Ankahee - SwaSan poetry

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Malangan

@TeriMalang

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Posted: 9 years ago

Hey guys 😊

M back with poetry this tym . medha,viji and shruti thanks for encouragement. If not this would hav always been hiding in me drafts corner :P

This one belongs to sanskar's ankahe lafz when he was away frm family after kavita's demise . I tried thinking what all must he hav gone through and this was outcome.

Har shaks tha dhoka

Har lafz tha fareb

Apno ne hi jab loot liya jahan humara

Dard ko banake saya

Tadape thay har pal

Zakhmon ko kured kar jeeye hai abtak

Dil ko banakar pathar sans lere thay hum

Tanhaiyon k andehron main banaye thi apni ek shaksiyat.

Dard aur tanhaiyan bangaye thay humsafar

Na tha lamha koi sukoon ka na jee rahe thay zindagi kabhi hum.

Maut bhi thukra gaye zindagi bhi kho gayi aise mod pe reh gaye thay hum.

Hope u guys like

Do drop in feedbacks/comments

~shab😊

Edited by -TeriMalang- - 9 years ago

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Cogito_Ergo_Sum

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Posted: 9 years ago

Very soulful. His devastation at the loss comes through very poignantly. You should write more.

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samiya.059

@samiya.059

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Posted: 9 years ago

Hey this is awesome
Just completely loved loved it
You are hugely talented
These words seem to have come directly from sanskaar's heart
brilliant
U should write more n more

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Malangan

@TeriMalang

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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: sneharay
Nice.. 😊

Thnks :)

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Malangan

@TeriMalang

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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: CogitoErgoSum
Very soulful. His devastation at the loss comes through very poignantly. You should write more.

Viji :)

Thanks for the appreciation:)

I was not very sure about this one. It somewhat looked adhura to me :P

I will write :)

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Malangan

@TeriMalang

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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: samiya.059
Hey this is awesome
Just completely loved loved it
You are hugely talented
These words seem to have come directly from sanskaar's heart
brilliant
U should write more n more

Thnks samiya :)

M glad u liked it

Thanks for all the beautiful wrds. Dats a huge encouragement

I will write :)

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Malangan

@TeriMalang

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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: sam.
Really loved it :)

Thnks :) glad u liked it :)

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medha

@ToujoursPur

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Posted: 9 years ago

See, I told ya..you would write very well.

Poignant..and straight from the heart shab. Very well done.👏

The last couple of lines...brilliantly conveyed his state of mind.

Keep writing.

Love--

Medha.

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950660

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Posted: 9 years ago

that was superb for a moment i thought m in writing forum..
so started writing its reply or say flip part...
but then realized that its if !!
loved it.
you shd write more !!

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tootiefrootie11

@tootiefrootie11

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Posted: 9 years ago

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Shab 🤗
Thanks so much for mentioning me! I meant what I said and this proves it! Loves the pathos in this, the devastation from the pain this love causes comes through so well! And yes please do write more.
I thought as I read this:

Labzon se karna hai bayaan mushkil iss mohobbat ki gherariyon ko
Bass hai yeh ek dariyaan, tanhaiyon aur dard ka,
Aise hai doobe hum ke na hai koi kinara
Fanah hein harr aarzoo pyaar ki joh nahi tera sahara.

Sorry- pretty poor compared to yours but came to me so wanted to share :)

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