OS: Words and Promises.

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Posted: 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Tears in eyes, raised heartbeat,overwhelm..😭..this is the situation of mine rite now after reading your os. ...👏 fentastic piece of work dear...loveddd it...thank u so much for the wonderful OS. ..really I bcome so emotional. .it touched my heart...😳beautifully potrayed suraj's feelings 👏
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Give me some time to get my emotions under control. Till then
Res.
Unres.

Kaise kahun ke tum mere liye kya ho.

Kaise samjhaaun kisiko ki tum mere liye kya ho.

Meri hasi, meri khushi, mera rona sab tum hi to ho.

Mere saans lene ki wajah tum ho aur saanse bhi tum ho.

Aur un saanson ke faaslon mein bhi tum ho.

Mera jeena marna tum ho. Aur meri tadap bhi tum ho.

Mera dard tum ho. Us dard ki dava tum ho.

Mera aaina tum, aur aks bhi tum.

Apne aap se anjaan tha main. Tumne mujhe mujhse milaya.

Khud se ek nayi pehchan karvaayi.

Khuli aankhon se sapne dekhna sikhaya.

Jhuthi hasi ko sachi khushi mein badal di.

Khwaabon ko pankh diye aur udna sikhaya.

Chup chap mere dil me chali aayi aur wahin apna ghar bana liya.

Ab tum mere dil mein rahti ho.

Meri soch mein, meri zuban se kaheti ho.

Meri dhadkano mein dadakti ho. Meri ragon mein lahu banke daudti ho.

Mujhe zindagi de kar meri zindagi ban gayi.

Mujhe jeena sikha diya. Ab mujhe marne ka salika bhi sikhaado.

Kyunki tum bin na jiya jata hai aur na hi marte hain.

Aur log kahaten hain ki tum meri nahi ho.

Ab inhe kaise samjhaaun ki jeene ke liye tumhara haath thaamna zaruri hai.

Kaise samjhaaun ki andheron mein ghira huya hoon, Raoshni ki kiran tum ho.

Inhe lagta hai ki tum mera pyaar ho.

Kaise samjhaaun, ki tum mera pyaar nahin mera joonun ho, mera pagalpan ho.

Mera wajood tumse is kadar juda hai ki, aankhon ke bina bhi tumhe dekh sakta hun.

Tumhe mehsoos kar sakta hun.

Khud ki dadkane sunai de ya nahin. Par tumhari dhadkane pehchan leta hun.

Bina kahe, bina sune tumhari aawaz mujh tak pohonch jati hai.

Tum mein is kadar samaaya hu ki khud ko bhul gaya par tumhara ehsaas har pal hai mujhko.

Tumhaara hun. Tumse hun. Tumhare liye hun.

Aur log kahte hain ki tum meri nahi ho.

Nimmi🤗

I wrote this for Vividha, but thought that it will fit for your Suraj as well. He is that beautiful. Heart and soul. Thank you for fulfilling our dream. For I am sure many of us wish see this Suraj on screen.

Yours stories and write ups give such immense pleasure to my heart that sometimes it just leaves me speechless and overwhelmed. I wish I knew how to write more for you.

Love ❤️

Geet

Edited by geetkumar - 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago
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OMG Nimmi...who are you ????
I just cannot control my emotions after reading this utterly beautiful, emotional OS...damn girl I am speechless !!!!
Crap...why the hell are you not in the creative team of this show???? I am sure we would get excellent storytelling...
How I wish we would get something like this in the show, but I better not keep my hopes up, coz I am getting disappointed everytime...
This is sooo beautiful, this Suraj is sooo perfect...oh man !!!!!
I almost want to DEMAND something like this in Udaan...like seriously !!!!
Perfect storytelling...wow !!!!!
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Posted: 8 years ago
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I love love LOVE this!!
Stuck at a horrid airport in a horrid mood and this just made my morning <3

Will try getting back and editing this, but IDK what to say TBH. Just that this is hands down the best Suraj POV I've read and we'd be lucky to be privy to even a fraction of his thought process on the show.


Edited by Aradh_27 - 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Beautifully written!!!
Always look fwd to what your thoughts are.Very very nice
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Posted: 8 years ago
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@Nimmi, you are making me bawl my eyes out. That was beautiful and so sad at the same time.
Loved it. Muuaahh 🤗
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Well,what you know! Nimmi di's fantabulous OS brightening up my pre-exam morning.You just summed up the whole SuKor story in one OS.So,nothing more to add.The balance you kept in between Chakor's POV and Suraj's POV was simply endearing.
Love,Paru
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Posted: 8 years ago
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i just marvel at your talent.
You weave magic through your words n i relish each one of your sentence
You invariably present your Suraj as a colossus. How dear! But i m afraid that reel Suraj will henceforth remain only for biological reasons- no reversion to his former avatar. i have lost all hopes 🥺
Satiation through your fiction only
Edited by gibbu - 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Hands down this is one of the best and perfectly penned down one shot I've read:') I wad dying to read a one shot on sukor for so long this was totally with the wait 👏

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