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Posted: 10 years ago
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Babe you know I am nursing a recently broken shipper heart. And here you are, dangling some candy! KrishKarsh are adorbs and it seems unlikely they'd be paired together. But hell. You are writing. I am reading. End of! ๐Ÿ˜†



Their eyes seemed to get hazed by a clear gleam of predators as they spoke of new meat joining in the middle of school year. <<< me likey this comparison.

"Where are you going, Toothpick?" Call me a sadist. I sniggered.



She turned to see Polly looking at her expectantly. She hummed in askance and saw her lowering her chin and widening her eyes, before gesturing towards.. Toothpick. ๐Ÿ˜†

She was bummed. She raked her brains to find an insult. "W-What's your name?" before frowning and raising an eyebrow and looking at her down her nose. Raking her brains to find an insult eh?

"Laurel--"

"Hate it! Let's call you 'Toothpick' from now on! Like really? Look at you," she paused, feeling her groups eyes boring into her skin. "And your clothes! Are you wearing a curtain? Seriously, nothing else suits you!" she shook her head in a patronizing manner and frowned in slight disgust, before bumping her shoulder into hers and walking off. Like Really? I heard her tone in my head as I read this!

Sliding her hand down her high ponytail, she brought it onto her shoulder.

Her work was done.
๐Ÿ‘
My review is done too. 1/3rd of it! ๐Ÿ˜†
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I like it babe!
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Like Really. ๐Ÿ˜† Again. The tone was as real as if Kris was beside me as I read this with a huge ass grin on my face.

Exhaling heavily, she rotated her neck with a hand at her nape, rubbing the sore muscles. Staying erect was a pain in the neck. Literally. Ah...Words to win my soul!

Today was.. a break for her. Good thing or bad thing?

Laurel aka Toothpick hadn't come in today. It was a first, since she had joined school. She'd know 'cause she hadnt missed a day without messing with the little red noodle. Little red noodle? ๐Ÿ˜† Like really Annie? ๐Ÿ˜†

Yesterday had been.. For a better word, dramatic.
Bumping into her was a coincidence. But what followed was quite unexpected.

"How dare you! Are you trying to ruin my uniform, you Idiot?!"

"I didn't.. I.."

"Like really? You are skinny, but are you freaking blind too?"

"Its not my f-fault. You came in front of me, un--" her wide bluish green eyes staring straight into her dark brown eyes.

"Excuse me? If am not mistaken you're the one whose carrying this cup of lemonade and my shirt, my white shirt here has a yellow stain!"

"I was watching where I was going, but you just came in front of me unexpectedly."

Splash!

She hadn't waited for any response and dumped the whole lemonade on her before walking off for the bathroom. I felt bad for the little red noodle! But gah,Kris' frustration was almost palpable.




Frowning, she followed Mishka's gaze and turned on her toes, to come face to face with her infamous school's logo, threaded into a similar white shirt of their uniform, expanded on a lean and slightly broad chest. She blinked and looked up to see a pair of coals staring at her. Ahah! Here he comes! ๐Ÿ˜‰

Her eyes darted to his lips, before looking back into his hard stare. Narrowing her own, she jut her chin out in challenge, "Yes." *Pictures this and swoons*

She watched his cheeks tighten, as he lowered his chin. "Stay away from Laurel.. or anyone for that matter."

Her lips turned upside down, in a frown. "And why would I do that?"

But he was already walking away.

Hands in his pockets.

A mop of horribly messy raven hair.

And hips that had swag. Ohmg! ASDFGHJKL! I like your portrayal of Karsh so much better! Gah but you always do this. Take nice characters and make em irresistible!
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Posted: 10 years ago
#13
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Ugh. I got tired of quoting and so I decided to do it this way
Firstly...
Something is up with Kris.
Why da hell is she playing hoodie bandit? Being all cat burglar sneaky?
Babe, you got something up your sleeve and it ain't the sterotypical stuff I grew up on.
I liked the convo between Kris and Laurel.
Karsh ain't her Bf or her bro?
WHAt up with him Maaan?
The highlight though:
messing with the bookworms and plump bums around the school.
^^^^
this made me lol. Plump bums? Honee does this pant make my butt look faaat?


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Posted: 10 years ago
#14

Originally posted by: PhoenixRadar


My first long comment for this story! ๐Ÿ˜ณ Thank you so much, Saffy! Can I call you that?
Aww... A jealous Krissan would make a good story, peeping into her mind and writing about it all!!
I hope I can do justice to both of them, because they are quite different from the way they are portrayed on the show. Well, I can't help but dream! ๐Ÿ˜‰
No problemo!

Annie

can call me anything you want ๐Ÿ˜†
ofc but as far as I'm concerned you are doing quite a brilliant job in getting the characters out in the open...ohh jealousy would defo be awesome!!!
im dreaming along with you now!!
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Posted: 10 years ago
#15
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One tablet.

Two tablets.

Three tablets.

Four tablets.

There were at it again. A sigh escaped those lips.

