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Hey Shruti🤗

Originally posted by: The.Lannister

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I resolve to keep away from the forum and then you n viji drag me back here!! Not that i mind 😳 keep them coming😳

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Shru, Shru, my dear 🤗 🤗

You mentioned in your reply to my last comment I guess, either on thread or over scrap I don't recall, that you'd be doing your best to make me adore this piece even more that your previous ones which I have a soft corner for. 😉 And let me tell you, it has come within a very few inches. I still barely hold on to my old favorites amongst your pieces, but by God, this chapter was a rollicking, edge of the seat, excitement filled romantic action thriller. I know, I know, that combination of genres seems unlikely, but with all the angst, realization of love, mingled denial and resistance to the emotion between the lead pair, and then that stupendous action sequence amongst the sand dunes---whet else can I term it? 😃

To start off: the description of the desert vistas. Breathtaking!! As I've told you before, I'm more of a mountains and beaches person; but the stark beauty of the sand dunes is really awesome too. I'll always remember my trip to the Sem sand dunes from Jaisalmer; as well as the desert dune safari when I visited Dubai.

Your vivid imagery of the shifting sands of pale gold and ochre, beneath a cerulean sky, brought that whole scene alive before my eyes! As did your exquisite description of the ruins of Samkalgoonj---the piled stones of cream and amber. Aaahhh...you really catered to my obsession with colors! 😛

Sanskaar dressed in white robes with a headgear giving him a slightly rakish appearance. I like, I like!! Swara dressed in saffron and cream sounded very fresh and lovely, too.

And that cute little scene, deftly portrayed, of them getting lost in each others eyes after he huskily reveals his thoughts---that he's never seen anything (or anyone!) as exquisitely beautiful as Swara...Madam realizes the import of his words too, flushes a very becoming pink!!

The whole sequence of Sanskaar's anguished words to Swara, recounting the futile and doomed love of Samarjit---the gates to his heart were well and truly opened now, he couldn't help but let his emotions in her blessed company, wash over him. And though it seemed to Swara that Sanskaar was talking of his lost love, Kavita; he was in fact speaking of his growing feelings for Swara, emotions which he was convinced, were doomed from the start.

That scene of them praying before those makeshift idols---where each prays that the other finds peace, happiness and contentmenr--that was so very moving, Shru. I had hoped that this scene would come in this chapter, right from the time you described the ruins in the previous one. I was literally thirsting to read what the Mermaid Princess and Prince Scrumptious would pray for---and I got everything that I wished for!! You made my prayers come true, Sis!! 😛 🤗

That lovely scene where Sanskaar's defences crumble, and that epiphany hits him squarely between his eyes---that he loves Swara like he does nobody else, like he did nobody else, come to that. That he wants to have a life with her, make her happy, if only he could allow himself to love her and seek her love in turn. What a man of steel he is, still trying so very hard to clamp down on these emotions, since he feels he does not deserve Swara in a way. He is still consumed with guilt for his part in bringing her to this pass, and is probably convinced she would be happier with a person who is less complex, who has not undergone so much pain and bitterness in life.

All that maelstrom of frustrated desire and longing, and a desperate attempt to stopper his own gushing love for her, forces that paroxysm of rage from him, doesn't it? Where he rages at Swara, screams at her for being foolish enough to ffel considerate for him, commiserate with his pain. Its almost as if he wants to make her hate him. 😭 That would, in his tortured mind, be easier to bear at the moment, than her warm concern which is coaxing his mind and heart into such impossibly beautiful dreams. The whole stretch of their near violent argument, with him forcing a dagger into her hands and yelling at her to go ahead and stab him---was a masterstroke. WOW! 👏 👏

And if that heart pounding interaction was not enough, which had already taken me to the edge of my seat, you made me completely fall to the ground in a spiral of nervous tension, with that fight scene. The Valiant "Dark Knight" Sanskaar---you just ensured that he has obliterated Christian Bale from my mind, whenever the term "Dark Knight" is used. 😃 What an enigma, what a man!! The way you described him with sword and daggers, defending the love of his life (for in reality, he is fighting to save her, not himself!)---fabulous!

