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@simsen23

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Posted: 9 years ago

#11

Muktai...

Very nice storyline..

Swara and sanskar having an arranged Marriage..

But the journey between engagement to marriage is described beautifully.

Each and every meeting with sanskar affecting swara from core and she is falling for him.

Sanskar is matured,funny and understanding at the same time..

But the countinouus flashbacks and currently missing him is symbolising something...

something happened to Sanskar!!!

I know I can't pressurize a writer because as a writer you must have something good in your mind..

But just a request,please do not separate them.in any sense...

Love you..

Simi😊

Edited by simsen23 - 9 years ago

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@Asad08

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Posted: 9 years ago

#12

Omg it's awesome!! 👏
Love it and excited to read more

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Cogito_Ergo_Sum

@Cogito_Ergo_Sum

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Posted: 9 years ago

#13

Very nice Mukta. All those lovely moments between Sanskaar and Swara in the flashbacks were awesome. The way he set her mind at rest regarding their arranged match, the way he exuded so much warmth, care and a soothing sense of comfort.

I liked their meeting in the cafe a lot. The engagement too. Gradually, Swara started feeling a sense of possessiveness over Sanskaar, a sense of belonging with him. The best part about his interaction with her, was his calm affection, the time and space he was giving her to come to know him, feel comfortable with him. I loved the way he said that he is entering into this relationship dil se, not out of any sense of obligation.

You have maintained a certain suspense as to Sanskaar's whereabouts now. SwaSan seem to have fallen deeply in love during that period between their engagement and marriage; and the way Swara cherishes the guitar gifted by Sanskaar, is so moving. He used to listen to her songs with such rapt attention and tenderness after their wedding. Wonder where he is now?

Do update soon.

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1025621

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Posted: 9 years ago

#14

Hi Mukta
nice start..
it was awesome
restaurant conversation was cute scene
swara missing sanskar...where is sanskar..
Can't wait for more
loved it... Eagerly waiting for more...
Update more soon
thanks for the pm.