SALVATION...MG(FF) sorry..discontinue note - Page 2

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Posted: 14 years ago
#11

Originally posted by: piya-

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o aisa lagtha hai k maan ka past khafi dardnaak tha...no wonder k he has lost his faith in relationships
omg maan ki mom n uske unborn brother ki death uske dad ki wajah se hui...n dadi also thinks that she was responsible for this situ
o take ur time dear geet ko tabhi introduce karna when u feel k it is thew right time
ye lo main bhool gayi
ME FIRST
YIPEE
continue soon
love-Piya

yup dear...u r d first..u knw i used to comment on others never thought of writing my own ff... iirrkk i m nervous...glad u like it...
luv u
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Posted: 14 years ago
#12

Originally posted by: lively-piia

yup dear...u r d first..u knw i used to comment on others never thought of writing my own ff... iirrkk i m nervous...glad u like it...
luv u

hey don't b nervous dear u r a good writer feel free to express urself
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Posted: 14 years ago
#13
hey nice attempt yaar i must say
do continue
n add me on ur pm list
take care
aniee👍🏼
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Posted: 14 years ago
#14
nice start...
interesting...
Add me in ur pm list!
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Posted: 14 years ago
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that's the only thing i can say..continue soon please😃
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Posted: 14 years ago
#16
nice update..waiting for more update😊
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Posted: 14 years ago
#17
Nice part!
Loveee it!
Feeling bad for maan!
Continue soonnn.
Thanxx for the pm.


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Posted: 14 years ago
#18
that was so amazing and so sad too!
i feel bad for daadi, maan, and maan's mother.
plz do let me know when you update the next part!

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Posted: 14 years ago
#19
Guys i m on roll so new installment of act 2... Act 2:- Scene [A] :- Maan was already boiling with anger and his encounter with dadima has freshened his wounds. suddenly the car got stop due to sudden break.
maan:- ramu !! pagal ho gaya ho kya??
ramu:- saab gaddi ke aage se kuch sadhu ki toli samne ke mandir jaa rahi hai..
maan :- [self-thought] bhagwan !! the creator wat they say survivor... bull shit ... he is no one just a destructor. she used to pray him a lot wat did she get in the end a betrayal and a painful and unwanted death.
the car started to move very slowly it irked maan more..there was a que on the on the left side of the car.
A girl who was in the que get unbalaced and banged on the car's door. she was trying to save her "puja ki thali" she again pushed to his car's door by someone...and as the car window was open vermillon 4m her thali got spilled over maan's face and went to his eyes...he closed his and frantically rub them..he had literally blasted on the person in his mind to spill this filthy element on him but when he opened his eyes to do so ...he was surprised to find a pair of hazel colour eyes looking at him with concern and a soft delicate hand js't mere inches away 4m his face...the face was again covered with a duppatta..
"Tahzeeb" a girl of about 20 years approx. came and started pulling her " chal jaldi kar. jake darshan karle agar aaj late hogaye toh woh saala robert [ yaar tapori naam chahiye tha ] phir chilayega."
she pulled her away while being pulled the girl kept looking back as if saying gud bye to him...
maan:- [s.t] Tahzeeb...did i hear right but the first word written by her last night was "G"...maan r u gone crazy ? may be she is not the same girl...but those eyes were same...no it can't be...
maan wat's gone into u ? u r thinking about a girl ? that to an unkown girl ...
Maan singh khurana has no time for girls in his life and emotions r nt meant for me...
with dis thought he cleaned his face n opened his laptop n started working on it. due to sudden hault of his car his mobile
fell on his feet n when he bend to pick it up he saw some flowers were laying on his feet. he guessed they were must hv fallen from "HER" thali he picked them up n instead of throwing them away he kept them in his pocket without second thought.
Maan entered in his office in full msk mode. his walk was elegant n his aura was charismatic. the office staff despersed to their respective seats.
adi:- gud mrng sirrr...
maan:- wat is gud abt dis mrng adi ?
* p.s introduction of... SASHA ... she is chief architect of khurana constructions.till now she is loyal to msk but she is a self centered lady n has liking for msk..with her come along TASHA a silly bimbo right hand of tasha...
approached msk with somw files...
sasha :- mk mr. chopra want to sign dis deal today itself.
maan:- dat's wat i want. we cant let them have second thoughts about dis deal.
sasha :- they wont. we wont let them mk every thing is being properly taken care off.
maan:- better...otherwise u know i dont part with mistakes .. he gave a promising look of his threat with his typical angry glare..
sasha gluped her saliva..
maan:- do u all need someone to escort you out of my cabin ?
adi :- hehehehehehe sirrr...
maan shot an another glare to him.
maan:- all of you leave.
Maan sat on his chair n started to go through the chopra's file. he wanted dis deal bad... chopra's always try to bait their clients with their wrong ways..they were known for their illegal n unethical terms of trade...maan always play fair n square in business deals n by cracking dis deal he would be having upper hand in all the decesions made by chopra group.
he will make sure they mend their ways n never to cross his lines again.
after going through the file he sign of relief n put his hand in his pocket to took out his mobile n while taking out his mobile he also took out those flowers which he kept in his pocket earlier...jasmine flowers they were..white, fragile n pure...
he smell them...their smell was enchanting, soothing and empowering...a wave of calmness spread through his body... he for a moment closed his eyes...
those pair of hazel eyes flashed in his mind...
he jerked up.
maan :- [s.t] Maan !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! uuurrrggghhh wat is going on with u ? u r behaving like a teenager... NO...
Nothing can change MSK... NOTHING...
HE SWEARED...
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Aaj ke liye itna hi...
there will be two more parts of dis act...no geet again...kind of???
i hope u like dis update...
luv u all...
mmmuuuaaahhh
Act 2 scene B :- page 5
Edited by lively-piia - 13 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
#20

Originally posted by: lil.mizz.smexii

that was so amazing and so sad too!
i feel bad for daadi, maan, and maan's mother.
plz do let me know when you update the next part!

i hv updated dear...

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