*Rang De Tu Mohe Gerua* SwaSan Two-Shot Part 2 (Final) Page 1

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Cogito_Ergo_Sum

@Cogito_Ergo_Sum

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Posted: 9 years ago

#21

Hi Shonali...

I really liked this so very much. You have described both Swara's and Sanskaar's feelings so well. Swara repenting for her mistrust of Sanskaar, the way she hurt him; and Sanskaar, not being able to fully accept that she loves him, because he is probably scared she is doing this out of her guilt and concern for him. Plus he is still hurt, that she did not realize he will never betray her, by framing her in this whole kidnapping imborglio.

Their pain and longing was very well described, and I am quite sadistically happy, that Swara was pining so very much for his affection and care. 😳

No comments on Lakshya...even after being unmasked and his duplicity being revealed, that loser is still trying to get Swara back into his life, and blame Sanskaar. Why wasn't he left to rot in jail...😆

The end of this chapter was very tantalizing. Sanskaar feeling guilty for getting enraged with Swara, in the midst of his bad mood with Lakshya's whining and his mom's cribbing. I am feeling bad for Swara, but in a way, this is a smaller version of what she did to Sanskaar. I mean, Sanskaar got pushed by his stress at that point, to listen to his mother's complaints, and yelled at Swara without thinking. Swara, similarly, had let herself get deceived, and doubted Sanskaar of the kidnapping, without really thinking deeply.

Hope they both resolve this momentary MU, and realize that they mean the world to each other. Am looking forward eagerly to the next chapter, wondering where Swara went to at that time of the night?

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manasi

@manasie23

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Posted: 9 years ago

#22

Hey Shonali... Just mind blowing mann... I loved it
Mr Lakshya Maheshwari kabhi nahi Sudhrega is obsession is too much to bear everywhere...
Think maybe Sanskaar tried to push her too far too soon... Lets see what happens in the next update...

And no way you look like a newbie in your writing... I gotta learn from you😳

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The.Lannister

@The.Lannister

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Posted: 9 years ago

#23

Shona 🤗 That was a great first attempt!

Sujata & Lakshji are very much in character here🤡

I loved the bond between Uttara & Swara & the MU Sujata has about Swara also seems realistic given the girls phobia towards her own marriage😆 Though of course she only had to ask/ listen in to the whole conversation/ not listen in at all...but then we both know that isnt sujata at all😆 And Laksh as usual being presumptuous about his brother's wife & her relationship with her husband?! 😲🤢 And the sheer gall to even mention Kavita😡 So like I said, very much in character👍🏼😆

I like that Sanskaar didnt melt at the first sign of acceptance from her. He is being cautious which is good since wifey has a tendency to overdo her mahantaa, so like you said maybe it is just her guilt talking. So happy to see a repentant Swara😈 SUFFER woman...as much as you made him suffer, if not more😈

And where did she go so late in the night?🤔 How he manaoes her right away & brings her back

And ofc you will PM me when you update the next part right?😉😃

Edited by The.Lannister - 9 years ago

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--Anna--

@--Anna--

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Posted: 9 years ago

#24

Shona 🤗

What a brilliant TS! Loved Loved IT! 👏 👏 This was the first thing, I read today, when I woke up. 😛

Absolutely adored Swara and Uttara's bond! I wish the show could have ventured more in their bond. Sujata being Sujata - what is more expected of her. She listens to absolutely nothing and she still makes a mountain of a molehill. 😆

Did Laksh really question Sanskaar about trust? Really? 😡 Well that is expected of our Laksh! 😆 Good Sanskaar gave it back to him. I loved that line where he said that he does not intend to make mockery out of his relationship or the problems between Swara and him in front of everyone. I wish Swara would have done the same thing. 🥱

Sanskaar reacting on Swara - I think half of it came from his conversation with Laksh. He must have been really frustrated with the conversation he had with Laksh and then Sujata must have added the fuel to the fire. I can understand him as always. 😳 And the sadist me was happy when he gave it to Swara but then I did felt bad for Swara.

So Swara left for some place? Hopefully our Sanskaar is able to manaofy her. 😳

Great Start!

Love
Anna

P.S : Best of luck for your exams! 👍🏼

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akanksha

@luvakanksha

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Posted: 9 years ago

#25

Beautiful start

Please continue soon

Felt bad for Swasan, they dont deserve all this they deserve love and happiness

Continue soon

Thanks for the pm

Edited by luvakanksha - 9 years ago

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medha

@ToujoursPur

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Posted: 9 years ago

#26

Very well written Shonali...

