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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: Cogito_Ergo_Sum




Saku 🤗🤗

Bookmarking for my Un res to come later today. 😳 Long delayed, but nonetheless eager, since you know how much I was intrigued by Chap 18.

In the meantime, I put here the lines which I have already used before to describe your bold endeavor with the Lands of the Vajra, the slightly modified lines from the Etihad Airways ad. 😊


""Occasionally people come along who are not content with merely moving things along. They want to take things further. Tear up the plans and start again. They insist that the dream is possible, and take a running jump into the uncharted. They aim not for reinvention of the superficial kind, because they want more. Their goal is not to merely improve upon what has been done before...but totally reimagine it".

Just as Etihad reimagined the flying experience, you have reimagined SwaSan in your creative world. 🤗🤗

Will be back soon for a full Unres. 🤗


Loads of Love

---Viji




Aww these words...I could read them thousand times and yet not get bored. Thank you so much for this sis really it means the world to me when someone of your caliber thinks so highly of Vajra. Waiting for your detailed take...

Lots of love ,
Saku
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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: Sakura24

Aww these words...I could read them thousand times and yet not get bored. Thank you so much for this sis really it means the world to me when someone of your caliber thinks so highly of Vajra. Waiting for your detailed take...

Lots of love ,
Saku


I am on your thread for my detailed take today for sure. Please bear with for the delays...what with work being a jam, typing up chapters of my SS and some pending replies on my threads...has been hectic.

But today is the day I come back here for sure. 😊

Lots of Love

Viji

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Posted: 8 years ago
Saku my Dear 🤗🤗


First off, kudos for the sheer imaginative power, in fleshing out so many details of the world you have conceived for this Tale. The intricate way in which you have conceptualized the social strata of the Naga Elves for instance---karmakas, nandakas, jeevakas, gyanakas and mokshakas. Even the names chosen with such care, such symblosim attached. 👏 👏 You know how much I love symbolisms, allegories, parallels and metaphors----and this is something I adore in your writing. 😊

So Yuvraj Sanskaar inherits his eyes---which change from hazel brown to a clear mountain-lake green, from his mother Aruna? Or should we call them viridian green? 😉 She seems to be a lady of very cogent and powerfully deep thought, I loved the way you made her reflect that perhaps, it might have been better to be totally wingless than to have been born with one's wings clipped. The there is the constant, chafing reminder that one has the potential to reach for more, to soar to heights uncharted and unexplored----but held back by chains which inextricably keep her bound. 😕 Not a pleasant feeling, and especially not when the intellect is powerful and profound, as I think would be in her case.

So this is the background of the Lady Aruna----initially supposed to marry the Elder Prince of the Vajras, Ram's older brother. (You haven't disclosed his name yet, but I presume its Durga ? 😉) But the Prince revealed himself to be a rather cold, vile man; drunk on power and the exercise of it by crushing those less powerful than themselves. Courageous of Aruna to break off the intended match, preferring to enter the ranks of Priestesses instead, rather than tie herself to such a man.

I loved the way you described the friendship between Arya, Mohan and Ram. Wonder how Rishi Agarwal enters the picture later to capture Arya's affections? But in the meantime, we get to see Pratula's intense wariness and jealousy about his sister; and Ram's own conscientious dismay and dislike of his elder brother's ill considered and cruel actions.

The first meeting between Ram and Aruna was very nice indeed. 😉 Eyes of blue meeting lake green huh? 😳 Yuvraaj Sanskaar has some really wonderful genes in his DNA. Who was that girl who was accused of the crime, her family labeled as traitors? For a moment I thought it was Parineeta---but then I realized that her generation came much later, isn't it? That was when her elder sister made the attack on Sanskaar, years later. So who is this little girl, covered with tattoos? Have I missed something, or is it that this revelation is yet to come? Is this girl (I presume from the Bhavas), somehow linked to Suvanna in the future?

