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Posted: 13 years ago
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Originally posted by: CoffeeAddict


Shishir!

Firstly... I can't tell how much my writer's heart has swelled with love seeing the length of your comment. It's not everyday that you get healthy four paragraphs of a comment from one of the most awaited readers and that too so brilliantly written.

Uncertainty is the flavor of life, won't you agree? And thanks for mentioning your favorite part about my works. As I said, it's a writer's Christmas present!

Watching Kiya I wondered where she gets her innocence from. Not the mother, heavens no! And then I thought about the bond between me and my brother. He's the one who has shaped me and my talents. I wondered where would I be if we faltered and the answer was, right where Kiya is.

Both DID not have friends. Anya is going to do something about it. Atleast for her sister's sake. Maybe a bit for herself. But at the end of the day, she has to go back to being the popstar.

Nawab Saheb has just entered, he's gonna be soul of the second part, well apart from "gaad dunga, ukhad dunga" none other than Mr. Pids (I love putting that dialogue before his name. It's really a wonder watching him here as a humorous side-kick and lover from that seriously charming chocolate boy in the Cadbury Ad. Samar's dialogues are like my father's way of talking after me, my brother and dad have spent an evening of reading Urdu sha'yari.

The first part just highlighted KiAn. Now you'll see multitude of emotions. KD-Kiya, Ranveer-Kiya, Paanchi-Kiya-Bobby, Anya-KD, Anya-Ranveer... There's lots in store!

Here I won't chose between Ranveer and KD... they're both the charm of the second part.

And you see... A long comment gets a longer reply!

Thanks...


Priyanka,

Siblings definitely play a major role in shaping one's life. Elder brother or sister are in no way less than parents. You mentioned about your brother, similarly I have my elder sister and elder brother to look after me. Infact, if I have any problem or anything I need, I first talk to them before I talk to my parents.

The first thing which attracted to me TBP was not any couple. It was the colourfullness of different character. I like KD and Kiya better as couple but still there are no favourites for me in the show. Its mainly because each character is quite different from other and each have their own individuality. No character have probably same equations with each other and especially not if the character is Kiya. Her relation with each one looks tempting. I am waiting to see what's in store for us. And btw I am intrigued about Anya-KD now that you have mentioned.

And Nawab Saheb and Piddi are the USP of TBP. Waiting to see their role in seond part. If I am not wrong they will play a major role in keeping the proceeding smooth.

-Shishir

P.S - Uncertainity is definitely the flavour of life.


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Posted: 13 years ago
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A/N:

Hey guys... Million apologies because this won't be updated today.

I've arrived back home today, just a handful of hours back and extremely sleepy (remember kids - NEVER have a sleepover at a friend's place right before you're supposed to reach somewhere early morning and especially when the the first thing you have to do is argue a case!!).

But worry not!

Since I've been in a writing overdrive, I wrote a PanSh OS before I took off for the weekend.

So i'm gonna be posting that in a bit as an apology!

Love you guys.

Sorry,
Pree

Edited by CoffeeAddict - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Originally posted by: 100littledevils

OMG another os !! <3 Loved the way u showed how anaya wants to have a normal life n how she bonds with her sis like old times. awww Kiya kitni khush ho gayi <3 but khushi thodi der ke liye hoti hain hahah

LOL WHOLE GANG TAPAKEDGI SHYD...Can't wait till KD's entry <3
Update soon <3


Thanks Piyu... Sorry to keep you waiting for a tad bit more for the update.

Shayad ye khushi thodi lambi chale... you know! 😉
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Its Okayyy ! But Syill Waiting Waiting !
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Nice OS.. do write more 👏👏
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Posted: 13 years ago
#66
It's ok. We will wait. Will read the Pansh one shot you wrote till then.
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Just loved it , excited abt d other part plzzz post soon...
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Posted: 13 years ago
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awsum...waiting for kd to come😳
update soon plzzz :)
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Posted: 13 years ago
#69
Even before a hello and a greeting I need to begin with an apology.

I'm sorry for dragging this from Monday to Friday (technically Saturday). Life seems to be unfair right now, there's too much going on. Though I'm sure I haven't been unfair with this update, it's written wholeheartedly.

Another apology is required, for this is not going to be the last part as previously decided. While I had the map scaled in my mind, I did not realized the length of it. And this requires an apology because the most awaited parts of KD-Kiya, Anya-KD, Ranveer-Kiya and Anya-RV are not included here. Sorry for the disappointment, but this whole update was needed to create a premise.

I hope even without the above mentioned parts, this doesn't disappoint you too much.

Sorry.

And now the greeting... Hello folks. I'm here... 😆

Read on...

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Continued...

"Piddi main tereko paise deta hu... Tu mujhe jaane de!" KD rolled his eyes as he tried to pry his arm out of Piddi's grasp, who was bundle of nerves.

"KD bhai, dost ki help nahi karoge!" Piddi said as he bit on his nails standing outside the sports equipment shop in the mall.

"Piddi teri date hai Bobby ke saath. Mujhe kabaab mein haddi kyu bana raha hai!" KD almost screamed.

