So shamefaced and embarrassed but I am here!! I have read until end of part 6 and despite knowing its really naughty to have been so late, you will relate to this as I was able to read so many parts all at a go and it really helped me with the flow. I am commenting on what I have read so far, will be back for more as soon as time allows- sorry!! Please Sorry are not allowed.. And i know how busy you are and so i am super glad you decided to read this one 😳... See how late i am in getting back to my reply..And i still got unres on EI too.. We all are running behind schedule ..But thats life i suppose 😆...
We had had a PM exchange of over this of course when you originally penned the concept and early chapter so sorry if I repeat somethings. As I had said at the time, you chose such an interesting stage for your story. This feels so very different to your previous work and especially of course the whole thing is such a change from Soulmates but I always love reading different things from the same author 😊. Here you have opted for lashings of intrigue and an interesting premise of two people broken in their own ways but thrown together- on the face of it similar to the show but thankfully poles apart in the plotting and execution 😆. Oh and before I discuss, love little Asha 😳, such a fitting name! I am commenting below in rough order of thoughts but as I went through each chapter so hope it makes sense. I remember the PM exchange..11 chapter later it feel like we discussed about it so long ago..At that time i really had no idea how it will procced further or if i will have time to work on it too.. You ideas all helped immensely...Though i posted it well before i actually had some sort of rough draft in hand and now the prospect of working on chapter 12 from scratch seems like a big task ... Hmm I still dont know how soulmate happened either😆.. One impulsive decision and soulmate journey started and one impulsive discussion we got BTM😉... And yeah in soulmate SwaSan had a normal life, though they had problems like Sanskar parents died and Swara was always forced to support Ragini..There were not broken like BTM..So yeah this time it more about two people living in guilt finding happiness once again😳...Hopefully i dont go like our CVs..They start well and we always know how they will end it 😡...I loved the name Asha too though i found it for Soulmates as SwaSan daughter, i am gonna keep using that name for all my works i think..😉
It's funny how we have both (as well as some others) chosen ML as the track to rework 😆- the CVs disaster made such an impact we all had to rewrite it no to make it bearable?! The injuries to poor Swara -I immediately had a guess who that was 😡- but of course I loved that Sanskaar rescued her. That's why in EI I did that too- hated the Sahil angle so much in the show I wanted that creep nowhere near a vulnerable Swara 😆. Well i had sahil to rescue for two of my OS and TS😡..Well was sticking with the show concept ...But this is my FF and no one will rescue Swara except Sanskar or herself if i got an say😆... We all discussed it Shru..ML track left us with a huge void of why ? Why did they ruin it just why..So no wonder everyone is writing about ML..We even had a debate on who wrote more on ML and Viji leads by a huge margin..😃... See that how much this ML affected all of us..I used to hate ML troop but i am writing with it..Credit to Cvs for it i suppose 😆...And yeah we are all trying to make it bearable indeed.. Next up it will be this track..Where we will try to make this track bearable ..I did wrote one OS already😆
And we get a strong Swara here too despite the ML 😃. I loved the first sign of it shown when how "Pari" so openly addressed "Arjun" trying to avoid her after their kiss (btw the suddenness of how that came had me going- whoa!!!) and telling him how she felt about it 😳. Then there was that unexpectedness of Arjun's momentary mistrust of Pari- really liked how you used that to subtly change the dynamics of their relation as well as of course to show she did know the Maheshwari family although her amnesiac brain only recalled their names then and not the connection. Lucky for "Arjun" that he was not the fully grown version in that pic in that moment 😉. Really interesting reworking of the show's big reveal of Swara cheated by Ragini and hence marrying the "right" brother btw Nitu 😉.Strong Swara ..I love ..Super woman detective Swara, i dont 😆. Well i had to shock you some way 😆..What better than kiss😉... Yeah you know how much i love Sanskar, so to make him mistrust on his swara it was hard but i felt it was needed to show his insecurity and fear😳... I am gonna let you keep your assumption about how the marriage happened 😉..As i dont want to spoil it for you..
