SwaSan SS: Love that binds two hearts- Ch.1 pg 6

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Hey guys!! Sakshi here. Well, it would seem the most strange thing, but I guess I'm writing an SS. But the scenario is completely different. Suddenly struck my mind so thought to pen it down. Well, it is like Rajat pushes Swara off the cliff and she is no where to be found.

Spoiler- She has completely lost her memory and as you all will read, you'll realise that she's in Mumbai. So this is it. Now read and please give me the feedback as this is my first go.

PROLOGUE-

KOLKATA-

"Mr. Maheshwari, I'm sorry, but our team couldn't find the body."

"She isn't a body Inspector, she is MY WIFE!!" Sanskaar roared, totally livid

"I'm sorry sir, but my profession often deprives me of human emotions. Sincere apologies on my part!"

Sanskaar was a myriad of emotions right now. Dread, anger, vexation, concern, love grief, all were having an immensely tough battle in him, none able to dominate. Such chaos inside him was making his worry and fury clearly visible on face. No one, no one had the guts to say anything to him now. Laksh and Ragini stood beside him totally quiet while anxiety and grief clearly marred their worried faces.

"Sir, there are some feminine objects down here." A man called out. A flame of hope burnt in Sanskaar. He hoped his Swara would be somewhere around. Laksh clutched his shoulder, giving him the needed support. All three were waiting, for the man and it felt as if he took 2 days instead of mere 2 minutes.

"Here sir, it's a mangalsutra, and a pepper spray. But the owner is no where around. We've searched the whole area." The man reported with complete ease.

Sanskaar stepped ahead, one foot, one second. His eyes were completely drowsy, lids half open, hands not moving at all and face completely drained of colour. He appeared as if a moving statue, pale and distraught. Inspector placed the mangalsutra and pepper spray in his hand, full of sympathy. Ragini cried hard on Laksh's shoulder, her grief had no bounds on losing her sister she had finally got back.

They were indeed hers. HE had put that mangalsutra on her, in their marriage, when she had run away from the bars and saved him from marrying Kavita. He would definitely give her the credits for that. HE had gifted her that pepper spray, and kept it in her saree where should we never forget it, on the day, which he would never forget. Now those memories whacked him with an intolerable force. Why him? WHYY??

A lone tear dropped from his right-eye, flowing down the edge of his nose and then down the ground, reminding him of how Swara had filled her maang with it. Now, there wasn't any Swara to do so. He couldn't take it anymore! NO...This can't happen! God, can't be so merciless on him. NOOO...And finally the damn unleashed, Grief won the battle and Sanskaar fell on his knees crying- SWARAAA...with a voice full of sorrow and melancholy.

MUMBAI-

A girl woke up suddenly. She was covered with bandages over her head and hands. She felt as if someone called her, but whom and what did he call her?? She was bewildered. She had no possession sans her clothes and a locket with SS written in a heart. But who is she, who gave this to her and where is she? She knows nothing, yet that voice somehow felt too familiar. Who was he? Ughhh...this headache, can't she get rid of it? This was way too much for her to handle. She screamed in agony. A lady came in, but before she could see her, Swara fell back, unconscious.

So how was it? I know I write really pathetic, but still. This was the prologue. Do tell me, how it was and whether I should continue or no. Thank you!!


Chapter 1 pg 6 - https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/swaragini/4621394/swasan-ss-love-that-binds-two-hearts-ch-1-pg-6?pn=6

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Posted: 9 years ago
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Unres 😛
Well i lyk the concept...
i wanna now how u will take her to mumbai from kolkata in upcoming chapters.as it quite far bt still it happens to people.
Prolouge is emotional and touchy 😭
Sanskar's agony and again the fear of loosing everythng along wd going back to those dark days is clearly seen...
Do cntinue soon 😊
Well done.i too wanna write one bt u nd keerti r doing it so i am backing off nw cause my SS and FF is still pending.
Do cntinue and pm me.
Edited by soumi93 - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Hi my dr Sakshi🤗
How ru Sweety?

Glad to see ur writing skills ⭐️⭐️

Awesome SS ,lovely👏👏

Pls continue soon dear ,want to read them😊😊
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Nice Prologue Sakshi!
Sanskaar's Condition is too Bad abt Losing Swara and his Pain and Anxiety is Clearly Visible through his Emotions.
Cosmic Connection of SwaSan is Brilliant!
Continue Soon Sakshi iam In for this story and PM me too if Possible.
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: CarpedeimRose

Hi my dr Sakshi🤗

How ru Sweety?

Glad to see ur writing skills ⭐️⭐️

Awesome SS ,lovely👏👏

Pls continue soon dear ,want to read them😊😊


Hi Jenni!
Is it nice? I am so pretty nervous about it.
Thank you so much!!
I'll try to continue as soon as possible!
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: 92Sara

Nice Prologue Sakshi!
Sanskaar's Condition is too Bad abt Losing Swara and his Pain and Anxiety is Clearly Visible through his Emotions.
Cosmic Connection of SwaSan is Brilliant!
Continue Soon Sakshi iam In for this story and PM me too if Possible.



Thanks Sara!! Yup, it is. After all he loves Swara too much, more than his life.
Yeah, I'll PM you. Thank you for reading!! It feels much better
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Sakshi i was Buddying you ur Request came Thanks Dear.
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: soumi93

Unres 😛
Well i lyk the concept...
i wanna now how u will take her to mumbai from kolkata in upcoming chapters.as it quite far bt still it happens to people.
Prolouge is emotional and touchy 😭
Sanskar's agony and again the fear of loosing everythng along wd going back to those dark days is clearly seen...
Do cntinue soon 😊
Well done.i too wanna write one bt u nd keerti r doing it so i am backing off nw cause my SS and FF is still pending.
Do cntinue and pm me.



Thanks for liking!! And that you'll come to know soon. I hope you people will like it.
Sanskaar has always loved Swara more than himself, so losing someone more precious than life is too melancholic and I'm happy I was able to depict it well. Yeah sure. Will PM you.
Thanks for reading!
Edited by MusicAddict - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
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amazing plot line sakshi...sanskar's agony was wonderfully described.

even m excited to know whether sanskar will go to swara or swara to sanskar...nd pretty plz do reveal how she reached Mumbai...
will comment long after exams..
pm me
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: sharif_lafungi

amazing plot line sakshi...sanskar's agony was wonderfully described.

even m excited to know whether sanskar will go to swara or swara to sanskar...nd pretty plz do reveal how she reached Mumbai...
will comment long after exams..
pm me


Hey Akki!
Thanks for the reply buddy. Yeah sure, I'll reveal everything!!
Done! Thanks for commenting!

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