Hey DD
sorry i am late.. kya karoon it was a super busy day as had to attend open evenings for my daughter's high school and then the usual work too!
\nyway it was amazing girl…truly amazing..u never cease to amaze me..
I find a very realistic OS here DD and that in itself is something as it is so easy to get carried away because of our love for D-N. I am not saying that those who get carried away and write their stuff are not upto the mark, in fact there are some amazing writers who can conjure up some absolutely lovely, mushy scnes enough to bring back smiles into my life on depressing days.. But when I read your OS, I feel you are one of those few who try and stay as true to the character as possible as depicted in the show.. and I think that is a hard feat as you are thinking like the dutta and nakku we see on telly every episode and not the Dutta-Nakku we want them to be.. ultimately it is the D-N on screen that we will have to live with, whether their actions appeal to us or not.. god, I am digressing here !!! but in short I will say, you think/write like a cv or an LTL team member :-)
Mujhe apne pati se jhooth bolna acha nahi lagta... now this is one line which is very difficult to agree or disagree on.. nakku has been hiding her secret, so you might think why double standards?! But then she has never LIED to dutta.. if he was to find out or ask her, she would come out with the truth like she did with baaji! So I liked this line a lot..
I totally enjoyed the realistic feel when Dp was talking to Nakku.. him pleading and nakku holding all her cards close to her heart and not falling for any of his words as she does not want to believe him, but is forced to listen as it involves her saab.. so true na..and her being upset when he accuses the PN niwas wale was very touching.. here is a girl who only wanted a good hubby and a good family in her life.. and she does get a gem of a hubby and she believes her family is top notch too... but to be told any different or to even be told that there could be traitors in her own house is like knife thru her heart..
Chakravyuh.. excellent choice of word here.. as soon as I read it, I was zapped.. so true.. very apt description in one word of what Dutta is trapped in.. and DP suffering from cancer is the most likely scenario, isn't it? Now nakku has no choice as these are a dying man's wish.. not just any dying man, but her FIL.
I always like nakku reflecting on things before she makes up her mind.. so unlike dutta hai na.. I love dutta for that though ;-)makes him more vulnerable!
'Dutta asking nakku 'Aaj kahan gayi thi...' and Nakku not able to lie.. this is when I feel you stay true to the soul of the character.. I don't think nakku can ever lie to dutta.. and I like her for that.. and after initial flare up, he asks why he was not made aware of this.. this is very much in keeping with how Dutta has changed. He has started thinking.. though will flare up first and then think..and nakku's answer.. mein aapke liye gayi thi.. bless her!
I love the way how dutta trusts and loves nakku implicitly even in such a time. I hope the show depicts the same..
You have depicted Dutta's reasonsing against his dad well.. esp how AS lost her hubby, his sisters lost their dad etc.. you have written those lines very well, but the lines that really got me where he talks about.. toh sirf anjaan chehre nazar aate hain.. dayaa nazar aati hain.. aehsaan nazar....' this was superb.. you have written out Dutta's inner turmoil exceptionally clearly in these lines..and his fear of what more is there in so clear in the line.. who aur kitna khoklaa karega.. this is something I never thought of.. to see that dutta thinks there is more to come :-(
What can I say about Nakku ensuring Dutta has a peaceful nap.. It is so poignant.. and wonderful that in spite of him being in such trying circumstances, he doesn't forget the fact that she is suffering more than him, and him acknowledging that she perhaps loves him more than he himself can ever do, and then he also feels the need to be as close to her as possible..truly amazing.. u do need that physical and emotional union to get thru such times, and so happy to see that he did not forget their anniversary and I absolutely adore that gift.. initially I thought ok, it's a bappa locket, but then inside their photo was a very sweet touch indeed! I found it really nice that nakku says ki main toh kuch nahi laayi aap ke liye.. how sweet and innocent and true.. and really touched me when Dutta asks her to promise that's he will never leave him.. brings out his vulnerability and his fear of being alone again.. wonder if he will ever come out of that fear ever in life ??
And my gos, AS was spitting venom.. saying usko lagta hain uski duniya bharpur hain,,lekin use nahin pata uske duniya mein koi nahin hain.. how glad will I be when that is proved wrong.. esp as he has nakku whereas AS thinks Kaali nakku is his sazaa.. use thodi na pata ki dutta's soul is nakku now..
And I wholeheartedly agree that at least at least ganpat saamne se kameena hai unlike these people!
Cant wait to read next part which will be very diffuclt to write esp as you stay so true to the characters and the situations.. but well done and absolutely marvelos as always,.. a pleasure to read and a special thank you for the PM
BTW, had a question for you, is this OS a continuation after face reveal esp as they have celebrated their anniversary as well.. understand the tapes are old, hence AS referring to nakku as kaali there
Love
Vandu
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