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Posted: 3 years ago
#41

Originally posted by: Jara567

I am literally your fan!! Specially a fan of your 80's wale stories!!

But you write all the stories with so much beauty and grace that it seems to be a very matured and composed writing.

Btw the story is so good!!😍😍 your take on thr's conceptis amazing!! The little detailsyour stories hold is beautiful! Like Kalyani calling her mother, Malhar calling kalyani's mother beautiful, moksh having that instant connect with malhar- everything is so well assorted. I am just loving malhar's emotions in this story. So beautifully expressed❤ please update soon dear,you write in a magical way❤


Thank you so very much Jara 💖💖💖. Your comment literally brought a beam of light in my exhausting day routine

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Posted: 3 years ago
#42

Wow.. This was amazing..

Kalyani is getting the quality time with her son for the first time.. smiley19this was so emotional..

And the time shift.... Kalyani building stone castles the wrong way..

Malhar telling her how to do it.. And that she's not like her dad.. Telling that Her mom is more beautiful.. smiley27 just like Kalyani is..

Aww.. Their past discussion was about the child returning back...

Seems to me it was linked to MalMoksh raabta of the present... ♥️♥️

Reverting to present... MalMoksh playing together.. smiley42

Sarthak and Malhar's convo was too good.. He has always been there to guide him the right way.. And he doesn't want Malhar to get hurt..

Malhar does have some feeling for Kalyani, but he respects her love for her ex husband.

His integrity towards his job didn't allow him even to save his father..

And he won't step back if Kalyani is proved as a drug peddler..

I guess he will try to find more evidence that she's not.

Mujhe donon time lines pasand aaye..

Present has a crime mystery involved...

Past has a love which is intriguing..

Great work Pragya

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Posted: 3 years ago
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Chapter-5


Kalyani was marking her students' exam papers when her phone rang.


"Hello?" Kalyani said, not entirely sure who was on the other side because there was no one left to call her and ask for her well being.


"Hi Beautiful!" A smooth voice replied.


"Malhar..." Kalyani said tentatively, "It's you, na? How did you get my phone number?"


"Wow! Aawaz se pehchan liya?" Malhar said smugly, "Itna pasand aa gaya main tumhe? Din bhar mere baare me hi sochti rehti ho kya?"


"Just cut the crap! I'm asking you again. How did you get my phone number?"


"Oho Baby!" Malhar said in a complaining voice, "Why does your record get stuck at one point only? I told you na, if a person loves someone he finds a way back to her."

"No, it was I who told you that," Kalyani bit her lip after saying this. Why did she say so? She had just met Malhar a week ago, and why would she talk about these things to a boy like him?

"OK, so listen," Malhar said, "I'm throwing a party at the Serendipity club and you're going to come sharp at 6 pm."

"And why do you think I have so much spare time to waste on your shitty parties?"

"Ok, so don't come," Malhar said nonchalantly, "I and Moksh need no one to enjoy. Bye."

"Hey wait!" Kalyani said hastily, "Please don't cut the phone. You are bringing Moksh to the club? But no club permits kids..."

"Wow! You have such an extensive knowledge about clubs. The club owner is my friend. So he has no problem in me bringing along Moksh."


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5:30 pm at Serendipity Club


Malhar was looking out again and again for Kalyani but she hadn't arrived.

"Relax Sir," Pawar said, "No one comes to parties at such clubs before time like you."

"I have spent my two months' salary in booking the club for this evening," Malhar said, rubbing his nails against each other, "I can't let go of this chance."

"But why this club Sir? It's the most expensive club in Delhi," Pawar asked.

"It's the most expensive that's why the most influential persons in illegal drug business frequent this place to finalize their deals because only the ultra-rich visit here and hence their chance of getting caught is minimal," Malhar whispered.

"But do you think the invitations you sent to the drug lords, will they accept them?"

"They have to," Malhar sighed, "Today was a grand meeting of all big drug lords in the city. But I booked the place by giving extra bucks and invited all of them by offering them to do business with me. Their curiosity and greed will bring them here. Oh, here she comes." The club was now getting filled with the people Malhar invited.


