PART 16,Pg 138-ZINDA REHTI HAIN UNKI MOHABBATEIN - Page 73

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Posted: 9 years ago
nainaaa
can u read mah mind?
jus thinking about update and here u did it .
yaar
seriously commenting for this part is not my cup of tea. ..i dnt hv that level to match to this masterpiece...m speechless. ..devoid of words
so cn jus say that----
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sanskar even realised that she is confused ...great
even he is firm in his resolve to never let go off her...greater
both hving glimpse of deir past...greatest
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veer zaara part was too gud
that part was correlating with their own story
it was much like the yjhd scene of kabir and naina where naina told him to stay away warna mujhe pyaar ho jaega tmse... dubaara...it was like deepika saying these lines to ranbir itself
...the same parallel u hv drawn dear bw swasan

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kavity...bhagwan g mujhe ek khoon maaf kar do phuleez mein is kavita ko jaan se maar de na chahti hu...m smelling burning heart of hers seeing swasan together.
waise accha hi h if she harm swara then swara ka kavita k liye guilt b khatam ho jaega aur sanskar b usse dur ho jaega for eveeer.
aur ap b swara ko accept kar sakegi..
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isha
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Posted: 9 years ago
Naina...😊in all ur stories my fav and loved one was this...I used to eargerly dammmly waiting for this update...due to busy schedule I didn't read in morning... Now I got time Soo I did...

wow...! Oh my god...! Bollywood theme party was superb...totally I imagined in my imagination...and swasan scene it is just...ooolakomostas...! Don't ask me what it is it is one kind of wonderful expression...!


Soo sanskar mind may fix hogaya...that he wont let swara to go away from him...! The way u posted the scene btw them them was marvlouse...!

Soo next what will happen iam waiting for next swasan scene sanskar saw laksh and swara going from their...I am imaging his expression here...😉aftr this what will happen iam sooo...excited...update soon...
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Posted: 9 years ago
Naina...Amazing... Awesome...
Dear u write each update more beautiful than previous update... This one is very interesting update.

So finally Sanskaar poured his heart to swara...

The whole sangeeth theme, i loved it & the selection of Veer-Zaara concept for swasan is too good...Song synchronization is apt for them...i so loved this update...Now swara remebers her past life?? Do this happens with sanskaar too??
I'm very eager to know what happens next...
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Un-res'ing on Page 96 in just a few moments, Nainu dear. 🤗

I am so very thrilled I got the first comment slot on this one!!

Love,

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Posted: 9 years ago
Finally he confessed his love for swara bt she didn't agreed. She left without listening him. Anyway he wants her to b his n he s possessive tat he sent laksh to check for dancers tats y laksh can't b with his swara. Next day he was behaving like he s avoiding her. She felt little sad. I loved tat veer zara our swasan. So somehow their past is cmng. Bt kavitha found something fishy between swasan. Bt laksh s good he appreciated for their performance.
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omg...plz update soon plz plz plz...i just cant control my eagerness to read more and curiosity of what's going to happen next...will swasan remember their past life of give some extra thought on why they called each other by different name...plzz updt asap
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plz update soon plz plz plz..
i just want u to update quickly
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Hey all,
I am going to update now, and I have made it extra long. I just could't stop writing..
Thank you sooo much everyone 🤗for reading the previous update and I appreciate all your likes and comments, wholeheartedly, and you all know why I can't reply to them all individually..So please forgive me, my dears..
Here is the next chapter for you all to read..Hope you all enjoy reading it too..


Imp Note : In the last update, there was a moment when Swasan addressed each other Pratham and Zaara (their previous birth names) But they were in a magical trance at that time..So they didn't clearly remember that moment when they came out of it.

PART 10

After the Veer-Zaara act, Swara joined Lakshya who was sporting Salman's look from "Kick" film. Lakshya placed his arm around her shoulder and congratulated her on her performance.

La: That was cool, Swara..! I just loved it..!
Sw: (weak smile) Thanks Lakshya..

