SwaSan TS: Music of the Soul-The Agony & the Ecstasy-Completed

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The.Lannister

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Posted: 9 years ago

#31

First a question before I comment on part 1: have you learnt music, or was all that just research? I truly love how you take up various themes be it colours which was in one of your previous works or music in this one, apply it to these characters and then tell such a beautiful story.

Ragini is such a captivating and compelling character, isn't she? Very much similar to sanskaar but still worlds apart. They are two sides of the same coin, connected but always different. I liked ragini wanting to change, I loved it that sanskaar was giving her that chance. Who better than him to know that if someone gives you a chance you can change! There would be so much lesser evil in the world if only people gave others a chance.

Sanskaar isn't coming to her to preach about truth. He isn't begging, rather he makes sure she understands who is doing whom a favour. Smart as usual 😉 Ragini sulkily admitting that they aren't back to being friends 😆 and then comes the line that is just so sanskaar, passionate and genuine to the core 😳

That line about ragini still being his enemy if she is swara's!! How can you not fall for a person who is so passionate and honest?!

Ragini truly deserves someone better than laksh, and not because he doesn't love her. Even if he did he would never be her equal, her partner. He just doesn't have her intelligence, drive, courage...nothing 🥱

Waiting for part 2!

Edited by The.Lannister - 9 years ago

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Cogito_Ergo_Sum

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Posted: 9 years ago

#32

Originally posted by: bloomnskyrules
I reached the end of part 1 and then realized that parts 2 & 3 are not updated yet!😭🥺
Part 1 was brilliant and your characterisation of Ragini was beautiful. It seems like she doesn't want be the vamp in SwaSan's lives anymore! Hopefully she will take up Sanskaar's offer and comes clean infront of their families!
It was great the way you described and differentiated the ways Ragini and Sanskaar love their respective spouses! I felt quite sad for Ragini actually...
How is it that Swara still doesn't realize that she loves her husband? That longing she felt while listening to Ragini's performance didn't clue her in? And how adorable is Sanskaar? He is giving Swara the cold shoulder but at the same time is keeping an eye on her!
I loved it when he told Ragini that she is still his enemy today if she is against Swara. I can't believe that Swara doesn't realise how lucky she is! I am hoping that in the next 2 parts she will become aware of her emotions and woos Sanskaar the way he deserves!
Very eagerly waiting to read the next 2 parts!

Hi Vyshu. ..🤗

Yeah I normally like to post all parts of a TS at one go. But this piece was taking longer than normal for me, as the daayan track kind of dulled my motivation for a while. So once the episodes picked up again, and i started getting the drive to write, I just put the finishing touches on this 1st chapter and posted it.

Am working on the 2nd and hope to have it up soon.

I feel bad for Ragini too. She has chosen a wrong path, sure, but she had a lot of good in her. Though of course, she has to take responsibility for her own actions, to a certain degree, Lakshya and Sanskaar were responsible for pushing her down this path. Swara too, in fact, with some of her benevolent but misguided actions. I would love to see Sanskaar help Ragini redeem herself in the serial as well. Their friendship was a cute bond.

Swara will be made to pine and miss Sanskaar quite a bit. 😉 I really want to see her realizing the magnitude of her emotions for Sanskaar, and go all out to win his trust back and woo him 😳

Thanks for your lovely comment Vyshu. Glad you liked the 1st chapter.

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Cogito_Ergo_Sum

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Posted: 9 years ago

#33

Originally posted by: aparnasvj
Wow.. I really love the concept... looking forward to read more viji...

Thanks Aparna 😊 Very glad you liked it. I am working on chapter 2 now, and hope to have it up soon, probably tomorrow.

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foresight

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Posted: 9 years ago

#34

It was beautifully written Viji. You highlighted the difference in the two loves, her transformation - one that probably her old self might not even recognise, her insecurities at still trying to reveal the truth and loss this Laksh despite what he has put her through (as you rightly put unworthy; but one she cannot get away from), the realisation that Swara and Sanskar's pain doesnt make her happy. Where do I stop! Each part of it was put forward so beautifully. Along with the pain of seeing Laksh still the way he is.

It was great to see all of this put from Ragini's point of view.