Kalyani was looking resplendent in her blue embroidered Kurti with churidar and peacock shaped earrings. The mauve lipstick suited her very well. Malhar suddenly had an intense urge to push back the lock of hair falling over her eyes behind her ear. Kalyani was clearly uncomfortable in that atmosphere, and so was Malhar but he didn't have the liberty to let it show. And when Kalyani saw Atharv unashamedly doing PDA with his girlfriend, she felt like hiding somewhere where no one could find her. Yet she had to search for her Pillu.


"I never want to put you through this, Kalyani," Malhar sighed sadly. As he was going towards Kalyani, a pretty girl with too much makeup and too high heels clad in a little green dress stopped.

"Hi!" She said seductively, "So you are the one who threw this party? I'm must say you've got the taste and you look too handsome."

"Uh," Malhar didn't know what to say to that. He was sure that girl wouldn't spare him a second glance if she knew he was just a police officer earning Rs.70K per month who eats daal chaawal he cooks himself alone and the tattoo peaking through his shirt is temporary, she wouldn't even spare him a second glance.

"Look at that one!" The girl pointed at Kalyani, "Such a cheap, unsophisticated girl. Like dude, she came to such a happening party and that too looking like a behenji with thick glasses? I'm sure you've not inviter HER!" Her voice full of distaste was loud enough for everyone to hear.

"Yeah right," Atharv agreed from across the room.

"You know what," Malhar said, leaning at the counter sideways with his legs crossed, "You are so pretty."


The girl blushed hearing this.

"But as much as you are pretty, your voice is equally irritating. I'm just wondering how could I hear your grating, high-pitched voice like a shrieking donkey without going mad."

The girl stood there open-mouthed. But if you insult someone in front of a room full of people, you must be prepared to get insulted in front of the same people.

Malhar went towards Kalyani and extended his hand as a gesture to ask her for a dance.

"What are you doing?" Kalyani whispered fiercely.

"Nothing much," Malhar said with amusement, "Just giving your scum of a husband a teeny tiny taste of his own medicine." With this Malhar kissed Kalyani on her cheek. Kalyani's eyes were wide with shock. Kalyani looked around but seeing Atharv open-mouthed, she took Malhar's hand.

Malhar held Kalyani by her waist and pulled her closer. The song started playing:


https://youtu.be/e8W2ByH9BCk


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After some time-


Malhar said, distractedly, "So you are Atharv Bapat, the midman between the dealers..."

"Midman as of now," Atharv said arrogantly, "But soon I'll rule this business and have people like you under my thumb."

"We'll see," Malhar said yawning, "So what are you offering?"

"I have the best of the stuff."

"Stop beating around the bush, and tell me your price."

"50K dollar per gram."

"Are you kidding?" Malhar laughed, "I'll find another dealer."

"You won't find a better deal than this, Mr. Malhotra," Atharv said, "This is the stuff unlike anyone has seen."

"It better be. Because I have clients all over America and Europe," Malhar said, "So you like buy your stuff from a single dealer or more than one dealers? Like how can you prove the stuff you're selling is the best."

"A good player never tells which cards he's holding in his hands," Atharv laughed, "Just know that I deal with the most dangerous drug dealers in Asia who value honesty more than life. They never sell fake stuff and nor they let anyone double-cross them."

"Honest druglords- How cute!" Malhar said, handing over a SIM to Atharv, "I'll call you on this no. after 1 am."

Atharv nodded and left the place.


So I was going to include past timeline in this chapter but it grew much longer. I hope you all are not getting bored by this. This gritty thriller thing I'm trying for the first time, so if the story is lagging at any place, please let me know.