Her eyes instinctively searched for Sanskaar and she found him seated beside Kavita, who was wearing costumes of Gauri (Gracy Singh's character) from the movie, Lagaan. Sanskaar didn't look in Swara's direction at all. But Kavita was already looking at Swara and she was shocked to find a look of intense dislike in Kavita's eyes. When she saw Swara look at her, Kavita just looked away, avoiding her gaze.

Swara felt quite uneasy and she turned towards Lakshya.
Sw: Lakshya..
Lakshya sensed her discomfort and he tightened his grip around her shoulders.
La: Swara..Tum teek toh ho na..?

Sw: Nahin Lakshya..! I am having a head ache..Can I go to my room and join the Mehndi function later on..?

La: Sure..! Waise bhi tum subah se bahut kaam kar rahi thi na..! In fact in the morning, main bhi nahin tha tumhare saath..You need some rest..

Sw: (nods) Tum bhi mere saath chalo na..Please..

Lakshya nodded and both of them walked away from the hall, together. Sanskaar who was pretending to ignore Swara till now, noticed this immediately and his eyes followed their trail.

Sa: (without looking at Kavita) Kavi..Main abhi aaya..!
Ka: (nods with a blank face, looking at him) Ok..

Sanskaar got up from his seat and began to follow Swara and Lakshya, he was walking at a considerable distance, making sure that he could see them and he would not be noticed.

Swara and Lakshya were now walking into the drawing room of the haveli, but when Lakshya turned towards the hallway leading towards Swara's room, Swara caught his hand and she turned to walk towards the staircase.

La: (surprised) But Swara..You wanted to go to your room na..?
Sw: Haan..But now I think that going to the terrace would be a good idea..!

La: (confused) Par kyun..?

Sw: I think some fresh air would make me feel good..Wahan uss party hall mein mujhe bahut ghutan mehasooz ho rahi thi..Waise bhi do teen dinon se bahut kaam kar rahi hoon na..I just wanted to feel relaxed..(sighs) by spending some time with you..It has been a while since we actually talked with each other, Lakshya..! (widens her eyes pointedly)

La: (smiles affectionately and strokes her head, briefly) Ok Swara..As you wish..Chalo..

And so both of them climbed the staircase and Sanskaar continued to follow them, in the same discreet manner.

Within some minutes Swara and Lakshya reached the vast terrace of the haveli. The view from there was panoramic, and the vision was wonderful at night. They could see the Udaipur city all around and all the lights looked as golden coloured, tiny pinpricks. The sky was strewn with lots and lots of stars and the moon had a beautiful glow, even if it had started to wane a little, unlike the previous full moon night, Swara thought, while she was strolling along the grounds with Sanskaar.

This thought made her think about Sanskaar again, and she was amazed at the way he had captured her thoughts. Here she was standing with Lakshya, and she wanted to convey her feelings to him, but still all she could think was about Sanskaar, she registered with an impatient sigh.

Looking sideways at Lakshya, she thought " It's now or never, Swara..This is the moment..Say that you love him, Swara..Tell him, before it gets too late.."

Meanwhile, Sanskaar had crept stealthily behind a high wall, from where he could conveniently see and hear them, without making himself to be seen.

Lakshya noticed that there was something strange with the way Swara was looking at him. He frowned and then smiled.

La: Kya baat hain, Swara...Tum mujhe aise kyun dekh rahi ho..?
Sw: (blinks uncertainly) Lakshya..Main tumse kuch kehna chaahti hoon..!

Sanskaar was sure now, about what she was going to say to Lakshya. He just wanted to reach her and take her away from there, far from Lakshya.

Up in the sky, a flimsy layer of dark clouds were slowly making its way towards the moon.

La: (frowns again) Toh phir soch kya rahi ho..Kaho na..? (smiles)
Sw: (gulps) Woh main...main...tumse...(and then suddenly)..I love you ,Lakshya..!

La: (shocked ) Kya..!!!

Sanskaar shut his eyes tightly, unable to resist the feeling of frustration coursing through his veins. He was now clenching his fists tightly, feeling resentful that he just couldn't do anything about it.

A strong gust of wind blew all over the place and some more layers of thick clouds began to close in towards the moon. A low rumble of thunder could be heard from afar.

