YuNa POEMS: Updated - 25/2 pg 15 Sealed Lips - Page 5

Originally posted by: koolaries4

I am Sorry.

She is my life,
without her there is no spice,
Yet there are shadows,
that bury me down deep in the mellows.

She asks for the truth,
About my past,
but if she comes to know,
then our relation wont last,
Coz she'll begin to hate me more,
When she knows the real score.

My heart longs to tell you my story,
Later on i will tell you, but for now,
All I can Say is,
I am really Sorry.

Comments and Criticisms wellcome, 😊
Tc,
MJ
xxx

MJ, wow!! That was beautiful. You have a way with words or should I say prose... You captured the emotions of these two so perfectly.
God bless you girl. You are a real talent.

Love,
Ash

OMG first time im reading ur poem SOOOOOOOOOOOOO good 👏

hey MJ

awwwwwwwwwwwwwwww MJ this soooooooooooo WOW

My heart longs to tell you my story,
Later on i will tell you, but for now,
All I can Say is,
I am really Sorry.

WOW! There is such simplicity in your words - you have put across Yuvi's  dilemma and sadness so well. He is so scared to tell Naina the truth.

hey mj

it was jst fantanstic
emotional as well as fun
i esp liked

She is my life,
without her there is no spice

Originally posted by: Starry_night

What do I say now.....running out of words.....its fantabulous....so true to their situation......Yuvi is feeling sorry for hiding the truth yet cannot confide in her coz he fears losing her.......true...she has become his life.......its amazingly written..

Hey MJ, read all ur cllection of YuNa POEMs and commented to
1.Naina - A corner...
2.My reality Poem: Yuvi 2 Naina
3.Yuvi's forgiveness...........

First of all lemme me tell u r a gr8, fantanstic, magnificent, superb, innovative, and etc poet...and i just loved ur poems , they r just so emotion filled, romantic,situational,  forgivfull[if that's a word], and all of praises........AND U HAVE AWESUM - BLOSSOM TALENT FOR POETRY......

I READ ALL UR POEMS AND HERE IS A BRIEF REVIEW[FROM MAAH SIDE]:
1.Revenge:A well described yuvi's mission from hatred to regret....especially ending
"That eventually cut my own mane,
leaving me to feel a new kind of pain.".
2.losing and gaining:All that i can say that yuvi shattered her dreams of fairytale, only what she wanted was sum true love from his deep heart but what in return was she got was only pain and grief.POOR PRINCESS.....she thought she would live her life merrily like a fairytale with her RAAJ.....but he turned out to be YUVRAAJ... LOVED the foll lines:
"For him it was just a game,
revenge was its name.".
3.Gratitude: Its very situational , abt how yuvi was grateful; for shashnk to let him stay him and he was very touched to see how easily shashank understood him and forgive  him. This were the exact feeling yuvi felt which were perfectly portrayed by you...
4.One chance: This is the poem that should be yuvi saying to naina, a well combination of his love and regret.Yuvi should realize that its not easy to absorb betrayal and he should understand that naina is the one that really should matter in ur life and which is greatly described  in this poem..LOVED THE FOLL LINES
"Where all that remains are our hearts".
5.Trust: This poem is my second fav.This is the PERFECT AND MAGNIFICENT Pot-ration of nainas  situation where she wants to believe in love of yuvi but is afraid to once again break and bruise her heart by the one person she cares foremost .I LOVED ALL LINES but most mattered was:
"If only you promse you are mine,
For now and for all times".
6.She gave me chance; This is sweet poem and i think u made it immeditely after Liqidified YuNa confession, i must say ur poet thoughts run very fast hehe lolz but seriuosly  i must say these were thoughts were in yuvi's mind when he emerged from pool.LOVED FOLL LINES;
"If only you promse you are mine,
For now and for all times😳".
7.Mine to take:Very true, i was still confused why naina huigged him when she was still angry[as well as worreid], but ur poem cleared all my doubts. Naina forgave him becoz she saw deep LOVE AND REGRET in his eyes, she realized that neither she can run away from him nor hate him or ignore him.....
8.I m Sorry:This is based on Yuvi's new secret rite. Yaar i must tell u r just fantabulous and magnizing[magnifescent and amazing].Yuvi is sure regretting for again lying to naina but yet he is confident that once he will make her realise her love for him and gain her trust and then will tell truth JUST PERFECT. LOVED FOLL LINES:
"She is my life,
without her there is no spice,
Yet there are shadows,
that bury me down deep in the mellows."
.............................................................................................................................
but  my favourite was

My reality Poem: Yuvi 2 Naina

check my comment:http://india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=1316672&TPN=3

 P.S. : i have taken 1 hour to comment all ur poems .i must say u r just ummm YUNICIOUS........

Originally posted by: sups2222

Hey MJ, read all ur cllection of YuNa POEMs and commented to
1.Naina - A corner...
2.My reality Poem: Yuvi 2 Naina
3.Yuvi's forgiveness...........

First of all lemme me tell u r a gr8, fantanstic, magnificent, superb, innovative, and etc poet...and i just loved ur poems , they r just so emotion filled, romantic,situational,  forgivfull[if that's a word], and all of praises........AND U HAVE AWESUM - BLOSSOM TALENT FOR POETRY......