"Bhai vo... vo..." Piddi said looking everywhere but at his friend.

"Ab kya gadbad ki tune?" KD rolled his eyes.

"Vo Bobby bas mujhe football equipment ki shopping mein help karne aa rahi hai. Maine use bola main Football Coaching join kar raha hu." Piddi looked away and KD so desperately wanted to bang his head in the glass that he stood resting his back at. It had taken him a lot of control to handle the unnecessarily hyperactive Junior Punj next to him. He reminded himself once again why he was doing it. Piddi was one guy who had treated him more like a friend than as a dealer, which far less people wished to do. Before he could answer they saw her riding up the escalator surprisingly with a white iPad in hand instead of the white football, guess there are certain places you can't just act or be a jock.

"List le ke aaya?" Bobby asked without looking up from the screen and the two wondered how she even knew where they were while she hadn't even laid eyes on them yet. From the corner of her eyes she saw KD's raised brows and chuckled looking up at them. She passed her iPad to KD to give him the answer while Piddi looked between the two like the third wheel, which originally had to be his friend's position. "Kya? I'm not just interested in sports, gadgets mein bhi kabhi kabhi interest le leti hu." Bobby commented folding her arms seriously, making Piddi gulp. While the two very non-metaphorically Ying-Yang and not-completely-in-love-birds were in a biased match of stare, KD was busy staring at something even more bizarre. He looked up at Bobby who crossed her brows as she snatched her "flat screen" from his hands and her expression suddenly mirrored the one on the usually pokerfaced guy. Piddi suddenly realized how bad it was an idea to not let KD go.

While the two people talked as dumb, using only the action of their brows and frown lines. The sudden silence on the corner booth of the caf had begun to get unnerving.

"So who is this guy..." Anya finally managed to ask. She fiddled with the mug holding her decaffeinated un-sugared coffee as Kiya looked onto Juhi who passed the look onto Samar and the buck finally landed on Panchi's lap.

"He's our batchmate... and my best friend." The pride in her voice defied the sudden urge to hide under the table that Anya had detected on their faces soon after the call. Somehow it amused her how those half dozen words strung into a sentence told her a novella sized story. She nodded, having weighed in her mind over a handful of questions she wanted to ask, she decided on the mute gesture. She wanted to talk to this girl in front of her, talk to her freely without her bothering. Looking down at her red summer dress she weighed her desire over the loss of that piece of clothing and decided in the former's favor. Whilst the other four were lost in their own Wonder-and-Under-Lands, she stealthily pulled the cup to the edge towards her which tipped over, coloring the red a very murky brown.

"Damn... Panchi could you come and help me with it?" She ordered instead of asking as she snuck out of the booth not waiting for her to answer, who after a confused daze of a moment followed her diligently. The two girls left back stared at each other for a little time and somehow unanimously decided to follow. Samar having been left alone went through a volley of expressions, first at the amazement on the herding abilities of women a very pronounced eye roll, then at their desertion a sorrowful sigh, then at the dramatic entry of his very hyper looking friend a micro-second of happiness before he surprisingly lunged for the Nawaab's collar.

"Aapko bhi aadab. (Hello to you too.)" Samar rolled his eyes. Ranveer looked closer at him, his one eye seemingly bulging more than the other in a funny way making Samar chuckle.

"Dude I know tu kya kar raha hai..." Ranveer said trying to glare harder.

"Hum hans rahe hai. Aur jahan tak humare zehen mein aata hai, us par toh kanoonan bhi koi pabandi nahi hai. (I'm just laughing. And as far as I can remember, it's not even restricted under law.)" Samar said forcefully grabbing his collar out of Ranveer hand and straightening his clothes as he sat down.

"Tu meri best friend ke saath aisa nahi kar sakta." Ranveer said pointing a finger at him.

"Aap kehte hain toh nahi karte. Lekin behtar hoga aap ye bhi farmayein ki hum aakhir kar kya rahe hai. (If you say, I won't do it. But it'll be better if you'd tell me what I'm doing that you're referring to.)"

"I know ki you're getting bugged of Juhi, and sooner rather than later, tu use ditch karne wala hai." Samar hurriedly glanced ahead at the door of the ladies room hoping his girlfriend was not within earshot.

"Hum Juhi ke saath rahenge ya nahi, uska Panchi mohtarma se kya lena dena? (Whether I stay with Juhi or not, what's Panchi got to do with it?)"

"Don't make advances towards her, I'm warning you." Samar now knew what the feeling of "boiling blood" really was as he stared at the Shergill brat.

"Mr. Ranveer Shergill, I might be one of the most consciously lacking person you think you know, though nothing more than you. I'm a royal blood and I have values imbedded in me more than they can be in your little head. And I do not, mark my words, do not cross my lines in friendship. What you just uttered was the most distrustful and disrespectful thing you could ever say to someone like me..." Samar towered over him, his eyes suddenly blazing with the betrayal.

"Whoa, chill dude..." Ranveer kept a hand on his shoulder.