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Posted: 3 years ago
#44

Originally posted by: kalma_lover

Wooow 😍😍❤️❤️❤️ Yout story again made me emotional 😭❤️ Can't wait for Next update please update soon😭😍❤️


Thank you so much Anu 💞💞💞💞💞

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Posted: 3 years ago
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Waaahhh Ji waaah Bhai Matlab pragyu ne poora jadu Chala rakaha hai apna Kya update pe update de rahi hai...Kya mazzedar update thi ajji tussi to dil Khush kar Diya yaara aaja saadein galein lag jaa kudiyein...🤗🤗

Coming to update ohhho malhar got no..of kalyani and started to irritate her awww inki nok jhok kabhi khatam nahi hone wali jii 😳😳..kalyani ne haan Kar di jaanein kein liyein badhiya ji badhiya malharji ne itne pyaar sein Jo bulaya moksh ka laalach dekein 😆😆...ohh poor malhar kalyani ka Sach jaanein kein chakkar main he spender his two months money on booking one day night club bechara jabsein kalyani sein Mila hai bass paise hi kharach karein jaa Raha hai aur kuch nahi 🤣....vo Kon ladki thi Jisne hamari Kalyani ki bezzati kii 😡😡ek to hamarien malhar ki naazarei. Uspein sein haatt nahi rahi thi aur ek ye hai ..hayye bandein ne kaise roka hai khudko uskien Baal sawarnein sein...😳..poor girl she got so much hurt seeing atharav flirting with another girl's ..and malhar is also feeling bad putting her in this state but he doesn't want to waste the teens future in this drugs case and all ..beachra 😭..aww he asked for dance and kalyani gave her hand seeing atharv ..hmm good timing mr.rane not bad 😳😳..

Song bohot khoob mazza aagaya sunkein love you baby aise hi likhkein Mera maan Khush karti reh ...🤗🤗

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Posted: 3 years ago
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Woow pragyaa both the parts are awesome. I really loved them.

I see ACP malhar falling for kalyani and them forming a happy family.

I love both the timelines, post on your Convienence.

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Posted: 3 years ago
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Originally posted by: Phlo

Waaahhh Ji waaah Bhai Matlab pragyu ne poora jadu Chala rakaha hai apna Kya update pe update de rahi hai...Kya mazzedar update thi ajji tussi to dil Khush kar Diya yaara aaja saadein galein lag jaa kudiyein...🤗🤗

Coming to update ohhho malhar got no..of kalyani and started to irritate her awww inki nok jhok kabhi khatam nahi hone wali jii 😳😳..kalyani ne haan Kar di jaanein kein liyein badhiya ji badhiya malharji ne itne pyaar sein Jo bulaya moksh ka laalach dekein 😆😆...ohh poor malhar kalyani ka Sach jaanein kein chakkar main he spender his two months money on booking one day night club bechara jabsein kalyani sein Mila hai bass paise hi kharach karein jaa Raha hai aur kuch nahi 🤣....vo Kon ladki thi Jisne hamari Kalyani ki bezzati kii 😡😡ek to hamarien malhar ki naazarei. Uspein sein haatt nahi rahi thi aur ek ye hai ..hayye bandein ne kaise roka hai khudko uskien Baal sawarnein sein...😳..poor girl she got so much hurt seeing atharav flirting with another girl's ..and malhar is also feeling bad putt

ing her in this state but he doesn't want to waste the teens future in this drugs case and all ..beachra 😭..aww he asked for dance and kalyani gave her hand seeing atharv ..hmm good timing mr.rane not bad 😳😳..

Song bohot khoob mazza aagaya sunkein love you baby aise hi likhkein Mera maan Khush karti reh ...🤗🤗


Behen Siddharth Gupta is lit in this song. Btw, Vaaste jaise cringe song me bhi he was great. I just hope kabhi vo bhi kisi TV show me nazar aaye. Saare TV Heroes ab yaa to apne se kaafi chhote hain ya at least 7 to 10 years bade. Koi dhang ka age appropriate crush bhi hona chahiye.

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Posted: 3 years ago
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Originally posted by: sathwi_99

Woow pragyaa both the parts are awesome. I really loved them.

I see ACP malhar falling for kalyani and them forming a happy family.

I love both the timelines, post on your Convienence.


