STORY CONTEST- 2(CASE OF THE MYSTERIOUS KIDNAPPER) - Page 48

story No 6 review

It was one of awesome stories. review as I felt

First Chandok and ACP conversation loved this scene

Chandok-Oho !!! Abhijeet-Daya,inko zimmedari di gayi
hai,isliye main sochoon ki aap itna confidently kaise keh rahe hai ki mujhe
kuch nahi hoga

(Abhi-Daya look at each other and share a smile)

And Abhi-Daya conversation after eating food neved imagined themsaying
this but made me do so

And after kidnapping zada Dant Daya ne khai.

ACP-actually ??... kya actually haan ?? main unse keh raha
tha ki yeh dono officers heere hai,sabse best hai,Chandok ji aapko kuch nahi ho
sakta aur tum do heeron ne meri naak katwa di,behosh pade the dono bhai
saab,Salunkhe ne bataaya inke juice mein behoshi ki dawa thi

Fully ACP dialogue
and reason ACP gave for not handling case loved it.

ACP-Tum log toh batao hi mat kya important hai,sab gadbad
tum dono ki wajah se hui hai,isliye tum hi sambhaalna

Then mysterious room

Next dialogue

Daya-Waah Shambhu gaadi chala raha hai ??? aur iske kapde
bhi kitne achche aur mehangi hai,bhai lagtha hai Chandok ji ke paas toh naukar banke rehne mein bhi aish hai !!

Abhi-Daya scene in Forensic Lab loved it and that Enzyminocide . The
only story which had some useful information related to forensic which looks
real forensic.

Your forensic scene was little dragged not so but slight one (I felt)

And at climax just loved relation of Chandok's son Shaan with ACP's son
Nakul. New concept. Whatever we see in
show it had everything. Chandok pointing gun towards ACP and ACP giving signal
and Abhi shoots Chandok.

Thanks for the lovely review sunny I'll try and improve in the sections u mentioned

congratessssssssssssssssss👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏

to all winners 👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏

from me

areeee koe mere story ka bhe postmortem karo,,,kissi ko samaj bhe aye ha ya nahee,,,,,my story is #2

agar kahta hain to forhensic lab main doctor saluka ko bhijva datti hon vo to bata dain ga,,,,kia waja ha iss story ki death kii,,,,😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃

@jatt your story was also very nice and a different concept but just a suggestion language thoda simple kar dena,it'll be perfect,instead of using double letters so frequently use them only when required,warna sach batao story wise tumhaara bahut achcha tha with an innovative concept

Bhavna is absolutely right! Ur story wa really nice concept wise! Only prob was the language.. A little diff to understand! But very nice effort! 👏 👏

@visrom: Why don't you edit your 1st post?

Originally posted by: metor

@visrom: Why don't you edit your 1st post?

If I edit, it becomes unsticky. I thought of lettting it remain for 2-3 days more.

OK NIce..! I ll have 2 read the stories ..!! I have shifted and am not able 2 access the net..!! i am still to check out wht is my result..!! :p congratz 2 d winners..!!

nd Visrom.... i used "ThAt TYpE OF LEttErs" cuz my Keyboard ... the capslock key was not switching off so i had 2 press Shift throughout and type the story... In Between when i left it.. so ThAt TyPE Of leTtErs Came..!! :(

I am the author of Story 7.

ok story 7 was urs ?? very good work metor you've really grown up as a writer !!