Meanwhile, Swara moved towards Lakshya and took his hands inside hers and then looked straight into his eyes confidently.

Sw: Main tumse bahut pyaar karti hoon..Jab se karti hoon, tab se main 15 saal ki thi..(nods fervently, so as to make him believe her)

Sanskaar felt as if his whole world was crashing around him, he still didn't open his eyes, unable to watch the scene.

Lakshya was slowly getting out of the initial shock and slowly her words were sinking into his mind. Swara's cute face, her wide and curious eyes, and her sincere proposal -- all these were tugging some unknown strings in his heart. He was watching her as if he was seeing her in a whole new light. But still, he was not sure what he was feeling right now.

La: (slowly) Swara..tum yeh kya keh rahi ho..?

Swara moved even more close to him and placed her hands on his shoulders, then she gazed deep into his eyes.

Sw: (emotionally) Lakshya..Main sach keh rahi hoon..I love you..! (looks into his both eyes alternatively with love) Ab tum kuch kaho na..Do you love me, Lakshya..?

Up in the dark sky, the clouds had finally succeeded in covering the moon, almost completely and only a thin curve of it was visible along the dark fluffy edges, as if it was peeping out to see what was going to happen.

Sanskaar opened his eyes in a jiffy, he didn't want to know if Lakshya loved her or not. He was shivering from head to toe, with a multitude of emotions raging and surging through him. What was the point in waiting now, since Swara had already confessed those three magical words to Lakshya, which Sanskaar had wanted to hear from her mouth, for himself only.

Sanskaar didn't wait for Lakshya's answer and he just walked away from there, feeling ever despondent.

The moon hid itself completely under the dark blanket of clouds, darkening the whole place.

Lakshya didn't know what to say to her, but he didn't want to hurt her in any way. He placed his both hands on her shoulders and chose his next words carefully, looking into her lovely eyes.

La: Swara..Mujhe bhi tum bahut pasand ho...Par...

But Swara, who was impatiently waiting for his answer, missed the word "...Par.." and she just hugged him with all her love. She pressed her cheek close to his chest and heaved a deep sigh of relief.

Sw: (smiling widely) Ohhh Lakshya..Tum bhi mujhse pyaar karte ho na..! Oh I am so happy..!

Lakshya was about to tell her that he liked her very much, but still he was not sure about his feelings, and that he wanted some time to think about it.
But Swara's happiness and excitement made him think again, "Swara hi mere liye perfect life partner ban sakti hain..I mean, we both know each other really well and our relationship is so special..Mujhe nahin lagta ki, main Swara ke siway kisi aur ladki ko pasand bhi kar sakta hoon..May be that is why, I could not love any other girl till now..Swara hi mere liye sab se special raha hain..humesha..!

La: (smiles) Haan Swara..I love you too..!

Swara's face lit up with happiness and she looked up at him with shining eyes. Lakshya felt real happiness when he witnessed her glowing face and he cupped her face, affectionately.

La: You are way too special for me Swara..And you always will be..! (he leans forward to kiss her forehead)

Swara hugged him again with love, They stood in each other's embrace for some more minutes and suddenly a flash of lighting illuminated the entire area, bringing along with it a loud clap of thunder. They withdrew from the embrace, feeling a little afraid.

La: (alarmed) Swara..Chalte hain yahan se..It's not safe to stay here at the top of the terrace.

Sw: Ok..

Rain drops like thick pellets began to fall one by one and they rushed towards the terrace door, even before the thick downpour began. Once, they reached inside, Lakshya turned to her.

La: Waise..I have to perform also.."Teri yaadon kaa... Hangover" (dances like Salman in "Kick")
Sw:(giggles) Stop it, Lakshya..Even I forgot about it..Lets hurry up, what if your name had already been announced...?
La: (sniggers) Then my Jacquilne Fernandez will be mad at me, because I didn't show up on stage..

Thus, Lakshya and Swara returned to the Sangeet party. Sanskaar was heartbroken when he saw them walk along the aisle, talking merrily with each other and Swara giggling happily. He was quite sure that Lakshya had accepted her proposal, and he looked away, unable to watch them together.
Swara was careful enough not to look towards Sanskaar's and Kavita's direction again. She was afraid to face Kavita's wrath again.

