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Short Story

  • Heavily OOC
  • On the verge of being AU
  • Written just for fun
  • Flames not allowed
  • PMs on request
  • Enjoy!
  • Dua karo ke I finish thi sone

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Index

1. The Ghoda & RA's Advice Queen (page 1)
2. Some Basic, Ground Rules (page 7)



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Posted: 12 years ago
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1.
The Ghoda and RA's Advice Queen.

"Point being, hum sab aakhir ko humans hi hain..." One eye closed, eyes on the target and tongue sticking out, she was looking quite the picture saying such philosophical lines.

His moving hands stopped and he looked at her as she threw the dart. It flew and missed the mark.

7th time in a row.

"Dang it!" She cursed and looked at him, pouting while she did so. And he had to fight hard to stop his smirk from appearing on his face. She shrugged and took her seat opposite to him.

"And as humans," she continued. "We have every right to act humans. And humans, err."

Wow, she was on a streak today!

"Kehna kya chahti ho Panchi?" KD diverted his attention back to the task at hand, finishing up the assignment.

"What I mean is ke bade faide ke liye chota nuqsaan uthana is fine!" She picked up her glass of half finished cold drink and took a sip from it, looking at him thoughtfully as she did so.

"Life philosophy se direct business mantra? Panchi Rastogi, tabiyat tou theek hai na?" He commented without looking up. She rolled her eyes and put her hand on his file.

"Ghee tedhi ungli se kyun nahin nikalte?!" She cried and he only raised his eyebrows at him.

"Assignment mein ghee daal ke kya karoonga?!" He retorted in the same way and tried snatching the file from her. And succeeded.

"I'm talking about Kiya!"

"What about her?! Right now I'm interested in this assignment only!" He made a hand gesture to shoo her away and she could only manage to give him a scandalized look.

"KD, koi andha bhi dekh le that there is something special between you." This time she tried a softer approach and it worked for he finally put down his pen and looked at her.

"Panchi, we are just good friends. Aur ye bhi kafi mehnat ke baad hua hai. I don't want to screw this up. And besides, it's not like ke wo mujhe koi ghaas daalti hai, uss tarah se." He calmly explained to her and picked up his pen again. Which point was he noting again?

"Keshav Desai, I didn't know ke tum ek ghode ho."

What?

KD dropped his pen on the floor at this comment and gave her a shocked look before bending down to pick it up.

"Cuz ghaas ghodon ko daali jaati hai, insaano ko nahin." She shrugged and finished her drink.

"Technically bakriyon ko bhi daali jaati hain but ghoda suits you more. What a fine breed of horse you are!" She smiled brightly at him, showing a little of her perfect teeth.

He didn't know how to reply to that so he just gave her his signature "Angry Young Man" look and she sobered up.

"KD, why don't you just tell her that you have feelings for her?"

"Because I'm tired of that. Har baar main hi kyun? My ego and self respect can't take that anymore. Main khud ko uss position mein nahin rakh sakta where she can step over me again!" He hadn't meant to say this, certainly not with the amount of bitterness in which he did. But it all came out. Kiya was a touchy topic for him. The crush which began in Royal Academy was still strong in the second year of Imperial College of Communication. But with time he had grown up and his feelings had changed. The core of that was still the same just this time, his manly ego didn't like being the first one to take the step forward. He had done this enough. About time she showed him that she cared.

The world may judge him all it wants, he didn't care.

"Then give her a chance to do so!" Panchi seemed like on a mission to sort out everything between her two friends. Let's just say, the lack of a love life had made her interested in giving others the chance to experience what she hadn't yet.

"Kaise?" He rested his face on his palm and cocked his head on the side.

"Oldest trick in the book - make her feel jealous." Panchi suggested flatly and he blinked. He didn't say anything but his expression showed his increasing interest in the subject.

"Dekho, hum insaan hain. Choti moti galtiyan hamare liye perfectly alright hain. I know you don't like hurting Kiya but technically, jealousy and hurt aren't the same. If you make her realize ke tum poori zindagi uska wait nahin karoge tou shayad cheezen speed up hojaein. After all, kab tak ye stolen Ishq Wala Love type moments pe guzaara karoge?"

KD chuckled at the last part and nodded thoughtfully. She wasn't exactly wrong at what she was saying. Crush or not, spending away his golden period of youth just looking from afar hoping for a miracle was not the 21st Century thing to do. Gotta take matters in his own hands.

"You mean, have an affair?" He asked, just to make things clear and she nodded after some thought.

"I don't mean ke you make someone else fall for you just to get at Kiya. Galtiyan apni jagah but that would be totally wrong! Just ke..do something which will give Kiya the idea that you have someone else in your life. Kaam bhi hojaega aur you won't be termed disloyal as well."