One tablet.

Two tablets.

Three tablets.

Four tablets.

The door didn't fail to stop the raspy screech from reaching in and breaking the night's pseudo silence. Pseudo silence, because nothing is really quiet when it comes to living in a city. There is always something that makes noise, after every few minutes. Mechanical sounds. The shrieks of whistles. Unmistakable sirens. Insects. Dogs. Cats.

But that pseudo silence was silence for her. All those sounds, coupled with the gentle whoosh of the ceiling fan's rotation, managed to be her quiet of her every night.

The rough push at the door's handle broke her almost settled silence. But the harshness of it all descended when the big panel of wood banged against the magnet, drilled to the wall behind. Her body jerked to sit up, while a horrible sensation contracted in her chest, sending her poor cardiac muscle into a marathon of survival.

Light flooded in her eyes, burning them, making her shut her lids to lessen the sudden pain, before opening them in a narrow manner, as soon as she heard the overly familiar voice of father shouting out her name.

She watched as her mother, pulled him by the arm, speaking in an angry but calm voice, to stop bothering her and let her sleep. "She has school tomorrow! Let her sleep peacefully!!"

"Arie!!"

She blinked her eyes, wide open to see him shaking his pointer finger before pointing at her mother, who now stood with her fists on her hips, gritting her teeth, watching him.

"Do you hear this woman? She says I don't let you sleep peacefully," a humourless laugh escaping his throat.

Her mother pulled at his shoulder, facing him, and responded, "Yes, you don't! Look at the time," gesturing to the clock hanging above her bed. "She should've been asleep an hour ago, but you!" She continued and went on to tell him how she needed her 8 hours of sleep, so she can focus well in school.

"But because of you waking her up before she has to, has slowly started to affect her. She can't focus or be active."

"Oh so you're blami--"

The resounding bang of the door, effectively stopped the other voices. Until she locked it.

"Arie!! Don't lock your door!" Her father banged on her door.

Shutting her eyes tight, she exhaled heavily, before climbing onto her bed.

"No! Keep it locked, Arie! If you open it, he'll never let you sleep, with all his drunken shit! Good night, beta!"

There were voices. Again.

One tablet.

Two tablets.

Three tablets.

Four tablets.

She sighed, sinking into her ratty, comfortable quilt.

Why?

~O~O~O~

"G'morning, Ma!" Kris chirped, as she passed her mum walking out of their bedroom. She smiled when a beautiful smile adorned her sweet face. Smacking big kiss on her cheek, she flew down the steps and into the kitchen.

Her father sat there, reading the newspaper as usual, eating.. She craned her neck to take a peek and saw khichdi in the microwave-able bowl. It looked like he had cooked it himself.

After exchanging Good mornings and smiles, like nothing had happened, she reached out to get her plate, while he went back to reading his articles.

"Oh, I see a breakfast full of carbohydrates," her mother's sweet voice traveled to her ears, before the unmistakably shining face of hers reach the kitchen.

She looked down at her plate, filled with steamed rice and curry. "Are you looking to gain more pounds, beta? Did you check your weight, today?"

~O~O~O~

Growl.

She winced, as she pictured bile juice pouring into her almost empty stomach. The liquid forming a whirling ocean inside, with nothing to catabolize.

An apple sat at the side pocket of her bag. A green one at that. She cringed, and took a huge gulp of water.

Brisk walking was not helping her either. The ride to school in that bus was dizzying, jostling her poor tummy here and there with it's dancing.

Puffing out her cheeks, she side stepped when a pair teenage girls, walked out the now open double doors of her school, giggling and twirling the ends of their hair. She rolled her eyes.

Making a beeline to the washroom was easy since there was not much of a crowd to fight off.

Slamming it shut, she rushed into a stall and locked it, to manage her business. Pulling off her hoodie, folding it carefully and pressing it hard to flatten it, she stuffed it into her sling bag, before stepping out.

Bluish green eyes stared back at her. Wide.

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Thank you so much, for such a lovely response. ๐Ÿ˜ƒ
I'm really glad to read your comments, because they don't fail bring a big smile.. no, grin on my face!

Annie
Edited by PhoenixRadar - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
#16

Originally posted by: Burn_the_Ashes



Babe you know I am nursing a recently broken shipper heart. And here you are, dangling some candy! KrishKarsh are adorbs and it seems unlikely they'd be paired together. But hell. You are writing. I am reading. End of! ๐Ÿ˜†

๐Ÿคฃ *evilly smiling* I know! I am awesome! ๐Ÿ˜† Not to toot my own horn..๐Ÿ˜‰



Their eyes seemed to get hazed by a clear gleam of predators as they spoke of new meat joining in the middle of school year. <<< me likey this comparison.
๐Ÿ˜† Thanks shexy! ๐Ÿ˜›

"Where are you going, Toothpick?" Call me a sadist. I sniggered.

