Trial By Fire- A SwaSan 3 Shot

First Previous

Page

Next Last

Frequent Posters

Zaalima_5

@Zaalima_5

Sparkler

Posted: 9 years ago

#101

shruti loved all parts..😊

beautifully written. really enjoyed..😃

Quote

JIDHNYASA

@Jidnyasa

Inactive

Posted: 9 years ago

#102

Yeppie...

Loved it..

Finally Swasan togther..

Hope this happens in real in serial

Quote

Looks like you are new here. Register for free, learn and contribute.

Sneha Ray

@sneharay

Voyager

+ 4

Posted: 9 years ago

#103

Wow..end is lovely..happy ending either beginning 😊

Quote

Sana

@Forum.Maniac

Rocker

+ 2

Posted: 9 years ago

#104

Shru, what a brilliant piece of writing! I'm in absolute awe of it 👏

Part 2 was exactly my type, full of angst. You know how much i enjoy those chapters and you didn't disappoint The dramatic showdown and Swara's realizations throughout it were mindblowing. Loved how she finally saw the light abt Ragini and Laksh, Sanskar's pain didn't go unnoticed by her too ❤️

In awe of Sanskar's unmoving trust. He was in so much pain as an instant reaction towards those pictures and CD, yet he could compose himself and see thrgh Ragini's plan. Brilliant, thats so like my Sanskar

My favorite part of the chapter thgh is wen Sanskar asks Swara to trust him with his decision of seperating for sometime and she does 😲 while thinking that she is finally driven him away. Can't describe the beauty of this scene! Wish we get something like this soon on the show too!

Coming to Part 3, how beautifully you described Swara and Sanskar's pain at the seperation. Aag dono taraf barabar ki lagi thi ❤️😆

Sanskar's plan was smart though. He led Ragini and Laksh to believe that they had achieved their means so they let their guard down which they did. Perect! 👍🏼

When you brgh Uttara into the picture thgh, for a while, I was confused due to the recent spoilers that she had a hand in the kidnapping, but she was just there for her Bhai and Bhabhi...Aww 🤗

And then a determined Swara was out to get her love. Oh how I loved that part!

Sanskar's surprise and concern over Swara being there was so beautiful and so was his shock at Swara's love confession 🤣 I swear, all you forum writers have increased my expectations of this scene so much 😆

What followed was ☺️☺️☺️ I loooved it! 😆

The morning after scene was so cute and romantic too. Sanskar had to get back to his plan but Swara was in such a bliss. Tidying arnd their apartment and planning to cook for her hubby, awwh ❤️ Can they please move out of the MM madhouse for atleast a while on the show too?

Laksh ji then arrived thgh to burst Swara's happy bubble. Ugh! Ghatiya insaan! 😡 But i loved how Swara was jhadofying him! 👏 But then his harqatein 🤢

Thank god, my Sanky came on time like a hero and gave a well desrerved punch to that 🤬

SwaSan hug was so romantic

Lastly, enjoyed the MM bit. The entire revelation, Sanskar's decision to press charges, Swara's support, that little DP-Sansku moment and Sanskar finally giving in for his taklu and Swara. 😆

The ending was so happy happy, glad that they moved back to the apartment! I can imagine the rest 😉

Overall, you nailed it again, Shru! Waiting for your next work 🤗

Edited by Forum.Maniac - 9 years ago

Quote

sehreen

@Sehru_life

Sparkler

+ 3

Posted: 9 years ago

#105

absolutely love it

beautifully written 😳👏

Quote

misaki

@misaki

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 9 years ago

#106

Shruts! What an amazing start to my day 🤗🤗

This story was the first thing that came to my mind when I woke up - I hoped that the last update was posted. I was happy to see that you indeed did. What a fitting ending to a truly wonderful story. I loveeedd it❤️ Firstly, the part where Swara takes the initiative (of course she got the push from Uttara however it was understandable that she needed it) to make her feelings known. I absolutely loved the way she couldn't help but tell him everything she felt for him at that moment, even if she thought it was embarrassing. It was perfect! My Sanskaar finally got his due. Ah! Mere dill ko kitna sukoon aur kushi mili seeing him so happy and content.🤗I loved what came next obviously, very very subtly and beautifully written.😳 ❤️

The title to this part - Inferno! - So damn Perfect! 😃 My favorite part easily of the three since it clearly brought out the journey from pain, regret and suffering to atonement and salvation👏 It was beautifully done Shru!❤️

And you were so right!😃 I absolutely loved the treatment that was dished out to Laksh from Swara and Sanskaar.(That guy deserves far worse😡)I knew there was no danger of Swara getting hurt., not with Sanskaar around. I was grinning the entire time Swara was tellin him to stuff it and get lost! 🥳Now if only we could see that happening on the show. (I still have my hopes on that one) The best part was that powerful right hook from Sanskaar! That disgusting creep had it coming and the fact that that one punch completely took him out had me feeling so very proud at my man *very very proud muh* and of course content that after everything the creep had done and said, Sanky could finally give it back.😃🥳

I of course knew why Sanskaar was doing what he was doing but the whole Ragini revelation and Laksh being her ally through every thing was very nicely done. We all have had so many discussions on where she gets the cash from😆 In your story at least, now we know.😛 I so wish the same thing happens in the show as well, but something makes me always think that AP really is behind all of it. I don't know why, I feel like she really is not what she looks like. But I still hope Laksh ji is behind all of it. What an epic revelation that would be huh? And mere dil ko sukoon milega seeing some people burn.😈 Ohh that would be so awesome!