 

Thank you. .😳

I READ ALL UR POEMS AND HERE IS A BRIEF REVIEW[FROM MAAH SIDE]:
1.Revenge:A well described yuvi's mission from hatred to regret....especially ending
"That eventually cut my own mane,
leaving me to feel a new kind of pain.".
2.losing and gaining:All that i can say that yuvi shattered her dreams of fairytale, only what she wanted was sum true love from his deep heart but what in return was she got was only pain and grief.POOR PRINCESS.....she thought she would live her life merrily like a fairytale with her RAAJ.....but he turned out to be YUVRAAJ... 😆😆LOVED the foll lines:
"For him it was just a game,
revenge was its name.".

@ Blue: True,  she looked for Raaj, and found Yuvraaj.. but like she said... thoda dafood hai, leikin mein manage karlungi, kyunki woh mujhse bohot pyaar karta hai !! 😊

3.Gratitude: Its very situational , abt how yuvi was grateful; for shashnk to let him stay him and he was very touched to see how easily shashank understood him and forgive  him. This were the exact feeling yuvi felt which were perfectly portrayed by you...

 

Yes, actually, its so difficult to imagine how Yuvi must have felt.. and all he can do is tell Shashank Sorry and nothing else.. *sigh*

4.One chance: This is the poem that should be yuvi saying to naina, a well combination of his love and regret.Yuvi should realize that its not easy to absorb betrayal and he should understand that naina is the one that really should matter in ur life and which is greatly described  in this poem..LOVED THE FOLL LINES
"Where all that remains are our hearts".

 

Yes, where two lovers are, i dont think there's place for anybody else.. right?! 😉😆

5.Trust: This poem is my second fav.This is the PERFECT AND MAGNIFICENT Pot-ration of nainas  situation where she wants to believe in love of yuvi but is afraid to once again break and bruise her heart by the one person she cares foremost .I LOVED ALL LINES but most mattered was:
"If only you promse you are mine,
For now and for all times".

AAAwwww.. thank you soo much. honestly you are spoiling me too much Supriya!! 😳

Yes, Naina has taken a big leap by trusting Yuvi again but it has been a transition from fear to hope to have done that.. and thats what i tried to portray, and i am glad that the message has been conveyed!! 😊

6.She gave me chance; This is sweet poem and i think u made it immeditely after Liqidified YuNa confession, i must say ur poet thoughts run very fast hehe lolz but seriuosly  i must say these were thoughts were in yuvi's mind when he emerged from pool.LOVED FOLL LINES;
"If only you promse you are mine,
For now and for all times😳".

 

Yes, i made it exactly after the liquified YuNa confession.. 😆 and that too when i was about to go to sleep and these lines popped up in my head, and i got up to write them and my mom shouted at me!! 😆

 

7.Mine to take:Very true, i was still confused why naina huigged him when she was still angry[as well as worreid], but ur poem cleared all my doubts. Naina forgave him becoz she saw deep LOVE AND REGRET in his eyes, she realized that neither she can run away from him nor hate him or ignore him.....

 

You see, the problem with Ishq is, that is very very ajeeb... you can never understand it.. Even though Naina is supposed to be angry and hurt, her love superceedes her anger !! Thats why its ajeeb - you can give up your life without a second thought, and still be happy.. very ajeeb! *sigh*Yes, for Yuvi, the lines are apt - love me or hate me, but you cant ignore me!! 😆😉

8.I m Sorry:This is based on Yuvi's new secret rite. Yaar i must tell u r just fantabulous and magnizing[magnifescent and amazing].Yuvi is sure regretting for again lying to naina but yet he is confident that once he will make her realise her love for him and gain her trust and then will tell truth JUST PERFECT. LOVED FOLL LINES:
"She is my life,
without her there is no spice,
Yet there are shadows,
that bury me down deep in the mellows."

 

Yes, thats his plan, to tell her later on, but since when do plans go as planned? hardly ever.. And although i can imagine his state of mind (and to an extent i agree to why he is doing it), i know that it will end up harming their relation.. for this, he is going to lose Naina!!

 

.............................................................................................................................
but  my favourite was

My reality Poem: Yuvi 2 Naina

check my comment:http://india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=1316672&TPN=3 - i already have.. thank you for it.. 😊

 P.S. : i have taken 1 hour to comment all ur poems .i must say u r just ummm YUNICIOUS........😍 😆Thanks.. 😉

 

For her I removed my shirt,
And with her I flirt,
If she tells me,
I would convert,
And her, I would never hurt.

Yet she refuses to profess,
The love she holds abreast,
Her feelings she tries to suppress,
And her I try to impress..

Finally she did declare,
The truth of our affairs,
For her, I do admit,
I thought I was unfit,
And nobody would permit,
Themselves to commit,
to me, a lowly git,
inteasd on me,
They would quit.

But she proved me wrong,
by loving me all along,
all i can do now,
is love her back
with all that i have.
So I shall, So I will,
And with a hug i seal,
this covenant, i promise to keep.

Thank you for loving me back,
And not doing some sorta attack,
Now that our love story is on its track,
I'll let Sumi whack me,
If I ever Slack!!  😆

Edited by koolaries4 - 14 years ago