๐Ÿ˜ฒ Jeez, now what can I say to that? XP But it wasn't that hard to come up with that, since I've got two buddies who are really skinny and no amount of food can help them gain weight! I wish I had such high metabolism! ๐Ÿ˜†

She turned to see Polly looking at her expectantly. She hummed in askance and saw her lowering her chin and widening her eyes, before gesturing towards.. Toothpick. ๐Ÿ˜†

She was bummed. She raked her brains to find an insult. "W-What's your name?" before frowning and raising an eyebrow and looking at her down her nose. Raking her brains to find an insult eh?

๐Ÿ˜ณ

"Laurel--"

"Hate it! Let's call you 'Toothpick' from now on! Like really? Look at you," she paused, feeling her groups eyes boring into her skin. "And your clothes! Are you wearing a curtain? Seriously, nothing else suits you!" she shook her head in a patronizing manner and frowned in slight disgust, before bumping her shoulder into hers and walking off. Like Really? I heard her tone in my head as I read this! << You said it, babe! ๐Ÿคฃ

Sliding her hand down her high ponytail, she brought it onto her shoulder.

Her work was done.
๐Ÿ‘
My review is done too. 1/3rd of it! ๐Ÿ˜†
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I like it babe!

I know, sweetie! ๐Ÿ˜‰

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Posted: 10 years ago
#17

Originally posted by: Burn_the_Ashes

0.02



Like Really. ๐Ÿ˜† Again. The tone was as real as if Kris was beside me as I read this with a huge ass grin on my face. << I have you to thank, for reminding me to add the word 'like' here! ๐Ÿคฃ

Exhaling heavily, she rotated her neck with a hand at her nape, rubbing the sore muscles. Staying erect was a pain in the neck. Literally. Ah...Words to win my soul! <<I think so too! It really is a pain to stand straight.. I remember my school days! *shuddering* I had the tendency to shift from one leg to the other, most of the time, coz I hated those school shoes that always bit into my poor heel.๐Ÿ˜ก

Today was.. a break for her. Good thing or bad thing? <<Not telling!

Laurel aka Toothpick hadn't come in today. It was a first, since she had joined school. She'd know 'cause she hadnt missed a day without messing with the little red noodle. Little red noodle? ๐Ÿ˜† Like really Annie? ๐Ÿ˜†
The idea just popped, chica! It served its purpose, might I say! ๐Ÿคฃ

She hadn't waited for any response and dumped the whole lemonade on her before walking off for the bathroom. I felt bad for the little red noodle! But gah,Kris' frustration was almost palpable.

Really??๐Ÿ˜• Urm.. then, am glad you felt it! Served its purpose, again! ๐Ÿคฃ ๐Ÿ˜‰


Frowning, she followed Mishka's gaze and turned on her toes, to come face to face with her infamous school's logo, threaded into a similar white shirt of their uniform, expanded on a lean and slightly broad chest. She blinked and looked up to see a pair of coals staring at her. Ahah! Here he comes! ๐Ÿ˜‰

๐Ÿ˜Ž

Her eyes darted to his lips, before looking back into his hard stare. Narrowing her own, she jut her chin out in challenge, "Yes." *Pictures this and swoons*

<<me!

But he was already walking away.

Hands in his pockets.

A mop of horribly messy raven hair.

And hips that had swag. Ohmg! ASDFGHJKL! I like your portrayal of Karsh so much better! Gah but you always do this. Take nice characters and make em irresistible!

Ashu!!! You just revealed his nickname!!! ๐Ÿ˜ฒ God damn it!! Oh well, the compliment applies to you too, babe! ๐Ÿ˜› You're better writer and an amazing idea machine!! ๐Ÿค—
Anyway, thanks, chica! ๐Ÿ˜ณ
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Posted: 10 years ago
#18

Originally posted by: Burn_the_Ashes

0.03

Ugh. I got tired of quoting and so I decided to do it this way

๐Ÿ˜† Lazy ass! ๐Ÿ˜› Mwh..

Firstly...
Something is up with Kris.๐Ÿ˜ฒ
Why da hell is she playing hoodie bandit? Being all cat burglar sneaky?
๐Ÿคฃ Hoodie bandit? Nice play of words, suga'! Me gonna use it! Don't worry, will give you credit! ๐Ÿ˜†

Babe, you got something up your sleeve and it ain't the sterotypical stuff I grew up on.
Hmm... whether it's stereotypical or not, it's all up to you guys to decide. Me just write-y story!

I liked the convo between Kris and Laurel. Thankoo! ๐Ÿค—
Karsh ain't her Bf or her bro?
WHAt up with him Maaan?
The highlight though:
messing with the bookworms and plump bums around the school.
^^^^
this made me lol. Plump bums? Honee does this pant make my butt look faaat?

๐Ÿคฃ Ahh.. I loved writing that line! Picturing myself, and every other chubby person I know from my school and college!


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Posted: 10 years ago
#19

Thank you! :D
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Posted: 10 years ago
#20
I love their pair ,๐Ÿ˜ณ๐Ÿ˜†
Nice one dear keep it up..

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