SwaSan TS: Music of the Soul-The Agony & the Ecstasy-Completed - Page 44

Originally posted by: CogitoErgoSum

Oh dear Suha...

So sorry to hear that you are unwell. Take care dear, hope you get well soon. Try some gargling with betadine gargle.

Wishing you good health and happiness 😊

----Viji

Originally posted by: asexualflower

Viji, 🤗

First of all, sorry again for the tardiness of this comment. 😕

Part One

Okay so first of all, I loved the whole music theme you had going with the entire TS. You seem to know a lot about the different raags, have you studied music? I also loved how the plot of each part of the TS incorporated whichever raag was in the title of the part. 👏

I loved the way you started the TS, with that quote and then relating it to Ragini. 👏

I also liked how you explored more of Ragini's mom and her childhood. It really gave good context to your TS.

I really like the way you describe your characters and their actions. Like Lakshya, Annapurna, and Sujata were described so aptly at the beginning of the TS.

I'm also so very glad you redeemed Ragini. She is a title character and she's better positive anyways. Sanskaar's part in redeeming Ragini was great too. And I mean it only makes sense, he was the one who took her down the road of evil, he should help her come back as well. The entire conversation between the two of them in Part One was penned so beautifully. The way he explained everything to her, and the way she was contemplating the pros and cons of telling the truth. 👏

I honestly loved that bit after Ragini finished playing the sitar. Lakshya looking at Swara, Swara looking at Sanskaar, and Sanskaar looking anywhere but Swara. 😆😆😆 I don't know why but I found that pretty funny,

And Oh. My. God. Your description of the sun setting as Ragini stood in the balcony was so beautiful, I could literally visualize the sun setting in front of my eyes as I read that. 👏

Part Two

Once again your description of the daily sunrise in MM was described so wonderfully. 👏

Overall, I really like the flow of how you write. With one thing leading to another. All the references you make are relevant and integrated into your writing so well.

"to have him right beside her, and to miss him anyway." This was such an impactful and heartbreaking sentence.

The arti bit was so cute.

And the part where Swara started describing his eyes, I was wondering to myself, hmm how will Sanskaar ever reply to this? And then he said "I'm going to kiss you." and I literally cannot think of a better way he could've replied to her description. 😳

Overall Part Two was perfectly Swasanlicious. And somehow, even though it was mostly about them, you still managed to flawlessly develop other pivotal characters in the TS like Ragini.

Part Three

Okay so for this part, I really liked how you started it off in the future. And then went back to describe the events which had unfolded.

And the bond you showed between Swaragini was so cute too. It reminded me of the older days when Swara used to tease Ragini about Lakshya (before the CV's complicated everything 😵).

I really liked how you dug deep into Lakshya's character in Part Three. And I loved the monologue you used from Dhadkan, it fit his character so perfectly.

And the confrontation scene which unfolded was perfect too. With Swara and Sanskaar both standing up for each other, Ram slapping Lakshya, Annapurna trying to support him, Ragini finally saying the full and complete truth, Annapurna still trying to defend Lakshya, and finally Durga Prasad taking the upper hand.

And then you took us back in the future to such a cute scene between Swasan. 😳

And finally, at the end, I loved the way you compared and contrasted Swasan and described their love. It was all too perfect.

On the forum, you're one of my favourite writers. 😛 The way you write, one can go back and read your work multiple times without getting bored. 😆

Once again, sorry I'm so late with this comment.

