SWASAN OS-Dil Ka Rishta Bara Pyara Ha

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Posted: 9 years ago
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hello all!!u guys knw me...actually kal raat baithe baithe main bore horahi thi & wrote a os on swasan.bt net was doing nakhra so cnt upld.so read at ur own risk.agar ye parke tumlog vi bore ho gaye to mujhe mat kehna...šŸ˜†.so here u go-----------
AT Badi-

swara-kya baat hai kissan,aj itna chup chap,mujhse baat vi nehi kar rahe?'

kissan-hum apse naraj ha.humka bohut gussa ayi ha.apne humka jhut bola.humka hurt pheel hua'.

swara-kyu maine kya kia?'.kissan-kya kia...ya dekhiye ka kia...humka ya photo mili ap dulhan ke jode me inke sath(pointing swasan marriage pic)..apne humka bataya kahe nehi ki aap shadishuda ho,waise aap donoeksath bohot ache dikh rahe ho.lekin aap yaha ka kar rahat ho..ya to apke papa ka ghar ha,ap apne pati k ghar kahe nehi ha'..

swara-mujhe khud apni shadi yaad nehi to tumhe kya batu...kissan-ka matbal?apko apni shadi yaad nehi'...

swara-actually mera accident hua aur pata chala i lost my memory.kisine bataya vi nehi i m marrid wo to i saw ths pic thn i knw abt my marriage'.

kissan"to aap unke sath q nehi rehte?'.swara-q ki ussne mujhe marne ki koshish ki..& told him everythng'..

kissan-to ee baat ha.he bajrangbali mujhe avi nehi marna,avi to IGT me jana hai.'

swara-ye kya keh reh ho tum'

kissan-ha agar apke pati ne humka marna chaha to,ka hai ki hum harwaqat apke sath rehat ha na islia..

swara-wht rubbish!wo aisa kuch nehi karega'..

kissan-aap ye ka keh rahat ha,humka kuch samajh nehi awat ha.pehle kehwat ho usne apko marne ki koshish ki,fir kehwat ho eo aisa nehi ha,aap humka conphuse kar rahe ho'.

swara-main to khud confuse hu.mujhe khud samajh nehi araha,khud kuch yaad nehi ha.main thak gayi hu.mera dil kuch aur keh raha hai dimag kuch aur.jab maine use pehli bar dekha mujhe yaad aya ki usne mujhe goli mara,par sab matlab sab log ye kehte wo mujhse pyar karta ha.& sach batau maine humari pics vi dekha ha,laksh k pas ek video vi dekha sanskar proposed me,pata nehi kyu mere dil ko ek sukun mila.ussdin sanskar siri me gir gaya tha pata nehi q mujhe uske lia fikar hone laga tha,par fir mujhe yaad aya he shot me & i insulted him.usne meri wajah se apna ghar chor dia,i felt guilty,trust me mera koi irada nehi tha aisa.uske akho me wo pyar wo dard dikhta ha,mujhe mehsus hota ha par main kya karu maine uski akho me wo nafrat vi dekha ha whn he shot me,sab keh rahe hai usne mujhe bachane k lia goli chalai,he never ever think to hurt me ,uske akho me vi wo sachai dikhai deta ha...i m cnfused.mera dil kehta ha uspe varosa karu par dimag kehta ha nehi..aur mujhe kuch yaad vi nehi ata ha,m cnfused'..

kissan-huh!bajragbali ki kasam ya bahut hi jatil ha.par main ya jarur kahunga kisipe nehi humesha apne dil ki baat sunna chahiya kyuki apka dimag jo kehta ha usme conphusion ho sakat ha par dil jo kehta ha uspe nahi'..

swara-hmm!acha choro mujhe ragini se milne jana ha.main jarahi hu.bye'.

sanskar monologue-mujhe pata tha humara pyar aj vi zinda ha.tumara dimag mujhe vul sakta hai,tumara dil nehi.tumare dil me ajvi tumara sanskar ha bas tum dekhna nehi chahte ho'.

