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Posted: 3 years ago
#31

Originally posted by: Autumn09


Thank you so much Rekha. I'm so glad that you liked it. MalMoksh Raabta ka idea mujhe CVs ke genius dimag se hi aaya when they introduced the track of Atharv trying to claim Moksh as his son by blood. Sach me agar is twist ko CVs further explore karte na to Raabta gang ka sabse puraana and bada Raabta to MalMoksh connection hi ho jata.


Sahi kaha tumne.. I have always loved MalMoksh bond. And I am also in the same page with you.. It was not explored well because it would have outshined the rest of the raabtas. 😆

And yes though the CVs did not explore it properly, MalMoksh bond is equal to AnuYani bond..

Moksh and Kalyani were both born out of the betrayal their parents gave to their legally wedded spouses..

Atleast Atul was a bit better that he didn't sleep with both women...

But Sampada was such a yucky woman who was having both the men in bed... The betrayal that Malhar faced was really too hard to digest for any man.

Show me AnuYani ke alawa sirf Moksh and Kalyani ka raabta ko hi establish kiya whereas it is not uncommon for a younger sister to care for her elder sister's child if the latter is not present in their lives anymore.

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Posted: 3 years ago
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Chapter 4

After spending the longest time with her son since he was born, Kalyani was on cloud nine. She was in a great mood, so she thought it would be good time to read Nikita's thesis.


The Sun was now shining like a big red bindi on the forehead of sky. Kalyani and Malhar were sitting at the shore of river. Kalyani was absent-mindedly trying to build a stone castle but it collapsed again and again.

"You're doing it wrong?" Malhar pointed.

"What?" Kalyani looked into Malhar's eyes.

"I mean you are building the castle on an uneven surface," Malhar said looking away from Kalyani's innocent gaze, "Obviously it'll fall. What will people say that the daughter of great architect Maanchand doesn't know even the basic things?"

"Don't annoy me," Kalyani said frowning, "I'm nothing like Pitaji."

"I know you are not," Malhar muttered to himself.

"Did you say anything?"

"No," Malhar added hastily and then dreamily looking at the pink and orange blush of dusk reflecting on the Sindhu river, he said, "Your mother must have been so beautiful!"

"No, she wasn't beautiful," Kalyani said, "She is the most beautiful woman. Even though no one can see her now, whenever I sleep, I feel her hands patting my hair, singing a Lori."

"Kalyani," Malhar called softly.

"Hmm..."

"Do you think if it were a one month old child, who passed to the other world," Malhar said, hesitating, "Do you think he could find his way back to his parents like your mother found her way back to you even though he was so little?"

"I think when you love someone," Kalyani said, this time bringing the stone castle down herself, "They find a way back to you in one form or other."


.....


Present Day

"My Moksh will play with ball," Malhar said, "Look. Such a big, yellow ball." Moksh looked at Malhar, then fearfully, touched the ball with his pinkie finger as if he were touching something hot, and when he had made sure the ball wouldn't burn or bite him, he picked up the ball and threw it on Malhar.

"Ah!" Malhar said, falling down, "Moksh, have some mercy. Baba is not a strong boy like Moksh." Seeing this, Moksh started clapping with his plump hands.

"Baba and beta having fun, haan," Saarthak entered the room, "Malhar! It feels like you've been practicing being a good Baba since centuries. Tell me truthfully, do you have a secret son hidden anywhere with a secret girlfriend of yours? Come on Malhar, don't be shy. You can tell me. I won't judge you."

"Where do you get such ridiculous ideas from Kaka?" Malhar said laughing, "I've never even looked into a girl's eyes for more than one second except for criminal interrogations."

"But you were flirting so smoothly with Moksh's mother," Saarthak chuckled.

"And whom did you learn this from?"

"Come on, A good lawyer never discloses his sources."

"But a good police officer needs no one to learn what's the truth. I swear I won't spare Pawar. Let him come to the Narcotics Bureau tomorrow," Malhar said, folding his sleeves.

"Calm down, Malhar," Saarthak kept a hand on his shoulder, "Moksh's Baba flirting with Moksh's Aai... what's so scandalous in that?"

