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@Terenaina

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Posted: 16 years ago

#31

I was thinking wow, he didn't even notice her? what a mean loser he is or maybe he has ghajini moments...LOL

but then I saw ur post saying he was mad at the way she left him. Oh okay so he has a reason now. Good

Edited by Terenaina - 16 years ago

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Sonam

@sonam_s

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Posted: 16 years ago

#32

Try to introduce some new characters in the story like her mom and dad. 😊

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Archana

@Girl_2007

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Posted: 16 years ago

#33

aaaaw i loved the story, i mean, wat u wrote so far... 😳 its so beautiful, so lovely... makes me sigh in a daydreaming way... 😛... and makes ppl to write beautiful comments... before reading it completely, i frankly thought that it was another piece of the story.. 😆😳

well... if u want us to feel suspense, u must not discuss about scenes etc. so openly, neither say why he ignores her before posting the next part... 😆😛 but its ok, now im more relaxed to know that actually its not the "ghajini" fever😆, but a lil revenge.. 😛

hey, along wid the story, im loving the comments wich are meant for you... 😆😳 hope u dont mind much... just.. cant avoid it... 😳

waiting eagerly for ur next update.. 😃

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Posted: 16 years ago

#34

haha, aw. I totally forgot about my story. Got busy with uni. But I will definitely update soon. Thank you everyone for commenting.

@Girl_2007: You're right. Thanks for the comments. 🤗 and you can enjoy the beautiful comments people leave too. 😃

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Posted: 16 years ago

#35

Update:

How could he just ignore her? She didn't deserve the treatment; she was confused throughout the day and couldn't focus on anything. It was around 6 p.m. and time for her to go home, as she was packing up, she noticed him coming towards her. She didn't pay attention to him though and kept on putting her things in her purse. He came up and tapped her shoulder, she turned around and said, "oh, hi." He greets her back and tells her to have a good night and leaves. She's left confused once again. On her way home, she's thinking, why are guys so confusing?! and why is almost every girl forced to ask herself this question at some point in her life?

She tells herself to just forget about it, he's her manager, and she has to be nice to him, and that's it. She wakes up the next morning, but she has a really bad headache. She gets these pains every once in a while, but it was getting really bad so she called in to work. She told them she couldn't come in that day and went back to bed. After what felt like only two minutes, her phone starts to vibrate again, she debates on whether she wants to answer it or not. It was a restricted number anyways, but she answers it with a weak voice, "hello?" A boy from the other line says, "hey. what's wrong?" She has no idea who it is so she asks him and he tells her that it's her manager, Jai, and he's calling to know what's wrong and if she needed anything. She tells him, no that she's fine. He wants to make sure that she's ok so he asks her one more time, but she says she's fine and just needs to get some rest, she was planning on visiting her parents in L.A. tomorrow and she needs to be perfectly ok to drive tomorrow. He asks her if she's taken any medication and she says, "no, I don't like taking meds."

"Have you eaten anything?"
"I haven't exactly gotten out of bed."
"Ok, I'm coming over and bringing food."
"HUH?! No, you're not. You don't even know where I live."
"I'll call work and find out what it is."
"You're not at work right now?"
"No, but they called me to figure out a replacement for your shift today."
"Oh, I'm sorry.."
"It's ok, not your fault. I'll be there in about half an hour."
"wait..." and he had hung up.

Edited by Ms.GoodMorning - 16 years ago

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Posted: 16 years ago

#36

I updated after a long time, my apologies for that. I hope you guys enjoy it. 😊

I need a suggestion - should I keep updating the first page with the full story or just keep updating on random pages post the number of updated pages on the first page?

Edited by Ms.GoodMorning - 16 years ago

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Archana

@Girl_2007

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Posted: 16 years ago

#37

well, this part was... above all.... short!! too short!! i wanted more...!

but its ok... i can understand it from a writers view... but i still want more from a readers view...😆😛...

anyway, my comment:

i liked, well, i always like the description👏 its, neither too much, neither too less, just perfect 😊

the way he confuses her, its a fact, a real fact... and, so, that makes this realistic. 👏

the next coversation.... i think, its really exciting! 😃 in real life, would seem a bit too fast to happen some random and sweet thing... but as we are all waiting eagerly for their meeting.. its ok, thanks! 😃 and that encreases the confussion feeling in her.. 👏 and in us! 🥱😆

so, thank you for this part, and as for ur question... keep doing it as so far... if u are decided to continue wid this story till the end, then you can collect all chapters in the middle of it or in the end itself on 1st page 😊

Edited by Girl_2007 - 16 years ago

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Posted: 16 years ago

#38

ha-ha! I wanted to keep it short and I wrote it at like 3 a.m. last night. 😆😆

thank you so much for the sweet comments. 🤗🤗 I have a lot to learn, but thank you. It's encouraging.

Confusion, confusion, I know right! Guys are like that, I figured I should add something like that in it.

Hmm. Yeah, I'll just put an update instead of copying and pasting all the time, it takes time.

Once again, thank you for your comments!

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Archana

@Girl_2007

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Posted: 16 years ago

#39

lol... u wrote at 3:00 am??... 😲 and did u sleep well after that?..

lol yeah.. confussion factor, but still, this girl is lucky... coz he is gonna meet her soon... and the confussion doesnt last much.. 😛

glad u liked my comments... thanks to you for writting this story 😃

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Posted: 16 years ago

#40

Yup. I was up doing homework and then I was about to turn of my laptop and go to bed, but then I had this idea to log on here and add something to the story and I hadn't updated in forever so I needed to do it!

And yeah, the girl in this story is going to be very lucky, but so is the guy. Two lucky people. 😃

I will try to update tonight.

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