I especially like your language skills.

medha.

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BB_CallmeC

@BB_CallmeC

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Posted: 9 years ago

#27

Originally posted by: Prizi
firstpart was awesum

Thank you so much Prizi

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BB_CallmeC

@BB_CallmeC

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Posted: 9 years ago

#28

Originally posted by: Messi2
shonu...u updated yayy...loved how u depicted nd u write very well buddy i saw so many of your discussions in AT
lucky🤬...but sanlak convo was jackass want it to happen ...utaara bhabhi convo was also nice sujju

update 3 parts re😊

ek ek part ka alag reply dungi 😃

Jessi🤗

Yup I did it. Hehe, yesterday's segments filled me with extra energy and encouragement that I ended up writing it.

I am really glad you liked it. It will be mostly two parts but if its too long, I will break it into three parts. It will have to wait though. Finals hai ab😡 Sorry.

Thank you again for your comment. Means a lot to me

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BB_CallmeC

@BB_CallmeC

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Posted: 9 years ago

#29

Originally posted by: LoveSonu2408
a wonderful piece by a lovely girl...shona🤗,dnt dare to call it bad.
a lovely updt.emotnal one...
yes yes yes!wht i wanted swara shud understnd wht she did by mistrusting sanskar...& nw trying to manaoing her pati,living in same pain...
ab to with all tana blh blh blh..
ragini,gd discion,bring swasan closer..& Mr.LRG...😡
the way sanskar shut him up...👏..*whisteling*
ok,so sanskar ne swara ko suna diya & nw its swara's turn...
whr she go??hmm!
shona darling zyada intezar mat karwana pl..updt nxt part soon..

Sonu🤗

Thank you so much. I am really glad you liked it. I was just scared coz it was my first time😃

Didn't we always wanted to see Swara fight and pine for Sanskaar. Bas, yehi dekhaya

I will try my best to update. Just finals hai ab, toh thoda late hoga. Please don't mind

Thanks again Sweety

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BB_CallmeC

@BB_CallmeC

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Posted: 9 years ago

#30

Originally posted by: CogitoErgoSum
Hi Shonali...
I really liked this so very much. You have described both Swara's and Sanskaar's feelings so well. Swara repenting for her mistrust of Sanskaar, the way she hurt him; and Sanskaar, not being able to fully accept that she loves him, because he is probably scared she is doing this out of her guilt and concern for him. Plus he is still hurt, that she did not realize he will never betray her, by framing her in this whole kidnapping imborglio.

Their pain and longing was very well described, and I am quite sadistically happy, that Swara was pining so very much for his affection and care. 😳

No comments on Lakshya...even after being unmasked and his duplicity being revealed, that loser is still trying to get Swara back into his life, and blame Sanskaar. Why wasn't he left to rot in jail...😆

The end of this chapter was very tantalizing. Sanskaar feeling guilty for getting enraged with Swara, in the midst of his bad mood with Lakshya's whining and his mom's cribbing. I am feeling bad for Swara, but in a way, this is a smaller version of what she did to Sanskaar. I mean, Sanskaar got pushed by his stress at that point, to listen to his mother's complaints, and yelled at Swara without thinking. Swara, similarly, had let herself get deceived, and doubted Sanskaar of the kidnapping, without really thinking deeply.

Hope they both resolve this momentary MU, and realize that they mean the world to each other. Am looking forward eagerly to the next chapter, wondering where Swara went to at that time of the night?

Viji🤗

Wow, such a long comment. I feel so great that everyone who has read it so far has liked it. I was scared to even post it thinking it isn't that great.

Didn't we all wanna see Swara pining for Sanskaar? Isn't that what our sadist heart has been asking since long long time?😆 😆 I really wanted to show Sanskaar ignoring Swara a little more and then making it look like he is just being cautious with himself and even her was I think a good option for me to portray it that way. Sanskaar wants to be 100% sure that Swara is indeed in love with him and not just saying it out of guilt or sympathy for him because he is mad.

I have no comments for Laksh either. He is one delusional character.

Sanskaar reacted that way because he was way too frustrated, thanks to his cousin and his mom. Even I felt bad for Swara, but it was his spur of the moment reaction.

I will definitely try to update but i have finals coming up so it could be delayed. Hope you understand😃

Thank you once again for your comment. Made my night!!!