Ragini here - you made her sound like the conniving murderess with all the clues in the early chapters - oh that sounds familiar but she was so cold here but it already made me wonder if those were red herrings 😆. They were all on real roller coaster huh; or should I say still are of course as the tale is not yet told. I really did like the way you etched the conflict between DP and Sanskaar- and ofc you again gave the family relationship distinct differences than in the show- I have always liked the idea of Sanskaar as AP/DP's real son in some way and here it fit well with the undercurrent between father and son. Especially nice touch was Swara's acute observation which was so sweet in its own way that she was jealous of herself or Swara whilst she was Pari really as Swara and Sanskaar shared a remarkable bond she felt distanced from, but was not of course- it was only the reaction of all that he had been through. The poignancy of that childhood friendship with Sanskaar's reasoning behind those gifts- 😭- so touching. Oh and I never saw that second white kerchief attack coming 😲. See making Ragini look like a conniving murderess is very Easy..The show did a splendid job of that..So it easy.. But you are still in chapter 6..So wont say much tha that😆.. I would choose RP if the father son dynamic is gonna be friendly and will choose DP if it will have some sort of tension 😉.. But in Soulmate..Sanskar father was apparently Varun Maheshwari😆... Yeah i want to explore more about swara tiny jealousy but mystery over clouded it i would say.. Those gifts were amazing right.. I am happy that i keep surprising you 😃.
Then we had plenty of confusing twists and you know how much I like a good old mystery with the "Who Dunnit" game in the reader's mind right? 😆. Sanskaar- Ragini gave me good feels of a sort of takkar but mixed with a good breakthrough in communication. Again I was feeling that the real female culprit somehow wouldn't be her. Well i say keep guessing.. 😉... Who did it.. The answer i have to reveal soon.. And i am working on the how now ..
And you again flummoxed me when Swara so boldly asked for Sanskaar's heart as her gift! Whoa- one bold and determined Swara we have 👏👏. Swara would fight for her love..And as i said she wont shy away from speaking her heart out... 😃
When Sanskaar's past began to unravel, it was so painful- how his whole life was destroyed. After making himself successful and fighting against his annoying dad and finding the wife who was so compatible in a nice and easy way (of course no grand romance there like SwaSan), his life collapses 😭. At this point I hadn't read what really happened to her that fateful day. And Sakshi- 😆😆- so she lived her dream of being Mrs S M through your fic 👏👏😆. Sanskar past was indeed painful.. He was living in guilt for years ..Just when he felt the fights were over..Destiny struck and he lost it all again😭... Well i was finding name for Mrs Sanskar Maheshwari and Sakshi volunteered 😆...
Then the plot thickens about the past when Lucky makes his joking and after that more serious reveals. Like Lucky btw- he seems lighthearted but not as dense as in the show! The joke he made to put Swara at ease certainly worked although it gave his Bhai a mini heart attack 😆. And whoa again- Swara had rejected Sanskaar?! 😕 I had forgotten for a brief while (as I was so busy with the moving plot) that you had started with Swara having inadvertently rejecting Sanskaar in the beginning 😛 - I remember it after a quick read of the whole chapter! And when you explained in 6, it had all clicked in. Mind you by the end of that chapter I thought I would have a heart attack when Swara announced she thought she had killed Sakshi 😆. Before then I myself wanted to kill Sujata so it was overall a rather "murderous" chapter 😉- sorry about the puns! The characters in our fic are better than the show Shru 😆..Lucky loves his bhai , he is lighthearted but not as dense in the show.. Mini heart attack poor Sanskar😆😆.. Yeah that happened to most of the readers.. They were asking me why Swara rejected Sanskar and i had to say i did told you in prologue 😳 .. So i explained it in chapter 6 once again.. Murderous chapter to the win then 😃... Well i had fun ending the chapter with swara thinking she killed Sakshi
I read 6 very quickly hoping for the Sakshi mystery to be sold but was soon caught in the tenderness of the whole book dedications and the deep bond between SwaSan- not that there is anything similar in the events or even basic premise but it was giving me such Kuch Kuch Hota Hai feels, if you know what I mean? And that's a compliment needless to say- I associate that movie with a very young me and it was so impactful at the time 😳.Yeah i know..Everyone wanted answers after chapter 5 but i felt chapter 6 need to happen so we get clear picture of Swara 😳.. So i am happy you liked it though you are still caught in mystery 😆... And i take it as an huge compliment..You liked it is enough for me to be on cloud nine Shru.. 😃😃
I had to reluctantly stop here 😕- have a manic day and mega early start and still have a long list of pendings so will be back but hope I have expressed views long due! I think you've really ventured into a new territory here Nita and the whole mixing in the suspense with the rest is working so well 😊. Great work and cannot wait to catch up fully!Take your time Shru..I know you are busy.. And as i always say this FF will be here till you find time..So dont worry about it ... See how late i am in replying back to your lovely comment ...Thanks once again shru..You do know how i get super happy reading a comment like yours..Though i dont feel like i deserve such compliments ..But coming from an amazing writer/Friend like you ..I feel so happy 😳..Thanks dear for taking your time to let me know inspite of your busy life..
Love,
Shru xoxo
Love
Nita
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