"Ab samajh mein araha hai ke Royal mein sab tumse advice kyun lete the. I'm impressed." He bowed his head a little in appreciation and she giggled.

"Lekin mere saath fake affair karega kon?" He asked hoping that she'd have thought that out as well.

"Wo sochna padega..." She mumbled and looked at the entrance of the canteen where Kiya had just appeared with a few friends of her. Panchi waved at her and she waved back, wanting to get some sort of greeting from KD but he was lost in his own thoughts. Kiya sat at another table with her friends and Panchi picked up her glass mindlessly, forgetting that it was empty. She brought it to her mouth and tilted, realizing too late that it was empty. KD gave out a laugh at this, enough to get Kiya's attention who kept stealing glances at KD.

KD kept laughing while Panchi pouted. He pushed his own barely touched glass towards her and she shrugged sheepishly and picked it up while he just shook his head and bowed down to finish his assignment.

Now, had it been someone else other than KD on that table giving Panchi his glass of drink, Kiya wouldn't have given it a second thought. But THE Keshav Desai who hardly interacted with girls doing such intimate gesture for Panchi, that image didn't quite leave Kiya's mind. She was bewildered at this, an expression which KD's sharp eyes didn't miss. And just like that, the wheels of his mind started running in full speed. He gave Kiya one last look as she continued looking confused and shifted his gaze to Panchi who was sipping from the glass, looking around and humming lazily. A smile formed KD's lips as he took in that scene.

After all, all's fair in love and war, right?
Edited by Mais - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
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OMG PanSh ss😃 cant wait to read it😳...pm me Maisy😳
and OH i LUV the siggie you made its Superb😳
Edited by sweetshine - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: sweetshine

OMG PanSh ss😃 cant wait to read it😳...pm me Maisy😳

and OH i LUV the siggie you made its Superb😳



aww! Thanks Farah! Did quite a bit mehnat at it 😆 and realized that I don't have awful loads of Fahad/KD pics saved on my PC 😛 But I did me proud! 😳
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Posted: 12 years ago
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haha really it came out really Awsum😳, i luv the down right part especially, the merging is Superb

Ok finally read it hehe WOW that was really an Ahmazing start👏
loved the way you began so casually😳
"Dang it!" She cursed and looked at him, pouting while she did so. And he had to fight hard to stop his smirk from appearing on his face. She shrugged and took her seat opposite to him.
and hahaha i luv this part its just sooo Cutee😳
and the casual convo is just Superb between the two😳

OMG Panchi giving advice to KD for his love life damn i'm loving this SS hahaha😳😆
I love the friendship rapport you portrayed btw the two, i've always wanted to see more to their friendship like this type in the show😳😆
really this is an Awsum piece😳👍🏼

"Keshav Desai, I didn't know ke tum ek ghode ho."

What?

KD dropped his pen on the floor at this comment and gave her a shocked look before bending down to pick it up.

"Cuz ghaas ghodon ko daali jaati hai, insaano ko nahin." She shrugged and finished her drink.

"Technically bakriyon ko bhi daali jaati hain but ghoda suits you more. What a fine breed of horse you are!" She smiled brightly at him, showing a little of her perfect teeth.

He didn't know how to reply to that so he just gave her his signature "Angry Young Man" look and she sobered up.
Buhahaha this is soo cuteee, the reaction and all was so apt😳🤣

I love the way you explained all the feelings of KD his thoughts regarding his feelings and all for Kiya😳
OMG Jealousy trick haha i luv that just spices up the story😳

After all, kab tak ye stolen Ishq Wala Love type moments pe guzaara karoge?"

KD chuckled at the last part and nodded thoughtfully.
hahahaha so true🤣

Kiya sat at another table with her friends and Panchi picked up her glass mindlessly, forgetting that it was empty. She brought it to her mouth and tilted, realizing too late that it was empty. KD gave out a laugh at this, enough to get Kiya's attention who kept stealing glances at KD.

KD kept laughing while Panchi pouted. He pushed his own barely touched glass towards her and she shrugged sheepishly and picked it up while he just shook his head and bowed down to finish his assignment.
Damn this is really Superb, hahaha it is soo freaking cute, i totally LUV this part😆

and OMG i luv the thots you wrote on Kiya's mind seeing all this😳😆 hahaha damn Awsum... and KD catching that look of her and shifting his gaze back at Panchi 😳aaahh seems like he got his Partner in crime or affair 😳😆

Really love the whole idea, its really Amazing😳👏
and everything you wrote was just totally fun to read, the convos and the thoughts everything was just Mindblowing👏
even the little situations, like the pout and KD trying to stop his smile then the drink situation at the end all these moments were brilliantly written😃, and even though its very casual types its something fresh and nice to read😳
that's what i like about your writing hehe sorry i havent commented on some of them which i read before hahaha but i really luv your writing😳, its very gripping for as a reader and its always to the point nothing too draggy or anything which is really Superb👍🏼
and coming to PanSh i love the way you have portrayed them😳, and damn i cant wait to read the next chapter hehe thnku so much for the pm😳

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Posted: 12 years ago
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Res
Will comment after I get back from school.