sameday at evening-

DP receive a call & bcm tensed.DP-hume hospital chalna hoga,laksh ka phn aya tha,sanskar ka accident ho gaya ha'...

swara-WHAAT!!she rooted at thr.she getting some flashbk of a girl running here & thr asking for sanskar,thn a man sitting on some logs,the girl run towds him & hug him.she clutched her head in pain & nw clearly see the girl is herslf in a red sari & the man is none othe than sanskar,b4 she lost conscious she clearly heard both saying ILU..

all family member shocked & rush 2hospital with swara..

AT hospital-

sanskar-r u sure lucky??'.laksh-haa bhai.tere accidnt k baat whn i reached tht place i saw a mobile thr.it was nt urs.bt whn i saw the caller name sahil i picked up & next moment i was shocked whn he askd wheathr u r dead or nt?everythng went well??ye sab usika kia kara hai.nw i m sure swara & tere misundrstanding me vi usika hath ha..be careful'..

tht time all ntr sanskar's room.sujata broke down & hug him.sanskar-main thik hu mom,dnt worry'...

sujata-tu chup kar,kya thik ha dikh raha ha mahre ko.yesab kya ho raha ha jiji ektaraf ye yaha pe aur dusri taraf swara'..

sanskar-kya hua swara ko??'.sujata-pata nehi kya hua,tere accidnt ka khabar sunke usne apna sar pakar lia aur behosh ho gaya'..

sanskar-kaha ha wo,mujhe usse milna ha',,,he bcm hysteric,going to stand up 4m bed whn DR ntr & said-ghabraia mat mr.maheshwari,she z fine.bas apke accidnt ka khabar sunke smthng trigger her mind..thts it.main ye to nehi kahunga she get bk memory par sayed unhe kuch pal yaad aya ho aur nehi vi hosakta ha.wo to unke hosh me ane k baad pata chalega'...

all member went to meet swara with sanskar also.all r in swara's cabin,sanskar sat nearby stool,caressing swara's hair,whn he heard swara's mumbling-sans..kar...accidnt..nehi...swara shake violently &open her eyes instantly,1st thing she saw is sanskar bandeged is hand & head sitting near her...

sanskar th8 she shake bcz of fear as he sit near her.he stand up,walking behind whn swara said-ruko...

swara sat up & said 'wo wo mujhe sanskar se kuch baat karni ha akele me'..

all leave the room.sanskar standing thr,thn swra spoke-u can sit here'.

sanskar sat thr after some awkward silence swara spoke-'kya main sachme tumse pyar karti thi?'

sanskar-'haa luking into her eyes.par y r u asking?'

swara-'mujhe kuch yaad aya'.sa-'kya'

sw-'aisa pehle vi hua ha na,tumara accidnt.mujhe kuch kuch yaad aya accidnt k khabar sunte main laksh aur ragini k sath uss jagah pe gayi.tum waha baithe the.main ro rahi thi.tum kisi wajah se mujhe sorry bol rahe the aur aur baadme maine wo maine tumhe ILU vi kaha(luking dwn)

whn she didnt heard anythng she luked at sanskar & saw he is staring at her...

sanskar smiling-agar mujhe pata hota mere accidnt se tumhe humare bitaye hue pal yaad ayenge i wish ye accidnt bohot pehle hojata'.

sw-shut up sanskar!!aur aur mujhe sabkuch yaad nehi aya sirf yehi yaad aya'.

sa-aur yehi mere lia kafi ha'..

sw-to fir wo sab kya tha?jo maine pehle yaad aya ki u shot me & wo gunde ko paise dena'...