Later, after all the performances, every one changed into their own dresses, from the dressing rooms.

Swara changed into a black net sari which had a dark maroon coloured plain satin border with thin silver edges, and she wore it in one layer (ie, without pleating the pallu into many layers) Along with it she wore a blouse with short sleeves, it was dark maroon in colour, full of mirror work and traditional Kutch embroidery. She set her hair in loose curls and let it down to the front along her left side shoulder. Suddenly she remembered the way Sanskaar had loosened her chignon hairstyle and the way he styled her hair like this, the previous night. Thoughts about that incident brought fresh shivers of anticipation along her body.

A grand banquet dinner was served afterwards. When she entered the party area, Swara's eyes began searching for Sanskaar, rather unintentionally. And then she saw him dining along with Kavita, Uttara and Karan, all of them cosily sitting around a round table, quite far away from where Swara stood. And at the same instant, Sanskaar looked up and glanced towards her direction, as if he could feel her eyes upon him, even from that much distance.
Their eyes locked for a brief moment, and Swara was mesmerized by the way he looked in that maroon tuxedo, with black satin lapels and crisp white shirt. Sanskaar's eyes hooded with desire when he saw her in that black net saree, her every curve visible through the sheer material. Swara almost gasped when she saw the look in his eyes, but right at the same time, Kavita looped her arm into his and his attention turned towards his fiancee. Swara felt a strange feeling of resentment course through her, when she saw him talking to Kavita.

Right then, Lakshya approached her from behind and gently placed his hand upon her shoulder. Swara turned towards him and she felt relieved when she saw him.

La: Wow, Swara..Saree an all, huh..(loops his hand into her elbow) You are looking awesome..! Ab chale..?
Sw: (smiles wide) Thank you Lakshya..Haan, let's go and have some food..

Kavita was watching them with a contented look. She glanced at Sanskaar and said casually.

Ka: They make a nice couple, right..?

Sanskaar looked up from his food and frowned at her, unable to guess whom she was talking about.

Ka: Look..Over there..Swara and Lakshya..I think they are in love..

A livid look crossed his face when he saw the couple and he was quick to mask his expression. He turned to Kavita with a plain uninterested look.

Sa: Kavi..You very well know that I am not interested in these kinds of gossips.
Kavita pouted childishly, but Uttara supported her bhabhi, instantly.
Ut: Hmm..You are right, bhabhi..It looks like they are very much in love..
Ka: (excitedly) Haan Uttara..Isn't it..?!

Ut: But bhaiyya..I forgot to say one thing..Aap donon ka Veer Zaara performance was just out of the world..!! Mujhe nahin pata tha..ke aap itne talented hain..? And Swara also performed really well..Hain na Karan..?
Krn: (nods) Haan Sanskaar bhai..It was a mind blowing act..!

Upon hearing this, Kavita's excitement and happiness dampened a bit, while Sanskaar just nodded with a polite smile, mumbling a vague 'Thank you'.

When the dinner got over, the time was almost 9 pm, and now the people had to proceed into the central courtyard of the haveli, where the Mehendi night and Dance party were arranged. When Lakshya and Swara entered the hall, the DJ was playing awesome remixed versions of the some super hit wedding songs, some of the men and women had begun to enjoy themselves by dancing ; while some of the ladies got intricate Mehendi designs done on their palms, by the help of numerous Mehendi designers. Lakshya and Swara separated and went off in different directions, to make sure that everyone was having a wonderful time.

Swara felt someone's hand on her shoulder and when she turned to see who it was, she was surprised to see Kavita. But Swara felt relieved when she noticed that Kavita's warm smile was back on her face.

Ka: Swaraa..Tum kahan jaa rahi ho..? Tum bhi mehendi lagaao na..Aao..
Sw: (smiles) Arre Kavita M'am..Not now..I have to take care of many things..
Ka: Offo..Woh sab Lakshya sambhaal lega..Aaj mehendi ki rasm hain..Waise tumne Uttara ke haath dekhi..? Those mehendi designs are simply splendid..