I am looking forward to the next two Raags. I liked the concept of Raag...they have their own meaning, emotions and context that conveys as much as prose can

👏 👏

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Cogito_Ergo_Sum

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Posted: 9 years ago

#35

Originally posted by: luvakanksha
Excellent part one loved it 👏
I also want ragini's realization to like this
I want her to get tired and confess
But the CVs are not ready to give is that
Loved the role played sanskar here, wonderful

Thanks so very much Akanksha. 🤗 Yeah I also feel very bad for Ragini in the serial. Of course, she has chosen a very wrong path, but she had a lot of good in her. I do want to see a solid redemption track for her on tv. I feel Sanskaar would definitely help Ragini redeem herself, after all they used to be friends. Also, I think Sanskaar definitely would feel responsible for initially pushing Ragini on to her wrong choices. He knows better than anyone, that repentance is possible if given a chance, so I am sure he will do this for Ragini.

I really didn't like this "new version" of Ragini they are creating on the show, instead of showing her path back to her earlier self. Let's hope they shift track later. 😊

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sonal

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Posted: 9 years ago

#36

Res

Will unres after reading the whole TS

I don't like cliffhangers😆

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naina

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Posted: 9 years ago

#37

Vijiii🤗🤗🤗

A Much needed TS dear..I am damn happy after reading this story..😃😃😃

I am very much yearning for Ragini's redemption in the show..and here comes my angel Viji with this plot..I love you for this❤️

Ragini's portrayal in the show is being OTT now a days..But I loved your way of starting to make her redeemable, by our one and only Sanskaar..😳 Since he was the one who started all this, he has an obligation to end this too..😊

I loved the way you explained about Ragini's singing prowess, that Raga and all..It was brilliant..

And I am impressed by Swara madam's yearning for Sanskaar😆 Let her yearn a bit more..😛

Lakshya is still being a 🤬 and is still after his bhabhi..😡 Oh god when will he learn..

And Viji I didn't understand your portrayal of AP here..Ragini doubting about her saasu maa's ulterior motives..😲 I mean what can it be..??

I am eagerly waiting for your next update yaar🤗

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maaneetfan

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Posted: 9 years ago

#38

Firstly Viji..thnx so much for the pm! !! Woke up morning to find this lovely TS link lying in my inbox n started reading it even bfr my breakfast. ..yup thts how crazy i am

Now coming to the story...well im sure u r completely tired reading abt how beautifully u write n express the emotions of each character so m gonna refrain frm doing tht...

I loved it how sanskaar investigated ragini's actions to malign swara's character despite his present anger towards her tho mayb he had done so bfr she acted so rashly tho still his defence fr her is so heartwarming. I also liked the fact tht he is still aware of his hand in ragini's transformation into an evil witch and is now trying to rectify his mistake along with attempting to help ragini achieve some peace fr herself. ... tho it remains to be seen if she will heed his advice or not.

Now pls update the next part soon...cant wait fr swasan scenes. ..tho was very happy sanskaar is ignoring swara n shez trying to gain his attention. ...quite a change!

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Cogito_Ergo_Sum

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Posted: 9 years ago

#39

Originally posted by: luv_virmaan
Part 1 was awesome 👏 and your an amazing writer.
Really loved the way you characterized Ragini in your TS 👍🏼
I have always had a soft corner for Ragini's character and wanted her to be redeemed in the show. The track would actually have a lot of potential. But CV's... They never look beyond drama.
And Swara! That girl seriously needs to realise her love. She is longing for him and she still thinks that they are just 'best friends'.
And Sanskaar , as always adorable. He is angry with her but at the same time, he can't help but care for her.
Please continue soon 😳
Can't wait for the remaining chapters.

Hey...thanks so much for those lovely words. 🤗

I have a lot of sympathy for Ragini too. She's chosen a terribly wrong path, of course. But she had a lot of good in her, before Lakshya broke her heart and her dreams, and Sanskaar gave her a nudge down this vengeful path. He tried, of course, to turn her back from the brink, but she was probably too far gone then.

I would love to see a properly executed redemption track for Ragini, and I do feel Sanskaar would want to help her on the process. After all, he knows better than anyone, the importance of a chance to repent and redeem oneself.

I am going to make Swara pine and miss Sanskaar a lot here. 😆 Frankly, he has been wearing his heart on his sleeve for so long, its high time she did the chasing and the wooing. 😳 She needs to assuage his hurt and win back his trust, too.

Yeah, Sanskaar would be hurt at her lack of trust in him, but he is always going to be there for her, to ensure she's doing OK. He loves her after all, irrevocably and unconditionally. Swara just has to realize she feels the same way about him, the sooner the better. 😉