sanskar sighd!sa-maine goli chalai bt tumpe nehi jisne tumhe kidnap kia tha,yes u were kidnaped & tht time i hd no choice xcept shoot him.partial memory loss k wajah se u only remember ki i shot the gun.&2ndly ussdin park me i didnt knw thy r goons,whn thy were escaping thy collide with me,unke paise gir gaye the,main unhe wo paise wapas kar raha tha whn u saw me'...

swara luking dwn & crying silently.sanskar saw it.he hold her hands,hesitantly wipe her tears.swara hug him tightly & cried.sanskar also hug her back.both sitting in each others embrace whn swara break the hug-'i m sorry,mujhe kuch yaad nehi ha,maine tumhe kya kuch nehi ke dia.par trust me i didnt do it intentnally,mujhe kuch yaad nehi araha,jab vi kuch yaad karne ki koshish karta hu my head strt spinning'..

sanskar cupping her face-'relax swara...shh!stop crying.main tumhe aise rote hue nehi dekh sakta...wiping her tears he spoke-'tumhe kuch yaad karne ki zarurat nehi,jaise ye humara bitaya ek pal yaad aya hai waisehi tumhe baki sabkuch yaad ajaiga aur agar nehi yaad aya to hum nayi yaadein bana lenge'..

swara kept saying-'i m sorry-..& hugged him again.

sankar holding her said-'bas swara,bohot hua ab bas vi karo..& 4m nw remeber 'dosti aur pyar me nosorry no thank u & u knw u always followed my this rule.samjhi.swara swara!!'

whn she didnt respond he broke the hug & realize swara slept in his arms...sanskar properly mk her lie on bed & adoring her.he gave a kiss on her forhead saying 'humara sath kavi nehi chut sakta'.he sat thr nearby stool holding her hands & slept in a hope that nw everythng going to be fine..


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Posted: 9 years ago
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Hi Sonu šŸ¤— šŸ¤—

Thanks for the PM, this was a nice and logical resolution of the ML track. If only they would show something like this in the serial. šŸ˜†

Liked the way Kissan was gently persuading Swara to analyze the proof, logically coming to the conclusion that Sanskaar could not possibly have wanted to kill her.
Sahil 😔 🤢 that obsessive creep tried to kill Sanskaar! Since Sanskaar has come to know about his plan, am sure he is literally going to destroy him! šŸ˜‰

The ending was so sweet---the reconciliation between SwaSan, and the pure happiness in both of their hearts now they are back together.

Love,

---Viji
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Posted: 9 years ago
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sonu u r wonderful writer..beautifully written loved the way the story is progressed..n swasan intact n her only part of memory came back..this is so aww wala oneshot 😭 😳
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Aww superb.i loved swasan convo in hospital so cute nd thanx for pm sumi!!!!!
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Superb os šŸ‘
Totally loved all the scenes 😳
Do write more
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Nice.. Enjoyed city..najane show me kab hogi ye sab..!!
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Nice update... loved the slow analysis made by swara and kissan ...reconciliation at the end was nice
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Hi Sonu,😊
Such a wonderful OS.šŸ‘ And even very logical too.😳 I just hope that our 'Mahan' CV's will show us something like this in the serial.šŸ˜‰ But they show us something very baseless and meaningless craps!!😔 Now coming back to the OS, loved Swara and Kissan's (Sanskar) conversation.šŸ˜‰ Loved the way Sanskar as Kissan was trying to analyze Swara's mind and make her understand.😃😳 Ughh!! That psycho Sahil tried to kill Sanskar!!😔 And when Swara heard about Sanskar's accident, she remembered a bit of an exactly same type of thing which included her and Sanskar along with Raglak.šŸ˜‰ She became restless for Sanskar and fainted.šŸ˜‰ And after she gained her consciousness, she confronted Sanskar about the same. Sanskar was beyond happy when Swara remembered something that included each other's care and concern for one another.😳 Was feeling so happy for him.😃 And Laksh like a caring bother warned him about Sahil.😃 Loved this OS so much!!ā¤ļø Thanks for the pm.😃
With love,
Aheli.

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