OS:"Waapis Aaogi Na" - Page 5

stupendo fantastically fantabulous

just wanted to say that when dutta told Nakku that he too wanted something from her, I seriously thought he was going to ask for a daughter. Par Dutta ki thinking hum se slow hai.

Originally posted by: suhana19

Hey DD thanx for such a mindlowing OS....i mean have no words to express my feelings....iam speechless yaar... u really excellent writer ...wow each and every dialogue touched my heart deeply ....i loved the way u showed that naku"s FR was done...so without any guilt she could support dutta in each and every way ....i loved it to the core ...i wanna see more of tasha...so will wait for the nxt part eagerly ...pls try to update soon ....thanx a lot for such a wonderful and mindlowing OS .....really apperciate it for ur all hard work  DD ....take care and see ya around...love ya👏👍🏼🤗 ❤️

Originally posted by: prettywoman

I find a very realistic OS here DD and that in itself is something as it is so easy to get carried away because of our love for D-N. I am not saying that those who get carried away and write their stuff are not upto the mark, in fact there are some amazing writers who can conjure up some absolutely lovely, mushy scnes enough to bring back smiles into my life on depressing days.. But when I read your OS, I feel you are one of those few who try and stay as true to the character as possible as depicted in the show.. and I think that is a hard feat as you are thinking like the dutta and nakku we see on telly every episode and not the Dutta-Nakku we want them to be.. ultimately it is the D-N on screen that we will have to live with, whether their actions appeal to us or not.. god, I am digressing here !!! but in short I will say, you think/write like a cv or an LTL team member :-)

Vandu, That's what i was telling Sara, that I connect to OS more than FFs because OS is more like an extn of the current serial...That implies that one has to stay in  the skin of the character....BTW, From Part III onwards my OS might digress and I am now scared of presenting it here...Its just tht how the story came into my mind in a flick and I am not able to divert from it... 

Mujhe apne pati se jhooth bolna acha nahi lagta... now this is one line which is very difficult to agree or disagree on.. nakku has been hiding her secret, so you might think why double standards?! But then she has never LIED to dutta.. if he was to find out or ask her, she would come out with the truth like she did with baaji! So I liked this line a lot..

Exactly Vandu, when I wrote this line, I was on this two turf surface, shld I call Naku sneaking as a lie or not....Keeping quiet is not a lie, and Naku didnt really lie to him but for her keeping mum is also not right in a marriage.....so, she is still guilty...especcially when Dutta doesnt wanna have anything to do with DP.... 

I totally enjoyed the realistic feel when Dp was talking to Nakku.. him pleading and nakku holding all her cards close to her heart and not falling for any of his words as she does not want to believe him, but is forced to listen as it involves her saab.. so true na..and her being upset when he accuses the PN niwas wale was very touching.. here is a girl who only wanted a good hubby and a good family in her life.. and she does get a gem of a hubby and she believes her family is top notch too... but to be told any different or to even be told that there could be traitors in her own house is like knife thru her heart..

My idea here was that although DP is dying and is here to save Dutta but his past actions cannot be forgiven so easily...and hence, that doesnt inculcate trust in any near and dear ones of Dutta...Naku cannot forget what DP did easily but anywhere its about Dutta's life, she has to lend her ears...and then DP is dying and I believe that universally, u kinda forgive anyone who is dying....u just feel tht u wish u culd rewrite the life again...... that does make Naku soft...but only if it doesnt affect Dutta!!

Chakravyuh.. excellent choice of word here.. as soon as I read it, I was zapped.. so true.. very apt description in one word of what Dutta is trapped in.. and DP suffering from cancer is the most likely scenario, isn't it? Now nakku has no choice as these are a dying man's wish.. not just any dying man, but her FIL.

It had to be Chakravyuh Vandu...Chakravyu are supposed to be very complicated internally and need highly skilled and patient mind to unfold each and every piece with diligence...Thats what Dutta is in....Not one web but multiple web around him, everyone targetting him for a diff reason of their own... 

I always like nakku reflecting on things before she makes up her mind.. so unlike dutta hai na.. I love dutta for that though ;-)makes him more vulnerable!

'Dutta asking nakku 'Aaj kahan gayi thi...' and Nakku not able to lie.. this is when I feel you stay true to the soul of the character.. I don't think nakku can ever lie to dutta.. and I like her for that.. and after initial flare up, he asks why he was not made aware of this.. this is very much in keeping with how Dutta has changed. He has started thinking.. though will flare up first and then think..and nakku's answer.. mein aapke liye gayi thi.. bless her!