And fantastic as the fight scene was, what followed was even better. Sanskaar's anguished cry of "Swaraaa", literally a call filled with rage, frustration and agony, echoing across the very landscape and the heavens above. He was really Samarjit at that moment, wasn't he----wanting to burn the world down at his mindless pain of being separated from his love, his very reason for living. And Swara feels that, too. She might still not have fully internalized what the fluttering feeling of warmth, affection and awareness she feels for Sanskaar is, but that cry struck a very deep chord within her. She wanted to go to him, be by his side, comfort him, tend to him. And the thought of losing him, possibly seeing him die, filled her with a desperate terror!

I loved how you gave my 3rd favorite character in this Fic (Veer of course!! 😛) such a lovely role here. Faithful, loyal, reliable and intelligent Veer!! Did everything he could, to help Swara pull Sanskaar up and seat him, and then cantered off towards the hidden mansion. That was a very nice factual touch, since horses are very intelligent animals, and do have a homing instinct of sorts.

I can't wait for Chap 13, darling!

Res - Chapter 12 ❤️
Just finished reading. What an amazing update.! - love realisation and so much action! I loved this update to the core. Will unres later. Fabulously done! ❤️ 😉

Unres:

Shru! <3

Intense update! Sanskaar love realisation <3 and some much awaited action. And you threw in the word 'lass' (even if by the loathsome outlaws)! Treat pe treat!

#Reaching Samkalgoonj
The description of the ruins was beautiful. I could imagine the dunes and the ruins and the sadness creeping within that something so beautiful could transform into ruins because of another beautiful thing - love.
Your description of them being as striking as the setting was brilliant. I could truly visualize the two like that. :)

#Conversations between the ruins
I could literally imagine Sanskaar being hit with the realisation that he is falling in love like a ton of brick just descending on his head. I want to commend you on the appropriateness of the reaction he ended up having. It was brilliant. The whole realisation to denial process with respect to Sanskaar's character was projected exactly as it should have been. No sane person in such a situation would have reacted any other way. Bravo! That whole dialogue answering Swara's question had me wincing at the cruelty of the world too. Ouch! :( Swara's still at the falling in love but not realising stage. She can feel his pain and prays for him! He prays for her! <3 Sanskaar Swara all out 'I hate you' argument. Poor guy trying to understand why his captive is not hating him for the kidnaping and what better way to put up all the walls again but by distancing oneself by showing their fake-worse side! Enjoyed every bit of it.!

#Outlaws Action!
Shruti, thanks for this. Was waiting for action.! I read this whole part with my heart in my mouth. I was so sure you would leave us a cliff hanger where Swara was taken away by the outlaws. Thank you for not doing that. Oh that whole 'Swaraaa' by Sanskaar was *shudder*! The whole action scene was really well written. I loved it! Sushena is dead? You killed him? :(

#Sanskaar is hurt!
I am hoping for some intense romantic moments now where Swara is taking care of Sanskaar. <3 Probably Swara will realise her love? Or we could have Sanskaar reveal all his secrets in his fever inducedstate of mind? Possibilites!!! ;)

Awaiting the next update! :)

-V

Originally posted by: bwvianna

Res - Chapter 12 ❤️
Just finished reading. What an amazing update.! - love realisation and so much action! I loved this update to the core. Will unres later. Fabulously done! ❤️ 😉

Thank you V dearest! You ensure that I can sleep peacefully (finally!) at 3.30 am to wake in 4 hours 😆. Was nervous to ensure the romance and action combo didn't fall flat! Will wait for more whenever you have time but thanks for letting me know you did like it! X

shuruu baby...muahhh🤗

That was an amazing update...realisation...action. A thrilling episode. Brilliant writing. You've brought out Sanskar's turmoil so well...One can feel his conflict, his pain. Looking forward to read what happens next.

Superb update.. 👏
It is one of my favourite story...loved the way story is progressing..each updates are awesome...
Very well described scenes nd situations 👍🏼
Waiting for next update...update soon 😊

Res!!