Thanks a lot Swathi.

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Posted: 3 years ago
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Hey pragu.... Such an amazing update☺☺😍😍

How can u think we are getting bored of this... Not at all....


Malhar ke bulane par kalyani aa gyi😊😊 ... Not for him but for his son☺

She looking resplendent and he can't help him staring her😍😍😍

Malhar ko sach pakde jaane ka darr.... 🤣🤣

Atharv with hi girlfriend 😒😒😒

Malhar ne kya insult ki us ladki ki... Publicly🤣🤣... Aayi badi kalyani ki insult krne🤣🤣😅😅

Atharv Or malhar ke talks.... Hope jaldi sach pta chal jaye👍👍

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Posted: 3 years ago
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Chapter 6

Sindhu was raging as if it'll submerge even the Himalayas. The water, the sky, the mountains, everything was dark as death. Suddenly the sky began raining blood and the who river turned into a red angry beast. Suddenly a muffled wailing rose up from the river.

"Moksh!" Malhar screamed and woke up.

Groggily, Malhar walked in darkness in the direction from where the voice was coming. He stumbled over a clay matka full of water and the water broke out of the shattered clay.

"What happened?" Malhar heard Kalyani's distant voice, "He's worse than a child, I tell you Jiji."

"What happened?" Kalyani came with a one year old child in her arms.

"Moksh?" Malhar felt as if he was still dreaming. His finger hovered over the baby's face as if his dream would burst if he didn't touch lightly.

"His name is Baba," Kalyani handed over the baby to Malhar so quickly that he didn't have a chance to protest, "Baba, this is Malhar!"

"Baba?" Malhar was back in his senses. There was no way he was dreaming such strange things and a baby with a weird name like Baba. "What kind of name is that for a baby? Baba means father. From where this baby seems like a father to you Kalyani?"

"The first word he spoke was Baba," Another woman who was supposedly the baby's mother came in the courtyard, "That's why Kalyani named him Baba."

"Now I understand," Malhar said, "Only Kalyani has the skills to think of such a unique name for a baby."

"Now, I'm thinking Baba needs a new name," Kalyani said, thinking, "What's the name you were screaming in your dream? It started with 'Ma' shabd?"

"I don't remember," Malhar lied, "It was maybe Manohar."

"It was not Manohar," Kalyani said with emphasis. Why couldn't she leave this alone? Malhar thought. Kalyani was pushing all his buttons. Only if he didn't have to pretend being an amnesiac poor beggar, and though he would never hit a child, woman or old, he could at least scare her a bit.

"Moksh!" Kalyani shouted much to Malhar's dismay, "My Baba will be called Moksh from now on!"

"Your Baba's name is Maanchand. I didn't know children can decide the names of their parents. Ask him what he thinks about his new name," Sarcasm in Malhar's voice hit all the right notes.

"Moksh! Mera Moksh!" Kalyani didn't have any plans to stop now. And the baby called Baba was responding a little too happily to his new name. Maybe Kalyani was right earlier. This strange baby deserved to be called by a weird name like Baba.

"Take him," When Malhar tried to give Baba(God knows Malhar could never call another child Moksh) back to Kalyani, Baba started squirming in his arms and wailing loudly.

"Moksh doesn't want to come to Me?" Kalyani said, mock crying.

Moksh shook his hand and tried to climb over Malhar and in an effort to kiss his cheek, Moksh's saliva dribbled over Malhar's right lower cheek.

It was becoming too much for Malhar. He roughly put Moksh on the floor, saying, "I hate children! Don't ever bring this baby in front of my eyes again!"

Moksh first looked at Kalyani from the cold, rough floor and then looked at the retreating shadow of Malhar and started crying with all the might his little body could muster, saying Baba again and again.

Malhar was too agitated to sleep again when a scroll was thrown inside through the open window.

Inside was written in a code language: Now that you couldn't find the royal palace's map in the house of royal architect, from tomorrow begins the second stage of your mission: Abduct his daughter, and if necessary, kill her.

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