While walking towards Uttara, Kavita secretly asked,
Ka: Waise Swara..Main ek baat poonchoo..? Kya tum aur Lakshya couple ho..?

Sw: (smiles) Haan M'am..

Ka: Great..!! You guys make a stunning couple..

Sw:(blushes) Thanks..(and she hastily added) Aap aur Mr.Maheshwari bhi..!
But after saying those words, Swara felt a slight twinge inside her heart, and she gulped and looked away, uncertainly, trying to gauge what she actually felt right then.

Ka: (looks at her happily) Thank you Swara...
Sw: (tries to smile)

Absent mindedly, she went straight and collided into Sanskaar, who was coming from the opposite direction, talking with someone behind him as he walked forward, and so he also hadn't noticed Swara and Kavita coming towards his direction.

Suddenly, Sanskaar leant forward and looped his forearm around her waist to stop her from falling backwards. Swara's hands were clinging on to his coat lapels, while his arm pulled her closer to him. Their abdomens touched and Swara could feel a heart thumping against her chest as she gazed into the depth of his molten dark chocolate eyes. He looked into her dark black eyes and then to her luscious pink lips and felt his heart melting away. But he steeled his heart in the blink of an eye and straightened her and himself in a jiffy. Swara opened her mouth to say thank you, but without caring to spare her another glance, he walked off, just like that. Swara watched him go, open mouthed and Kavita was more than convinced that there was nothing between them. Smiling wide, she tugged at Swara's hand.

Ka: Chalo na..
Sw: (turns to her with a gasp) Err..Haan..!
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Later, Swara and Kavita were sitting with her both palms filled with beautiful mehendi designs. Swara's eyes were trailing off towards Sanskaar now and again, and she was wondering why it was so. The way Sanskaar had avoided talking to her, it did hurt her ego in a major way and she realized with a pang that she couldn't even talk to him again after the "proposal fiasco" which happened in the morning. How she wished that he had not proposed to her, so that they could have been on talking terms even now. But surely, things had changed between them and the change of dynamics in their relationship had certainly cost their close companionship which was really strong until today morning.

Sanskaar was talking with some of his business associates and it seemed to her that he was not aware of Swara glancing at him now and again.

Suddenly the song changed into "London thumakda" which was one of Kavita's favourites.
Ka: (excitedly) Wow Swara..Aao na..dance karte hain..!
Sw: (shyly) Arre nahin nahin, Kavita M'am..

Meanwhile, Uttara too got up from her seat and pounced upon Swara, grabbing her arm.
Ut: Come one Swara..Get up..Let's dance together..
Swara couldn't refuse any more and she had to get up.

Kavita was excited and she went towards Karan Rajput.
Ka: Aap bhi chaliye..
Karan also got up from his seat and went towards Sanskaar.
Krn: Aap bhi aayiye na bhai..Nahin toh unn ladkiyon ke beech main akela pad jayega..please..
Sa: Ok..

Sanskaar relented and Kavita and Uttara were damn excited to see Sanskaar joining them. Even Swara felt a spark of excitement inside her heart, she was hoping she could break the ice between them so that he might change his mind and start talking to her again.
But Sanskaar started to dance with Kavita and Karan was dancing with Uttara. Trying hard not to feel bad, Swara just slightly grooved to the music and cheered every one. Suddenly another guy moved towards Swara and he began to dance with Swara.

This abruptly caught Sanskaar's attention, even though he was dancing with Kavita, his eyes were now stuck upon Swara and that guy. Swara was dancing beautifully and Sanskaar couldn't help admiring her prowess in dancing.

Suddenly, Kavita noticed Uttara's zip, it was slowly unzipping itself. Kavita hastily whispered this into Uttara's ears and they excused themselves and went off together to a side.

Just at that moment, during a particular dance step, Swara turned around in a swift move and her long and silky hair swept along Sanskaar's face. He turned his face away, startled at the sudden movement. Swara noticed this and she stopped dancing to apologize to him.

Sw: Err..Sanskaar..I am so sorry..I didn't..

