'Tum azaad panchi ho aur hamesha azaad yi rahogi '-SUKOR SS - Page 2

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Posted: 8 years ago
#11

Originally posted by: Kavyabenerjee

Wow its amazing 👏 and interesting plz update the next part soon.Hindi version padne Ki mazaa hi alag hai.loved ur introduction part of chandini raath and Suraj's thoughts.lekin hamara Suraj babu tho bandua ban gaya 😭

Thank u so much...glad that u liked it...I have already finished the story.but type karne mein bahuth waqt lagta hai yaar..mobile se na...aur meri choti terror hai na uske peeche bhaagne mein yi mera waqt nikalta hai. ..anyways will update soon...

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Posted: 8 years ago
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loved it lora!!!
waiting for the update
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Posted: 8 years ago
#13
Loved the hole part!
But sad that Suraj babu is bandhua now!

Can't say that it's ur first FF, it's superb!

Pls cont soon!
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: maithu_

Loved the hole part!

But sad that Suraj babu is bandhua now!

Can't say that it's ur first FF, it's superb!

Pls cont soon!

Thank u maithu. ..kya kare kabhi kushi kabhi gam
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: Radhika_r

loved it lora!!!

waiting for the update

Thank u dear...will update soon..
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Posted: 8 years ago
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very well written, Lora!!👏
Eagerly waiting for ur next update..