"Enough!" Malhar's voice boomed. Seeing his father in that mood, Moksh came to the verge of crying.

"Dar gaya mera Baccha," Malhar lifted Moksh in his arms, "Bad baba! Dhat!" Malhar said lifting Moksh's tiny hand to hit his face but Moksh shook his head and instead kissed Malhar on his cheeks.

Rocking Moksh in his arms, Malhar said to Saarthak, "She has a husband, Kaka whom she loves even after he cheated on her with another woman. I can never disrespect her feelings."

"But are you not hurting her by flirting with her, pretending to be a person who's completely opposite to you? What if she finds out?"

"Nothing is more important than my duty Kaka. It's about thousands of students lives whose life is getting ruined to the point of being worse than death by this drug cartel. When my hands didn't even shake to let the bank robbers kill my father in front of my own eyes when they blackmailed me to exchange the lives all other bank employees with his life. Why would I hesitate now to play this game to catch the culprits?"


"I just want you to not get hurt. This lying, pretending, I know it's not who you are and it drains you. Just remember even though, Dada and Vahini are not here, it doesn't mean there's no one to stop you from hurting yourself. You've always got me."

"I know Kaka," Malhar sighed, "And now I have one more person for whom I couldn't afford to get hurt. Hai Na, Moksh?"


And without missing a beat, Moksh nodded.


https://youtu.be/KWCLOpaZeLc


I'm so sorry for posting the chapters at such odd hours. I hope I'm not bothering you all? So behenon kaisa laga ye chapter? And which timeline you like more: Past or present?

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Posted: 3 years ago
#33

Originally posted by: rekha_crm


Sahi kaha tumne.. I have always loved MalMoksh bond. And I am also in the same page with you.. It was not explored well because it would have outshined the rest of the raabtas. 😆

And yes though the CVs did not explore it properly, MalMoksh bond is equal to AnuYani bond..

Moksh and Kalyani were both born out of the betrayal their parents gave to their legally wedded spouses..

Atleast Atul was a bit better that he didn't sleep with both women...

But Sampada was such a yucky woman who was having both the men in bed... The betrayal that Malhar faced was really too hard to digest for any man.

Show me AnuYani ke alawa sirf Moksh and Kalyani ka raabta ko hi establish kiya whereas it is not uncommon for a younger sister to care for her elder sister's child if the latter is not present in their lives anymore.


Honestly Rekha, I felt that's what made SamTharv such great villains. Har TV serial mein second female lead is a spoilt, rich brat jo hero par lattoo hoti hai and literally apna self respect uske kadmon par daal deti hai and hero use koi bhaav hi nahi deta. Kabhi kabhi us par taras bhi aata tha ki bas unrequited feelings rakhna yahi to uski galti thi. Yahaan to situation hi ulti thi. Sampada didn't give a damn about Malhar and pyaar vyaar ka koi lafda hi nahi. She was completely unapologetic and selfish. Same with Atharv. Paagal nahi hua Kalyani ke peeche vo kabhi. The villains had their own motivations. And honestly after Shagun left the show, THR me vo baat nahi rahi. Bandaa was too talented. If we see objectively, more than KalMa, SamTharv's Atrangi harkatein were the ones which put THR on the popularity map.

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Posted: 3 years ago
#34

Amazing dear exicted for the next

Plzz update soon

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Posted: 3 years ago
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Originally posted by: sehreemstory

Amazing dear exicted for the next

Plzz update soon


Thank you Arwa 💖💖

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Posted: 3 years ago
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It's awesome praku both the stories have their own grace and I am Liking that timing and your representation ...mazaa aajata hai aur pls don't be sorry I feel actually happy after seeing the notification of your happy ..main ek dum bhaagte huein padh leti hoo chapter tera 😳🤗

Coming to update kalyani is happy playing with her son for a long time ..the motherly feelings which you show for her is so pure and soothing but I really got emotional seeing her state ...how a poor girl facing so many problems in her life neither she is getting love from partner nor she can enjoy her motherhood with her son poor girl 😭😭...