So Ram's elder brother unleashed a battle against the Bhavas, leading to the new character you introduced here--Megha, and his cohorts, being quite hostile towards the Vajras. But still, Megha is a kindly man beneath those layers of pretended rough disdain, and I guess the way Swara appealed to him for help; trusting and guileless, reached out to his essential kindliness. Wonder who Kalindi is? And is Megha the same 'nomad of the Bhavas' whom Suvanna remembers looking at her with curiosity and perhaps a lot of wariness, in her tortuous 'initiation rites' by the Noir witches? So many possibilities, so many connections. 😊

I liked the way Megha immediately registered the connection between the Prince and the Eye. 😉 "You are HIS woman" he says, with such calm certainty. 😆 Wish Swara would realize that soon, and Sanskaar too----though I guess they already realize that subconsciously. 😳 I am loving this bond between the Eye and the Oneiro. The one who can see all, sense all; with the one who can weave a spell of illusion, absorb the other's thoughts and emotions and pour his own into hers, in turn. Golden threads of magic, illusion and charms. 😉

So Lakshya has broken out of the spell which Suvanna had cast on him? That look of cold greeting and icy disdain between Suvanna (in Ragini's body) and the reawakened Lucky, was so chilling. But I wonder if he is completely out of her spells as yet? He seems to be fighting against her, surely. But he seems rather colder and more machiavellian, more intent on betrayal, than the erstwhile skipping lamb, carefree and somewhat juvenile Lucky had been. Is this metamorphosis Suvanna's doing? Or has the venomous advice and influence of Annapurna and Aryaman finally borne fruit? This version of Lucky would have no qualms in betraying his Bhai, I fear...

Waiting eagerly for Chap 19. 😊 This weekend, perhaps?

Loads of Love,

----Viji


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Posted: 8 years ago
I'm working on Chapter 19 Viji dearest. It still has a certain interaction that needs to be worked on. You're spot on in several guesses, including the girl who has not yet entered to the present time story.
I'm still wondering whether I should name the Crown prince brother of Ram, Durga or not...cause in my opinion Durga is hardly suitable for an elven prince no?
Anyway, Lakshya was truly never a skipping lamb of true sense, he was pretending to be wooly when he was really made out of rather tough stuff. you'll know more about him in 19.
I'll do a detailed take later, there is much I'd love to discuss with you. Meanwhile let me just fly over the moon for a bit in the happy haze you put me after readING this lovely comment.
Tons of love,
Saku
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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: Sakura24

Aww Nynu you sweetie pie🤗
Thanks a bunch for taking my tantrums seriously. I was feeling moody the day I posted that note. but not anymore since you darlings made me feel very special indeed ❤️
Will wait to hear from you. Thanks for adoring Vajra.
Love ,
Saku



Dear Sakura,

I am finally here for Chapte 17B Blue and Black - can you imagine how irrestible the title itself is, to a self confessed chromatic obsessed person like me? The title itself conjures images of darkness and light, hope and despair and of love and loss.

Blue - eyed Suvanna- she is the one who always manages the evoke the maximum of my admiration and makes me breathless as each layer of her complex self is revealed. (similar to the potential Ragini in the serial). The same Suvanna who more or less absorbs Ragini (or the other way round) never hesitated to save a innocent child, but she does not hesitate to prove how "loyal" the Vajra warrior would be to her, that he would price her wish over the bonds of blood, yet is desperate to prove her own blood bond. In the end, she is a daughter, thwarted by the only person whose love she ever wanted (a malignant twist on the ardent desire to be loved as a daughter, and it is she, right, in the prologue who realises that "he" was never hers to love? And is the prologue the challenges in the emulations?)

Black - Sanskaar bleeding to a possible death - in the dead dark lands of his nightmanres (I have to read it all over again as to why Asanikeshtra is now a dying land), Swara realising that her concern could be only account of spell that Sanskaar wove around her and her anger blinding her to logic even as her heart started questioning as to whom she should actually trust.

Blue - the light of the azure skies as Swara looks in the depths of Sanskaar's eyes and remembers all her dreams, though she much be now wondering if those were dreams or actually a pale vision of a possible future?

Black - the depth of deception and deceit of the veiled woman (Annapurna is the best bet, but in your hands it could be anyone else)

I really cannot find words to write more, am off to re read Chapter 18 and will be back.

love,
Nyna
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Posted: 8 years ago
Dear Sakura,

Chapter 18 - "She who wears the crown", I am quite tempted to bestow the title to you for the wonderous tale you have managed to weave.