But Sanskaar didn't even look at her and he held out his hand signaling her to stop apologizing. He impatiently scratched his forehead and then turned towards Karan to dance with him. Swara began to feel really hurt and she excused herself from the dance floor and went off to sit down in a corner.
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Finally, it was time for everyone to sleep. Swara returned to her room and was about to change her saree and suddenly she noticed something. Her gold bracelet was missing and she was alarmed. "Maa would kill me if I lost it".

First of all she went off into the dressing rooms in the party hall, but she couldn't find it there. Then she remembered that she had been to the terrace with Lakshya. She hurried towards the staircase and started to climb the steps hastily, her saree's end trailing after her.
When she reached the terrace door, she opened it and walked out into the terrace. But there was someone else, who was standing near the railing at the far end, at the same spot where she had proposed Lakshya earlier in the evening. And that person was unmistakably him -- Sanskaar Maheshwari.

Swara was confused whether to go forward or to go back and come later. She was not ready to face him alone, lest he behaved harshly with her again. But just then Sanskaar turned around, as if he felt her presence at the door. Swara gasped and decided to move forth as it was obvious that she couldn't back out now.

Hastily, she walked forward and began to search for her lost bracelet here and there on the tiled floor. Sanskaar watched her with interest, with an eye brow raised, wondering what the matter was with her.
Sa: (smirking) Agar tum mujhse kahogi ke tum kya dhoond rahi ho, shaayad main tumhari thodi madat kar sakta hoon..

Sw: (still bending, without looking up at him) My bracelet..It's made of gold..
Sa: (still smirking) Acha..? But why are you searching it here at the terrace..? When did you come up here..?

Swara was caught off guard at his query and she straightened herself up gazing into his eyes, uncertainly.
Sw: Err..Main..yahan...Main aayi thi thodi der pehle..Hawa khaane ke liye..

She didn't know why she was avoiding telling him about coming here with Lakshya. Sanskaar silently nodded at her as if he believed her and then put his hand inside his pant pocket. He was wearing the same white shirt, and dark grey pants, and the maroon tuxedo coat with black satin lapels. From his pocket, he extracted her bracelet and showed it to her.

Sa: Is this the one you are looking for..?

He was looking intently into her eyes and she nodded, feeling transfixed by the magnetism of his eyes, which had always enticed her. Slowly, she walked forward with bated breath. The intensity in his eyes became more and more powerful with each step she took and she just let those invisible strings, which always pulled her close to him, do the same, even now.

She held out her hand and he was about to place the bracelet in her open palm. But to her surprise, the words escaped her mouth.

Sw: Can you please help me wear this bracelet..I can't do it alone..

A slight surprise crossed his otherwise guarded eyes and he nodded at her. Slowly, he placed the bracelet around her wrist and fastened its hook securely with his thumbs and forefingers.

Swara decided to talk to him now, hoping against hope that he will listen to her, at least now.

Sw: (cautiously) Mr. Maheshwari..Aap mujhse ab tak naaraz hain..?
Sa: (looks up seriously and frowns) Kyun..?
Sw: (cautious tone) Dekhiye..Kya hum dono pehle ki tarah ache dosth nahin ban sakte..? Aaj subah aapne jo bhi kuch humse kaha, main woh sab bhool ne ke liye tayar hoon..

He knew she was hinting about his proposal.

Sa: (looks at her unflinchingly and says each word very clearly) Lekin main.. woh sab... nahin bhoool sakta..Samjhi tum..!! (glares at her angrily)

Swara gaped at him with open mouth and a hurt face. Sanskaar turned away from her and started to walk off from there. But Swara was not ready to give up so easily, she quickly caught hold of his wrist and Sanskaar stopped and turned back, feeling surprised.

Sa: (angrily) Chodo mujhe, Swara..

Sw: (determined tone) Nahin chodoongi..! (tightens her grip)
Sanskaar's blood was boiling with emotions ranging from pain, pangs of lost love, intense attraction, frustration and hot anger. He was fighting hard with himself, while he decided to go away from her.

Sa: (even more impatiently, shivers with rage) I said leave my hand, Swaraaa...
Sw: (equally stubborn) Nahin matlab NAHIN..!! I want to talk to you now..!!