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Posted: 8 years ago
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Sukor SS:Part 2
Haa...wo haadsa ..uske baare mein soch ke yi suraj ka dil kaamp utt tha hai. .
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Suraj ko jailor se bachane ke baad kuch din haveli shaanth thi. .kyunki KN aur Ragini ko ye samaj mein aagaya ki jab tak chakor suraj ke saath hai tab tak koi uska kuch bigaad nahi sakta aur media bhi uske saath hai ..isliye pehle chakor ko raasthe se hataana hai aur phir baadh mein suraj ka kaam tamam kar sakthe hai. Isliye unlogo ne suraj ko maarne ka nirnay badal diya aur pehle chakor ko raaste se hataane ka socha. Lekin wo log bahuth achche se jaanthe the ki chakor ko thodna bahuth mushkil hai isliye kuch bada plan yi karna padega.
Idhar suraj ,chakor ,imli aur vivaan KN -Ragini ke khilaf sabooth doondne mein vyasth the. Sukor ki nok jokh Chalthi rahi thi. Lekin wo dono ek dusre ka bahuth kayaal rakhthe the. Wo ek dusre ki aadath ban gaye the. Aur kuch haftho baadh Asian games hai tho chakor ne practice bhi shuru kiya tha.Suraj bhi uska support kar raha tha. Eaise din beeth gaye aur phir wo din..wo bhayanak din...ek kabri ne phone karke bola ki KN ke khilaf kuch sabooth hai...chahiye tho Sitapur aana padega. Chakor ko practice ke liye jaana tha tho suraj ne akhele jaane ka faisla kiya.
Chakor: "Nahi suraj hum tumhe akhele jaane nahi de sakte. Hum bhi chalenge tumhare saath ."
Suraj: "Nahi chakor tumhara practice mein jaana bahuth zaroori hai. Hum sab sambhal lenge."
Bahuth charcha ke baad finally chakor maan gayi lekin ek sharth par.
Chakor: "Teek hai suraj ...lekin tum Sheeku ko saath mein leke jaana. "
Aakhir suraj ko maan na yi pada.
Suraj: "Teek hai ...tho hum chalthe hai. Tum apna kayaal rakh na aur kuch bhi problem ho tho thuranth humhe phone karna. "
Chakor: " Haa suraj ...tum bhi apna dhyaan rakhna. "
Suraj shiku ke saath wahan se nikla. Aur practice mein jaane ke abhi waqt tha tho chakor kuch kaam mein vyasth ho gayi. Suraj ke nikalne ke 1/2 gante ke baadh chakor ko ek phone call aaya "Ragini ne suraj ko kidnap karke puraani factory mein bandh kiya hai. Shayad ragini usse maar sakthi hai. "Bas wo sunthe yi chakor shock huyi. "Agar ragini ne suraj ko maar diya tho? ? ? Nahiii. ..eaisa nahi ho sakta .suraj ko kuch nahi hone denge hum" chakor ke dil mein ek ajeeb sa darr aur dard uta. . wo paagalon ki taraha puraane factory ki taraf bhagne lagi. idhar suraj shiku ke saath Sitapur jaa raha tha. Lekin uske mann mein kuch ajeeb se kayal aa rahe the.usse chakor ki chinta ho rahi thi. "Kahin KN ne chakor ke saath kuch bura kiya tho...?"ye kayal aate yi usne achaanak jeep rokh di.
Suraj: "Shiku tu ja...jaldi se haveli ja aur chakor ke saath yi rehna. hum yahan sambhalenge ."
Shiku :"Lekin suraj babu. ..."
Suraj : "Jaldi se jaa shiku aur wahan pahunchte yi hume phone karna. chakor ka phone bhi nahi lag raha hai. " Shiku wahan se nikla.
Idhar chakor kaise bhi karke puraani factory pahunch gayi. darwaza lock nahi tha lekin andar bahuth andhera tha. "Suraj. ...suraj." Paagalon ki taraha suraj ko doondne lagi wo.aankho se aansu behene lage.tab achaanak bahar se darwaza bandh hogaya aur saare lights on hogaye.
"Welcome to the hell chakor bhabhi "Ragini kadi thi wahan .chehre pe daraavna hasi thi.
Chakor:"Ragini tum yahan...?suraj kahan hai ? Kya kiya tumne uske saath? "
Chakor suraj ke liye bechain ho gayi.
Ragini:"Suraj. ..?suraj yahan nahi hai chakor bhabhi. ...wo tho Sitapur gaya hai na? Ragini jor se hasthi rahi...chakor aur bhi pareshaan ho gayi.
Chakor:"Tumhe kaise pata? "
Ragini:"maine yi usse wahan beja tha...thaaki tum yahaan akhele raho aur hum tumhara shikaar kar sake. Jis kabri ne usse phone kiya tha na wo mera yi aadmi tha " sadistic smile.
Chakor: "kya chahti ho tum ragini ?"
Ragini :Hum tumhe hamare raasthe se hataana chahte hai. Tum suraj ka kavach ho na? Hum iss kavach ko thodna chahte hai chakor."
Chakor:" Tum hamara kuch nahi bigaad sakthi ho ragini "
Ragini aur bhi gussa ho jaathi hai aur chakor ke baalon ko pakadthi hai.
Ragini :"uska humne sab intezaam kiya hai chakor.aaj hum tumhe eaisa sabak sikhayenge ki tumhaari rooh bhi kaamp utegi aur tum toot ke bhikar jao gi aur tumhara wo pathi bhi tumhe samet nahi payega. Wo bhi tumhe dekh ke toot jayega aur kamzor padega aur tab hum asani se usko katam karenge "
Chakor dard se aur darr se kamzor ho rahi thi lekin phir bhi hausla nahi choda usne.
Chakor:"sapne dekhna bandh karo ragini. Abhi bhi waqt hai sudhar jao."
Ragini paagalon ki taraha has rahi thi.
Ragini:"Waqt tho tumhare pass nahi hai chakor .Tumne hume bahuth sataya hai na?Barbaad hone ke liye tayyar ho jao " aur usne kisi ko bulaya. ..


Edited by vinlora - 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Nice one with full of drama!
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Edited by maithu_ - 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago
#19
Wow Lora!!! What an amazing story. Full of suspense and drama. Loved it.
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Posted: 8 years ago
#20
Lora its awesome loved it
Aur suspense banake rakna

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