The chapter was quite descritptive and as is typical with your updates give rise to three questions for every answer given. Admirable was the entire caste system of the nagas, it was almost poetic and wistful was the revelation - that though there was no king it did not mean that the system appreciated equity and equal oppurtunities - a very profound truth that reflects the state of very sentient being, human or elven. And here every outcast, by choice or chance had to join the nunnery of Kaaldwaras (I missed the name of this sect??).

And we have the encounter / confrontation between Aruna and the runaway child (is she by any chance - Sujata - I did recall you saying that you had a very nice role she would play and as I read, this child who would be saved by Aruna would definitely have a role to play?? or is it one of my wild, way of the mark, miss is good as a mile guess?) This meeting would certainly change the shape of things to come, right - Aruna ends up marrying Ram, Arya leaves for the human whom she loves, Mohan stays
behind for both his friends, Annapurna marries Ram as the "second spare" queen rather than the crown prince she was intended for (there was a scene to this effect in your earlier chapters, right - I really need to read all over again, I am simply rambing otherwise)

Then another new entry - Megha (named after the clouds for their ability to travel unrestricted, visit lands even forbidden and able to bring storms?) Such a lovely interplay of his conclusions and the stormy cloudy climes - I loved the magic it foreshadows - he feels that the first woman he found was just the preclude to the storms which threaten to blow their lives apart and that Swara is the eye and the eye of the storm. And I am not even trying to guess about the dark eyed, pale faced and deep set eyes - maybe I will, in the end Suvanna recalls the Bhava stare with curiosity at her, so that is her discarded body?

And he stumbles on our trio - he correctly gets that Swara is "his woman" though both Swara and Sanskaar will take time to accept and understand that they belong to each other. And even as the storms threaten to blow they would have to relearn everything that was taught to them, right? As Swara proved, sometimes innocence is enough, even if there is no trust, it makes the other person stop long enough to reconsider to the primary decision to kill.

Finally, Suvanna and Laksh - he is not as malleable as he made out to be, is it that he was not so much under her control when she asked him to slash his wrist and it was simply a small price to pay, in the large scheme of things? Could be, right. For Laksh appears to be in full control of his mind and senses and seems to be willing to take her help to get his way. But there is not much trust between them, for Suvanna appears to have anticipated this action.

The last line - a new betrayal etched itself in the fabric of time - this would culminate in the brothers fighting against each other?

I am now exhausted, cannot write anymore though I am not sure of what I have written either.

love,
Nyna
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Posted: 8 years ago
Nyna my dear you have summed up everything as well as one could have. They are totally correct. I will do a more deserving, detailed revert once I'm done with the chapter 19 I'm struggling with. This was like rain in desert, soothing, lovely and much much welcome. Thank you a trillion times!
Love ,
Sakura
Edited by Sakura24 - 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago
Dear Sakura,
I loved chapter 19 more so because I finally got the girl being Sujata right, you did admit it in your reply but I am quite elated now, doing my favorite dance:



I will be back, hopefully soon. I am now going to bask in the delirious joy of my astute deductions of my defective err... detective brains.

Goodnight, sweet dreams and sleep tight.

love,
Nyna
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Posted: 8 years ago
Hi Sakura,
I was so happy to see Vajra update. I've been waiting for it so long.
. Pls try to update more often. Want to see how sujata/Kalindi and Swasan encounter turns up.
I think Laksh's motive is Swara,more than crown. Suvanna will brainwash him.
engaging update.

Love,
Dyuti
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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: Nynaeve

Dear Sakura,

I loved chapter 19 more so because I finally got the girl being Sujata right, you did admit it in your reply but I am quite elated now, doing my favorite dance:



I will be back, hopefully soon. I am now going to bask in the delirious joy of my astute deductions of my defective err... detective brains.

Goodnight, sweet dreams and sleep tight.

love,
Nyna


Aww my detective friends.. How smart you are.. I read and I literally was like 😲 .. My whole expression in summary.. Still being not able to get over it..

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