In a swift move, Sanskaar turned around and pulled off his hand from her grip, forcefully. Swara was alarmed seeing the blazing look on his face. But she didn't get anymore time to think, because next moment, Sanskaar grabbed her shoulders and pinned her to the nearby high wall in another swift move. Swara was panting hard with the intensity of the situation she had got herself in. Sanskaar's furious eyes were boring into her confused eyes. But she knew she wanted to escape from him, so she raised her hands from her sides and began to push him off her frantically. But Sanskaar was quick for her, he grabbed her wrists and raised them above her head.

Sw: (gasping for breath) Mr. Maheshwari..Please..Mujhe jaane do..!

Swara was struggling hard to get away from him, but without her hands, she was a failure. Sanskaar's smouldering eyes stared deep into her puzzled doe-like ones.

Sa: (whispers breathlessly, with seething anger) Ab Kaho..kya kehna hain mujhse...?

Swara was not in a condition to talk anymore, her eyes were looking into the depths of his magnetic eyes and inside them, and she could feel all his emotions which were crystal clear to her own heart. And those emotions coursed through her veins like a house on fire. Anger, frustration and attraction overpowered her being and she stared at him unflinchingly. She forgot who she was, or where she was, as she transformed herself into him, as if she had always been a part of his being, as if they were one body, one soul from eons immemorial.

Sanskaar eyes softened instantly, seeing the kind of look in her eyes, and as a result, the same soft and vulnerable emotion mirrored inside her eyes too.

Both of them were heaving for breath, but their eyes were communicating wordlessly to each other. Just at the same instant, it began to rain heavily, but the two of them were still there, Swara no longer struggling, both of them unable to move or realize that they were slowly getting drenched in the torrential downpour.

Sanskaar's eyes travelled from her eyes to her parted lips, and as Swara watched, his eyes were filled with molten desire for her. Swara's felt her underbelly clench with desire and her eyes too were hooded with raw yearning. Sanskaar was slowly bringing his lips down to hers, and Swara closed her eyes in anticipation. But just at that moment, he remembered Swara's words to Lakshya.

"I love you ,Lakshya..!
Main tumse bahut pyaar karti hoon..Jab se karti hoon, tab se main 15 saal ki thi.."

Suddenly, Sanskaar withdrew his face and stepped back with utmost contempt. Swara opened her eyes, when she felt suddenly deprived of his closeness. It was then that Swara was aware of her condition, her black net saree was clinging to her body like a second skin and she felt highly conscious about her appearance. Sanskaar felt awkward at once and looked away instantly. But he removed his coat and held it out to her, without looking again. Swara quietly took it from him and wore it around her drenched body.

Thankfully, no one saw them as they walked down the steps in silence, Sanskaar in the front and Swara at a certain distance behind him.
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End of PART 10
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Nainu...what can I say for this update my dear...you have robbed me of the ability to even think straight, with such an intense, powerful, passionate, painful yet romantic, tender yet anguish-filled update!!

I am just so overjoyed that I managed to get the first comment slot, on page 100, no less! for this marvelous Chapter 10 of one of my favorite Fics...you are simply, mind blowingly superb my dear!!

The way you described Sanskaar's anguish and frustration, that sheer, stabbing pain coursing through his veins when Swara tells Lakshya she loves him---I literally had goosebumps! It was so clear that Swara was more expressing that as a method of escaping the turmoil and intensity of her own passionate feelings for Sanskaar! Her mind is convinced that she loves Lakshya...but her heart and soul belong to Sanskaar, which even she is becoming aware of now...

And Nainu...the way you described the dark clouds blowing in, to hide the beautiful moon when Swara proposed to Lakshya (with Sanskaar overhearing)--that was so powerful, so symbolic. The moon has such a special connection to both Pratham---Zaara; and now to Sanskaar---Swara. In a sense, this complication with Lakshya was painful to the very fabric of nature and even the universe itself! Poor Sanskaar---he just could not bear the scene isn't it? His heart was bleeding, his soul practically weeping when Swara told those 3 magical words to Lakshya, words which he was thirsting to hear from her...

