SwaSan SS: Eye of the Storm - DELETED - Page 8

Originally posted by: ros_aavir

Another character saved from butchering in part 9 woo!😆

I'm glad Laksh was finally back in his senses. Even more glad that Swara identified the biggest problem in Swalak's relationship as .. well.. Swalak themselves. These two were always meant to be good friends, but never lovers. Like you wonderfully penned down, they lacked perception into each other's lives, trust and a whole load of other things that makes a relationship. I liked that it was simple and short, nothing OTT.😊

Swara😆She's turned into Sanskaar 2.0. She's behaving like he was when she left MM.😛

Swara acknowledges and treasures the fact that she's in love with Sanskaar.🥳 Have I told you before, I love this Swara?⭐️

You left us on a cliff hanger here! I so so wanna know what happened between them.

Part 10 had my heart in my mouth for a minute! What a twist!😲My heart actually sank and I thought it'd never rise up! (I have no idea what I'm typing😆)

Firstly, you have penned down Ragini's thought process brilliantly!⭐️You have done full justice to her repentance.👏Really liked how she remembered Sanskaar's words and especially loved the fact that it was stated that this shrewd, cunning Ragini is actually the weakest. A lot of people are naming this turn in her character as 'strong'. But it really isn't, is it? She was basically living in self pity and justified her actions with it. The Ragini who stood up to DP and the whole community with her sister announcing that they are Swaragini was bolder than this Ragini. Glad she's decided to lift her chin up and face the world rather than fighting back the wrong way.

Sanskaar is alive! odjfnkjdsfjds! We thank God!🥳🥳

Absolutely CAN NOT wait for the upcoming Swasan scene!

The previous chapter's cliff hanger is still there, waiting for that too!😉

Looking forward to the next chapter!

Originally posted by: ros_aavir

You are a wonderful writer. 😊

Absolutely love the way you analyse each moment and describe every emotion the character is feeling. As a reader, I could really connect with your work.⭐️

In the first chapter, the dilemma Sanskaar faces was marvellously portrayed. His altruistic nature when it comes to Swara along with that enduring guilt of bringing in a storm into the life of an innocent soul.

It wasn't easy to reconcile the fact that the person who had become the reason for your happiness, the core of your existence, would one day walk out of your life leaving a gaping hole that would bleed for love and that you would only try to mend with bandages of friendship.

Brilliantly put. 👏

The second chapter is another great piece! ⭐️ A fab representation of the conflict faced by another character- Annapurna. Personally, I find her so hard to read and I still haven't decided her if I like her or not (as a Swasan fan😆). It was interesting to read your take on what is going through her mind. Nice to see that she truly understands the depth in which Sanskaar loves Swara, but the fact that she almost tries to measure the dose of Swara needed in her own son's life is intriguing. It came across to me as though she recognises the differences in the affection the two brothers have for Swara- she knows that Laksh's is driven by craze, it will bring destruction, but her perception of Sanskaar's love gives off positive vibes. Very eager to know who she's off to talk to in the middle of the night. I feel like it's Swara. I wonder which path she's more inclined to take. I'm off to read the next chapter, you have me hooked! 😃

Originally posted by: swa291

Mard Bachao Andolan 🤣
And picturing Sujatha SwaSan scence☺️

Loved the way she expressed her love
but still a small separation and a death scare to reach that

Thanks for the update
Keep Writing

Originally posted by: Shikha022

loved ur update !!

Originally posted by: ros_aavir

How adorable was part 3 &4 !

Really liked you observed that Swara is trying to juggle lies. Other people's lies. Just giving herself more work than needs be. 🤪 This Swara is sensible though! I'm glad she realised early on (well...😆) that she's been tossed about in the mud enough. It's so good to see a girl giving priority to herself after recognising that she has lost her sense of self because life kicked some ass- really hope this happens in the show soon. Strong girls are the best. ⭐️

High five to Swara for setting out boundaries and making it very clear to Laksh that she's not his toy. Wish show-wala Swara would take a leaf out of this book!

The events of the past day and today and the anxiety over him was making her feel as though she had a bowling ball sized knot in her stomach and someone had tied an anchor to her legs before throwing her into a whirlpool.

This sentence is extremely interesting. Sanskaar brought the storm into Swara's life and he's afraid of the final consequences. But here, clearly Swara is seeing Sanskaar as her anchor. The one who will hold her in place during this phase. Love love love the way she craves for his input and his presence. Her mock anger at him is adorable. The advice Sanskaar gives to her are so wise and insightful. 😳

Just like in the show, she is angry, she goes on her rantings without stopping for breath 😉, he listens, she asks for his opinion, then shuts him up, he brings up some damn good points, makes her feel at complete awe, he cracks a joke, they share some light hearted moments. Cuteee! ❤️

Originally posted by: ros_aavir

Part 7 was surprising! 😊

I really wasn't expecting Swara to apologise. I love how you're carving Swara in this story. That's how it should've been, but CVs have been hell bent on ruining such a strong, alert character with OTT mahanta and dumbness. So this is a welcoming change! 🤗

This was certainly needed. Forget about Swasan, Swalak or Raglak, the story was meant to be about two sisters after all. Swara knew about her part in creating that monster residing in Ragini I think for a little while now, probably after the truth revealing in the farm house. She had a flash back about it while she was travelling back to MM with Sanskaar. I always thought guilt was one of the things that drove Swara in wanting everyone to forgive Ragini and be accepted by Laksh. She has unknowingly pushed Ragini into dreaming about her rishta with Laksh, like a lot of other people had and I'd be super impressed if they show this in the show. Because that takes guts. To admit to someone who had done so many horrible things to you that you had your fair share of blame to take as well, is not an easy task. That shows the strength of one's character- it showed Sanskaar's. Swara's would be a thousands folds more.

I'm glad she didn't deliver the famous "Let's become Swaragini again" dialogue. This Swara is completely in her senses, I love it! She's merely unburdening herself, making things simpler, showing Ragini that there are people who genuinely care and leaving her with open options while being very vary. ⭐️

Oh and Swara is such a goner. She's fallen flat on her face under Sanskaar's charming nature.

Chapter 8 was lovely.

I can feel the longing building up, I wonder how it's going to be when they finally meet.

I'm glad Sanskaar is thinking about having a convo with Ragini too- this should be interesting!

Sanskaar's insecurity when it comes to Swara's feelings for him heart wrenching. Poor man. 💔