Originally posted by: gems4emma
I'm officially in love with your writing. I feel like I'm reading a proper story/ff/os, not some hackneyed, choppy sentenced/misspelled wording/wrong grammar (which do make a huge difference!) and out of character wet-dream type fanfiction about yhm/ishra.
Personally, I tend to roll my eyes at anything dramatic whether it be romantic or scary or even emotional. But damn, damn DAMN this was so touching and so well written and I could honestly imagine this scene in yhm and raman/ishita were in character (as in, this is something that I could deff see occurring between them and not some long shot ooc fic that alot of people tend to write).
I had tears in my eyes as I finished and I was clutching my chest because I could feel every single word you wrote.
I seriously wished that they did include some of the aftereffects of Ishita almost being raped; how that effected her emotionally. I guess they 'tried' to when Ishita was all subdued and stuff at Amma's house after the ordeal but that for me was just the surface. I wanted to see her emotional and personal fight, not just the fight against Parmeet but the fight against her own inner demons (and of course, Raman's assistance in helping her fight her inner demons just as he helped with potential rapist Pervmeet).
In YHM, the sequence ended abruptly with Parmeet being jailed as the "climax". For me, Param's arrest did not signify the end of Ishita's ordeal. After harassment/sexual violence, the victim -or, as I prefer to call Ishita - the survivor's ordeal is far from over when their perpetrator is arrested/taken away. You displayed this so beautifully and to be honest, I didn't even know that this is what I wanted to happen until after I read this and I was like, damn, CVs, I WISH we had something like this because it would have added layers and layers of depth to that subplot as well as the issue of rape/sexual violence as well.
Honest to God, instead of silly simmi's vampish antics, I'd have much much much rather the CVs atleast included this type of scene. Atleast then would the Bhallas/Simmi and Toshi in particular would have realized what a freaking scumbag Param was and how absolutely disgusting his actions were. And as added bonus, it would have reinforced to Romi how horrible it is to dishonor and even THINK about dishonoring any woman - especially one in the family (ahem, Mihika; of course, this track is resolved by now though...) This scene could have perfectly not only given a necessary and important social message and awareness to the Indian public, but it would have also brought depth to the plot and ~entertained~ them as it would have brought IshRa together AND utilize the secondary characters in a positive way (as in Toshi/Simmi/and perhaps Romi).
I'm not a fan of Indian television-based fanfiction in general (and deff not of Ekta Kapoor's serials or Balaji period!) but YHM is so dear and lovely to me and your writing is absolutely golden that I had to make exceptions in both cases! All the best and please do keep writing.
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