OS: The Dying Figs Of Autumn; Part 2 PG. 5

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Posted: 11 years ago
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Hey Guys,
I have worked in a wierd inverted fashion starting from FF, going to SS and now finally my first OS. This one is Belli writing in all her elements. I was hoping to make it two parts but only if you guys like it!.
The Poem i have used for inspiration is A Man in his Life by Yehuda Amichai
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The Dying Figs Of Autumn 
  

A man doesn't have time.
When he loses he seeks, when he finds
he forgets, when he forgets he loves, when he loves
he begins to forget.

Everything around her felt surreal, her vision was blurred perhaps due to the lights, perhaps the pain or was it her eyes filled with pearls of water seeping down her cheek. She wanted to escape, hide away from it all, she did not want to be rescued for she thought she cannot be rescued, it was too late for it all! The damage had been done. He was gone and with him she was!

He will die as figs die in autumn,
Shriveled and full of himself and sweet,
the leaves growing dry on the ground,
the bare branches pointing to the place
where there's time for everything.

 

The emergency workers dragged her out of the car ripping the metal door from the mess of the car that had been left behind. The broken glass shattered all over her face.

"Engaging all units, there is a hit and run case on Southside highway. The driver of the white highlander is dead on the spot; we need an ambulance for a young female'"

Came the distant voices of the police officer who made their way at the scene.

 

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She slipped in and out of perception as she was being rushed into the emergency room by the EMTs. She shut her eyes hard trying to convince her it was all a bad dream a nightmare just like the ones she had as a child.

"Khushi, come on! You are such a child" he complained grabbing the baby picture out of her hand

"No! now the entire college gets to see this" She ran around the corridor waving the picture

She is sinking, on the count of three

One, two, three! A jolt ran through her body as the defibrillator was placed on her chest.

"I love you so much khushi!" He whispered next to her ear softly nibbling on her neck.

She could see him! Hear him! He was leaving...

 

 NO!

She reached out but he was drifting, someone was pulling her back

***

Ephedrine shot. She is losing blood; initiating transfusion.

She felt the gush of blood in her head as the adrenaline rushed through her, forcing her stone heart to beat, to pump, to go on without him. He was telling her to go on.

He left!

He was gone!  

Now she laid still in the chasm.

 

 

 

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Three days later

Khushi, Khushi .She is opening her eyes call the doctor Abby!

She heard the familiar voices ruffle her ears as she attempted to open her eyes. She shot open her eyes to stare at the white ceiling. She remained still as Abby and Sara came to her side!

"Khushi! Oh my God you are awake!" spoke Abby cupping her face

The doctor walked in right behind and went ahead to look at her vitals. He lifted her wrist to check the pulse she turned to behold the familiar face and that is when she erupted. She pulled her hand away from him with all her might, and began to shudder on the bed trying to rip apart all the IV swathing her. She pushed and punched shattering on top of her lungs

"HE IS GONE!!!!"

"My RAHUL IS GONE"

The nurse pinned her down as the doctor injected the sedative. She immediately started to calm down and her violent rage turned into sobs.

"Bring him back'" she murmured falling unconscious

The doctor signaled Abby to follow her as he exited the room leaving Sara behind to witness the state of her once, vivacious friend.

"Look Abby as I had warned you earlier Khushi has gone through a severe physical trauma and these aftershocks were expected given the psychological impact such accidents have on the victim." The doctor spoke in an apprehensive tone.

"We cannot assess her condition until she wakes up again; the sedative will last for a couple of hours." He continued.

Abby broke into uncontrollable sobs hearing the doctor and all he could manage to say was

"Sorry!" And before he could say anything further an announcement went on the speaker

Dr. Raizada report to the ER immediately.

Excuse me Arnav continued as he paced towards the emergency room as a tear rolled down ther corner of his eye.

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Part 2. PG. 5

And Now the best part you get to tell me what you thought!

Love

Belli

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Posted: 11 years ago
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RESS!!

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OMG YESSS...FIRST comment!! πŸ˜ƒ

YEA YEA YEA YEA!!πŸ˜†

How AMAZING was this OS??

I LOVE that it was based off a poem!! How creative!

And I LOVE the title...its so thought-provoking!

Wait...who's Rahul?? πŸ˜•

And OMG this was so sad!! Khushi is in such a bad condition! πŸ˜­

Anyway PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE update soon!!

I LOVE YOU! πŸ€— Muah!

Tara β­οΈ

Edited by -Smiles- - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Me (:
Pats self on back.

_______

Daamn Belli, where did you get an idea like this!
I freakin loved it!
At first when you said white highlander I was like ' nooo, Arnav!'
But then when Khushi finally opened her eyes I was like 'the ladka must have been someone else, Raizada babua is fine.'

That was so damn cute.
Especially the ending with a tear sliding down Dr. Raizada's cheek.

So when are you continuing this?
I can't wait!
(:
Edited by Hot.Pink.Heels - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
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REs
 
Bloody phuckwa.
In my defense I say I didn't know about this and I'm ShwetaSunshine aka S so I got the pm after the others.
 
EDIT:
 
I read that OS THREE TIMES.
I even phucking looked up the poem.
That was soo deep. Her pain. Her loss of Rahul.
She got into an accident? Rahul died before it right?
She's not in a... good state right? Arnav is the doctor?
Who is Rahul anyways. I'm guessing its the guy she loves. And that too very deeply.
Does Arnav love her? Or is he just crying because of Khushi's painful loss and depression?
I am confused but you are continuing this right? RIGHT?
 
That was me talking bout the story, but the way it was written...
Especially the first paragraph...
I actually somehow felt it. It's weird but it felt like I was there, as if that was me. It was so relateable, the feeling the tears it was described that well that you just felt like it was me.
But I had a question, "He was gone and with him she was" so she thought that this was the end and she is dying? Or was he literally with her at the moment but she saw him die in front of her but she miraculously survived till the ambulance got here. But then why did they say we need an ambulance for one young female? They don't just leave a dead body there.
 
I need a second part, I need to know what happened.
 
Well written and it's true, kuch baton main tum meri maa hi rahogi.
 
I love a lot Belli muah! You are my only Habibi Kameena and that too forever.
Edited by ShwetaSunshine - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
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--UN-RES--

Belli !!!!!!!
That was AMAZING! I mean I can't even tell you how much I loved this!
Dr.Raizada? What a brilliant idea!
And loved how you associated the story with that beautiful Poem.
You are turning this into an SS woman! I am not hearing anything...this is an SS officially!
Thanks for the PM.
And I will be waiting for an update on this SS! 

Mini <3
Edited by -Manal.A- - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
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nice os hope u continue soon
btw does it have a continuation
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: ShwetaSunshine

REs

 
Bloody phuckwa.
In my defense I say I didn't know about this and I'm ShwetaSunshine aka S so I got the pm after the others.

^ pfft, excuses..
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Posted: 11 years ago
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I thought someone was going to sleep...
And that is the eggjact reason i basnt phirst. :'(
IM A FAILURE
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: ShwetaSunshine

 
I thought someone was going to sleep...
And that is the eggjact reason i basnt phirst. :'(
IM A FAILURE

Belli has good timing. Just as I finished talking to you I got her pm and then... *Pria makes a mad dash to res* 
So yeah..
But no worries, my res-ing skills are horrible. 
This was sheer luck. 
Feel better now? <3

Now I'm off to sleep for real this time :)
Edited by Hot.Pink.Heels - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Hey Belli! This was a great OneShot! It was so unlike anything i've ever read..a new concept. It was great!
Please do continue it! :)