Am I late or what?
Ah well, does it matter?
I believe no.
Okay then, coming to the first chapter...
Mais, I'm not being sarcastic this time, and I swear on my love for my Kaede-kun, I love you.
I honestly do. For this.
Damn, I mean, this was just so...damn!

"Because I'm tired of that. Har baar main hi kyun? My ego and self respect can't take that anymore. Main khud ko uss position mein nahin rakh sakta where she can step over me again!"

This is exactly what I've been ranting about from so damn long! To the extent, that the resentment managed to creep into my OS too (though its my favourite out of my own works, but whatever).
I'm no PanSh fan. If there is anyone I'd ever want to see with KD other than Kiya, that would be Juhi.
Buuut, I don't mind. My wish is being fulfilled, who gives a damn how?
I love the whole idea! Ah, a jealous Kiya after so long!
I always did prefer jealousy in girls and possessiveness in boys.
Because jealous boys tend to become violent, resulting in creating all the more problems in their love-lives...and possessive girls are clingy. Yeah, I'm warped.
And so this, is perfect. Just bloody perfect!
Especially,

"Keshav Desai, I didn't know ke tum ek ghode ho."

What?

KD dropped his pen on the floor at this comment and gave her a shocked look before bending down to pick it up.

"Cuz ghaas ghodon ko daali jaati hai, insaano ko nahin." She shrugged and finished her drink.

I always did prefer humor more than anything else.
And yes, I'd like the PMs very much...and I better get them, thank you.
You aren't planning to make it a KiSha ending...are you?
Well jo bhi ho, if you feel like it...make it as vicious as you want. I, for one, won't mind at all.
You know...I don't get it how you always manage to get such extreme reactions outta me...you either completely spoil my day...or completely make it, the second one, more often than not.
I'm a real cranky bitch...especially in the morning, but after reading this at 5 am, I couldn't help but smile...leading to my mother commenting on it too...I guess it must have been a shock to see me smiling rather than the usual frowns...woh bhi after so long...
Well, hoping to see a PM in my inbox after the second chapter is updated.
Mugdhaa.
PS: Have I been associating too much with you? Zindagi mein itna lamba comment nai likha hai kisi OS pe.
Edited by NonComposMentis - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Res :)

Unres!
I hope I'm not super late in commenting. Coming on to your ss, I really loved it. Pansh..
They have always been such cute friends, and I love seeing this cheerful side of KD. Well, He wasn't entirely cheerful throughout, but I absolutely loved the part where he laughed at her from drinking out of an empty cup. I don't know why but his seriousness in the show always keeps me away from liking him. he actually looks like he is sort of set free in your ss, not caring about kiya and running after her or feelings guilty. Sometimes, he just needs to let go of all his worries and just smile and laugh. And who other than panchi for the job? My angle is perfect for the job:)
I loved her lines in this..ahahah..especially this one in addition to all the ghoda lines..lol;)
"Cuz ghaas ghodon ko daali jaati hai, insaano ko nahin."
Overall, I loved both Kd and panchi's characterization here. Do pm if you update, although I never really read ss or ffs but I will definitely try keeping up with this one since I really liked it..Great Job, Mais! You make me love and adore whoever you write about!:)) And that coming from me in a ss about one of my least favorite characters says alot about how great of a job you did! 😃
Edited by coolpixie - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
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PanSh ss! It's awesome. I liked it a lot. But one thing. who'll be there in the end? PanSh or KiSha? Please cont soon. And please pm me whenever u update.
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Posted: 12 years ago
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omg a panSh ss!!!!!
gosh i soo loved it!!!!
their frndshp is the one i always adore<3
and KD discussing about kiya to panchi is a treat to read😊
love the way u explained KD's feelings regarding kiya😳
and panchi being the ultimate advisor😎
damn kiya feelings
hehe now PanSh going to throw a fake affair 😉
i am so looking forward how kiya will react to this😆
mais it is jst awesome😃
continue soon!!!
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Posted: 12 years ago
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awasome work masis
just loved it pansh ss
panch is good at giving advice
hope this advice not only gives kd a chance with kiya but also panchi chance to rv
as he ca also be jealous by seeing pansh together
s finally kd found what he have to do to get kiya
a fake affair
and kd is right everything is fair in love and war
update sooon
and do pm me
Edited by tenzingchoden - 12 years ago

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