On other side loved how Malhar and kalyani are coming close to each other.. aww malhar unintentional taunts to atul ..kya jodi hai sasur aur damad ki 🤣..kalyani pure thoughts on love and Malhar's hidden pain behind his words is incredible👍🏼

Sarthak moksh and Malhar scene sacchi inn teeno ko show main kitna kam screenspace mila kya jodi thi agr inka trio dikhatein to kitna acha hota

Aur how sarthak is teasing him about his girlfriend ohh god mera hass haas kein pet dukh gaya 🤣🤣🤣..aww my moksh and Malhar such a cutipie they both are ..loved how someone is there for malhar who can guide him on right path ..👍🏼


Lovely lovely chapter with itna saara love koi nahi iss FF mein meri iccha poori nahi ho sakti to kya hua hum kissi aur FF mai karwalenge par likhana jaroor ye FF mere liye plssss😳😳

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Posted: 3 years ago
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Hey praggu....

I am so so sorry itne saare chapter update bhi kr diya tune and i couldn't comment on it....

Just read all the left parts and you have done an amazing work babes💓💓💓💓❤️❤️

It was so wonderful..... Kalyani knows about moksh but can't take him because of haraami atharv.....😒😒😒

Malhar adopted him☺️😀😀

He got confirmation that kalyani has involvement in illegal things😞😞

You have put all emotions in it❤️❤️❤️

Keep writing...

And once again sorry too

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Posted: 3 years ago
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Originally posted by: Phlo004

It's awesome praku both the stories have their own grace and I am Liking that timing and your representation ...mazaa aajata hai aur pls don't be sorry I feel actually happy after seeing the notification of your happy ..main ek dum bhaagte huein padh leti hoo chapter tera 😳🤗

Coming to update kalyani is happy playing with her son for a long time ..the motherly feelings which you show for her is so pure and soothing but I really got emotional seeing her state ...how a poor girl facing so many problems in her life neither she is getting love from partner nor she can enjoy her motherhood with her son poor girl 😭😭...

On other side loved how Malhar and kalyani are coming close to each other.. aww malhar unintentional taunts to atul ..kya jodi hai sasur aur damad ki 🤣..kalyani pure thoughts on love and Malhar's hidden pain behind his words is incredible👍🏼

Sarthak moksh and Malhar scene sacchi inn teeno ko show main kitna kam screenspace mila kya jodi thi agr inka trio dikhatein to kitna acha hota

Aur how sarthak is teasing him about his girlfriend ohh god mera hass haas kein pet dukh gaya 🤣🤣🤣..aww my moksh and Malhar such a cutipie they both are ..loved how someone is there for malhar who can guide him on right path ..👍🏼


Lovely lovely chapter with itna saara love koi nahi iss FF mein meri iccha poori nahi ho sakti to kya hua hum kissi aur FF mai karwalenge par likhana jaroor ye FF mere liye plssss😳😳


Pakka Vanshu 💕💕💕 Aapki farmaish sar aankhon par.

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Posted: 3 years ago
#39

Originally posted by: PRAKRITI_12

Hey praggu....

I am so so sorry itne saare chapter update bhi kr diya tune and i couldn't comment on it....

Just read all the left parts and you have done an amazing work babes💓💓💓💓❤️❤️

It was so wonderful..... Kalyani knows about moksh but can't take him because of haraami atharv.....😒😒😒

Malhar adopted him☺️😀😀

He got confirmation that kalyani has involvement in illegal things😞😞

You have put all emotions in it❤️❤️❤️

Keep writing...

And once again sorry too


Thanks a lot Praku 💖💖💖.

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Posted: 3 years ago
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I am literally your fan!! Specially a fan of your 80's wale stories!!

But you write all the stories with so much beauty and grace that it seems to be a very matured and composed writing.

Btw the story is so good!!😍😍 your take on thr's concept is amazing!! The little details your stories hold is beautiful! Like Kalyani calling her mother, Malhar calling kalyani's mother beautiful, moksh having that instant connect with malhar- everything is so well assorted. I am just loving malhar's emotions in this story. So beautifully expressed❤ please update soon dear,you write in a magical way❤

Edited by Jara567 - 3 years ago

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