so amazingly well written and I loved how Raman noticed Ishita almost as soon as he stepped in and of course the bit with the brothers and his possessive green-eyed self coming to the fore was a delight but the best part undoubtedly was him saying aloud the shut up 🤣🤣🤣 and then realizing he spoke it for everyone to hear 🤣🤣 Oh I have been there once...NOT at all a good place to be in😆

Also weren't you supposed to update this 🤔 where is the next part mam?

Edited by EkPaheli - 11 years ago

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PreciousPri

@PreciousPri

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Posted: 11 years ago

#24

My Sona babes 🤗

How dare you call this brilliant piece of writing bad 😡...ek kheench ke marungi

Anyways ... This... This was OUTSTANDING 👏👏👏 One of the best OS's I have read... sach mein you are truly gifted ..

The awkwardness .. the authority ... the understanding ... the ease.. the jealousy...the hesitation... all so well written... 👏

I really wanted Ishita to tell Shagun to leave her and her hubby alone... so I'm super happy she blasted airhead 😃

But but my FAVOURITE has to be "baalon ka burger" 🤣🤣

and then this

Her every gesture did something to him now that pulled him towards her. He knew her, but he wanted to know more. He could feel her but he wanted to feel more. He HAD her but he wanted to HAVE more! 😉

When I read this ^ ... I unknowingly whistled😆 ... seeti maar line Sona 👏

Edited by PreciousPri - 11 years ago

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eternalasha

@eternalasha

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Posted: 11 years ago

#25

Areena, my favourite part...

"he was attracted to her in other ways... many more ways. Her every gesture did something to him now that pulled him towards her. He knew her, but he wanted to know more. He could feel her but he wanted to feel more. He HAD her but he wanted to HAVE more!"

Edited by eternalasha - 11 years ago

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RamonaG

@RamonaG

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Posted: 11 years ago

#26

awesome one Reeno👍🏼 really loved it ❤️

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Lucky

@alwaysaTVFan

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Posted: 11 years ago

#27

Res...

***EDITED for both parts...

Good Lord Girl... first and the foremost, I didnt know you wrote, so had no idea what to expect. But that brought in the extra excitement (not that it was needed though!). WONDERFULLY written. 👏

BOth your parts have the RIGHT proportion of depth, breeze, naughtiness, romance and of course retain both Raman and Ishita's characters in tact.

I love that you have used a couple of lines from the show to (paani piyo 😆), it makes this such a delight, it made your story surreal

Aaah, the dori scene. Personally I have no specific opinion about this scene. hai to hai, nahin hai to nahin hai types. BUT, when they do have a dori scene, I'd like them to use yours... 😊

the way you describe everything is so visual, I did have to think hard to imagine the scenes playing out... and the image of the saree helped too 😉 😆

and you should leave your modesty alone for a minute, and bask in the praise you get for this one. Both the parts were very well written, and by no means were they sub-standard OR looked like written under pressure. Your friends are right, you can write romance quite well 😊

Last but not the least, please write more frequently 😆

Edited by always_a_TV_fan - 11 years ago

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Soul_Stirrer

@Soul_Stirrer

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Posted: 11 years ago

#28

Wow!!! I didnt know that apart from being funny and critical you write too and that too so amazingly. Loved the first part. Please keep on writing such ishra moments. Hope such scenes come soon on the show. Fingers crossed!!!! 😳