Oh and as always, thanks for the PM's. Otherwise, I would definitely miss your marvelous work. 😆

- Sapna

Originally posted by: Monica_Suhasini

part 2 - Raag Bhairav

once again the morning arthi ...the way u described so refreshing

annapurnas sons resounding tone deaf...😆😆😆

i sooo love the way u describe sanakaar his willpower his love his passion his attitude

always GLORIOUS⭐️⭐️

u written very gracefully viji how his hope ignited...

in the show also i very much loved swasan...at diwali

their convo was so adorable...dreamy dreamy

but stupid cvs ruined...showing crap...

seriously they should take ideas from you...

our darling got hurted so much...how deep z his love for her...his hurt shows that

amazing👏

both are suffering ..so sad...😭🥺

explained swaras condition also very well...great job

the way he is talking to swara that he dint doubted her...shows how much more he wanted her to trust him...

may b this z out of topic viji

sanakaar y dint you tel wen swara askd about blanket...

swara was very uncomfortable while searching his belongings...

she was releived to know that he is not involved in kidnapping ragini...

i gave a chance of doubt to swara..i love both...raginis kidnapping created misunderstanding btwn our swasan

i so hated that sequence...hate cvs😡

sorry for above stuff viji couldnt stop writing that

and his explanation was very convinient,,,

so keenly u wrote

certain degree of inaccuracy sometimes saves tons of unnecessaryn explanation

how good it have been if swara askd him there itself when she saw him burning

awww she missed him terrribly...

THE WAY HE LOOKED AT HER THAT SHE WAS THE ONLY PERSON IN THE WORLD...☺️

omg...awesomenesss

swaragini...talk...

rags immediately found something z wrong...sounds sweet

viji that para fate is not an absolute

i so loved it...very insightful...

m lazy...was trying to copy paste😆😆

but its not comming..restricted na

i soo wish to make a pdf of ur writings...so that i can read wenever i want

LOVE KNOWS NOT ITS OWN DEPTH UNTIL THE HOUR OF SEPARATION

how true...

wonderful sugession by ragini...to swara...

loved that quote...

me again lazy to write

ragini seeing the innerside of herself

how innocently she told that he z not taking to her...

cuteness ki dhukaan

sooo imagining that...

hugs viji🤗

awww ragini smiled...poignant...ur description gives life...😊

i repeat i have zero knowledge about music..

but ur way of representing makes me go awww

swara...darling...conveyed with every fibre of hers ,,,,to her hubby...beautiful

he z smiling and responding...my heart z jumping..

so longing to c his onscreen..

thanx alot for this magic ya...swasan are magical... and u make them extra magical❤️

sensing eachother irrespective of circumstances...adorable

he complimented...cute husband❤️

such an outstanding explanation from her side..

viji impressed re...always impressed but dont know how to tel better than this word...🥳

so touching...lovely

yipeee mischevious husband is back...yahooo😃

and too just love the way he function...

lucky swara⭐️

s sanskaars eyes are wonderful...

wat a description...faints faints☺️

thats y without waiting he kissed her...

kiss...what a passion ...speechlesss...

viji...enjoyed to the core...thankyou very much

loads of love

suha

Originally posted by: CogitoErgoSum

Originally posted by: CogitoErgoSum

Hey Sapna...🤗 🤗

Finally managed to get online from my lappie, been on holiday last few days and sometimes holidays seem busier than working days. 😉

Thanks a ton once again, for this lovely comment yaar. Like I mentioned in my brief revert which I typed from my phone, I was so touched that you'd written the aspects you liked in each of the parts. 😊

I have studied music--Violin (Carnatic classical) for 6 years. Stopped formal classes in the last term of my 12th, when I had to prepare for my boards. I still practice occasionally, though I am quite rusty now. But I love classical music, both Hindustani and Carnatic, especially instrumental.

Part 1: I really wanted to show the start of the gradual trajectory in Ragini's redemption. She's been turned into an absolute nightmare in the serial, but I felt after the kidnapping episode, there was a golden chance there to show her mulling over the consequences of her actions, to begin to realize the extent to which her fanatic obsessiveness had clouded her nature.

