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Posted: 14 years ago
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This is one of my earliest poems....it's a very small one though !
Do read and comment...criticism is welcome !!

EMOTIONS

Life is as you want to see,
But not always as it seems to be,
Silence & Emptiness is filled in the air,
Mysteries are crowding everywhere
And days are hard to see;
Love is running away;
And betrayal is crossing my way,
God dunno what to do ?
Life is turning to blue
Life is as you want to see ,
But not always as it seems to be
.

-Fatima


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Posted: 14 years ago
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Brilliant job Shabs 👍🏼
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Posted: 14 years ago
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This is one of my earliest poems....it's a very small one though !

Do read and comment...criticism is welcome !!

EMOTIONS

Life is as you want to see,
But not always as it seems to be,
Silence & Emptiness is filled in the air,
Mysteries are crowding everywhere
And days are hard to see;
Love is running away;
And betrayal is crossing my way,
God dunno what to do ?
Life is turning to blue
Life is as you want to see ,
But not always as it seems to be
.

-Fatima


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Posted: 14 years ago
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Fatima dear you are a wonderful writer as well as poet👏Your poem was truly a treat to read and you did a great job👍🏼
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Posted: 14 years ago
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loved it....pls do try & write an ff on sajan
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Fama, sorry for delay , and I wanted to reply in a different way.. But I am hurrying to work again and I know you are waiting for my comment..
I can say only one thing - "Good things comes in small packages"
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Posted: 14 years ago
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amazing poem fatima

thx for the pm
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Short but a very beautiful poem👏
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Hey! i visited your blog...and i would comment there after my exams....seriously your blog is just amazing!

I really loved this poem....yup....love and betrayal are two complex feelings which can never be explained.....not atleast you have felt them....so i can't ever describe them...

but this poem, although short, but is really beautiful...somehow it connected me to the emotions of the person.....

my favorite four lines are-

Life is as you want to see,
But not always as it seems to be,
Silence & Emptiness is filled in the air,
Mysteries are crowding everywhere

and really beautiful poem...

do write more....

love,
Mahak

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