I strongly believe that dnt lie to ur close ones even if for circumstances u have to keep quiet...I have seen Naku very true to her principles and love and I want her to stick to it...No matter how many weakness she inculcates, I dnt wanna see her deviate from her basic character as such!!! 

I love the way how dutta trusts and loves nakku implicitly even in such a time. I hope the show depicts the same..

ahem ahem.....*gets sheepish* ..I am scared about future parts of mine Vandu...I think I might have deviated somewhere...okie, lets see how u all take it...

You have depicted Dutta's reasonsing against his dad well.. esp how AS lost her hubby, his sisters lost their dad etc.. you have written those lines very well, but the lines that really got me where he talks about.. toh sirf anjaan chehre nazar aate hain.. dayaa nazar aati hain.. aehsaan nazar....' this was superb.. you have written out Dutta's inner turmoil exceptionally clearly in these lines..and his fear of what more is there in so clear in the line.. who aur kitna khoklaa karega.. this is something I never thought of.. to see that dutta thinks there is more to come :-(

Vandu, His father has come back, although Dutta might have shut him off, he knows this truth is not here to stay with his life, he might ignore the truth in his mind, but he cant run away from it...but when he sees the ppl around him with whol he has lived last 26 yrs, he cannot help but do as per their heart desire bcoz of the debt and "love" that they have "shown" him...Subconsciously, he wants a closure but he is avoiding it because of his weaknesses and fears!! 

What can I say about Nakku ensuring Dutta has a peaceful nap.. It is so poignant.. and wonderful that in spite of him being in such trying circumstances, he doesn't forget the fact that she is suffering more than him, and him acknowledging that she perhaps loves him more than he himself can ever do, and then he also feels the need to be as close to her as possible..truly amazing.. u do need that physical and emotional union to get thru such times, and so happy to see that he did not forget their anniversary and I absolutely adore that gift.. initially I thought ok, it's a bappa locket, but then inside their photo was a very sweet touch indeed! I found it really nice that nakku says ki main toh kuch nahi laayi aap ke liye.. how sweet and innocent and true.. and really touched me when Dutta asks her to promise that's he will never leave him.. brings out his vulnerability and his fear of being alone again.. wonder if he will ever come out of that fear ever in life ??

u got this spot on Vandu...That promise was redundant demand considering that she had assured him last night and he knows she loves him and he is her life...yes, he wuld ask her...why? because he is seeing his relationships slip...all the ppl whom he had held to the heart were slipping...and Naku is one such person whom he has held v v close to his heart...she is the only one who is still there intact...he cant let her go.... 

And my gos, AS was spitting venom.. saying usko lagta hain uski duniya bharpur hain,,lekin use nahin pata uske duniya mein koi nahin hain.. how glad will I be when that is proved wrong.. esp as he has nakku whereas AS thinks Kaali nakku is his sazaa.. use thodi na pata ki dutta's soul is nakku now..

😆😆😆😆....yeah, this was the time when Naku was kallo...and u know my obsession with AS is BH mantraa!! 😆😆 

And I wholeheartedly agree that at least at least ganpat saamne se kameena hai unlike these people!

Yeah, In front of these leeches, Ganpat looks so harmless...u can understand the snakes flourishing in and around dutta!! 

Cant wait to read next part which will be very diffuclt to write esp as you stay so true to the characters and the situations.. but well done and absolutely marvelos as always,.. a pleasure to read and a special thank you for the PM

Yeah, I am now scared Vandu...The story wuld take unexpected turn but just tht when I was talking and walking, thats the story came in my mind, and I am not able to deviate from it, thought it might be non-LTL....Read it and tell me if I deviated!!

Originally posted by: bfunofbb123

Ohh DD i am so exited u decided to write/continue ur OS it sounds amazing i can't wait to read it i like how u said u'll write it, it will b fun lots of bollywood i enjoy bollywood and u said ektaish, as long as it doesn't end like ekta's it is always ruined at the end but, i have full faith on u i really enjoyed ur previous Os infact to remind my self before i read this i was reading the naku i do and FR OMG u won't beleive it as if i am reading 4 the first time i enjoyed reading it again and reminded my self how it was now i am all ready to read this and will comment and tanx again 4 this.😊

Originally posted by: Rose_Petal

I have yet to finish the whole thing but so far so good DD! 👏

At least in your OS Naku remembered about Kishore and the fact that he knew something about Sups' escape......If only she did that in ltl then we would have more clues on who is the BH....although I am absolutely sure (or just really, really hoping) it is AS 😆.