I just loved the delicate touch with which your portrayed both Swara's and Sanskaar's emotions after that. Though Sanskaar feels as if he has been stabbed through the heart, he is still unable to keep his eyes off Swara, unable to stop admiring the pure, divine beauty she possesses. And Swara too, is unable to resist the magnetic attraction she feels for him. She feels a sharp tinge of jealousy when she sees Kavita talking to Sanskaar, placing a casual hand on his shoulder...

Kavita here, also seems to suspect the deeper connection between SwaSan. Initially, she was very insecure, and also gave a look of intense dislike to Swara (in the previous chapter end). But then she seems to have become convinced that Lakshya and Swara are a couple, so she is easier in her mind. But Sanskaar's intense feelings for Swara (which he is trying his best to mask), still trouble Kavita a wee bit.

The whole interaction between SwaSan on the dance floor was also nice. Swara is feeling so bad that Sanskaar is avoiding her, keeping his distance from her. She thinks she would like them to go back to their warm friendship, that camaraderie again. Actually, she wants much more, her heart is prompting her to realize she loves him, and him only! But she has to introspect much more, to arrive at that realization...I liked your description of how her luxuriant, silky tresses brush across Sanskaar's face, and how he prevents her from apologizing, feeling hurt, betrayed and bewildered. He wants to avoid too much conversation with her at that point, since he is not sure he can control his emotions.

And then---Oh My God. That whole scene back on the terrace, was AWESOME. So powerful, so passionately intense. Swara going to search for her gold bracelet, and I so knew she would find Sanskaar there! 😉 Her asking him to put the bracelet on for her was a wonderfully tender moment. She wants to be close to him, if only she would realize that! And when she tells Sanskaar that can't they move ahead, she is willing to forget what he told her that morning (the confession of his love), Sanskaar's reaction was so powerful, so moving. There is so much of pain, anguish, and yet passion and desire, and pure, intense love for her flowing through every last fiber of his being.

I liked how he wanted to leave, to avoid losing control with her...but Swara held him back, holding his wrist tightly! 😆 😉 And then, Sanskaar was so affected by her that he comes close to her, holds her against the wall by gripping her shoulders, staring straight into her eyes. Swara is completely mesmerized, and even a little panicked, seeing the intense play of emotions, the raw sense of loss, love, anguish and rage in his eyes. Though she is initially scared, somehow the fact that their souls are so intertwined, across eons of time and space, conveys itself to her as well. That was such a powerful moment, where she starts feeling whatever he is; because they are in essence, twin souls, destined to be together.

That realization, mirrored in her eyes, gives way to a more gentle, tender moment between them; and then that sensual, passionate moment when they get drenched in the rain and their desires almost overcome them. 😳 Sanksaar came so very close to kissing her; but he then recalls the anguish he felt when Swara expressed her love to Lakshya...that statement, that she loved Lakshya since she was 15 years old, haunts Sanskaar. He feels disgusted with himself for wanting to kiss a lady who (supposedly) loves someone else. Poor Sanskaar---he also doesn't realize that Swara merely thinks she loves Lakshya...

The moment passes, and Swara actually feels the loss of his warmth, the loss of that contact when he moves away from her! 😉 She wanted him to kiss her, didn't she? There would have been Diwali firecrackers for sure, had they kissed, that scene was SO intense!! 😳 And Sanskaar, like a true Gentleman, gives her his coat without even looking at her, when he realizes that the rain has drenched her and her sari is soaked through.

You ended at such a suspenseful note, Naina darling!! I want an update of Chapter 11 quickly!! 😃 Please!! My God, I am biting my nails in suspense, wondering when Sanskaar will tell Kavita that he wants to break their engagement! I so wish that Ragini will land up at the event and also propose to Lakshya! 😉



Edited by CogitoErgoSum - 9 years ago
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Naina it is awesome as usual 👏
I loved every bit of this part
Swara confusion 😆
Sanskar heartbreak
Swara trying to talk sanskar 👏
But in the end it was awesome
Beautifully written
Update soon
Edited by sujoyricky - 9 years ago

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