The Best of Things - FF (RagYa, SwaSan) +16 Part 44 on Pg 145 - Page 83

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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: Red.orchid

Awesome update

Well written👏


Thanks Sadhana!
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Posted: 9 years ago
Nice update.. Things are getting better 😊
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Originally posted by: sneharay

Nice update.. Things are getting better 😊


Thanks Sneha, yes, things are getting better 😊
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Posted: 9 years ago
Short update - but sweet, I hope 😳

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The Best of Things
(Ragya, SwaSan) Fan Fiction Series
By Bubble

Chapter 42

Now that she came to terms with Ragini being at the baadi, Swara admitted to herself that she was relieved not to have to go. She would have done anything for her mother... but it would have been a wrench to be away from Sanskaar... you're behaving like a love-lorn idiot, she scolded herself... but the hours that he was away... she had to force herself not to call him, to engage herself in some activity or the other till it was time for him to come home.

Every moment with him around was so heightened, so sharply focussed... she wondered at the feeling. Even if he was preoccupied with work and other things, just to see him in the room... concentrating on his laptop screen, or rifle through his files...

At the moment, he was on the phone in the balcony, so she put on the radio at a low volume and dived into the bathroom for a quick shower before evening aarti. When she came out, rubbing her wet hair, he was done talking, so she turned up the volume again and brought her towel up to jerk the droplets from her tresses.

Sanskaar came to the door and on cue, Rafi started to croon...

Na jhatko zulf se pani
Ye moti phoot jayenge...

Sanskaar raised a comic eyebrow at the radio and Swara started giggling at the coincidence. He stood there for a moment, looking at her... her kurta wasn't fully zipped up and was sliding almost off her shoulder, her wet hair was pulled to one side, leaving drops of water on her almost bare shoulders... He pushed away from the door and came closer... and closer... her smile was wiped off by the flare of molten heat in his eyes.

He came to stand before her, his eyes dropping to her lips, still damp from the shower. Ye nazuk lab hai ya aapas me do lipti hui kaliyan... She raised her face to his, and closed her eyes in involuntary invitation... his finger came up to caress the full lower lip, and seduce them into parting... Zara inko alag kar do, tarannum phoot jayenge...

But still, he didn't kiss her... and bemused, she opened her eyes slowly. His face was near, a knowing smile in his eyes... and, suddenly shy for having solicited his lips, she lowered her gaze again. Hamari jaan le lega ye neechi aankh ka jadoo... Sanskaar sighed... Chalo achcha hua mar kar jahaan se choot jayenge...

Her bosom heaved in sheer response to his nearness... and his phone beeped. Shaking his head, he glanced at it and reined himself in...
Work! He looked up at her. "Hold that thought!" he said, and then went away.


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(From the film Shehnai)
For those who don't follow poetic Hindustani, a small translation of the lines used from this song:

Na jhatko zulf se pani ye moti phut jayenge
Tumhara kuch na bigdega magar dil tut jayenge

Don't jerk these droplets off your hair... these pearls will surely break...
You won't care about the loss... but there are hearts that will break

Ye nazuk lab hai ya aapas me do lipti hui kaliya
Zara inko alag kar do, tarannum phut jayenge
Are these delicate lips or two tender buds intertwined?
Please, part them a little and let the melodies spill...

Hamari jaan le lega ye neechi aankh ka jadoo
Chalo achcha hua mar kar jahan se choot jayenge
It may rob me of my life, this magic of lowered eyelids
But it is well, for in death we'll be rid of this world

Edited by soapbubble - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
Loving your updates. The mature and logical way you have tried to redeem Ragini is so enthralling. And your Lakshya is as amazing as Sanskaar. Love reading your updates and am looking forward to more.

Chapter 42 is so beautiful. My heart literally flipped with the beauty of the emotions you have written and poured in each word. This falls in the top ten scenes of SwaSan written by writers in the forum. <3
Keep it up. You have a fantastic talent for writing. Awaiting another update. :)

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Edited by bwvianna - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
Indeed sweet...very very sweet update Bubble!! I'm loving the fact how Swara is now so utterly conscious of Sanskaar all the time and misses him badly when he isn't around...

Tht beautiful and sensuous post shower scene is just tooo good!! Swara involuntarily yearning for Sanskaar to come to her and yet her shyness at his closeness...and Sanskaar is such a tease too when he knows she wants the kiss he is taking his good time and making her more aware of him..pls do keep such scenes coming

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Posted: 9 years ago
Thanks for the update..really a sweet one.. 😊
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Posted: 9 years ago
Lovely update 👏
Beautifully written
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Posted: 9 years ago
Lovely update.. :))
Waiting for new part !!
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Posted: 9 years ago
nice update n nice progress of story. Plz continue soon n thanks for pm

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