"Ranveer, aap beshak Panchi ke best friend hain, lekin ek cheez yaad rakhein, hum bhi beghairat nahi hai. Humare liye bhi Panchi mohtarma ek dost hai, aur hum dosti ki kadr karte hai. (RV, you might be Panchi's bestfriend, but remember one thing, I'm not pride-less. Even for me, Panchi is a friend and I value/respect my friendship.)" Samar said cooling down. "Aapke saath humari dosti ki bhi, aur unke saath humari dosti ki bhi. (My friendship with you, and also with Panchi.)"

"Ranveer yahan kyu aaye ho?" Panchi said as she stood there with her arms crossed, Kiya and Anya managing her flanks while Juhi still pondered over WHAT had just happened in the washroom.

"So this Mr. Ranveer is your best friend, if I'm not wrong?" Anya didn't take even a second to begin when they entered the ladies room, if she was quick to calculate it won't be long before Kiya and Juhi came along. While she approached the basins and ran a towel under the water, she saw Panchi reluctantly nod in the mirror. To Panchi this was the most confusing and uncomfortable situation ever. A popstar had ordered her to the bathroom and was now interrogating her about her best friend. Why she didn't escape out, was a mystery. "Then why so tensed?" Anya looked pointedly at Panchi's hands that she was constantly clenching and unclenching.

"He... He seemed angry when he said he's coming..."

"And...?"

"And Kiya and Non... Ranveer are not really good pals." Panchi rolled her eyes.

"So..." Anya said as she faced her, folding her arms, the wet towel and the almost dried coffee on her dress were forgotten.

"He'll be upset that I'm hanging out with her."

"Do you regret that you're here?"

"Ummm..." Panchi didn't know what to say, but looking at Anya Gujral who seemed like just Anya to her, she realized there was nothing to regret. "No."

"Then darling, why so tensed? That guy cannot just rule your life unless you let him."

"I don't..." Panchi quickly retorted while Anya replied with a raised brow, right at the moment when the door opened and the other two entered.

"An..." Kiya cautiously began looking between the two of them. She extended her hand that held one of the many paper bags which held their day's spoils. Anya peeked in and saw one of the dresses that she had bought and smiled.

"Thanks K." The older humbler sister said and quickly snuck into one of the cubicles to change.

"Aww... So sweet." Juhi mused as Kiya rolled her eyes albeit with a smile on her lips and went to the mirror to check herself.

"Panchi you might like this guy. But that doesn't make it sensible for you to give him the right to rule your life. Not even as a best friend." Anya, The Hermit, said from beyond the wood wall while Panchi stood wide eyes looking at both Kiya and Juhi who seemed unperturbed.

"Don't look so alarmed." Kiya chuckled as she saw Panchi's expression reflected in the wall-mirror. "It ain't really a cozy little secret. You know Royal keeps secrets but nothing a secret from the Royals." Kiya pressed her lips together to even out the gloss while Panchi pulled up an eyebrow. "Well apart from some exceptions like your pea-head best friend."

"And KD." Panchi said with a sweet ringing laughter. Kiya whipped back with bulging eyes and red cheeks. She quickly disguised them with another look as Anya walked out, now wearing a dress in aubergine.

"You know An is not wrong. Ranveer cannot really rule your life till you let him." Kiya said packing the contents of her clutch. Panchi nodded and came ahead to give Anya a brief hug.

"Thanks Anya."

"I was just speaking your mind sweetie." Anya hugged back. While Juhi was still wondering about the touchy-ness between the girls in the bathroom they walked out in time to hear Samar's Urdu versioned monologue. That was enough to indicate to Panchi that the glaring daggers between them had, not just something, but a lot, to do with her. And it was also enough to blow her calm.


...to be continued.


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The next post will be soon.


I have another KiSha OS to post, from which I have a lot of expectations and is a lot closer to me than any, though it's experimental and a lot of you will not like it I'm sure. However before that is posted, I'll end this. So expect the end soon, since that one's already written and re-read.


Luv,

Pree.


P.S. PMs are only going to those who have commented on this so far.


P.P.S. The italicized portions in a different color in the brackets is the translation of Samar's Urdu dialogues because some of the readers were finding them tough to understand.

Edited by CoffeeAddict - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Well, finally you updated! :D i am a bit out of my senses right now so the comment will be a little bleh!

It was a nice chapter. Maybe its my more than usual slow brain but I could not get the Bobby-KD part at all :p or maybe I am on from phone hence my brain is not registering things as they ought to be. Khair, interesting little character this Anya is. Dont kill me but I dunno why she isnt holding my interest now. She seems so...been there, seen that! kind of a sister to me. But its just me! Loved the Ranveer and Samar part, specially the whole English monologue! I swear, you made Samar speak more English in a chapter than he ever will in the show :p Ranveer really is possesive about Panchi, let's see how things will shape up from here. Also, how will the other trio end up with the gang.

Little correction - it should be "beshak" instead of "besharte". Besharte means "on condition", beshak means "doubtless". With besharte, Samar's dialogue translates to "On condition that you are Panchi's friend" and that is not making a lot of sense :p

oh eff! I will just go crawl in the corner.

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