SwaSan OS: Unexpected Gifts - Page 5

Originally posted by: piccola1

Absolutely Delightful, droolworthy and truly declicious, Lanny. Loved it ! This one is straight from our day dreams of the ML track !

U've etched each character so brilliantly..Daadi'Ss rock hard stand (thankfully towards the right thing here😊), Suju's impatience with "pampered wives" 😆, Ragz being romantic (in her new avatar), Shomi being her usual Swasan shipping self 👏...its all perfectly put.

But the best of course are our lovely duo. Love Swara's confusion between her head (which reminds her he tried murdering her) and her heart (that pulls her to him, is delighted in his loving her so ardently😳 and feels hurt/anger at his "indifference") is superbly outlined. And Sanskaar is a delight..enigmatic, intelligently wooing his wife in all the right ways, and oh so happy to have her back in his life ! ⭐️

Superb tale - it made my day! And I wish we get some - even a teeny weeny bit - of it on screen..it will make my year ! 😃

Love ya for scripting a really heart-winning tale 🤗

Originally posted by: Helee

awww its so adorable...! chocolates, puppies and lots of attraction I just loved it. swara and her detective giri. 😆 this is something she will obviously do but sanskar and his unconditional love and never to force attitude have won the swara's heart once and she will fall for him once again.

sanskar will be happy if he knows that his swara is alive. her existence is biggest source of his happiness.

I just loved that after thinking he is a murderer she want her attention when he is not giving.🤣 her mind can forget him but her heart and her soul never. ❤️ I just loved the conflict between her mind and heart.

once again a beautiful os. 😳

Originally posted by: MusicAddict

Lanny 🤗
A biggg hug to you for this!! I love it soo much!!
All my favourite elements in one OS.
Swara back to her fav job jasoosi!! You just cracked me up here man!! Outta everything, couldn't Swara forget her jasoosi 😆
Sanskaar is so patient and his behaviour is so moving!! My Sanskaar<3 Even Swara feels it but wouldn't give up her jasoosi 😆
What a birthday gift man?!! Is this guy for real? He is too perfect and just the one to die for! He gave her two white puppies...mummy!! Even I want them!! *makes a grumpy face and sulks* I'm a big dog lover and chhotu chhotu se puppies steal my heart away. I even picked a chhotu sa stray puppy from the road when his mum wasn't there and tickled him!!
And then chocolates!! Woah man, if somebody gives me this gift na, I would hug him and kiss him and much more...not that way 😉
Such a sweet and amazing OS!! Make more like this please...* hands folded*

Originally posted by: 92Sara

Such a Sweet and cute OS Lanny.
Haha Swara and her Jassosi to collect proofs against Sanskar and she is failing in that mission.
Loved Dadi in this OS for parceling Swara to her sasural wen she had protested she won't go and Shomi's emotional blackmail trick really worked here.
Everyone knows how much Sanskar loves Swara and he can't even bear a tiny scratch on her that's the reason Swara failed in her mission "Murderer".
The most cute part of this OS Sanky's gift to Swara Chocolates and Puppies and how excited she became and Swara's Cute anger wen Sanky did'nt wished her.
How much Swara ever tries to run away from Sanskar thinking him as a khooni Her Heart and Soul will always be pushing her towards Sanky.
Thanks for this beautiful OS.

Originally posted by: -Prithi-

beautiful OS

Originally posted by: ssroomani

Absolutely lovely OS Shruti! Thank you for the PM.

Loved every line of it. Each character's personality is maintained, Dadi with her no nonsense stand, Shomi and Sanky's bond, Swara and her jasoosi, Sanskaar and his unconditional love for Swara, Suju and her way of saying wrong things, etc.

I wish we could get something like this rather than the much touted RNBDJ track!

Please write more such stories, they satisfy my roomani heart so much!

Originally posted by: bones123

I could have sworn I left a reply here yesterday and don't see it now...!!

Loved the story Shrutii !!

You've left Swara's jasooosi vein intact...😆😆...Obviously she'll try to proveee her point that her husband is a murderer...lady your full family is like that...including you...no escaping that :P

But honi ko toh hona tha...no matter what she thinks of her husband, and how she wants to incriminate, the base emotion will return and will hanker !! It was hilarious that even though on one hand she wants to prove him to be some psycho murderer she's equally pissed that he who everyone claims to

Can I tell you how I adored Sanskaar's approach *would love to see you write this entire thing from his POV* ...Giving her the time and space but still making sure he makes his move for his wife with subtelty...loved that he was in cahoots with his MIL...possibly the only sane character he can depend upon in the Baadi !!

The entire gift sequence was superb...chocolates and puppies...you've won the battle there Sunny boy...MELT !!!! and to top it all,, he manages to get that cheeky*pun intended* peck in...woot woot !!

Delightful read this be Shrutii...and like i said earlier do consider writing from Sanskaar's pov as well...hugs and kisses !!

And hopefully we'll see something similar playout in the actual track without much seashore interference !!

P.S. I was 😆😆 when reading the descriptions and reactions of the other family members...especially daadi and sujju...spot on !!

Originally posted by: harshitaloomba1

Aww this a real good story

I loved reading it...

N the end was actually 😳

Originally posted by: The.Lannister

Priya 🤗

How ironic right that she is surrounded by murderers but will be doing jasoosi of the only decent person in her life😊

Now believe it or not I had written this whole story from Sanskaar's POV but it turned out to be too painful & angsty 😭 and hence I rewrote it from Swara's POV so I could put in some humour & make it all light & nice, especially given how much we have cried these past 2 weeks & will be crying in the coming weeks too. Are you sure you really want Sanskaar's POV here? Even if it isn't a happy one? I will rewrite it then😆