That last part where Sanskaar refuses to stay back in MM made me really happy. After how AP and Suju completely berated Swara (seriously that was no way to talk to a girl, especially a bahu of the house. Suju I can still understand but AP? I was actually cringing hearing her say "woh ladki". No wonder Laksh is her beta - like mother like son🤢. Of course that didn't mean I felt bad for Swara - she really had it coming.Does that make me heartless? So be it! I didn't and that's the truth!🤔) So when Sanskaar just tells them off , disregarding their apologies the way he did, it made me really happy. Swara ignoring Shomi! You go girl! I seriously think Sanskaar should stay in his house with his wife away from all the mentaleshwaris, every one of them is a nautanki and clearly brainless.😵 That would make his life so very easy. But of course it ain't happening. Stupid MM wasis! Leave my man alone!😡

After all that blabbing, I of course cannot leave without telling you, once again that it's always a pleasure to read your works Shruts. Love 'em always! There is no way I wouldn't. 😃 And what's this I read on your replys?😲 No thanks ever required remember?😕 Jhappi though, I would take anytime. 🤗🤗

Love you always ! xoxo

Edit - OMG! I forgot to wish you on turning red!😲 Shru the color looks great on ya (or should I say on Varun!) 😆 😃 🤗

Edited by misaki - 9 years ago

Quote

Mallika-E-Zain

@Mallika-E-Zain

Rocker

Posted: 9 years ago

#107

Shruti! Finally read it completely!
So first of all, 🤗

This TS was awesome (nothing new for u)
But for this I had a word- Fabulongo- marvelously- wonderpipical !!

One of the Best TS I've ever read! Loved it too(x infinity times)

Quote

Ramya

@The-Heart

Navigator

Posted: 9 years ago

#108

Again an excellent piece of writing from you shruti 👏

All parts are excellent I loved the way you narrated the entire story

I hate the total swara and laksh BFF drama in the show and i am glad here you made swara realize her mistake of blindly trusting laksh and ragini again.

Finally swara madam realized that laksh and ragini both are not trustworthy

@Part 1: You described the swara and sanskar bonding very well. Wow sanskar decided to not to give up on his love and trying to woo swara ( I love to see this kind of sanskar in show).

In the end you gave us real kiss with out any confession😉 😳😳

@Part 2: I love the total confrontation sequence and i like AP and sujata here. Unlike in the show AP have made some sense and i love the way she make swara realize her mistake. In the end Sujatas dialogue us superb Lekin agar koi bhindni Laxman rekha paar kare hai, toh agni pariksha bhi dene hove he na?

Even in the show swara really need to check again her friendship boundaries with laksh, because he is not only friend but also he is her ex fiance and ex boy friend too.

I am glad sanskar stood by swara even though he doesn't know about all this kidnapping and photo session drama earlier.

@Part 3: Wow swara is not dumb here, she herself went to sanskar to confess her feelings Laksh is very disgusting in this part and i am glad sanskar punched the laksh(actually he need more punches)

I am happy sanskar decided to leave the MM 😃 Finally they are going to live in peace without this mentaleswaris interruption.😆

Ramya

Quote

tootiefrootie11

@tootiefrootie11

Rocker

+ 3

Posted: 9 years ago

#109

Originally posted by: Lavender_Love
unreserving...

My God Shruti... its just so amazing... This update alone itself was a roller-coaster ride... Every emotion was here... be its melancholy, pain, love, joy, contentment, hate, anger... just everything...
And the way you wrote this is breath taking... Once I start reading I was just lost... See... the effect of your writings... you have made me addicted yaar... 😉😉
I loved the way you weaved the story that brought the aftermath part. Initially, At that point I was thinking that Sanskaar must be angry for Swara because of some reason.But it turns out to be something else and much better instead. Swara's confession was so amazingly done... You know na ... you're setting standards high... I will be happy if we get to see Swara's confession as good as here. It was sweet and straight forward. Just perfect. ⭐️ Their consummation... it was so finely done... just beautiful... You're word play there is so amazingly done...
Laksh ...seriously,,, he is not worth talking...he is scum here... 🤢 I liked that Sanskaar was all set to let that evil couple suffer the consequences of their crimes and most of all I liked that Swara was with him at that. Again.. I liked that Sanskaar didnt stayed back at MM... she was insulted so much there... its not worth it...

All in all Shruti... this TS was an amazing journey. I have told you before to but I will say again.. .I love your writing style... The way you describe everything is amazing. Would be looking forward for your next story...
With loads of love
Nitz.. 😳

Nitz 🤗

What a nice start to my Sunday after sleeping at 3.30 am (writing) and just finishing off basic chores after waking- I see such lovely comments from my sweet friends! Thanks so much for the high praise- I am not sure it is entirely deserved but it is making me 😳😳 and very happy indeed!

I can breathe a sigh of relief that what I wanted to get across in this TS seems to have worked, and I am pleased Part 3 was up to the mark as I got such nice comments after the other parts, I was getting worried about delivering! I am (selfishly) glad you are addicted as when I am back to bore everyone with new things, at least there is someone to read! 😉.

See I didn't want an unnecessary MU between SwaSan although as we say, Swara can't blame Sanskaar if he did sometimes MU as her own behaviour will have contributed but I just made her realise this instead without giving her the corresponding upset from Sanskaar.

Thanks again for this Nitz and keep the feedback coming xxx