And who better than Sanskaar to help her in this gradual path towards redemption. I always did feel that he would have some guilt for giving her that initial push down this path (when he himself was a gray character). Of course, he tried his best to head her off from the brink, but it was too late then. I do think that Sanskaar would be willing to give Ragini another chance at repentance, and to restore herself to the person she used to be. After all, who better than him, to know the value of a second chance to redeem oneself? I do feel, however, that he will not be prepared to blindly trust Ragini as Swara used to do. He will follow the "trust but verify" maxim. 😆 Which is why, here I showed him following the carrot and stick approach---warning Ragini that if she tried to harm/ malign Swara, she would have him to deal with; but also extending a hand in support if she truly wanted to redeem herself. I really liked writing this Sanskaar---Ragini conversation/ confrontation scene, so am very glad to hear that you liked it. 🤗

Very happy that you liked the whole setting with the sunset towards the end. I love sunsets and sunrises 😊, but apart from that, the setting made it relevant here. Raag Yaman Kalyan, which was the theme Raag for Chapter 1, is a late evening Raag.

Part 2: I started off with the morning routine at dawn/ sunrise in Maheshwari House, since I love sunrises, for one thing 😊, and Raag Bhairav, the theme Raag for this chapter, is an early morning Raag, traditionally played at dawn. In this chapter, I wanted to show Swara pining for Sanskaar, intensely missing his affection and care, and resolving to assuage his pain, win back his trust and woo him. And I wanted to show, really, the reason why Swara could have had that momentary doubt about Sanskaar's possible involvement in the kidnapping. Like I made her say in that dialogue, I felt the reason could be, that Swara knows how protective Sanskaar is of her, how fiercely he defends her. Once when Ragini maligned her by disparagingly referring to her "illegitimacy", Sanskaar got so furious, he held Ragini's throat to stifle those vile words. Since Ragini had maligned Swara so badly in front of Annapurna and Sujata, Swara could have had a momentary doubt, that Sanskaar might have kidnapped Ragini just to teach her a lesson.

But where she crucially erred was, she ought to have realized Sanskaar would never, ever let the blame fall on her---he would rather have confessed, had he arranged the kidnapping. Similarly, he would never have let Swara worry so much for those couple of days, he would rather have told her the truth, had he been involved.

I also wanted to briefly touch upon how hurt and betrayed Sanskaar would have felt by Swara doubting him---because for him, the trust and belief they had in each other, was the cornerstone of their relationship. I felt he would have felt most betrayed, because Swara did not come straight out and ask him why he'd burnt the blanket. Had she asked this simple, straightforward question, he may well have given her a straight answer. But the roundabout way she went about investigating the issue, would have wounded him deeply, since it implied she doubted him.

I wanted to tie in the music theme here, and portray Swara expressing her emotions through her singing. Am very glad you liked it. 😊

And the ending of the chapter---I really liked writing Swara's description of Sanskaar's eyes, and his very romantic reaction to that. 😳 ☺️ Happy that you liked reading it.

Part 3: Thanks for saying you liked that shifting of scenes from the future to the present and then back to the future.

I wanted to show a Ragini who'd gotten back in touch with her innate goodness, the person she used to be. She and Swara have restored their sibling bond, and are running their music school together.

In the present timeframe, I wanted to delve a bit into Lakshya's thinking, his character. I do feel that even if he had proceeded willingly with his engagement to Ragini; and had never fallen in his infatuation for Swara; he would never have been able to reciprocate the intense devotion Ragini felt for him. Lakshya is just too limited in terms of his intellectual and emotional depth. Frankly, the kind of intense emotions Ragini felt for him, were both beyond his understanding and capacity, and would have even scared him off. He does strike me as a little bit of a coward, emotionally.

I liked writing that confrontation scene, with Ram finally deciding that enough was enough, and giving Lakshya a tight slap for trying to frame his son. 😊 Very glad you liked that bit!

And that bit about SwaSan at the end---I wanted to show how perfectly they complete and complement each other, though on the surface, their approaches to life, their way of thinking is quite different. They really are soulmates.

Thanks again for the lovely and warm words, Sapna. It truly made my day to get your feedback; I'd been meaning to write this detailed revert to you for 3 days now but what with travel, got delayed.

Hope you have a wonderful 2 weeks holiday before you resume classes again.

Wish you and your family a Very Happy New Year! May 2016 bring you much joy, peace and prosperity. 🤗